https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 18:17:42 UTC 2023-03-27 22:53:51 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png 29xhorn https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2355587394 I liked how you used the right amount of descriptive words and still told a great story (me personally I would never accidentally quit something but that is just me.) I also liked how you described how you were feeling throughout the whole story and that was kinda funny. I want you to respect your cousin Xavier Horn and always buy him cosmic brownies and also you could work on making it longer]]> 2022-10-25 14:45:24 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2355587394 29ansandhu https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2355605340 I loved your piece! My first star for your piece is how you started your piece off by expressing your emotions and what was going on around you. I could immediately feel your confusion and really enjoyed how you set a fast tempo for the story and then slowed it down. My second star for you is how you dove so deep into your lesson and made it so powerful. That powerful lesson summed up the entire story and really strengthened your memoir. A way you could improve your piece is to elaborate more on your inner thoughts and figurative language because sometimes the story in the beginning was going so fast that some of the details were confusing and hard to understand.]]> 2022-10-25 14:55:00 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2355605340 https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2403807305 Hi COOOOOOOUUUUUUUUSSSSSSSIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNN. I liked how you turned the main character (I forgot her name.) towards a more side like me as in if you hit me I’m gonna hit back harder . I also liked how you slowly drove her towards madness to the point of locking someone in a whole shed. But I don't like how you left us at a cliffhanger and did not have a proper ending you normally do that if you are going to make a second one.

]]> 2022-11-30 16:10:00 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2403807305 29spinsky https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2405988116 I loved how you used so many inner thoughts, to really show what the main character is thinking. In made your story more interesting because only I knew what you thought and the other characters didn’t.One thing I wish was that you would have given a few more details to really spice up you story and make it better.

]]> 2022-12-02 01:48:40 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2405988116 https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2434870753 I loved your piece! My first star for you is the powerful word choice. The word choice really brings your pice together and makes it look very professional. Another star I have for you is the organization. The way you organized it is amazing in really bringing your piece together. A wish I have for you is maybe add some punctuation and even out the paragraph. Overall, you did very good!]]> 2023-01-05 16:36:52 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2434870753 https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2486499574 Hello Mia, One star I have for you is that the overall structure of your paragraph is amazing! You included persuasive words and phrases to really get the reader HOOKED on the essay.  That HOOK is so good. Another star I have is how you really tugged at the reader’s heart like a fish on a HOOK 🪝 One wish I have is to reread your hook please]]> 2023-02-17 15:58:18 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2486499574 https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2488799021 Hi Mia! One thing I really liked about your essay was how in your “Go to the heart” in your last paragraph you compared “Beethoven to Beyoncé”. I thought this was very unique and an interesting way to put it. Another thing I really liked about your essay was how in your article body paragraph, in the anecdote you said, “He was left in despair wishing for the day he would have something that fit him.” I thought that was very descriptive and great. One wish I have for you is about your zinger in your last paragraph you used “I’m”, just because your not allowed to use personal pronouns. Overall, beautiful job and I loved your piece! ]]> 2023-02-20 18:56:51 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2488799021 29ljuliano https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2524090707 i think you did great. You had great word choice. You used lots of creative words and meaningful words. You had a good figurative language. It straightened your explanation. 

]]> 2023-03-20 18:28:30 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2524090707 https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2533988384 Hi, Mia! First off I really liked your refined word choice. For example, “absurd, and acknowledge” really elevate your piece into sounding professional. In addition, I honored your transition words. For instance, having, “Indeed, to further elaborate, and evidence that backs up this statement” helped your piece be organized which thus helps in making your theme clearer. A suggestion I can offer for improvement would be to have better punctuation and layout of your paragraph. Some sentences didn’t have the best punctuation which made your paragraph a bit hard to understand. Overall, great job!]]> 2023-03-27 22:53:51 UTC https://padlet.com/29mbrown/92t3h63kts3fysir/wish/2533988384