https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba Made with serendipity en-us 2017-10-31 15:21:23 UTC 2025-11-24 16:34:58 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188838 I believe my partners introduction to the culminating project was overall very well done. He just had a slight grammar error in the beginning ]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:40 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188838 anayah_green https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188841 I told my partner to add quotations around the title of the speech, add indentations, and start thesis statement with a contrasting adverb. Also to add more background information. Overall she had a good introduction paragraph. ]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:40 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188841 oluwatomisin_igun https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188888 My partner's introduction was well written, however she needs to include the name of the speeches.]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:44 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188888 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188889 I revised my partner's intro, and I was good. Although I changed "even though" to "although" in his paper. I also added a comma in the thesis. 


]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:44 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188889 kaylaj_greenfield https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188920 My partners introduction paragraph, was written well and well organized. I suggested that she didn't start the paragraphs with a date not spelled out. She also needs to keep in mind of grammatical errors.]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:45 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188920 khalia_rawlings https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188931 My partner's introduction paragraph was well written and very detailed. The only thing i suggested was to move the thesis to the end of the paragraph.]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:46 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188931 steven_maldonado1 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188982 A few tips I would add are
• Capitalize names
• Make indentations when writing paragraphs
• Write the person's entire name before shortening it
• The information contained was pretty concise, however, more sentences are needed in order to make a complete paragraph.  

]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:47 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202188982 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189024 I told my partner that his introduction was very well made but he needed to improve on background information on the speakers.]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:49 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189024 taja_keitt https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189075 My partner's introductory paragraph was obviously thought-out and well-rounded. The only correction I gave my partner was to change the wording and combine a few short sentences ]]> 2017-10-31 15:22:55 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189075 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189159 My partner's introduction was well organized. However, I told her to add a little more detail for the background information of the presidents. 

]]> 2017-10-31 15:23:03 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189159 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189217 My partner's introduction was very well written and intriguing. His thesis is well structured. I think all he needs to do to his introduction is add more background information about the events that the president is addressing.]]> 2017-10-31 15:23:08 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189217 cassidy_mcandrew https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189322 I told my partner to add quotations to the speech and add a contrasting adverb to the thesis statement and add a bit more background information otherwise it was well written. ]]> 2017-10-31 15:23:20 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189322 arooj_ahmad https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189344 I peer-reviewed my partners paragraph overall it was great but, it had some grammatical errors that needed to be fixed.

]]> 2017-10-31 15:23:22 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189344 amyoguguo https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189447 I told my partner that she used creative words that enhanced the purpose of her paragraph. You described and explained the speakers tone and gave its meaning.]]> 2017-10-31 15:23:29 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202189447 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190090 I reviewed Jennifer Rubio's introductory paragraph. Her paragraph was very thorough and met all of the requirements. The only suggestion I would make is for her to add more background information about the topics of the speeches in her introduction.]]> 2017-10-31 15:24:30 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190090 jenniferrubio https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190117 I suggested that my partner fix their hook sentence and describe who the presidents were.]]> 2017-10-31 15:24:33 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190117 nitalya_mack https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190281 My partner had a very good amount of background information in their introduction. The only tip I gave was to restructure the thesis statement to make it more evident and clear that the essay would be comparing and contrasting the speeches.]]> 2017-10-31 15:24:50 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190281 keith_rishton https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190946 My partner's introductory paragraph was good and included lots of background information. A tip I would give is to add quotation marks around the name of the speech if it is needed and include more from the prompt in the thesis.]]> 2017-10-31 15:25:57 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202190946 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202191662 I suggested that my partner revise her thesis and add more background information]]> 2017-10-31 15:27:10 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202191662 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202191808 My partners speech was well organized and it let me know what her paper was going to be about and let me know the differences between the two speeches.]]> 2017-10-31 15:27:28 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202191808 dakotah_west https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202191949 In Ms. Mack's introduction to her culminating project she lucidly and completely explained each of the President's goal in writing the speech. The only tip I have is to add quotations between the speech names. ]]> 2017-10-31 15:27:43 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202191949 onome_efealuebhosele https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202192057 My partner's introductory paragraph was well written but had some minor grammatical issues.]]> 2017-10-31 15:27:56 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202192057 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202192066 I told my partner that he should change words like "many" to "countless" or "numerous."]]> 2017-10-31 15:27:57 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202192066 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202192988 I told my partner that he had to revise his thesis statement, and include more information about the presidents.]]> 2017-10-31 15:29:38 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202192988 jayla_claggett https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202193573 My partners introduction was written in a very well manner. My only suggestion was to fix minor grammatical errors. These errors did not change the understanding of their introduction. However when my partner fixed the mistakes, the introduction was wonderful.]]> 2017-10-31 15:30:43 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202193573 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202194277 I told my partner that he should examine his introduction for grammatical errors.]]> 2017-10-31 15:31:55 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202194277 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202196227 My partners introductory paragraph was written very well. The only suggestions I gave were to place quotation marks around the titles of the speeches. ]]> 2017-10-31 15:35:10 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202196227 chelsie_ihuoma https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202200048 My Partner introduction was well written and precise.]]> 2017-10-31 15:42:27 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/202200048 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260168220 My partners introductory paragraph was very organized well but it had a few grammatical errors. The only thing I suggested from the writer was to use transition words and add more length to their paper.]]> 2018-05-12 19:56:52 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260168220 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260168430 The collaboration with my peer helped me improve my response to the literary analysis response. Their feedback about my grammar, structure, helped me realize what aspects of my writing needed improvement. For example, their feedback touched upon grammatical errors I commonly made such as comma splices, misspelled words and sentence fragments. Feedback also concerning how the structure of my text was good but I should have elaborated more on the story in order to make the end of the story more understandable to the reader. Through this feedback, I was able to fix errors that I would not have noticed at first glance. ]]> 2018-05-12 20:00:32 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260168430 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260259719 My collaboration with my partner helped me understand what exactly was expected of me in grading the narratives. I was able to use better words to review my narrative and understand what I did wrong and what I could improve. I was able to use better words that made my narrative have more context and made it more clear and coherent.]]> 2018-05-13 19:03:54 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260259719 https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260273600 Collaborating with my peer in order to revise my written response helped me improve my written analysis. I was able get feedback on the way my writing was structured and on my grammatical errors. My partner gave me constructive criticism and allowed to see the flaws in my paper. This assignment enabled me to see my written literary analysis from a new perspective. I was able to make my analysis more concise and well-structured because of the feedback I received.]]> 2018-05-13 21:18:06 UTC https://padlet.com/a_kiasibarnes/7ogttrq9ytba/wish/260273600