https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva Period 2 en-us 2016-09-16 13:07:40 UTC 2016-09-19 01:35:33 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124351573 Amanda: 6- because her ideas and logic are clearly there, but work needs to be done to improve transitions, introductions, embeding, and the general flow and connection between arguments.

Savannah: 6 because she has clear unstanding of the text, but missed a crucial part of Kennedy's speech. Limited diction.

Brian: 7 because the development of his essay is very clear and flows, order of paragraphs could have been different for an agrunent's standpoint,  even thought the flow was good it could have been smother.]]> 2016-09-16 14:08:34 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124351573 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124352008 I would give Jing a score of around 6+ due to her superb use of textual references and style but lacks a varied amount of analysis

Leane recieve a 6 because she did a great job on her interpretation, but need more text reference to clearly demonstrates her interpretation of said text. ]]> 2016-09-16 14:09:43 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124352008 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124352135  Shyanne6 word choice could have been better and with the ideas she had she always had a explanations which is good 
Favour 6 good diction explanation needed more details and paragraphs could have stated what she was talking about
Keona6+ used great diction and provided lots of good information and introduced each paragraph great

]]> 2016-09-16 14:09:58 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124352135 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124353109 I give Devin's essay a 6+, he explained Kennedy's purpose very clearly in his first paragraph. His thesis statement could have been better and shorter, he also should have specified which rhetorical strategies Kennedy incorporated. His body paragraphs explained the how/why of each strategy. He clearly explained what the strategy was and used a quote to show that strategy. His essay would have been better if he utitlized more than one example from the text. 

I give Maya's essay a 6. The thesis is strong and clear. Soapstone is used. The first sentencs are explained by the paragraph that follows. But more text references could be used and there is confusion between syntax and diction. The essay starts strong and ends with a short but strong conclusion. ]]> 2016-09-16 14:12:28 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124353109 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124355613 Katelyn -  Based on what was written, katelyn received a 4. There was some evidence and examples but hey we're limited. There were some quotes but were lacking explanation.

Tyraé- I would give Tyraé a 5 because her thesis statement wasn't very developed well. In one of her paragraphs she wrote about fiction. It didn't give evidence from inaugural speech.

Marshay - 3 
Marshay receives a 3 because there is lack of examples, and evidence. Poor diction.(diction was mentioned but an example wasn't provided) and there seems to be lack of understanding of the prompt. 

]]> 2016-09-16 14:18:09 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124355613 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124356418 Brianna combined score of 6+  she was great at explaining the text and true purpose of Kennedy's speech. Our advice to her would be to work on imbedding quotes and she coul steal from Jordan's transitions.
Jordan's combined score of a 6+ too because she had smooth transition from paragraph to paragraph. Briana and I felt that she could do a bit more analyzing. 
Gabby's combined score is also a 6+ because she had good diction and healthly evidence. Our advice to her would be to work on the structure of her essay and to directly address her audience. ]]> 2016-09-16 14:20:04 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124356418 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124360860 Rebecca-5- very confusing, run on sentences, grammar issues
Liked how she explained text and imbedded quotes.

Reanna- 6- small grammar issue, conclusion could use some more work. Loved the diction overall and the way she structured her intro paragraph.

Dakota- 6- Explained text support, repeated "his" a lot. Liked the structure of the essay, didn't seem repetitive overall. ]]> 2016-09-16 14:30:05 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124360860 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124362162 Hunter - 5.5 - paragraphs were well thought out and organized. Thesis was a bit unclear 

Megan - 6 - well written and structured. Did not use unneeded information. Concluding paragraph does not reference thesis. 

Dasha - 5 - well thought out thesis. Concluding paragraph was missing. Wordy third paragraph. ]]> 2016-09-16 14:32:54 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124362162 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124448339 Score 7
Perfect length, very effective. Includes a good amount of references. Topic sentences are very clear and her point and thesis is very clear. 
Kelly 5
First paragraph is one sentence and no thesis.
Has references but doesn't show how they are effective

]]> 2016-09-16 18:12:46 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124448339 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124449338 Conrad: score 7+
Sophisticated argument with text evidence that is appropriate and convincing, but leaves out point Kennedy is making in paragraph one and his conclusion lacks reasoning.
Ronaldo: Score]]> 2016-09-16 18:14:51 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124449338 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124450204 Score: 6 
-Good arrangement and examples
-could go into more depth when it comes to explanations. ]]> 2016-09-16 18:16:47 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124450204 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124450881 Score:6 
-good thesis 
-clear text support
-good examples
-could use  better senctence structure
-could go into more depth ]]> 2016-09-16 18:18:39 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124450881 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124451402 Adina- strong essay a lot of useful details just enough quotes just needs to expand on conclusion (7+)

David- essay was informative but short needs more details & to expand on points (6) ]]> 2016-09-16 18:20:06 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124451402 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124451899 Conrad: score 7+
Sophisticated argument with text evidence that is appropriate and convincing, but leaves out point Kennedy is making in paragraph one and his conclusion lacks reasoning.
Ronaldo: Score 6 
Deep analysis and use of diction. Needs more evidence and stylistic features.]]> 2016-09-16 18:21:38 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/6zz9yz4w2eva/wish/124451899