https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1 How does LLoyd craft this piece of travel writing ? en-us 2018-06-11 21:15:06 UTC 2018-06-12 22:44:03 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909631 A group of Simple Sentences in a row 
 eg. Tom waves from the verandah. The dog barks goodbye. and the journey begins.]]> 2018-06-12 22:27:05 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909631 st16104 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909636 The adjective Epic, to show the expectations of the road trip. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:27:09 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909636 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909639 Dad is so deflated he doesnt]]> 2018-06-12 22:27:14 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909639 Livi https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909643 Stupidly cool, stops the hot leather from sticking


]]> 2018-06-12 22:27:20 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909643 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909647 "The boot is sat on once, twice, three times" the word epic is repeated 3 times through the text. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:27:21 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909647 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909685 once, twice, three times
- explains and shows that it was hard to shut the boot for the epic road trip because they packed so much stuff]]> 2018-06-12 22:27:48 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909685 st16104 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909694 2018-06-12 22:28:01 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909694 st16104 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909697 1972 and exactly the colour of poo, this rhyming shows that the writer is kind of hinting that the road trip is going to fail. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:28:02 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909697 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909724 1972 and is exactly the colour of poo]]> 2018-06-12 22:28:25 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909724 helens4 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909734 Opens in the present tense
I'm 10
Immediately hooks us into the excitement of the 'epic' road trip

]]> 2018-06-12 22:28:37 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909734 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909743 Barks goodbye]]> 2018-06-12 22:28:45 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909743 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909759 Gives us personal and emotional insight into the events. Helps us understand the emotions of the main character, as they are also the narrator. If it was written in third person reading it you could feel emotionally disconnected.]]> 2018-06-12 22:28:57 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909759 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909763 A thermos flask, Christmas Presents, pegs for the tent...

]]> 2018-06-12 22:28:59 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909763 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909780 Tom waves from the verandah ]]> 2018-06-12 22:29:14 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909780 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909793
IM 10 

]]> 2018-06-12 22:29:24 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909793 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909805 im 10
i sit on my best sweatshirt

]]> 2018-06-12 22:29:33 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909805 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909828 Nor can the pig or the chickens or the cat]]> 2018-06-12 22:29:49 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909828 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909829 And the journey begins. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:29:50 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909829 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909831 Eg dad is so deflated he doesn't even swear
Shows disappointment ]]> 2018-06-12 22:29:52 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909831 helens4 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909857 alliteration
Dad ducks
emphasis on the small interior of the car]]> 2018-06-12 22:30:11 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909857 st16104 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909877 The title 'It Was Over Before it Began' tells the reader that the road trip is going to fail and the car is the reason. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:30:32 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909877 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909891 "stupidly cool" ]]> 2018-06-12 22:30:43 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909891 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909929 "The one I hope my new cousins will think it's stupidly cool" shows writer excitement of being able to see extended family]]> 2018-06-12 22:31:17 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909929 helens4 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909943 verb choice
Dad folds himself
they are all packed in tightly for their big trip
Dad is in charge]]> 2018-06-12 22:31:22 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909943 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909948 Gives the car a character instead of just saying 'the car dies']]> 2018-06-12 22:31:24 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909948 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909973 this is shown when:

• they call it the epic road trip; the 'epic' just shows the excitement that have towards it.
• the dads disappointment when they realise they won't be able to go on

]]> 2018-06-12 22:31:42 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909973 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909974 The dog barked goodbye ]]> 2018-06-12 22:31:44 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266909974 st16104 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910013 The car boot clutches tightly onto everything else, the car can not clutch but it gives the reader a vivid image in their head of a car clinging onto things and the overfloing boot. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:32:20 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910013 hb16147 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910019 Hi]]> 2018-06-12 22:32:24 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910019 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910035 dad's dad is


]]> 2018-06-12 22:32:31 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910035 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910038 "we can un pack later "this implies that the family could be lazy and the dad may be a procrastinator
 

]]> 2018-06-12 22:32:34 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910038 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910053 Dad goes inside to put the jug on. This shows the dad is trying to hide the disappointment from everyone else. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:32:43 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910053 helens4 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910063 irony
the car breaks down very quickly
it is not a 'Triumph' for their 'epic' trip]]> 2018-06-12 22:32:54 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910063 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910082 "Dad is so deflated he doesn't even swear. He just stands quietly and waits" Too disappointed to even talk

]]> 2018-06-12 22:33:06 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910082 helens4 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910133 second person
you
'everything you're supposed to take with you'
this is an adventure that many families undertake
the narrator wants them to be like everyone else's family]]> 2018-06-12 22:33:42 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910133 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910146 2018-06-12 22:33:50 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910146 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910154 The simple sentences through out the text shows us the short attention span of the narrator, as the narrator is a child.]]> 2018-06-12 22:33:53 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910154 st16104 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910205 The simple sentence 'I'm 10' has been used by lloyd to show not only the person's age but to grab the audiences attention. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:34:23 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910205 hb16147 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910239 Triumph 2000 dies]]> 2018-06-12 22:34:43 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910239 helens4 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910283 foreshadowing
'made in 1972 and is exactly the colour of poo'
it is not a surprise when the car breaks down

]]> 2018-06-12 22:35:06 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910283 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910305 Playing prince on the record player]]> 2018-06-12 22:35:17 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910305 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910309 a semi colon seperate from the movements that the father did as and after he hoped in the car. Used to show the reader that he was not rushing into the car, he was taking his time. This can show that he might not of been to sure if the “epic” trip was going to work out. ]]> 2018-06-12 22:35:19 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910309 hb16147 https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910470 The baby's strapped in the middle of the back seat. Eight-year old is is perched on her folded-up duvet, a school bag full of pyjamas and tags at her feet.]]> 2018-06-12 22:37:40 UTC https://padlet.com/helens4/8b6sz6lq7fe1/wish/266910470