https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 18:19:17 UTC 2023-06-14 19:09:38 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f344.png 29mhales https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2355972652 A strength in your memoir “Cherish Life” was your figurative language. You described the situation, and emotions that you were feeling in a really strong and descriptive way.I also love your description of the setting. It really made me feel like I was experiencing the situation that you were in. My one wish was for you to have a longer more emotion filled ending.]]> 2022-10-25 18:21:45 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2355972652 29acerchio https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2355988887 I loved you memoir it was very detailed and had a lot thrill in it. I loved the ending and the lesson learned it in. I like how you added a lot of inner thoughts in it. ]]> 2022-10-25 18:31:52 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2355988887 29igiannacio https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2357714151 I loved your piece! It was really well written. The figurative language was extremely great! I liked how you described how your friend was like the lettuce and cheese inside a sandwich. That was a really creative part in your memoir. Another great thing was your inner thoughts. There was a good thought where you were talking to yourself, making sure you could ride the jet ski. I don’t really see any errors in your piece, it was amazing!!]]> 2022-10-26 17:29:53 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2357714151 29nduffus https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2357808285 I loved reading your piece it was a very descriptive interesting memoir and i enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your figurative language and descriptive. ]]> 2022-10-26 18:28:05 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2357808285 29nduffus https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2405649194 Hey Lucie, a strength in your memoir was your idea in how you twisted the memoir “wacky shoes”. i think that you had a great twist to change it into a new story that had a funny and scary events
Which Made it enjoyable to read .
In addition I think you also had a strong interesting funny twist on your ending.
I also think that you had a great description that made it easy to imagine and picture.
However I was a bit confused about your hook and how it was coming together. I think that your hook was also a bit undeveloped to understand clearly.
But overall I think you had a great story.]]> 2022-12-01 19:20:17 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2405649194 https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2489976823 - Eva La Rosa]]> 2023-02-21 16:40:22 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2489976823 29acerchio https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2490177068 Hi lulu, the first star in your CEES essay i really liked you introduction i thought that you worked really good on it and worded it good. The second star was that i really liked your explanation parts because you explained everything well and did not make it confusing. How ever I think you could of added a bit more detail on your conclusion i think you could like made the heart to heart more emotional but overall i think you did really good!!!! -cerchio]]> 2023-02-21 19:19:13 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2490177068 https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2490178089 Hi Lucie, something you did amazing on was your anecdote. It had so many sensory details, and an outstanding amount of description throughout your piece. Another thing that you did great was that your first CEES paragraph had an amazing explanation. It really brought your evidence to life, and provided the reader with a lot of passion and good word choice. The only wish I would have for you is to expand on your conclusion. Although it was compelling it was lacking a bit more of something, next time I would look at the organizer provided. But it’s not your fault that you ran out of time because the rest of the piece was extremely compelling and well written.]]> 2023-02-21 19:20:06 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2490178089 https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2523846762 2023-03-20 15:56:51 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2523846762 29acerchio https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2524085264 Hi Lucie! A star for your writing is your explanation because you did a good job explaining everything. Another star is your claim because it all made sense when you explained and you had good word choice in your explanation. A wish could be your conclusion because i feel like you could of chosen different words. Overall you did a really good job!!-lex ]]> 2023-03-20 18:24:47 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2524085264 https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2525871309 Hi Lucie, A star in your writing piece was your claim because it really connected to your Pixar shirt and was worded with great word choice. In addition, your evidence seemed to be chosen very wisely because it supported your claim in a great way as well as your sum-it-up sentence. However, I think you could improve your 1st but y to f yourexplanation because the sentences sounded a bit repetitive. ]]> 2023-03-21 18:10:39 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2525871309 https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2525905603 Hi Lucie, a strength in your piece was your sum it up sentence, it fit in extremely well with your theme, and the pixar short you chose. Another strength in your writing piece was your evidence. Your evidence fit in extremely well with your claim, and the evidence was a great way to connect the theme to the short. The only thing I would change is check punctuation and spelling. Overall you did an amazing job!]]> 2023-03-21 18:33:30 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2525905603 https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2533315506 2023-03-27 15:36:16 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2533315506 https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2623712321 Hi Lucie! A strength in your presentation, “Lululemon” is your introduction. It grabs the reader’s attention by asking a simple question lots of people may be able to relate to. Another strength in your presentation is your history. It shows a good example of the history of Lululemon in a way that is easy for the reader to understand. A wish I had for your presentation is to add more pictures. I think some of the pictures you have are really good, but I wish you could have added more pictures of Lululemon clothing to give the reader more examples. Other than that I think that your presentation was amazing!]]> 2023-06-14 19:09:38 UTC https://padlet.com/29ljuliano/6lmvye9ub1zsbvsz/wish/2623712321