https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a en-us 2023-02-27 16:14:51 UTC 2023-03-16 01:28:21 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f339.png thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2499742236 Pages 1-4 Strongly lacked interesting features and I personally believe spoke too much about boring subjects without drawing attention. Zero attention catchers. "The forest had become a labyrinth of snow and ice." A general first sentence which grabbed near zero attention. ]]> 2023-03-01 15:42:13 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2499742236 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2499781659 "But there was a pair of golden eyes shining from the brush adjacent from mine."
Picks up pace but yet too late. I believe this should have been an opening line rather than the constant rambling about hunting. Perhaps I am impatient, but I was doubting the abilities of writing in this book. ]]> 2023-03-01 16:07:39 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2499781659 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2499788087 "If I judged wrongly, my life wasn't the only one that would be lost." For roughly 3-4 pages she debates killing the wolf-or faerie-she sees. It is very obviously not a real wolf and a faerie but provides such a predictable storyline as you KNOW the wolf is a faerie, and she will face consequences. Not a solid surprise factor and truly boring. ]]> 2023-03-01 16:11:36 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2499788087 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500490522 Absolutely no dialogue up to this point. Purely description and inner dialogue, complete disbalance. Understood for context of story, inner monologues present as dialogue but lacks change in plot. All actions read plain such as, "I skinned him and cleaned the arrows as best I could". ]]> 2023-03-02 03:22:25 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500490522 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500495619 "Nesta's eyes flashed, but a movement behind me caught her eye and she gave me what I supposed was her attempt at a sweet smile--probably as she remembered the money I carried. 'Your friend is waiting for you.'". 

Balance of showing and telling is displayed as conversation and actions remain realistic, in the moment and imaginative. Much better than the beginning, but still splotchy a times. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:28:12 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500495619 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500497409 "Alis looked me over from head to toe. 'You think a bit of rope snapping in my face will keep me from breaking your bones?'"

Balance of showing and telling remains reasonable to this point. Rocky start but as the first hundred pages go on, it balances out when she reaches the court. She starts more interesting dialogue, and realistic yet jaded reactions. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:30:17 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500497409 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500501926 "But there was a roar that half deafened me, and my sisters screamed as snow burst into the room and an enormous growling shape appeared in the doorway."

From the gap between action and consequence provided the reader quiet mind time and greatly impacted the curiosity scale, giving great amounts of tension and release. Action, then calm. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:35:31 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500501926 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500503900 "A pity I didn't have the arrow now--so I could shoot him instead."

Quiet but a moment of character developments, strong amounts of tension refrain for roughly 30 pages creating a pattern and revealing writing style. Good balance.

]]> 2023-03-02 03:37:52 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500503900 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500505986 "A massive hand wrapped around my arm. 'Going somewhere?'"

Action picks up as Feyre believes to see her father, but Tamlin's actions reveal as slow patch ends, more frequent action continues as balance and pattern remains. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:40:30 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500505986 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500511474 "I glanced from the doe to the wolf and back again."

The first twist in the book remains when Feyre faces a wolf-or so she believes is a wolf-when she has to change her path and journey in order to survive, and decide to kill or face her sudden death. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:47:13 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500511474 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500513418 "MURDERERS!"

The family household is broken into, as Feyre faces a consequence for her action, as she learns the wolf she killed was not but a wolf but a faerie. She must pay the treaty and either be killed, or be trapped in the beasts court forever. Predictable but intriguing twist.]]> 2023-03-02 03:49:22 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500513418 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500515143 "I wanted to look--I needed to see what it was."

Feyre faces her first warning of this world as the Bog takes her life at risk, longing to be seen or heard. She is warned by Lucien not to look, and makes it out. This is the first twist, sign and warning that this world is a danger to itself. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:51:24 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500515143 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500517882 "Take those disgusting clothes off."

From the small time Feyre spends in her own home, she speaks out about the abuse, neglect, and character her family (Father, Nesta and Elain) hold. Nesta is easily prescribed as stuck up and worthless, weak and naive, and father, incompetent. A lot of rich character development is shown and explains Feyre's actions and herself. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:54:30 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500517882 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500520002 "Swallowing hard, I set my fork down so they wouldn't see my hand start to shake."

Personality and diversity begins to develop near the 60th page as Feyre's typical main character syndrome fades, and you begin to see her schemes and defensive behavior. The past is logical to her developed characteristics and guarded views. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:56:39 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500520002 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500521727 "What do you want, Feyre?"

Tamlin remains mysterious up to this point and perhaps further. He is such a character very similar to the Beast from Beauty and the Beast. I remain curious if he is going to stay this way, but he beings to become near jaded for the lack of attention, rule following and interest Feyre exhibits. He has a backstory, and I am already curious to follow it. ]]> 2023-03-02 03:58:39 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2500521727 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509579209 "One shot--one shot straight through that golden eye".

Sparking a new sense of mentality for Feyre, the beginning of the next 100 pages--and first half of this book-begins picking up speed as Feyre gains a small sense of remorse for killing the faire.]]> 2023-03-09 02:56:21 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509579209 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509584653 "Idiot!" He yelled at me, then glanced behind him toward where the other fairies stared. "Useless human fool."

Faeries of all sorts begin to sprout into the book, and the action begins. I believe this book had a slow beginning, but thankfully is picking up speed. Action, characters, and changes are appearing and it is providing a more interesting catch. ]]> 2023-03-09 03:00:57 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509584653 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509588300 These two pages provide a good example of description, into dialogue. Page 144 provides heavy dialogue into the life of Tamlin, and page 145 is the perspective of Feyre. It releases minimal information, but enough to lead the reader on in a balanced manor. 

"What about a friend?" "Can faeries be friends with mortals?" -144

"But he wouldn't, not with that twisted knee. Not with it as an excuse." -145]]> 2023-03-09 03:04:15 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509588300 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509592116 Too choppy of showing, and telling. Pages become either all showing or all telling which can be choppy and difficult to read with easy understanding. Not that challenge is not appreciated, but almost in a messy or blocky feel for the flow of writing. 

"Each of Tamlin's movements was precise and efficient." -158.
This page goes into extreme and unnecessary detail. All telling, no showing. ]]> 2023-03-09 03:07:38 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509592116 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509598311 "You aren't what I had in mind for a human, believe me." -118

"I wouldn't go down without a fight. Without taking some of them with me." -133

"At some point, I dozed off while sitting on my vanity." -194

These hundred pages strongly showed the balance of mass action, plus slow and steady. For some, it may be aggressive but from a personal standpoint, I believe it was not too aggressive nor too slow. ]]> 2023-03-09 03:13:27 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509598311 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509601021 Two action packed events in a row--bold choice but the attack of the faeries, and the death of a soldier remains a non negative as both provided growth and insight, in a positive manor. As well as sparked interest in this realm. 

"Something wet touched my feet and I didn't need to look down to see that blood pooled around me" -152]]> 2023-03-09 03:15:42 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509601021 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509603036 "Tamlin is--Tamlin is a high lord?" -128

Feyre finds out from the peace seeking Suriel that her mysterious captor, is indeed apart of the high fae. Revealing the power he holds over Pyrithian. ]]> 2023-03-09 03:17:36 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509603036 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509605968 "I regret what I did to Andras...I regret that there was so much hate in my heart." -154

Feyre sincerely apologizes to Tamlin for killing his friend, as well as worker. This is the first sincere apology and step into Tamlin and Feyre's relationship. A twist since there previous dismay. ]]> 2023-03-09 03:20:17 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509605968 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509609737 "Tamlin went rigid as we entered the gardens" -178.

Tamlin begins to develop diversity as not just a captor but a faerie with life, personality, and soul. He begins to provide new perspectives and take an interesting approach to Feyre. He gains new insight on his past, and his future in these hundred pages and gains personality. ]]> 2023-03-09 03:23:49 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509609737 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509613158 "Paint...if--if its not too much to ask I'd like some paint. And some brushes." -146

Feyre is gaining a bit more comfortable, and becoming less of a traumatised parentless main character who faces "main character syndrome". It is nice to see her branch out, and become slightly more comfortable and devoted to her settings rather than jaded. She is branching out, as well as the plot.  Especially her relations with Tamlin and Lucien. ]]> 2023-03-09 03:26:36 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2509613158 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518186308 "Faerie Pig!" I yelled, and Lucien howled, almost tipping back in his chair.

Feyre at this exact middle point of the 400 page book begins to become more comfortable in her environment, in positive and negative ways. Her relationships are developing further and further, and she is beginning to lash out due to her circumstances. ]]> 2023-03-15 18:03:00 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518186308 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518247616 "I know what it is," he murmured, studying the painting. I backed away a step, unable to bear watching him look at it.

Feyre gains some personality and flare and the plot begins to pick up from her paintings, and the action picks up fresh from this point. The beginning half of this book was incredibly boring however and lacked strong or important information. ]]> 2023-03-15 18:48:24 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518247616 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518561169 I looked at my left forearm then, and my stomach rose at the trickling blood and ripped tendons, at the lips of my skin pulled back to accommodate the shaft of a bone shard protruding clean through it.

The last roughly 80-100 pages were very much description, and telling, rather than showing or any dialogue. I was disappointed in the flow, as this was a pattern in the beginning of the book. It improved near the middle, but went straight back to the start.

]]> 2023-03-16 00:59:56 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518561169 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518566872 "My chest hollowed out again, but I merely said "Yes I Would have," and slipped inside my room to get ready.

This was the best portion of the book, when it comes to showing and telling. It provided the most dialogue and description balance, and overall flowed smoothly. It helped pick up the pace and maintained my interest the longest. ]]> 2023-03-16 01:04:34 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518566872 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518571009 "I might have been going to my death, but I wouldn't arrive unarmed."

From Feyres departure to the Spring Court to her return, this allowed for a build up into the action based last hundred pages. This was needed, and had a balanced amount of action. ]]> 2023-03-16 01:07:41 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518571009 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518573923 "Kill a faerie, fall in love with a faerie, then be forced to kill a faerie to keep that love."

This portion of the book picks up in the final hundred pages, with nonstop action of her final three tasks. With Tamlin, Lucien, and Feyre's lives on the line this kept the readers engaged, which was needed for such a lengthy and drawn out book with many slow portions. ]]> 2023-03-16 01:09:59 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518573923 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518586656 "You could've been the one to stop her."

Feyre finds out she could've been the one to break the curse in a beauty and the beast style twist. This was not necessarily shocking, but provided some context on why Tamlin behaved the way he did for all those weeks before his capture. ]]> 2023-03-16 01:18:40 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518586656 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518589168 "The answer to the riddle...is...love."

Rather than a twist, I would consider this a lack of a twist. After Feyre completes all three of her tasks, the riddle to save Tamlin and all those following him's answer turned out to be love. Perhaps, this is jaded from it being so cliche but the twist that it was love was expected and unimportant, creating a downplay to this large captivating moment. ]]> 2023-03-16 01:20:18 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518589168 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518597012 "But I'd failed them. And in doing so, I damned them all." 

Just as Feyre finds herself happy in this situation, and proud of herself and her discoveries in the Spring Court she realises she could have saved all the people and places she fell in love with, adding to her character development. She expanded from main character syndrome, to having a personality and destination for her dreams. ]]> 2023-03-16 01:25:45 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518597012 thomass243 https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518600927 "Don't bother. I don't think I'd be particularly fond of faeries."

The character with the most and most successful character development and diversity was Nesta, the sister whom caused the most issues. It was a shock and not only development but twist when she found out about the faeries, but as well her support for Feyre all along. She was truly there to support her at any moment and did not have a change of heart, but was already there for her. ]]> 2023-03-16 01:28:21 UTC https://padlet.com/thomass243/6kanjoe9asnzoj3a/wish/2518600927