https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv 1. Post your document, and then find your partner's document. 2. Read their brainstorm sheet. 3. Create a new post; write feedback using TAG method. 4. "Connect" your post to your partner's; add a label with your names ("Long-Tonneson Feedback). Partners: (Alex --> Jon --> Frank-->Alex ), (Cece & Ariston), (Aaron & Amalia), (Averi & Sam), (Maretta & Hailey), (Kaden & Nick), (Macy & Katelyn), (Barett & Sofia), (Grace & Charlie), (Maddie & Cooper), (Ben & Josh), (Devon & Logan), (Aiden & Connor), (Jacob & Austin) en-us 2017-11-07 13:06:02 UTC 2020-12-11 22:18:23 UTC hello@padlet.com mlong15 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1008015733 2020-12-10 20:54:58 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1008015733 mlong15 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1009702487 1. I like the way you changed Little Red Riding Hood's name to modernize it a little bit more; it makes your story more relatable! 
2. What do you think would happen if you made the wolf the protagonist? Would that help develop your plot a little better?
3. Your next steps might be to develop your moral more because "they lived happily ever after" is how it ends, not necessarily the lesson they learned along the way. ]]> 2020-12-11 13:58:18 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1009702487 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010151334 2020-12-11 15:46:58 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010151334 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010153999 2020-12-11 15:47:36 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010153999 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010154612 2020-12-11 15:47:43 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010154612 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010155669 2020-12-11 15:47:58 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010155669 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010158237 2020-12-11 15:48:29 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010158237 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010158449 2020-12-11 15:48:32 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010158449 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010161853 2020-12-11 15:49:18 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010161853 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010162291 2020-12-11 15:49:24 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010162291 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010162897 2020-12-11 15:49:32 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010162897 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010163642 2020-12-11 15:49:42 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010163642 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010168251 2020-12-11 15:50:46 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010168251 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010172114 2020-12-11 15:51:38 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010172114 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010174732 2020-12-11 15:52:11 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010174732 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010178910 2020-12-11 15:53:07 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010178910 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010180354 2020-12-11 15:53:27 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010180354 amaliaschaefer https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010181201 2020-12-11 15:53:39 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010181201 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010187485 2020-12-11 15:55:02 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010187485 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010191142 1. I liked the way how you made the changed the point of view to the prince instead of Cinderella.  
2.One question I have is where do the antagonist come in to your plot. It doesn't say anything about them. 
3. Dont forget to add the antagonists in.]]> 2020-12-11 15:55:52 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010191142 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010191632 2020-12-11 15:55:59 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010191632 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010194619 1. Two things you really did well was the plot and how you explained it. You added details, but not too much.
2. One question I have is how does Rapunzel knows Wanda? In the movie, Rapunzel doesn't know anyone but Mother Gothel, so what is the relationship between her and Wanda?
3. The story might be stronger if we knew who Wanda is. It doesn't need to be this long this of how they meet, but just a quick back-story to know who they are, not just her friend that we have never heard of.]]> 2020-12-11 15:56:40 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010194619 mlong15 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010196426 2020-12-11 15:57:04 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010196426 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010202447 https://docs.google.com/document/d/1h5-w82ylz4LRDyhuQYJT6VQcMtAB_9WKTjM7J3wm0pU/edit?usp=sharing]]> 2020-12-11 15:58:23 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010202447 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010202845 2020-12-11 15:58:28 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010202845 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010203353 I like how you made the grandma and Little red ridding hood move into the wolfs house.
where did the grandma go to when little red ridding hood went to get groceries 
I suggest that you change your theme because it does not really go with the story.]]> 2020-12-11 15:58:35 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010203353 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010205376 1. I liked how you changed alot but you still hit some of the main point like the cutting of the hair. 
2. One question I have is does Rapunzel still have the magic hair and if so does it evect the the Enchantress?
3. I feel like there is a lot happening and not to much deatail to explain what it happening. It is a little hard to follow the story.]]> 2020-12-11 15:59:03 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010205376 mlong15 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010206388 2020-12-11 15:59:15 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010206388 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010215326 1. I think that your characters and setting are really well thought out. You explained it very well in your doc.
2. Where did the wolf go? Like why wasn't he home and when did he come home? Also did he find the pigs in his house or did the police?
3. One thing you could do to make it better is maybe add a conflict into your story but otherwise really good. ]]> 2020-12-11 16:01:16 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010215326 cooperjahnke https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010215926 2020-12-11 16:01:25 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010215926 cooperjahnke https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010223225 I liked the way you change the way for the bears to be the bad ones which put a good twist on it
I think you have pretty much everything done     and don't need to add anything
One thing is you could add more detail about the bears maybe]]> 2020-12-11 16:03:09 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010223225 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010223943 T-I liked that you changed the pigs to flies
A-Did you consider making the attention grabber more detailed?
G-You could just add more detail idk]]> 2020-12-11 16:03:18 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010223943 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010225147 2020-12-11 16:03:34 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010225147 mlong15 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010226863 2020-12-11 16:03:57 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010226863 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010231610 I like how you interpreted the theme/moral in your story. I also liked how you changed the story from the original]]> 2020-12-11 16:04:55 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010231610 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010232667 1.I like how you flipped having the bears go into the house instead of Goldilocks. 
2. One question I have is what did the bears say or do when Goldilocks told them to get out.
3. Something I think you could have done is to have it be more of a revenge instead of flipping the bears with Goldilocks.]]> 2020-12-11 16:05:08 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010232667 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010234074 1. it was creative how you changed the characters and plot based on migos and made them the protagonists
2. I think you should make it a little more related to the original story other than just her name ]]> 2020-12-11 16:05:25 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010234074 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010234611 1. I like the way the little boy gives the other little boy candy at the end.
2. What candy did the old man choke on.
3. i think your story would be better with another character trick or treating with the little boy]]> 2020-12-11 16:05:33 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010234611 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010238217 I liked your charecter names they are very creative. Also who is the biggest deer out of all of them. Finnally I think the story would be better with another charecter like a dog or a friend for harold.]]> 2020-12-11 16:06:20 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010238217 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010241928 1. I like that you kept the story similar and switched up the characters roles. 
2. I think you have it pretty much finished, maybe some minor edits but other than that it looks good.
3. Make sure that the story isn't the exact same as the little mermaid besides switching roles of the characters.]]> 2020-12-11 16:07:11 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010241928 mlong15 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010246758 2020-12-11 16:08:15 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010246758 amaliaschaefer https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010252291 I liked how you changed the ending on how the wolf got taught the lesson.
Did you consider changing the point of view to one of the characters.
It could be stronger if you explain more into detail.]]> 2020-12-11 16:09:26 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010252291 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010254130 1.I like how you made the pigs smart and the wolf dumb. I also like your theme.
2.I don't really have any questions.
3. You could maybe add an extra minor character if you want to add more to the story.]]> 2020-12-11 16:09:50 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010254130 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010268261 T - I like the way you changed it to sugar to change the story a little bit. 
A - What is the climax of your story.
G - Maybe a little bit more change in your story and add the climax but other wise I think your story is really good.]]> 2020-12-11 16:13:04 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010268261 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010296886 1. I liked the way you changed the point of view to Baby Bear's.
2. One question I have is does the reader get to know what the bears are doing when Goldilocks is in their house?
3. Don't forget to say what the bears are doing.]]> 2020-12-11 16:19:39 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010296886 mlong15 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010312463 2020-12-11 16:23:05 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010312463 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010461728 https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oZ0Paf6_Cg2LA1RsqJwAtLgI5JOGV6xtMhLTTT6AolM/edit?usp=sharing]]> 2020-12-11 16:56:05 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010461728 https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010463085 2020-12-11 16:56:24 UTC https://padlet.com/mlong15/6ralox1booqv/wish/1010463085