https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x Made with a quick smile en-us 2018-03-06 13:11:29 UTC 2018-03-06 16:06:30 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238582665 A little more information needed in the paragraphs
fix run-on sentences]]> 2018-03-06 13:32:21 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238582665 1100276654 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238582923 Write more information
unsupported thesis statement]]> 2018-03-06 13:32:51 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238582923 blakerenner2 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238586377 Support thesis statement a little more
Use more sources and quotes

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Break up your points into paragraphs. ]]> 2018-03-06 13:41:33 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238587482 ridgepolk https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238589091 make sure to indent 

give details about important events]]> 2018-03-06 13:44:21 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238589091 1100277034 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238589520 -Support thesis in paragraphs better 
- use more word variation ]]> 2018-03-06 13:45:07 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238589520 1100278672 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238591846 -Try not to do run on sentences
-keep your paragraphs around 5 sentences ]]> 2018-03-06 13:49:12 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238591846 2000133637 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238591990 -better flow
-better wording]]> 2018-03-06 13:49:28 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238591990 1100257521 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238592479 U KNO I GOT THE FLO, AND IM BOUT TO DROP IT ON THE FLOOR, MAKE EVERYONE RUN OUT THE DOOR, U KNOW YO GIRL WANT SOME MOR, YEA BECAUSE SHE A HOR, YEA I GO HARDCORE, SIKE IM REALLY HONESTLY POOR, ]]> 2018-03-06 13:50:21 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238592479 1100257521 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238592600 -Put commas in right spots
-Fix conclusion]]> 2018-03-06 13:50:35 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238592600 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238595619  

• Only one space in between paragraphs
• Make sure in text citations are mla format 

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More details in body paragraphs]]> 2018-03-06 13:57:02 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238596673 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238597062 -Commas
-Need more in-text citations.  ]]> 2018-03-06 13:57:42 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238597062 2000100061 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238600300 - transitions
- word corrections]]> 2018-03-06 14:02:50 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238600300 sean2855 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238602203 work on transitions
better wording ]]> 2018-03-06 14:05:32 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238602203 2000138813 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238603559 - Use more sources 
- Break up points into more sentences]]> 2018-03-06 14:07:09 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238603559 https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238605853 -transitions 
-support thesis]]> 2018-03-06 14:10:30 UTC https://padlet.com/leejy2/8vijc0gr8y3x/wish/238605853