Peer Comments by Erik Fries https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf en-us 2021-11-01 19:02:14 UTC 2023-10-24 11:55:20 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f4da.png bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998776790 2022-01-18 19:05:39 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998776790 I liked when you wrote that you would buy a zoo with the $600 million. bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998777993 2022-01-18 19:06:12 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998777993 bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998779455 2022-01-18 19:06:48 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998779455 Cody, I thought you did a nice job with your paragraph by giving detailed examples of what you would do with $600 million. Thank you for also including a topic sentence and conclusion sentence. bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998793492 2022-01-18 19:13:07 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998793492 I really enjoyed your paragraph. Your star ideas were very interesting. You helped support them with some great details. Now I want a Rolls truck. efries7 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998796481 2022-01-18 19:14:30 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998796481 grate job king cody aka Lord Cody aka cody mac aka cmoney with the car cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998799608 2022-01-18 19:16:00 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998799608 I liked how you said you will make your own house sschaedig2 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998800553 2022-01-18 19:16:29 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998800553 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998802101 the holl of nice theing]]> 2022-01-18 19:17:16 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998802101 efries7 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998803667 2022-01-18 19:18:01 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998803667 bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998808822 2022-01-18 19:20:19 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998808822 sschaedig2 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998812285 2022-01-18 19:21:52 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998812285 cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998812845 2022-01-18 19:22:08 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998812845 Nice and job with your punctuation and waiting on my hellcat red eye cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998819114 2022-01-18 19:25:03 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998819114 efries7 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998819733 2022-01-18 19:25:22 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998819733 good job on your paragraph jack when you said you sell my 2 cars to Cody and Mario sschaedig2 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998820368 2022-01-18 19:25:40 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998820368 Jack, I liked when you wrote that you would buy a house in the Philippines, specifically in Legazpi! So cool! bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998822978 2022-01-18 19:26:58 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998822978 Great job with your paragraph. You did a a wonderful job using transitions between your star ideas. I really loved how you thought of your friends when you considered what you were going to buy with your money. efries7 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998824351 2022-01-18 19:27:37 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998824351 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998825802 very very cool msr jack]]> 2022-01-18 19:28:16 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998825802 cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998826807 2022-01-18 19:28:46 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998826807 sschaedig2 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998830205 2022-01-18 19:30:30 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998830205 good job with money cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998838216






]]> 2022-01-18 19:34:42 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998838216 efries7 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998838232 Great job on writing both an introductory and body paragraph. Your star ideas were very original and well supported with detail sentences. It was very nice of you to think about your family. ]]> 2022-01-18 19:34:42 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998838232 Sydney, great job challenging yourself with writing more than one paragraph. I liked when you wrote that you would buy a pet for your grandmother because she is lonely at home <3 bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998839533 2022-01-18 19:35:19 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998839533 sschaedig2 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998840058 2022-01-18 19:35:34 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998840058 nh bh6yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyv cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998909091 2022-01-18 20:08:48 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998909091 I like the sound of the game show I feel like it's a really good idea Nice job tag cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998913437 2022-01-18 20:11:02 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998913437 efries7 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998914946 I really enjoyed paragraph. It was very interesting to hear where you thought you would be in 20 years. I hope it isn't as anti-climatic or stressful as you predict. Great job with your descriptive words. Your star ideas were very well thought out, and you also used transition words which is awesome. Keep up the good work. ]]> 2022-01-18 20:11:58 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998914946 Tag, you did a nice job perserveing through this paragraph. You didn't give up and came up with a very interesting writing with very robust vocabulary words (anticlimactic) and strong star ideas with details! bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998916154 2022-01-18 20:12:37 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998916154 Mario, you're more of a country person! I did not know that. bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998929735 2022-01-18 20:19:20 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998929735 Nice job with your paragraph. I liked when you wrote about the cars, the house and being specific! cmorris128 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998931443 2022-01-18 20:20:22 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998931443 I like your style https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998936487 2022-01-18 20:22:59 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998936487 Mario, you had nice supporting details with your star ideas. Your life seems like it'll be really interesting in 20 years! bkim29 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998936553 2022-01-18 20:23:01 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998936553 efries7 https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998936694 I really enjoyed reading about where you thought you would be in 20 years. I think its great to want to build things with your hands. Having those skills is invaluable. You did a great job coming up with star ideas and supporting them with detail sentences. You also correctly wrote your topic and conclusion sentences. Great job!]]> 2022-01-18 20:23:07 UTC https://padlet.com/efries7/8bcd28zskez38wnf/wish/1998936694