Constructive Feedback on "Look@Me Now" Presentation by Susan Williams

Mrs. Williams

2017-09-24 21:02:42 UTC

I appreciate EVERYONE who shared their writing in class as I know public speaking is difficult for some of you. Many of you were prepared and read a passage that was at least 75 words. Stepping away from the group when it is your turn to speak may make you appear more relaxed and confident next time. I know that practice with "The 5 Tips in Public Speaking" will also improve your skills.

Ashtin Wacker

2017-09-26 15:16:46 UTC

I appreciate how Brogen Taylor was confident with his content and what he was going to sayi. It was clear that he had all his sections done well with all the words he needed in them. I think he should have spoken a little bit louder even though it was good. It seems that he took advice from the videos that we watched so he can speak well in front of the class.

Emma Mehl

2017-09-26 15:17:08 UTC

I am proud of Jaden Oliver for getting up in front of the class and giving a speech, not many people can do that. Jaden seemed prepared and ready to present to the class. A tip I would give Jaden would be a little louder and try to look up at the crowd more. Other wise Jaden did really good in her speech and she

Jillian Trunnell

2017-09-26 15:17:24 UTC

I appreciate Alyssa Fletcher, and how detailed she was. She seemed very confident on what she was presenting. She brought up how she did research about the career that she saw in her future. Everything she talked about was rel

Emily Glenn

2017-09-26 15:18:00 UTC

I appreciate Jaden Oliver because she was really nervous about going up and speaking in front of a lot of people but she did it, and really good. Her paragraph was long and very detailed which made it interesting, and made others want to focus in on her. She is a good presenter and the only thing that would make her better is if she was louder. All she needs is some practice and she'll be even more amazing.

Anthony Rogers

2017-09-26 15:18:04 UTC

I feel that Hayden did an amazing job. He seemed relaxed and comfortable. He enunciated his words correctly, and spoke in a loud clear voice, but he did not make enough eye contact. Other than that it was outstanding.

Alyssa Fletcher

2017-09-26 15:18:12 UTC

I am proud of Jillian, her paragraphs were long and flowed well, also she did well with eye contact in the beginning but when you read your paragraphs aloud you read really fast.

Meagan Staten

2017-09-26 15:18:12 UTC

I really liked how Ivy had great posture, and she new what she was talking about. She did a great job but there is parts that I thought she could have done better.I thought that she could have done better, because when she went in front of the class to speak she stuttered a lot. i think that if she was to have more practice at speaking in front of the class, she would do a lot better.

Joseph Slavens

2017-09-26 15:18:16 UTC

I like how Joshua spoke loud and clear enough for us because sometimes he gets a bit too quiet when he's talking. He went up there and knew what he wanted to say, and didn't skip something just because he didn't want to or because it was too long. He always makes what he says exciting and fun to listen to which is always good. Laughing while talking will be something you might want to work on.

Esmeralda Cueva

2017-09-26 15:18:18 UTC

I am really proud of Ivy she did a really good job with her presentation

Jaden Oliver

2017-09-26 15:18:23 UTC

I really loved EMILY GLENN because she was super loud and extremely confident in what she was reading. She had great eye contact. She could have used less filler words and slowed down when talking.

Henry Harding

2017-09-26 15:19:10 UTC

I appreciate Tyler McGahern for delivering a prepared presentation. He did everything right, and didn't fear being in front of everyone. The only thing he did wrong was he needed to speak up. It could have been the fact that I was sitting in the back.

Kara Anderson `

2017-09-26 15:19:13 UTC

I appreciate how Jaden was honest with her words and how she put a lot of effort into what she was saying. She had a very strong and steady voice with the words as they flowed out of her mouth. I loved it, I personally feel she did an amazing job.
Although it was amazing maybe next time you could slow down and make it even better.

Andon Alcala

2017-09-26 15:19:15 UTC

I feel that Natalie's was special because she put a lot of effort into what she was writing. It's hard to stand up in front of your peers and read what you wrote but i think she did an excellent job calming her nerves and reading it without

Brogen Taylor

2017-09-26 15:19:16 UTC

I think Jillian Trunnel's presentation was presented with great confidence. She was really enthusiastic about her writing and didn't use any filler words.

Tyler McGahern

2017-09-26 15:19:16 UTC

I like how Kayla O. spoke , and her story was very good she had good eye contact and did not use to many filler words. I think that next time she should practice reading it so she knows exactly what to say.I feel that this will help her in the future. Over all I think that she did a fantastic job, and I look forward to listening to her speak in the future.

Thomas Livingston

2017-09-26 15:19:50 UTC

I like how Anthony was very persuasive on how everybody should at least try to follow Christ. He projected his voice, to were the whole class could here him, and could understand what he was saying. he was consistent with what he was saying. he was straight and to the point, kept talking about the same thing, even if he didn't say the same words. overall he did a really good job on reading his story.

Brent Bozzo

2017-09-26 15:20:11 UTC

I think Jarrid did good at speaking. He needs to work on eye contact and talking slower. It could also be a little longer. He had good content in his paragraph and did well.

Dylan Sullivan

2017-09-26 15:20:38 UTC

i really liked Anthony speaking.
to be honest it was great . the speaking was on point stutter and his speaking was good.
he did really good
.

Kayla O'Haver

2017-09-26 15:21:02 UTC

Natalie Panks had a great introduction. She started out strong and ready to present. But I think she could have done better if she tilted her head up and made eye contact with the audience. Even if she tried to be louder with her voice booming to the audience and not to the ground it would have made a difference. But congrats to Natalie !!

Jarrid Ojinaga

2017-09-26 15:21:16 UTC

I think Brent Bozzo did really good. He had a good posture. He also had a really loud and clear voice which let the whole class hear him.

Joshua Wyman

2017-09-26 15:21:32 UTC

I like how Joseph's essay was written, And how it went into detail. His vocabulary was strong. I wish he can present too, because hes very literate. Over all everyone else did great. I feel like we know everybody better with this assignment.

Eva Fletes

2017-09-26 15:21:59 UTC

I liked how Josh spoke loud and clear so that everyone could hear him and how he wasn't shy to get up and present his presentation. He did very well on his essay and I enjoyed reading it.

Hayden Boyes

2017-09-26 15:22:28 UTC

It seemed like Jillian Trunnel poured some time into her work, therefore meaning that she knew what she was talking about. She also seamed confident and relaxed when introducing herself. The only thing that I would tell her to do better would be to project her voice and talk a little slower so that her audience can comprehend what she is saying.

Alyssa Fletcher

2017-09-26 15:25:43 UTC

Kayla O'Haver's paragraph that she read was done really good. It had really good details in it, and it seemed to reach the length it needed to be.

Emily Glenn

2017-09-26 15:30:19 UTC

Another person who was a good presenter was Jarrid. He was confident from the moment he got up to the second he sat back down. He was comfortable and knew the material he was talking about. Something for next time that would make his paragraph better would be if he included more details into it. I feel that his next paragraph will be a lot better.

Joseph Slavens

2017-09-26 15:32:02 UTC

Anthony was very clear about his message and speaking which set him apart from others which was nice.

Teagan Sieck

2017-09-26 15:32:50 UTC

I think that Kayla Pottorff did an amazing job on her presentation. She spoke really calmly and she projected her voice well.

Alfred Castro

2017-09-26 15:33:21 UTC

I thought Jillian was very interesting and unique it was very well put together and complete

Eileen Garcia

2017-09-26 15:58:52 UTC

I think Maleny Reyes did a good job with her paragraph. I think she could be a little louder but overall she did very well.

Michael Yang

2017-09-26 16:00:31 UTC

I thought that Jacob Benfer did a really good job explaining what certain types of things he does. could have spoken louder

Kennedy Yang

2017-09-26 16:01:05 UTC

I like Eileen Garcias presentation.She had a good posture and she had a loud voice so everyone can hear.She could have spoken towards the class so everyone could better hear what she is saying but her presentation was great

Jazzmin Nalton

2017-09-26 16:03:14 UTC

Gwendolyn Moreno Starkey did really well on her presentation. She spoke clearly and loudly, made eye contact and had a long paragraph and did very well. Even though Gwendolyn's presentation was amazing she needed to

Phoenix McDaniel

2017-09-26 16:04:45 UTC

Vicente did very well speaking with a clear voice. What I really liked about what he shared is he gave the class really good information about his flashback and I liked how he shared that some people would not like to share with other people let alone in front of the whole class.

Jacob Savage

2017-09-26 16:12:04 UTC

Jesse Yingling Is a great student and i think he did great. Jesse's voice was nice and loud he was also very clear. He also had very nice body movement, not too much to be distracting and not too little to look staged. He tried very hard to get the assignment done and he did it well in my eyes.

Vicente Rodriguez

2017-09-26 16:14:25 UTC

Phoenix did good with speaking. He spoke clearly and loudly and had a good story. He had a good posture and his speaking voice was clear. He could have more eye contact and needs to start quicker.

Axel Parra

2017-09-26 16:25:57 UTC

Jose Magana spoke of his great-grandmother, she was celebrated her birthday number 88 and after a few days she passed away. The story was a bit sad but he presented it perfectly well.

Maleny Reyes

susan_williams6 — 2017-09-26 16:30:27 UTC

Jose did a very good job speaking English. He had a loud voice. He had a very nice long paragraph about his grandmother. I liked how he put his emotions in it. I thought it was very nice when he wrote about his grandmother and about how she pasted away.

Jose Magana

2017-09-26 16:32:16 UTC

Axel Parra he wrote about the internal conflict that he has being separated from his family in Mexico.

Gwendolyn Moreno- Starkey

2017-09-26 17:14:37 UTC

I appreciated Jazzmin Nalton's clear voice while reading her paragraph. She did well in writing it and presentation. Her wording was well done in her writing. Her theme was written at an amazing extent and seemed to be long enough to top the requirements. She did well and even though there was not much eye contact, I wouldn't mind hearing her paragraph again.

Alex Brown

2017-09-26 17:14:44 UTC

I like how Ryan Allen had a good sense of humor, was very energetic, and knew exactly what he was going to say

Chance Naegele

2017-09-26 17:14:45 UTC

I thought that Ashleigh Grant did amazing on her presentation, but she needed to speak louder. She included great detail that described exactly what was trying to communicate.

Ashleigh Grant

2017-09-26 17:15:02 UTC

I liked Jazzmin Nalton's presentation. She had good posture, long paragraphs, and made contact in the beginning. Although I think she can do better and be louder I am proud of Jazzmin.

Luis Bryant

2017-09-26 17:15:47 UTC

Evan Williams

2017-09-26 17:15:51 UTC

I thoroughly enjoyed Jared Dancel's presentation because I could hear him just fine, he was easily able to under stand, and how he made his presentation. When he made his slide i was like "oh here comes another one of those boring presentations"(no offence to anyone), but then his actually sounded good even though he wondered off a little. I would rate 8/10 just because of a couple of errors but it was pretty good to me. I would listen again.

Andrew Galyean

2017-09-26 17:16:19 UTC

I appreciate Ryan Allen's presentation because he projected his voice well and, he had some humor in his presentation. However it seemed like he was not confident in the content he was presenting. Besides that he had an all around good presentation with a great balance

Emma Bunt

2017-09-26 17:16:30 UTC

Gwendolyn Starkey did an amazing job on her writing. She had a clear voice and

Jazzmin Nalton

2017-09-26 17:17:35 UTC

Gwendolyn Moreno Starkey did really well and kind on her presentation. She spoke clearly and loudly, made eye contact and had a long paragraph and did very well. Even though Gwendolyn's presentation was amazing she needed to be a little more confident.how i can be kind and helpful is by helping her on her speech.

Atalia Tyrovolas

2017-09-26 17:18:21 UTC

Kaylee Pursell wasn't supposed to present but she did and she did very well she spoke loud and clear, she was very confident, and even though she wasn't prepared she did a great job.

Kaylee Pursell

2017-09-26 17:18:34 UTC

I love how Atalia Tyrovolas spoke with confidence even though she wasn't quite ready to be presenting. She could have been more prepared for the presentation, but overall she did fantastic!

Trenton Andrew Jonas Crow

2017-09-26 17:18:59 UTC

I appreciate how Ryan Allen's enthusiasm made his presentation pop.His personality was entertaining.his story brote back memoirs of my child hood

Blake Knight

2017-09-26 17:19:05 UTC

I liked Ryan Allen's paper. I liked his paper because their was a good story line. He also talked very well and I could hear everything he said form the very back of the classroom. He was also very ecstatic about his writing and his confidence while speaking. Good job Ryan

Alexis Farrow

2017-09-26 17:19:06 UTC

I like Breanna Bornman's presentation. She did really good. Even though the classroom is very big, she did very good . I like her goals when she was younger. You go girl!

Annabelle Britton

2017-09-26 17:19:15 UTC

I thought Breanna Bornman did really good on her presentation. I like that she really spoke for herself and how she felt about things. She really spoke out to people and it could change some lives if they read it. I felt that she could have spoken a little louder though because its a bigger class. Her presentation was really organized and neat.

Nale Rodrigue

2017-09-26 17:22:57 UTC

Ryan Allen your presentation was loud and clear and well made i appreciate your dedication and i would like to say how amazing your presentation was.

Breanna Bornman

2017-09-26 17:26:12 UTC

I liked how Lexi Farrow was spoke fluently through her presentation. I also enjoyed how detailed her plan for her future was. Some things I think she could work on is the filler words, even though she used very few. Overall her presentation was excellent.

Luis Bryant

2017-09-26 17:26:15 UTC

I show gratitude toward Emma Bunt and how she expressed her presentation. Emma used her voice well to show an opinion in her section and a little bit of emotion. She sounded very with the times on how she wanted people to accept everyone else in the world without any judging or hate. I think that Emma wanted us to understand where she is on this topic and that it's a very serious matter in her life.

Jared Dancel

2017-09-26 17:26:20 UTC

I show gratitude toward Luis Bryant because he had a very good speaking voice and didn't really mess up apart from one time but he did correct himself which in my book add extra credit if i was the teacher and another thing that was good about his presentation was he didn't use any filler words which i also enjoyed very much.

Ryan Allen

2017-09-26 17:28:53 UTC

I personally loved Breanna Bornman's It was very fluently presented, the writing was very well thought out and was read outstandingly. Her tone of voice throughout the entire presentation was flawlessly, it was read like and actor on a stage. Breanna kept the whole audience's attention throughout her entire presentation. The story line was very good, overall 10/10!!!

Tyler Bowman

2017-09-26 17:33:07 UTC

Mr RYAN ALLEN your presentation was the Bomb!! I really liked how you were funny but serious at the same time and you had a good since of humor. You might need more eye contact but I thought over all you had lots of detail.

Chris rider

2017-09-26 18:10:20 UTC

I liked Vicente's presentation he showed good posture and spoke clearly as much as he did not want to present he had good posture, so that is why I believe Vicente had a good presentation.

Alyssa Sheats

2017-09-26 18:11:37 UTC

I greatly appreciated Jasmin Mejia Mejia's presentation. I was able to relate to her

Mackenzie Anderson

2017-09-26 18:12:15 UTC

I really had a great interested in Alyssa Sheat's presentation. It seemed like it was very well planed .She had amazing eye contact and spoke very clearly within her presentation. It would've been better if she spoke a little louder. But over all outstanding.

Jessica Lucero

2017-09-26 18:12:28 UTC

I show gratitude toward Jasmin's presentation. She had good eye contact and she was very interactive. She knew what she was going to say and didn't mess up. Her voice was loud enough so everyone could hear. Overall I think she did a fantastic job.

Gabrielle Tobolsky

3105413 — 2017-09-26 18:13:27 UTC

Kaitlyn Hancock, I loved how you stood tall even though everyone was staring into your soul. Your posture compared to others was pretty good. I also loved how much eye contact you made with everyone. You looked at one group for a few seconds, and then another group for a few seconds and so on. But almost right into your speech, you stuttered. You slurred a couple of words and messed up, but you came back even stronger. You did an amazing job.

William Thompson

2017-09-26 18:13:31 UTC

I really liked Jasmine's presentation. She spoke loud and could hear it clearly. I thought she did good overall but she wasn't very confident in herself and she used filler words. Overall her presentation was good she just needs to work on those things

Bryanna Boysen

2017-09-26 18:13:53 UTC

Kaitlynn Hancock presentation spoke to me in many ways, even though it was sad to hear her mother doesn't really try to be there for her. I do see the hurting and sadness that does come from her story and her telling everyone this does make it a

Thomas DuBose

2017-09-26 18:13:56 UTC

I think Kyle Staup did a very good job projecting his voice and transitioning in between sections of his presentation. I think that he could've kept better eye contact as sometimes during his presentation he was looking down. I also think he could've spoken a little bit more clearly overall though he did a very good job.

Garrett Perry

2017-09-26 18:14:01 UTC

I really enjoyed Hayden Gilliams presentation. He had a good sense of humor and he surprisingly finished his

Jenna Hummell

2017-09-26 18:15:05 UTC

Thomas Dubose did an awesome job with projecting his voice through out the class. He did a good job with making good eye contact. Although he did a great job one thing he can improve on is being smoother with his words. He did a awesome job with his presentation and was very comfortable talking to the class.

Melody Corona

2017-09-26 18:15:39 UTC

I personally think Jasmin Mejia"s presentation was very good. She presents good, everybody can hear her. One thing i think she could work on is her posture, other than that her presentation was very well read!!

Jada Lam

2017-09-26 18:15:50 UTC

I like the way Garrett Perry was very organized with the way the way he presented his information, he spoke very clearly and had good posture. Although, I do think he should've projected his voice throughout the room and spoke louder.

Kirk Whitney

2017-09-26 18:16:53 UTC

I really enjoyed how Nelson Ard made eyed contact with the audience although hey didn't talk as loud as he could he did a good job with both eye contact and speaking fluently.

Jasmin Mejia

2017-09-26 18:18:33 UTC

I think that Kaitlynn Hancock's presentation was very good.Her voice was very clear and loud enough for you to hear across the room. She also had good posture and made good eye contact with the audience. Overall Kaitlynn had a very nice presentation.

Danielle Funk

2017-09-26 18:20:30 UTC

I really liked Alyssa Sheats' presentation because it was really good. I heard her clearly and she had good posture. I think that would have made her even better would be that she needed to be a little louder. I also think that she chose a good topic to right about

Thomas DuBose

2017-09-26 18:21:36 UTC

I think that Jullian Bishop did an outstanding job on his presentation. He had very good eye contact, projected his voice through out the classroom, and transitioned well through out his presentation. There is pretty much nothing that I have negative about his presentation

Garrett Perry

2017-09-26 18:23:07 UTC

I really enjoyed Hayden gilliams presentation. He had a good sense of humor and he surprisingly finished his Look@Me Know paper. One thing that Hayden could of done better is to look at the audience and speak more clearly . otherwise he did a very good job on presenting.

Phoenix McDaniel

2017-09-26 18:24:33 UTC

In my opinion Melody did a good job with her presentation she shared very well. I think she could have gave more information and spoke more clearly. But besides that she did good she shared who she trusts the most and why she does, and a lot of people can't do that in front of the class.

Kaitlynn Hancock

2017-09-26 18:24:46 UTC

I personally think that Alyssa Sheats was by far the best. She was very loud and her story was very well written. You could tell that she put a lot of time and effort into her story. Plus that story was very personal to her, and for her to go in front of the whole class and tell us her story, it shows how brave she is and that is awesome.

Jada Lam

2017-09-26 18:29:05 UTC

I like how Garrett Perry was very organized with the way he presented all of his information. He spoke very clearly

Alyssa Sheats

2017-09-26 18:29:09 UTC

I greatly appreciated Jasmin Mejia Mejia's presentation. She had very good vocabulary and she was very loud to where the whole class could hear her. Though I wish that she would have made more contact. But I think that she benefited

Meagan Staten

2017-09-26 18:47:26 UTC

I really liked how Ivy had great posture, and she new what she was talking about. She did a great job but there is parts that I thought she could have done better.I thought that she could have done better, because when she went in front of the class to speak she stuttered a lot. I think that if she was to have more practice at speaking in front of the class, she would do a lot better.

Jesse Kenyon

2017-09-26 21:09:53 UTC

I like how Carson looked at the class. He could improve by first talking louder. It's a big class so you have to talk louder then a normal presintation. Over all he had good content.

Jacob Benfer

2017-09-26 21:10:07 UTC

I really liked
Micheal Yang's speech and how he tried his best but he could have been louder and not mumbled as much.

Alissa Hogan-Davison

2017-09-26 21:10:23 UTC

I enjoyed how Kennedy Yang gave his speech. He was very inspirational and thankful for what he gets and has. He mumbled a little bit but he was clear enough to hear. I think he could have done better because he was very still when he was talking in front of the class. But from my view he gave a wonderful speech.

Kennedy Yang

2017-09-26 21:11:16 UTC

I liked Michael Yang's presentation was great.I liked his posture and his voice.I wish he wouldn't move that much and speak up a little louder.

Michael yang

2017-09-26 21:11:34 UTC

I thought that Jacob Benfer did a really good job explaining on the certain things he does on his free time. What he could has do to make his presentation better was he could have spoke a lot louder.

Scott Shipman

2017-09-26 21:11:40 UTC

I really liked how Carson had a good loud voice. I also like how he had eye contact. He also used hand movement well. but he could of looked up more. But overall he had done a great job on his presentation and in my opinion he should have gotten a 4 on this assignment.

Gabe Schermer

2017-09-26 21:11:48 UTC

I liked how Kennedy knew what he was talking about, but he could of been louder

Eileen Garcia

2017-09-26 21:12:22 UTC

I really liked how Maleny Reyes's did her speech because she had good posture. She also did not mumble like other people did. I think she could have been louder but overall her paragraph sounded great. She did a good job with everything else.

Maleny Reyes

2017-09-26 21:13:50 UTC

Eilleen Garcia speech was very good I like the way she talked about her dad. I love who she showed her emotions about her dad and how she fells about her dad. She talked very nice explained everything really well about her paragraph. She need to work on not moving a lot and not look to nervous up there.

Isabel Rivera

2017-09-26 21:14:04 UTC

I really liked how Kennedy Yang presented because he knew what he was saying and he was making good eye contact. He did pretty good with everything else and he could've spoke up more.

Jesse Yingling

2017-09-26 21:15:24 UTC

I though Colton Pratt's was very good. He put a l
ot of detail to his. He had eye contact and very stuttered when he was reading. He could speak up but his best I've seen. Colton had good poster when he was standing up there.

Axel Parra

2017-09-26 21:15:53 UTC

Jose Magana
talked about her great-grandmother and if ... she was a little sad because she celebrated her 88th birthday and after a few days she passed away, since for José she needs some practice reading in English like me, but over time it will be solved.GOOD PROGRESS

Zada Tweedy

2017-09-26 21:16:34 UTC

I liked how Jesse had a completed presentation and presented with a projected voice and made eye contact throughout it.

Wyatt Rogers

2017-09-26 21:17:28 UTC

I thought that Carson had good eye contact with the crowd and he also had a loud voice and didn't move while presenting this means that he was confident and he had an easy time doing this project.

Trent Dobrec

2017-09-26 21:20:28 UTC

I liked Michael Yang's Presentation

Mikylie Blanchard

2017-09-26 21:22:19 UTC

I really appreciate Zach Jackson's presentation. It seems like it took something from inside him to say what he did. He was very organized, and he presented with confidence. He did a very well job projecting his voice and staying loud. He did overall well, but I think he could've said a little more while he was doing it. On the contrary he did very well speaking to the audience.

Brittany VanSickle

2017-09-26 21:29:19 UTC

I really liked how zach jackson knew what he was talking about, and was very organized. He was pretty loud when speaking. The thing he should work on is eye contact and posture. Besides that I think it's good.

Scott Shipman

2017-09-27 00:29:19 UTC

I really like how Scott had good eye contact and didn't fidget with his hands. One thing he could have done better was speaking louder. He did a great job overall.

Kobe Chao

2017-09-27 16:05:03 UTC

I liked how Jesse Kenyon presentation was really something that he would say.

Jose Magana

2017-09-27 16:09:53 UTC

the presentation that I liked the most was Axel Parra, talked about how his family can not visit because they can not come to the United States of America, not see your father, your mother and your brother makes a person sad and think he did a very good job.

Jack Michel

2017-09-28 02:30:10 UTC

I like Ryan Allen's presentation because it was funny, had more that 75 words, and was said with a lot of emotion. I think he should work on eye contact. It seemed he was looking at the floor a bit. Otherwise it was a great presentation.

2017-10-04 22:21:07 UTC

Andi Schumacher

2017-10-05 18:43:47 UTC

I though that Elaine's presentation was good. I liked that she spoke loud enough so the whole class could hear her. She also had good eye contact.

yle Dunn

2017-10-06 15:11:06 UTC