https://padlet.com/26bdinizo/6xdzquar6tl Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 18:36:43 UTC 2026-01-02 18:26:23 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/438973340/50e37f7b413c1cad1f1b2769d6158ce7/images.jpeg 26bkloepfer https://padlet.com/26bdinizo/6xdzquar6tl/wish/421781851        A strength for your narrative “Unexpected” is the way that there is more thoughts then people or you talking.One of my favorite thoughts was when u said you had to get better soon and you were being to insecure. This helps me understand the event that is happening because the thoughts sometimes explain the situation.Another strength that you had was really expressing your character's feelings as example “Why am I being so insecure”.This helps me understand your story more because your explaining what's happening to the character. A wish or something you could add to your story is maybe adding a little more conversations.

]]> 2019-12-09 18:39:52 UTC https://padlet.com/26bdinizo/6xdzquar6tl/wish/421781851 26jleske https://padlet.com/26bdinizo/6xdzquar6tl/wish/421808196 One thing I think you did well was your hook. I think you did a good job on your hook because it was very descriptive like “The vibration on the old rusty wooden floor scattered across the room. A loud bang hit everyone's eardrum as the old wooden door squeaked open.”Another thing I think you did well on was using descriptive language like “When John went to sleep the house was quiet like a library.” One wish I have for you is that I wish you would’ve checked over your story one more time because there were sometimes mistakes and things that didn’t make sense. 

]]> 2019-12-09 19:15:58 UTC https://padlet.com/26bdinizo/6xdzquar6tl/wish/421808196 26vslack https://padlet.com/26bdinizo/6xdzquar6tl/wish/422194859 One thing I liked about your story was "The vibration on the old rusty wooden floor scattered across the room. A loud bang hit everyone's eardrum as the old wooden door squeaked open." That really tells the reader what is happening. Plus it's a very "right away" opening. You started straight into some action and it makes the reader want to read more. Another thing I liked in your story was your word choice. It helps explain better what is happening and gives a more vivid description. One thing that was not as good was that you introduced your character a little late. Although you explained what was happening, that was really all you did. For the first paragraph or two it was just your character doing things when we didn't even know his name yet.]]> 2019-12-10 15:05:19 UTC https://padlet.com/26bdinizo/6xdzquar6tl/wish/422194859