Feedback and Comments

Three things that were good were the definition of the types of engineers, the information about how to become an engineer, and the slides and movement in the presentation.

Two areas of improvement include the timing on a couple of the slides and the conclusion which seemed a bit abrupt.

Finally, Rand's informative and laid back style of presenting was perfect.

3. Visuals / Fun to read / To the point.

2. Capitalization consistency / contractions

1. It was funny.

3. Beautiful backgrounds/ visual effects with text/ good summarizing

2. Capitalization/ spelling

1. You can tell you really care about the status of the Sumatran Orangutans,

Three things he did well

1.The first video is very informative. It does a good job of showing how someone with a love for baseball helps make those that are not known more recognized today

2. The photos of the older times are good images that show how long the game has been around. It helps to show how much effort went into creating the game.

3. I like the way you led with the slide about a young man loving the game. This immediately draws the reader into the message.

Two areas he could improve

1. There are several spelling and grammar errors, like the first slide's spelling of recognized. Sometimes grammar errors can change the meaning of what we write.

2. The first slide details could take more from the context of the slide. There are many reasons other than what is listed that players may not be known from the video that would be informative.

One thing that I loved

1. In slide 7 where it references your reason for why Abner Doubleday might not want to take credit is insightful. Knowing how much you love the game and recognize the love it takes to play comes out clearly here.

I liked the graphics, the facts, and the goal. The sentence structure and the punctuation could use some work. I greatly enjoyed the morality of the topic.

It was a very interesting presentation. I liked the facts about the population. I suggested that you give it a frame of reference to assist the audience in conceptualizing the numbers of unemployed.

I also appreciated that you found that the "Great Depression" lead to World War II. Those are some more advanced concepts. I was glad to help you make sure you picked the correct side of Hitler to be on.

I thought the brief presentations raises questions about "war" helping a countires economy and scapgoating.

Three things he did well

1. He had a very good essential question

2. He tried to find information from the EPA's website that how the weight of the vehicle is related to the consumption of gasoline.

3. He actually demonstrated by designed the car that by decreasing the weight of the vehicle, one can increase the gas milage.

Two thing he needs to improve on

1. I wish he had included a visual of the car on the presentation

2. I wish that he had provided the information about the parts he had manipulated to decrease the weight and wether they have any safety concerns.

One thing I loved was that he researched and tried to find a way to fix the problem.

3. History/ Pictures/ and lots of detail

2. Grammar/ Punctuation

1. I liked the topic you choose because it something you enjoy and something that you spend a lot of time playing and I liked that you learned the history of the game that costs me a lot of money and my time.

Three things done well,

Pictures, audio, and the fact that the legend still lives within this generation!

Three things things that could be done better,

Sentence structure, details, and capitalization. There is so much information about this topic, I want more!

The pictures of past inmates, including the ghosts, make for a very unique piece. I can tell the boys enjoyed this.

3 things he did well: Good use of images to convey the situation, nice summary of bullets to outline the text, and an interesting choice of color and font to make it visually appealing.

2 things he could improve: Additional research to support his conclusions and I cannot think of another - he did a great job

1 thing I loved: His passion about the subject was clear in his speech as well as his presentation

3. Alden did the following well: He chose a topic he was interested in, he demonstrated the steps well for how others can participate in the program, and he shared interesting facts about demographics.

2. Alden could improve upon the following: He could be more specific and provide greater detail on some of the slides presented. He could also improve his eye contact with the audience while presenting.

1. One thing I loved about the presentation was the pictorial examples Alden showed on what he has created during coding practice time.