Seventh Grade Writing Feedback by Abigail Balagot https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m Hi welcome to my wonderful writing padlet! Enjoy my pieces, and thank you for reading them! Drop a kind message before you go! en-us 2017-06-22 15:36:34 UTC 2026-01-11 14:50:36 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Doubleheart.png Research Simulation https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237068335 2018-03-01 17:50:16 UTC https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237068335 Suspense Narrative. 23lsimeon https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237387535 2018-03-02 13:54:26 UTC https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237387535 Research Simulation 23jfallo https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237401247 Hi Abby, I believe that your biggest strength is your opening paragraph because of how you related it so much to Hollywood such as " Going behind the scenes in the movie world today, there are so many complicated issues with race and ethnicity." Another strength you had was your warrants. They were very well thought out including many compound and complex sentences. One wish i have for you is when citing you should also add who said it along with the name of the company, such as when you said (GMA) also add Will Smiths name. Overall, Phenomenal writing!]]> 2018-03-02 14:22:49 UTC https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237401247 Hi Abbey, I think that your suspense narrative was amazing! You had such great little details that really contributed to the story. It kept me constantly on the edge of my seat. Also I felt as though the word choice was extraordinary. These are just a few things I really liked. A wish I had for you was that you might have taken the story a little slower. I felt as though there were so many details and I felt it was just rushing through them. I wish it was just time was slowed down in this piece. Overall, fantastic job on this piece! -Kylie B. https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237460163 2018-03-02 15:55:13 UTC https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237460163 Vignette 23mwhitney https://padlet.com/23abalagot/8zsh8gycmg1m/wish/237516890 STAR: You did a really nice job of including all of the senses into your piece. It really added to the description and made me feel like I was there. I loved this piece, nice work!
-Maggie Whitney

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