A1 The Narrative Tools/Strategies I Noticed by Rachel Bradshaw https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536 Scroll to locate the two stories you read and list at least 1 narrative strategy or tool you noticed in each story you read. See Mrs. B's examples. en-us 2020-08-05 01:40:09 UTC 2020-08-31 21:17:20 UTC hello@padlet.com I noticed how the author developed WHY/THEME -- "It was Ugonna who had given her a new life" - she couldn't sell the tragedy of his death for a Visa to America - he gave her a new life when he was born, and that new life couldn't come to America. The message is powerful: becoming a parent changes you and creates a new life for you. rachelbradshaw https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/690049483 2020-08-20 18:09:09 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/690049483 FORESHADOWING - when Juanito rides into town he sees a buzzard flying near him "a sure sign of a dead or dying animal nearby" - this foreshadows the tragic events and deaths in the story. rachelbradshaw https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/690052035 2020-08-20 18:10:00 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/690052035 I noticed description that results in a rise in tension (and foreshadowing) rachelbradshaw https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/690061724 He shook his head again. “I had to stop thinking.” He’d lain awake too many nights, he said, thinking: about the religious police, about the lashings men he knew endured in prison, about the public plaza with its granite tiles and chessboard-size drain. Risks he chose to take, for love.

The author hints that her brother is taking a risk for love - a very dangerous risk. This increases the tension of the story as it leads to the climax. ]]> 2020-08-20 18:13:08 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/690061724 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699943294 I noticed how the author used imagery very well, the descriptions of the scenery and the characters was very detailed, like when the author describes the old man," Something besides years had had a hand in his aging. His hair and long, full beard were white, his gray, lusterless eyes sunken, his face singularly seamed with wrinkles which appeared to belong to two intersecting systems. In figure he was tall and spare, with a stoop of the shoulders." the descriptions really helped you imagine it and see it like it was a picture.--Emma Jolley

]]> 2020-08-26 14:22:55 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699943294 In this story I noticed that it has lots of descriptions. It had lots of imagery so the whole time while reading it I was imagining the scene. For example it said " Then there were silk gowns, and velvet and satin ones added to these; laces, too, and embroideries; bonnets and gloves" https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699943983 2020-08-26 14:23:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699943983 I noticed how the author used Imagery to add to the feel of the story. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699945273 2020-08-26 14:23:25 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699945273 The Details and the Imagery added to the whole story to make it more complete. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699960736 It used imagery a lot and made the environment feel more real and gave lots of details about all characters and what was going on with them. All the details made all up the whole picture. "He stood over the body in the fading light, adjusting the hair and putting the finishing touches to the simple toilet, doing all mechanically, with soulless care." Name: Carter Smith A1]]> 2020-08-26 14:27:53 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699960736 I liked how the story was told in more then one perspective, the mother, the daughter, and then her husband at the end. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699961300 2020-08-26 14:28:03 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699961300 In this story, the author used plenty of descriptive words. It was a very detailed story so the imagery was quite vivid. The short story seemed to keep you on the edge of your seat and use different words and funny phrases to try and explain things to give them a different meaning. It was taunting as well, going back and forth between mother and sons mindset. - Megan Bryant https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699963535 2020-08-26 14:28:43 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699963535 THE IMAGERY https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699971532 Mitch Maddix
the imagery in this short story is EXTRAORDINARY it describes rooms or places or even things in the story very very well. "She watched the visa interviewer behind the glass screen, the way her limp auburn hair grazed the folded neck, the way green eyes peered at her papers above silver frames as though the glasses were unnecessary" 137. For me small things in a story like that makes the story a really good story.]]> 2020-08-26 14:30:57 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699971532 I noticed that the author used very descriptive imagery to help us better understand what is going on in the story when I read the story I felt like I was there and was experiencing what was going on more so in other books. For example "Wounds and slashes were cut like roads deep into his flesh." that's pretty descriptive language. Easton Ernst https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699975651 2020-08-26 14:32:09 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699975651 I really liked how the author switches back and forth between the present story of being stuck in the boarder and the past story of why they are traveling across the boarder so as you read, you get more and more information and slowly the puzzle pieces fit together to form the full story. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699978259 2020-08-26 14:32:53 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699978259 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699978963 In this story I noticed imagery and description throughout all of it. It was very detailed so it was really easy to picture the setting and what everything looked like. I also noticed that the perspective switched from first the mother, to the daughter, then to the husband. This was very interesting to see the different sides of what was going on.]]> 2020-08-26 14:33:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699978963 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699979171 In this story there is a really suspenseful conclusion. It leaves you wondering what will happen next and makes you wish that there was more. ]]> 2020-08-26 14:33:09 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699979171 Imagery https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699983768 This author used a lot of imagery to make the setting and characters seem real. When eading it as if you are a fly on the wall experiencing it with the character]]> 2020-08-26 14:34:29 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699983768 I really like how the author didn't write this story in perfect English with perfect grammar, they mixed it up and changed it to match the main character and where she was from. "'She did real good' my mother would say." - Megan Bryant https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699986164 2020-08-26 14:35:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699986164 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699993171 I like how the story has a very different conclusion to what you were thinking it would be. It makes you wish there was more in the story so you could learn what happens next.]]> 2020-08-26 14:37:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699993171 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699994343 I loved the plot twist at the end and the irony of the story, it left me very stunned yet thoughtful. I also enjoyed the description of the setting and the way it brought clear, detailed images to my mind. An example of this imagery is shown when the author writes, “Upon her own great mahogany bed, that was like a sumptuous throne, with its satin-lined half-canopy”.]]> 2020-08-26 14:37:24 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699994343 There is a lot of imagery in this one. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699999985 The bulbous nose hung pendulous over a pair of fleshy lips. The ears protruded forward like swinging doors. The mustache curled menacingly at each corner like a scorpion's sting. And the hair, plastered to his head, looked matted and dirty like an old mop. Finally a two-inch scar crossed Scipio's left cheek at a diagonal. 

]]> 2020-08-26 14:38:56 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/699999985 In this story used a lot of imaginary. It states,¨It was no wonder, when she stood one day against the stone pillar in whose shadow she had lain asleep, eighteen years before, that Armand Aubigny riding by and seeing her there, had fallen in love with her.¨ I think this is a great example of imagery because it takes us to the moment when he fell in love with her. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700000785 2020-08-26 14:39:09 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700000785 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700003618 I thought that the background and description that it gives throughout the story are what makes it interesting. The way it ends is not what you are led to expect at all. ]]> 2020-08-26 14:39:54 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700003618 Foreshadowing https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700008934 I noticed how even though the story was 8 pages long, it still had quite a bit of foreshadowing, like how it said that the man didn't know how to prepare a body for burial. "In performance of this sacred duty he blundered now and again, did certain things incorrectly, and others which he did correctly were done over and over." I also like that the real twist of the story wasn't fully revealed until the very last sentence. The shock doesn't come until the very end. - Jenica Pierce]]> 2020-08-26 14:41:25 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700008934 The author really helped me see how the orphan made it so that he she loved her so much https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700014081 The passion that awoke in him that day, when he saw her at the gate, swept along like an avalanche, or like a prairie fire, or like anything that drives headlong over all obstacles. ]]> 2020-08-26 14:42:49 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700014081 the symbols and imagery in this was exceedingly great. ALSO VERY RELATABLE in certain ways https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700014416 Mitch Maddix
"During the long ride to the subway station, she and her husband did not exchange a word, and every time she glanced at his old hands, clasped and twitching upon the handle of his umbrella, and saw their swollen veins and brown-spotted skin, she felt the mounting pressure of tears." The detail in this short story is incredibly accurate I have definitely been angry at my parents or just them glancing at me in a curtain way makes me want to cry sometimes and this story described that perfectly]]> 2020-08-26 14:42:54 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700014416 I liked the way that this story told the story thorough imagery. I liked how you could really imagine the yellow house with the trees out front and how you could see what was going on. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700014655 2020-08-26 14:42:58 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700014655 The Author used a lot of narrative tools such as imagery and lots of details with them. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700015629 For example when Rosendo went in the store he talked about what he smelled "And then an overpowering sensation of smells accosted him: cigar smoke and illegal rum. The latter – sweet, pungent - clung to his nostrils like sealing tar." This shows a lot of details that make the story better. Name: Carter Smith A1 

]]> 2020-08-26 14:43:15 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700015629 In this one I had lots of imagery running through my head. Especially while they would be fighting. Here is an example "He 27 had skin the transparency of alabaster, in which blue veins stood prominent like tributaries. His achiote-red hair framed a face with deep-set brown eves. And though he had a handsome face, with strong features and eyes moist like a puppy's, on it there was an expression of perpetual sadness." While reading this I could picture every detail they gave https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700015758 2020-08-26 14:43:18 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700015758 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700016723 There was a lot of imagery in this story," The bulbous nose hung pendulous over a pair of fleshy lips. The ears protruded forward like swinging doors. The mustache curled menacingly at each corner like a scorpion's sting. And the hair, plastered to his head, looked matted and dirty like an old mop."
The description of the character really made you see the character and have an image of what the character looked like which helped make you feel like you are in the story.--Emma Jolley ]]> 2020-08-26 14:43:33 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700016723 i liked how in the story there where times when the author told us more then was necessary. for example "she remained in the living room with her pack of soiled playing cards and her old photograph albums." the cards and photo albums were not important to the story, but with the added information you can relate and better understand the characters. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700016786 2020-08-26 14:43:34 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700016786 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700018607 Reading this story I noticed how engaging it was and you always wanted to know what would happen next. For example the text reads, “ ‘Ah!’ It was a cry that she could not help; which she was not conscious of having uttered. The blood turned like ice in her veins, and a clammy moisture gathered upon her face.”]]> 2020-08-26 14:43:58 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700018607 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700021745 The author used emotion to really tell the story. For example "She was like a stone image: silent, white, motionless after she placed it there. In silence he ran his cold eyes over the written words. He said nothing." By using these words we could feel the emotions the authour was trying to portray.
Abbie San Juan]]> 2020-08-26 14:44:52 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700021745 Imagery https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700022781 I know everybody's saying imagery, but imagery really is this story's strength. The author didn't miss a single detail, describing every scene and character so vividly you really felt that you could see it playing out in front of you. Even the description of the grocery store in the beginning was detailed. "The colmado was a modest structure: four walls of oaken boards, shuttered windows and a gabled roof made of zinc. The boards had been painted lime green, but the paint had since peeled, the roof red from rust."  - Jenica Pierce]]> 2020-08-26 14:45:11 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700022781 I really liked how this story used dopamine and how it made you feel like you were on the edge of our seat. I really liked how you kind of get a ending but it mostly ends with you still wondering what really happened. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700023030 2020-08-26 14:45:15 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700023030 The author used very good Imagery in this story. An example is when Jaunito went to see his father and found him dead. It says , "Juanito took the blade from his father's hand and regarded his well-defined and clean-shaven face. Rake-thin and wiry-muscled". He is describing his father using details. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700027675 2020-08-26 14:46:34 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700027675 The story had a twist at the end with the father. along with that the story did well at changing the energy of it very suddenly from happy and light to uncertainty and sadness. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700031486 2020-08-26 14:47:41 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700031486 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700035505 The author used lots of  descriptive words in the story to make it seem like you were living through it with the man. "Then there were darkness blacker than before, and silence; and when he returned to consciousness the sun was high and the wood vocal with songs of birds." through this imagery the reader can picture what is going on and be more invested in the story. Abbie San Juan]]> 2020-08-26 14:48:46 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700035505 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700037712 I like how they they explained everything that was going on and how detailed it was. It seemed like a happy story at first but they were able to change it quickly.]]> 2020-08-26 14:49:21 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700037712 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700037903 I really like in this story how the setting is explained and how the background knowledge really helps you better understand the story for example when he describes the river "Her names were for her power and her beauty. Dadajan wove fantastic tales around her – her rage, her sorrow, her bounty, her greed." it really helps you understand where Babau is coming from. Easton Ernst ]]> 2020-08-26 14:49:24 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700037903 Adam Arnson https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700038242 very good imagery and conveying emotion it described places very well and here is an example "We called it that: the Creek. In fact it was an open sewage canal, wide enough to fit a pedicab and five or so feet deep," its very descriptive too.

]]> 2020-08-26 14:49:30 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700038242 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700039492 This story uses very good imagery. For example, “He lived alone in a house of logs surrounded on all sides by the great forest, of whose gloom and silence he seemed a part”. ]]> 2020-08-26 14:49:52 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700039492 The imagery was great like when Scipio was described alive as well as dead. https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700043265 2020-08-26 14:51:00 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700043265 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700043954 The writer did a good job of showing what has happened in the past and then showing what was going on in the story and it all worked good

]]> 2020-08-26 14:51:14 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700043954 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700044065 The story showed a lot of emotion. Forcing readers to feel empathy, the author expressed the pain and sadness that Desiree felt, “For God's sake tell them it is not true. You must know it is not true. I shall die. I must die. I cannot be so unhappy, and live." As a reader I felt the same emotion she did. ]]> 2020-08-26 14:51:16 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700044065 Aaron Norman https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700843508 It used very descriptive imagery. The way the author described the scenes made it feel like you were there. ]]> 2020-08-26 18:26:46 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/700843508 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701044507 I really enjoyed the attention to detail in this story. For example the quote "The little log house, with is chimney of sticks, its roof of warping clapboards weighted with traversing poles and its chinking of clay, had a single door and directly opposite, a window" draws you in and makes you want to keep reading to see what happens inside of the house.]]> 2020-08-26 19:34:03 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701044507 maddy carpenter https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701286944 I thought it was cool that they started off with a happy story of a man and finding his true love, and then it quickly changed into something deeper and sadder then that, I found that cool because while reading the beginning of the story I never would have guessed that would happen I also thought that the ending was the perfect shock that the story really needed to pull it all together.]]> 2020-08-26 21:33:29 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701286944 maddy carpenter https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701293712 I really enjoyed how much detail was in this story. Being able to picture everything in my head made the story so much more interesting for me. I really loved when the author explained the pictures in the photo album too, I feel that was a nice touch and needed so that you could get a feel of what was going on.]]> 2020-08-26 21:38:58 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701293712 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701323805 It was very descriptive and detailed here is an example “Tales were told about this man; for example, Scipio could drive nails through a board with his bare hands. He could lift a young bull on his shoulders and drink rum all day without losing consciousness. He could whip anybody in a fistfight”]]> 2020-08-26 22:03:31 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701323805 I thought this story used really good imagery. You are able to picture exactly how the character looks. This is shown when the author writes, "She wore cheap black dresses. Unlike other women of her age (such as Mrs. Sol, their next-door neighbor, whose face was all pink and mauve with paint and whose hat was a cluster of brookside flowers), she presented a naked white countenance to the faultfinding light of spring." https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701763495 2020-08-27 03:57:09 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/701763495 I noticed how the author used very descriptive words and sentences to help set the scene for the story which helps the story to feel very full of life. My favorite descriptive sentence is, "The fertile lush lands that emerged from Ishwari’s womb were desired by many." How the author describes the setting sets the mood for the rest of the story which is why it is very important to get it right. -Emily Matthews https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/704039844 2020-08-27 23:50:18 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/704039844 https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/704271550 I noticed this story had a lot of description. The story gives you a lot of details and makes comparisons to help you picture what is happening, such as, "Straining the corners of his mouth apart by means of his thumbs, with a horrible, mask-like grimace". The story would also give little details that weren't necessarily important to the main storyline which I liked a lot. For example, when she dropped some playing cards the story named each kind even though it didn't really have to do with what would happen next. I also noticed that the story had a lot of suspense, building it up, only to leave you wondering what will happen next at a cliffhanger at the end of the story. -Rebecca Cook]]> 2020-08-28 02:41:09 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/704271550 Livvie Adamson https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/705689592 I noticed that all of the details were not revealed until the end. There was a good hook and it pulls you in for the rest do the story.]]> 2020-08-28 17:45:32 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/705689592 hook https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/710165789 I thought the authors hook was very effective, "IT SURPRISED NO ONE, least of all the cane cutters of La Cuchilla, the day Juanito's father fought Scipio Armenteros, the town braggart and bully. " I feel like its interesting and mysterious enough to really get the reader to lock in]]> 2020-08-31 21:16:12 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelbradshaw/7x661c7ll5z1536/wish/710165789