Editing Station Reflection by Shareesa Bollers https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8 Answer the following questions based on the peer editing you have done this week. Be specific. en-us 2019-01-10 22:32:07 UTC 2019-01-15 20:50:00 UTC hello@padlet.com Looked over how my peers use their transitions and reasoning https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319752477 2019-01-11 16:40:00 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319752477 Hello https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319752668 By have 5 sentence ]]> 2019-01-11 16:40:21 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319752668 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753021 by going in depth with the reasoning.

]]> 2019-01-11 16:40:55 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753021 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753139 expand on reasoning as much as possible.

]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:04 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753139 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753151 That the reasoning has to be connected to the claim.]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:06 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753151 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753258 make sure it connects to the claim]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:17 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753258 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753340 taking out words or phrases from the quote and further examine them to make the reasoning stronger]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:26 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753340 Hello https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753373 The Conclusion has to by rewrite of the claim. ]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:29 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753373 Being Specific on reasoning and show how it's supporting your evidence https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753413 2019-01-11 16:41:32 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753413 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753469 By having a clear topic]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:38 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753469 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753480 by having a good reasoning to your evidence]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:39 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753480 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753507 Make it interesting and try not to use a question]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:41 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753507 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753528 Connecting evidence and reasoning to claim]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:43 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753528 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753553 Introducing the source of evidence]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:47 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753553 Luis M. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753616 I checked if they had a good claim and also checked if there reasoning connected to the claim. ]]> 2019-01-11 16:41:52 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753616 The conclusion needs to show understanding https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753635 2019-01-11 16:41:53 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753635 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753848 restating the question or giving an idea on what the person is going to be talking about ]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:16 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753848 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753875 i found that there were small things people were missing and, that could be easily be changed.]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:19 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753875 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753902 expanding reasoning and analysis]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:21 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753902 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753908 Seeing how well my peers writing were]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:22 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319753908 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754175 BY having a descriptive introduction

]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:48 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754175 Recommend to restate the claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754210 2019-01-11 16:42:52 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754210 Luis M. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754222 To improve the introduction I could add more details and explain more on the three topics I will be explaining throughout the Body Pghs. ]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:53 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754222 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754228 restating the claim and a brief summary of everything that was talked about ]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:53 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754228 adding great evidence and having good reasoning that explains why its important and significant. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754233 2019-01-11 16:42:54 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754233 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754289 restating the thesis and summarizing the main idea]]> 2019-01-11 16:42:59 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754289 Stating claim followed by information that will be used through other paragraphs https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754450 2019-01-11 16:43:16 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754450 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754464 to improve my writing i need to have my reasoning connect back into my claim, instead of just connecting it to my evidence. 

]]> 2019-01-11 16:43:18 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754464 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754777 expand on reasoning, have a better analysis of the source of evidence and summarizing in my conclusion ]]> 2019-01-11 16:43:51 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754777 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754812 Organizing flow of information]]> 2019-01-11 16:43:55 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754812 Seeing how effective their claim, evidence and conclusions were and improvements that they need to reach. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754848 2019-01-11 16:44:00 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754848 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754872 they sometimes don't answer the question that is given ]]> 2019-01-11 16:44:03 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319754872 Luis M. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755154 Having good evidence and creating more details into the reasoning in order for the reader to understand more about the point the author is trying to make. ]]> 2019-01-11 16:44:34 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755154 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755261 Restate claim and summarize ]]> 2019-01-11 16:44:46 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755261 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755275 I can make sure it is clear and understandable not all over the place. ]]> 2019-01-11 16:44:48 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755275 Expand reasoning and include a good conclusion https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755396 2019-01-11 16:44:59 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755396 Luis M. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755792 Restate the claim and add more details in order for the reader to recognize what the big point of the passage was. ]]> 2019-01-11 16:45:48 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319755792 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319756614 getting evidence that connects to my claim and having good reasoning ]]> 2019-01-11 16:47:12 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319756614 Luis M. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319756766 Re-read the writing and make changes to anything that makes sense. Also, just try to add more details but don't repeat the topics over, so that way the writing will be more clear and grab the readers attention. 

]]> 2019-01-11 16:47:26 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319756766 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319757871 restating the claim and add more details ]]> 2019-01-11 16:49:19 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319757871 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319776516 you need to make sure that your counterargument actually argues your argument and you need to be able to argue why your right.]]> 2019-01-11 17:25:55 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319776516 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777201 I can only add information that is important to the topic I'm talking about ]]> 2019-01-11 17:26:59 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777201 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777255 I can reread it and make sure it makes sense.]]> 2019-01-11 17:27:06 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777255 hello https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777271 2019-01-11 17:27:07 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777271 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777275 by stating the information that was discussed in the previous paragraphs ]]> 2019-01-11 17:27:08 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777275 The intro has to show that you really understand what you're gonna be talking about. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777373 2019-01-11 17:27:21 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319777373 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319780732 Grammar errors ]]> 2019-01-11 17:33:18 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319780732 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319780882 Peer have a strong claim or evidence]]> 2019-01-11 17:33:35 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319780882 i https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781490 2019-01-11 17:34:47 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781490 By having a hook https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781581 2019-01-11 17:34:56 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781581 That my peers have to make there claims or evidence stronger https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781588 2019-01-11 17:34:57 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781588 Try to extend your writing https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781748 2019-01-11 17:35:18 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781748 Evidence https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781765 Connecting the evidence to your claim is very important! make sure the evidence is strong and that it strengthens your claim.]]> 2019-01-11 17:35:20 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781765 By having making sure its clear https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781856 2019-01-11 17:35:31 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319781856 Connect everything together and answer the question if you had one. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782000 2019-01-11 17:35:46 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782000 reasoning has to improve https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782585 2019-01-11 17:36:55 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782585 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782713 observations that i made during this week was that people had long writtings ]]> 2019-01-11 17:37:09 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782713 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782829 To have an error]]> 2019-01-11 17:37:22 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782829 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782856 my peers told me to focus on my evidence.]]> 2019-01-11 17:37:24 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782856 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782922 To make the sentences ]]> 2019-01-11 17:37:31 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319782922 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783216 Connect the evidence to your claim or reasoning ]]> 2019-01-11 17:37:56 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783216 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783220 To make the sentences cohesive]]> 2019-01-11 17:37:56 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783220 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783319 finding the right evidence is hard

]]> 2019-01-11 17:38:08 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783319 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783353 you can improve the introduction by ]]> 2019-01-11 17:38:13 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783353 That there will always be errors https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783390 2019-01-11 17:38:16 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783390 having more descriptive words, something to catch the readers attention. IG better hook and thesis. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783397 2019-01-11 17:38:17 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783397 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783512 Connecting your evidence to what your talking about ]]> 2019-01-11 17:38:31 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783512 the you summarizing what you wrote https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783743 2019-01-11 17:38:58 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783743 Improve my conclution, improve my body pghs, improve my interduction, and https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783780 2019-01-11 17:39:01 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783780 Many people have different ways to form there brief write. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783885 2019-01-11 17:39:14 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783885 Having a good claim that can be easily reasoned by and given to detailed to. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783896 2019-01-11 17:39:14 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783896 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783906 Have good evidences and then explain it as best as you can.]]> 2019-01-11 17:39:16 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783906 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783948 Try to hook the reader and state your claim clearly]]> 2019-01-11 17:39:21 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783948 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783957 Have background info that is relevant to the claim and make the claim cohesive that states the points ]]> 2019-01-11 17:39:22 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319783957 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784088 Give Strong evidence and very good and clear reasoning 

]]> 2019-01-11 17:39:36 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784088 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784112 Need to relate the claim and then add a little bit more of details ]]> 2019-01-11 17:39:39 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784112 dad https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784142 Good feedback can really help the writer improve their writing ]]> 2019-01-11 17:39:43 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784142 you want your intro to be catchy, to get the attention of the reader. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784148 2019-01-11 17:39:45 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784148 Add evidence from the text and connect it with your claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784165 2019-01-11 17:39:46 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784165 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784346 You can improve your conclusion by connecting everything together.]]> 2019-01-11 17:40:08 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784346 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784382 Find reliable evidence and expand on reasoning]]> 2019-01-11 17:40:13 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784382 strong evidence and good reasoning to back it up. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784438 2019-01-11 17:40:19 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784438 Add more evidence and expand on reasoning https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784540 2019-01-11 17:40:30 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784540 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784550 Make sure you summarize everything you talked about in your writing ]]> 2019-01-11 17:40:32 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784550 want to make the outro the best when rephrasing the claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784608 2019-01-11 17:40:38 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784608 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784622 I can improve my connections and my reasoning ]]> 2019-01-11 17:40:40 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784622 the way they find evidence https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784645 2019-01-11 17:40:42 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784645 dad https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784792 State your claim clearly

]]> 2019-01-11 17:41:03 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784792 i feel like we can improve on our reasoning and transitions https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784808 2019-01-11 17:41:05 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784808 that people view are different form each other https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784821 2019-01-11 17:41:06 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784821 start it off with something interesting , a fun fact. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784857 2019-01-11 17:41:09 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784857 to Improve the claim and the reasoning to connect the EQ https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784981 2019-01-11 17:41:20 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319784981 if you have a strong claim your evidence and reasoning will become strong. You want to start off strong and expand. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785172 2019-01-11 17:41:42 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785172 keep it on topic https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785296 2019-01-11 17:41:55 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785296 dad https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785302 Connecting/relating the information to your claim ]]> 2019-01-11 17:41:55 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785302 have a strong introduction a stong claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785419 2019-01-11 17:42:08 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785419 making sure the claim is the same as in the intro https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785638 2019-01-11 17:42:35 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785638 dad https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785845 Restate your claim and summarize the info from your body paragraphs ]]> 2019-01-11 17:42:57 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785845 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785885 Reasoning needs improvement and also make their writing more specific ]]> 2019-01-11 17:43:03 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785885 expand my evidence and reasoning by giving good information https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785994 2019-01-11 17:43:15 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319785994 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786125 Rephrase the topic sentence in the conclusion ]]> 2019-01-11 17:43:33 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786125 i feel like i can improve by expanding my reasoning to better prove my point. also maybe my transition sentences from paragraph to paragraph. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786231 2019-01-11 17:43:51 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786231 dad https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786491 Connect my evidence/reasoning back to my claim ]]> 2019-01-11 17:44:24 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786491 supporting my claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786531 2019-01-11 17:44:31 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786531 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786587 Make sure your writing is on task and focused on your topic.]]> 2019-01-11 17:44:39 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786587 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786634 Write neater and expand on reasoning]]> 2019-01-11 17:44:45 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786634 to improve my writing i need to my evidence and to a strong point and my conclution is sometimes weak https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786777 2019-01-11 17:45:08 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786777 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786882 Give an idea on what you are going to be talking about through your whole writing

]]> 2019-01-11 17:45:25 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319786882 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319787519 Improve my reasoning, conclusion and lastly making sure my writing is understandable to the point where you know what i am talking/ writing about ]]> 2019-01-11 17:46:52 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319787519 same topic summary https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319788557 2019-01-11 17:49:11 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319788557 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319807729 elaborate on your ideas

]]> 2019-01-11 18:26:26 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319807729 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319807918 People have good writing , they just need to complete their work.]]> 2019-01-11 18:26:50 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319807918 Expansion on the reasoning and evidence. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319807955 2019-01-11 18:26:55 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319807955 Strong claim and try to involve something catchy. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808310 2019-01-11 18:27:44 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808310 MAKE YOUR INTRO HOOK TO WHAT YOU ARE GOING TO TALK ABOUT AND GIVE A GOOD UNDERSTANDING OF IT. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808425 2019-01-11 18:28:00 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808425 people dont talk https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808527 2019-01-11 18:28:13 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808527 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808865 Restate the claim and rephrase it in your conclusion]]> 2019-01-11 18:28:42 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319808865 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809130 There are repetitive reasoning's and little evidence.]]> 2019-01-11 18:29:11 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809130 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809147 Improve on expanding my evidence and reasoning.]]> 2019-01-11 18:29:13 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809147 I can see that they have good conclusions on what there saying to connect the claim. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809163 2019-01-11 18:29:15 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809163 ALWAYS HAVE AT LEAST FIVE TO SIX SENTENCES https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809179 2019-01-11 18:29:17 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809179 Have a proper claim that introduce what side of the topic you are on. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809790 2019-01-11 18:30:29 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809790 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809881 Give evidence that helps my claim and then make my reasoning connect to the claim and make the reasoning non repetitive.]]> 2019-01-11 18:30:40 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319809881 support evidence with good reasoning https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810071 2019-01-11 18:31:02 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810071 no https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810117 2019-01-11 18:31:07 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810117 I can improve my intro by making sure i have a strong claim, and making sure it is strong. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810232 2019-01-11 18:31:22 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810232 More detail https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810478 2019-01-11 18:31:53 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810478 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810489 I can specifically, think more about the reasoning. In order to have better reasoning.]]> 2019-01-11 18:31:54 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810489 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810628 Restate the claim and question and summarize why your side is better.]]> 2019-01-11 18:32:09 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810628 Completing it . https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810677 2019-01-11 18:32:14 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810677 Be non repetitive when writing the reasoning. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810926 2019-01-11 18:32:44 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810926 drc11 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810954 Looking over on how my peers are r]]> 2019-01-11 18:32:47 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319810954 they all have good strong claim evidence and reasoning but needs a little bit of explanation on evidence https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319811176 2019-01-11 18:33:13 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319811176 They can seperate their body paragraphs by a claim, evidence, reasoning, evidence, reasoning, conclusion. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319811854 2019-01-11 18:34:26 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319811854 restate the claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319812689 2019-01-11 18:36:05 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319812689 having strong evidence and reasoning https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319849506 2019-01-11 19:49:43 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319849506 There will be people that with help you to be a better writer. Also the person that is look over your work will look at miss spelling words or any errors that you did https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319849635 2019-01-11 19:50:04 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319849635 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319849982 add evidence

]]> 2019-01-11 19:50:47 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319849982 make it interesting and get the readers attention and bring up the whole point of the essay https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850059 2019-01-11 19:51:00 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850059 talk about about the topics youll be talking about later on https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850062 2019-01-11 19:51:01 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850062 c https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850101 connecting back to the claim]]> 2019-01-11 19:51:08 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850101 checked if their evidence was good and if their reasoning is good https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850223 2019-01-11 19:51:29 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850223 get every information little by little and then bring it all together https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850384 2019-01-11 19:51:53 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850384 have a claim that introduces what you are going to talk about and will want me to continue reading https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850578 2019-01-11 19:52:21 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850578 expand the reasoning, try more on the conclusion and not put SO MUCH information. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850641 2019-01-11 19:52:31 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850641 strong intro sentence, evidence, and reasoning https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850910 2019-01-11 19:53:05 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319850910 connecting to your clam/topics and by giving good evidence. Also good reasoning. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851018 2019-01-11 19:53:21 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851018 connects back to the claim and https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851052 2019-01-11 19:53:26 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851052 When you re read it you will see some problems so alwyas re read it. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851057 2019-01-11 19:53:27 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851057 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851423 have 4 or more pghs]]> 2019-01-11 19:54:12 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851423 include more details https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851486 2019-01-11 19:54:22 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851486 conecting https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851753 2019-01-11 19:55:00 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851753 I can look over my work and https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851804 2019-01-11 19:55:07 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319851804 keep the claim and its topic through out the whole text https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319852215 2019-01-11 19:56:04 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319852215 A introduction is when you mostly describing about what you are going to write about in you easy or in a paragraph. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319852775 2019-01-11 19:57:18 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319852775 By being more specific https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319852794 2019-01-11 19:57:20 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319852794 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319853199 There was lots of information]]> 2019-01-11 19:58:22 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319853199 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319853514 giving a little more information on it]]> 2019-01-11 19:59:11 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319853514 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319853672 good evidence and good reasoning ]]> 2019-01-11 19:59:37 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319853672 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319854018 Connect back with the claim]]> 2019-01-11 20:00:23 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319854018 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319854176 elaborating more ]]> 2019-01-11 20:00:46 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319854176 By making the claim stand out and having a good hook. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871039 2019-01-11 20:41:56 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871039 Reasoning was not the best, the evidencce shown wasn't really explanined, or the information said was rambing so it disrupted the flow of the writing. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871040 2019-01-11 20:41:57 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871040 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871243 a lot of the evidence was unsupported by the reasoning so the author needed to go more into depth with explaining the significance of the quote and how it relates to the claim and the overall topic.]]> 2019-01-11 20:42:36 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871243 Bring depth and reasoning and connect the paragraphs cohesively https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871257 2019-01-11 20:42:40 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871257 A strong and clear claim that leads into introducing a relevant piece of evidence. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871263 2019-01-11 20:42:41 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871263 I can add more reasoning after my evidence and connect it better to my claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871275 2019-01-11 20:42:43 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871275 good evidence and good reasoning https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871391 2019-01-11 20:43:06 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871391 reasoning is something people need to work better on https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871393 2019-01-11 20:43:06 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871393 Stop rambling and focus on explaining key componnets of the evidenc in order to make my writing more effective. https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871403 2019-01-11 20:43:08 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871403 I edited a lot of the homies' papers and most of them came from the gutter https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871509 2019-01-11 20:43:27 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871509 Connect my reasoning to my claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871542 2019-01-11 20:43:31 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871542 stronger claim https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871560 2019-01-11 20:43:34 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871560 refer back to my claims https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871590 2019-01-11 20:43:37 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871590 ye https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871621 understand how to present claim without redirecting attention to anything else that isn't relevant or isn't useful to the intro]]> 2019-01-11 20:43:44 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871621 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871778 the introduction should have a strong claim that gives a hint into what the essay will be about and also should have a hook that will make it stand out]]> 2019-01-11 20:44:12 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871778 Elaborate more in the reasoning https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871806 2019-01-11 20:44:18 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871806 The evidence mj16062 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871874 Some quotes that were used could have been better and werent really connecting to the claim ]]> 2019-01-11 20:44:31 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871874 https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871898 Ive noticed that ive noticed easy mistakes that make by looking at someone else's]]> 2019-01-11 20:44:36 UTC https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871898 to explains the evidence in the reasoning and to understanding because I can't explain the evidence that well https://padlet.com/sbollers/816sdyjpxpj8/wish/319871964

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