https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t Made with joy en-us 2018-01-31 15:50:21 UTC 2018-03-02 16:09:28 UTC hello@padlet.com 23mfela https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/227114939 I think that you did an amazing job on using vivid and enticing word choice! You really stopped me in my steps and made me look at the piece closer! Another thing that I think that you did well is how you even described the tatoo on the womans arm. When I was reading this I could really tell that you put a lot of time and effort into this piece. Something that I think you could improve on is, showing more emotion when her father dies! If I were her I'd be much more scared and sad! Overall amazing job!]]> 2018-02-01 16:05:36 UTC https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/227114939 23cchecchio https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/237448122 Hey Allison! I really loved your climate change essay. It was really good and kept me wanting to know more all throughout. One of my favorite thing you included was your intro. All of the statistics really impressed and shocked me. It really helped me want to know more about your piece. Another thing I really enjoyed was the word choice that you used. It was very strong and vivid and you helped tie it in your piece in an amazing way. You knew how to handle the strong word choice and used it in the right ways. One wish I had was that you just looked over your piece one more time because there were a few words that didn't fit the sentences such as "every" in the first paragraph. I think you meant to say "ever". Overall, you wrote an amazing piece that really impressed me!]]> 2018-03-02 15:36:48 UTC https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/237448122 23msilva https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/237453483 Something I really liked about your essay was your intro; and how you started off with a fact.  This grabs the attention of the reader because the fact is unexpected and shocking.  Your word choice was great and helped the reader visualize the affects of the problem.  Some words that really expanded the issue and the need for help are, "immense" and "ignorance" these words are important and varies the essay so it doesn't sound repetitive. One thing I think you could have checked on was your gramatical errors and the missplacement of words in the piece. Other than that, very good job.]]> 2018-03-02 15:45:16 UTC https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/237453483 23cchecchio https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/237464086 Hey Allison! I really loved your suspense narrative! It went over impressing me! It was amazing. One star of mine was your word choice! It was amazing! It helped add description to your story and it overall really interested me in the story! I saw it through the entire story which is really impressing! Another thing I loved was your beginning and end. It was great way to connect them together. I loved that you described the sapphires and rubies rusting, and then showing the feeling of seeing her parents getting killed, and then her coming close to it. It was really above amazing. I really don't have a wish cause this piece was great! Overall, you wrote one of the most amazing short stories I've ever read. You included so much in 5 pages, it felt like a lifetime. I'd love to see this turn into a real book one day. I'll be first to buy it! ]]> 2018-03-02 16:01:20 UTC https://padlet.com/23alesser/6fg9h7o4g53t/wish/237464086