Really good presentation!!

• Moving forward could look at more specific artists to research

Great basis of research and concept, more detail on the end products would help it seem like a more finalised idea

Love the concept! You could visit museums that will have artefacts that directly link to your heritage and the history behind them

great range of research both primary and secondary, with good explanation of initial ideas.

Maybe outline specific artists who inspire you, and perhaps any problems you may encounter in animation like time management, learning software and producing a quality animation.

well done tho :)

Good unique concept taking into account the environmental changes and beginning research/sketches to plan out animation outcome.

• good initial theme and topic

• good connection with architecture

• good use of images to sup[ort your theme.

• maybe use more primary and secondary research to strength it

-Good images for references.

-Solid theme and concept

-Feedback- maybe try use more different types of secondary research (e.g books).

• good incorporation of interests in architecture with the theme chosen

• went to see exhibitions that relate to the project/ exploration of different ideas and outcomes

• use of different mediums

• find specific artists you want to look at

  
  

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-Good Presentation and in depth research undertook about what your project topic and clearly laying out your intentions.

-Maybe outline a more specific timeline for when you intend to get certain parts of your project done so that you give yourself enough time to complete the animation.

Incredible proposal, love the image and what is to come. Plenty of informative slides followed with more than sufficient backstories.

it sounds like a great concept with impressive sketches and primary and secondary research already.

I feel like the way it can improve is to write about how it can help people or bring about change with your final product since the theme is Democracy, Protest and Empowerment

looking forward to seeing the final result

Really good research and great start, maybe just include what your final piece will be more clearly.

strong initial research points and ideation. possibly develop your final concept further so there is a more perceivable goal to work towards.

Personalised concept, in-depth research and knowledge about subject - further exploration into a significant case to further ideas - using both factual and artistic research

Outline the pathway and direction you want to follow - what medium do you want to use and how you want to display this. What do you want to do and what do you want to show?

This cool af maybe you could print your original illustrations for the animation and make a book / collection with a little blurb.

really strong idea and good research to bring awareness to a sensitive subject. maybe decide on a potential outcome

women by women @ London blackfrais

Really good research to add context to your work, you could include imagery to support this throughout. Your ideas for possible outcomes are interesting but need to be refined down to one final plan

Really strong concept and clear presentation!!

• moving forward could refine the specifics of what the final product will be!

I really like the presentation and the way you will develop it. Primary research into these issues maybe by looking at skin bleaching and the effects of media into psychology could help. Also looking at the history of colourism and how it has developed with society could help

• overall idea is great <3 - lovethe ideas of interviewing ppl close to you, makes it more personal

• look into YT animatic creators to gain inspiration - they often make videos to short songs

• art style research (looking into artists) can help you find your target audience

Haylee's feedback

really good presentation - very clear planning and goals for FMP

Really enjoyed the presentation and how clear you are with the topic your discussing about

I think show a range artists in your research that you want to use but really good job!

Really good presentation, moving forward collect together a range of artists that could push forward your style.

With illustration, look at using non mainstream methods of creating illustrations like Lino printing to show problem solving.

The research and knowledge about the topic is significant and there are also really good real-life examples. Maybe a bit more about the work process and the tools that are going to be used and etc.

I like the concept, i'm finding it really unique and i'm exited to see the outcome:)

I like how the project concept is personal and well researched- lots of cases to support overall statement and clear understanding of relevant laws and events

Begin establishing an overall goal for the campaign and what kind of designs/product you want to create. Consider designing an ethical manifesto to go alongside the project due to its sensitive nature e.g. what images and language will you use and how will you use them.

Freya

In detail strong research but maybe add your intentions of where you want your project to go and what you want to include for the process.

• very cool and original idea, i like how its linked to your culture

• diverse array of inspo images give a good feel for your intended outcome

• could maybe use recycled paper to print?? or do paint washes on newspaper and print over it?

I like the focus on something that is close to you culturally and effects you, makes it more unique and special in regards to yourself, a food service is very interesting to. Would be interesting to fully conceptualise, everything from logos to actual products. Also the consideration for how you will make it and research is importantly considered

Ava

-Good mood board and you have a clear direction in what topics you could research further.

-Maybe display this in a mind map to show all possible ideas of further research for your Canva blog.

Very nice execution of ideas, nice unique concept,

maybe add some examples for visual understanding

great concept and planning, it sounds really interesting. Maybe explain the website ending more clearly but overall really strong idea

Good presentation, personal subject matter!!

• Primary research? Is there an exhibition with any communist art?

clear idea and direction, find artists that inspire you

orson

very unique idea, maybe you could look at analog photography (like in the dark room) as a process of taking bits out of an image - the negatives, the chemicals actual outcome ect.

Really clear concept and highly researched and detailed explanation of the meaning behind the ideas.

Clear visuals of what you want to do and personal flare to it.

• good use of imagery

• great primary and secondary research.

• great theme and supportive facts about it.

• maybe make a mind map to show all the ideas in further detail.

Good in-depth research into topic and how it relates personally to you. Maybe research into the illustration style and possible artists that may help guide the aesthetic of your magazine.

The idea of collaboration is interesting, try to work out clearly roles so you don’t create work that’s too similar (ie. Each say which topic under womanhood you address)

The personal context of it relating to your heritage adds depth to the project, and this is supported well with the research into communist propaganda.

Really good clear focus and defined aim

Good inspirations and plan for a range of research

I liked how you thought about the target audience and how you want it to benefit people

Maybe add start some rough sketches to indicate design and layouts

Love the idea and the collaboration. You could use the history and different cultural views on the colour red. You could look into real life events like brutality from protest and the way the government has responded to younger generations trying to advocate for their problems.

Good research into subject - looking deeper into a subsection

defining concept and researching inspiration that can be used for this - further defining research - looking into reasoning behind choice

Create more in-depth notetaking and detail to research as well as doing some primary research - look at a range of different media to understand further the subject and look at more illustrators (not just for children's books)

There are nice examples with documentary and the childrens books and a nice story behind it. Moreover the research could be more i depth.

really good concept and strong ideas, you could definitely tackle the sustainability issue by using recycled paper. Maybe you could even find some south asian flyers or other media and use that paper in your magazine to reinforce both themes at the same time?

I think it's a very promising project and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes

Well researched- already identified practitioners, designers and illustrators for inspiration

Put key consideration into the target audience of the book- ensuring its not too heavy for young children to understand

Freya

I really like the presentation with the certain sources you used like the poster and I like how you both will do some sort of collaboration

Try to get more research of artists or photographers that you are inspired by individually

Well done!!!

Great starting concept. Make sure that the area you'll be looking into are clearly defined and separate so that it is still individual work, but the outcome is linked, as this will be an area of contention for tutors. Also look at using a range of techniques to play with the texture and overall layout of outcomes.

• lots of research - how will that be incorporated into project?

• great idea to use social media to protest against it - look at other people who may do the same to get more ideas

• try interviews to see how ppl (uni students + parents etc.) think about mental health and social media

Haylee's feedback

Strong concept and valid intentions, try and research mental health experts in social media, and brands/ companies who are looking into shaping social media.

This topic is really important because most of the time racism is not as prominent as white people commonly imagine it to be, it's much more deeper. Also presenting was really clear, i have no questions

Chosen a relevant topic and liked the idea of making a children's book to communicate this topic with children.

Have you thought about maybe making a polar bear the character or is someone narrating the polar bear's story?

Great research, the ice exhibition was really interesting!

Lots of research, direction and thought but should develop your ideas more.

This project sounds like it would be closely tied to the fashion and textiles group, part of the collaborative approach. The focus on alternative queer voices is cool and interviewing actual people is nice

Ava

Good use of a timetable and clear understanding of what you want to get done within your final major project, maybe expand upon research into illustration styles and your intended audience.

great concept and good start to research , it being interactive is a really good idea

Very nice concept and ideas, love the interactive concept I feel you can go very far with this idea.

Broaden your knowledge and understanding by communicating and connecting!! This is a very smart architecture idea try push that.

• good link to how it relates to your interests and things you liked previously in the course

• interesting ways of research and collecting data

• visited museums for primary research

• maybe look at queer fashion designers or queer film staples? maybe could look at drag queens idk if thats the kind of thing you're focusing on tho

strong concept with a unique format of exploration. good primary and secondary research. continue to develop your technical skills so your concept can really shine through in your final outcome

Good timetable and clear direction of your schedule

The primary research about the interviews is a good idea

Consider what software or materials you will use to create your zine and garments

The personal context behind the project helps it seem impactful, interviewing people you know would add to this.

It was a confident, well researched presentation but to support your facts try to use images (especially from an artist that could inspire your work)

really interesting idea which you can do loads with and I think the interactive idea is really strong

Nice clear idea and timeline

Really good and broad primary research

It’s really good that you plan to interview people

To improve, name some specific artists that inspire you and what mediums/software you plan to use

Really strong presentation and clear concept good base reaserch!!

• moving forward maybe deciding on what the final project will be?

Good structure of timeline and initial ideas - you seem to know what you're doing!

Good primary research at the museum, maybe include your thoughts about the pieces there and how that's informed your choices in your project, if it has at all.

maybe look into more problems you could face and how you might solve them - you've already mentioned time restraints hence making posters are a maybe, which is great! Maybe do two more?

well done :)

I like the use of statistics and personal connection. I think using some past events of women in war being murdered and sexually abused by fellow soldiers. I think this project could be well presented once you decide how to present it, maybe as propaganda or an advert

Strong concept and a very important one.

Moving forward it would be nice to see what artist and designers specifically you'll be pulling inspiration from and some research for what aspects of the clothing itself traditionally masculine and feminine and how you're going to go against those tropes and turn them around

• great presentation of ideas, really creative + visually appealing = love to see the use of a sketchbook in your work, make sure to scan all the relevant pages

• timetable = timeline that fits the color scheme of your site?

• in person event + online event = more ppl cause some come from distant places and might not want to travel in when your even is due to cost and time

• How will you present the event? (posters, social media, website, invites??)

Haylee's feedback

Your presentation was very in depth and covers the topic very clearly and strongly. Your research was useful and good to the situation.

Good work :)

I really like how well you researched your FMP project

I think you should discuss about what you plan to do and the inspirations you have for this project

Very passionate project concept, really good current concept that has a lot of room to explore. For your experiments show a range of techniques so that you show problem solving as a technique may portray your idea further than a triptych does. Maybe look into a range of different types of painting, e.g. watercolour, oil.

Ilgar

well thought out concept - thinking about target audience and approach to concept - using different research methods to further ideas - planning out time

use real life examples - primary research (interviews) and further secondary research, look at statistics and charities - how are you going to get to this?? perhaps concept is too finalised - no room to change when it is this set in stone

good start and concept, i think you should continue with the immersive experience

Clear planning and established goals- next steps sorted out

Personal and important issue which is not always acknowledged.

Outcome is already decided- ensure that there is a lot of room for experimentation and development from initial idea over the seven weeks.

Freya

really good and thoughtful ideas, what does the app do to help with mens mental health? do you have any ideas of what the app is going to visually look like yet? maybe look more into detail about mens mental health, look at stats and such.

Amazing idea and concept, very individual and interesting. Try create a digital version of what you vision your immersive work to look like through editing apps.

Impressive amounts of primary and secondary research straight away to back up your campaign. Think about the platforms you could use for this, including digital and physical media platforms. The imagery really supports your ideas so far

Very cool idea, amazing amount of primary and secondary research. You could use the style of vintage food adverts and the Lino style of printing for them. You could also look into endangered fishing and the fish that are most vulnerable

unique topic and strong ideation stemming from it. good varied initial research. possibly develop a clearer concept for your final outcome

Nice idea, you have a clear understanding of your concept idea and have started researching who will interact with the app.

Have you thought about researching current apps that focus on mental health and more in-depth research into men's mental health?

In depth research by identifying artists and interesting concept, lots of thought about your direction in your project.

if you want to go further into immersive experience you can look at frameless gallery or illusions gallery, but also you can explore more about human senses

• strong primary research and secondary

• good research

• maybe look more into articles about AI and how it could be a danger to artists

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You have explored a lot through primary research and experimentation the concept is really interesting

I think you should look at specific inspirations for research

Well done :)

Good idea and thought process and rationale for your Final Major Project. Maybe when researching look into the impact and after effects of AI on artists.

• interesting and relevant topic

• maybe go in more specifics about what you want to actually create and the specific aspects of AI you want to go into

• strong primary research

- I like the concept of AI and the ban of it

- The research of the Cartoon Museum sounds interesting

- Ensure you keep up with documenting your visits and the information you have learnt.

Interesting choice of medium and it’s nice that you are taking inspiration from your previous work. To improve maybe research some specific examples of the negative effects of ai and also look into the counter argument of the benefits of ai

You seem very enthusiastic about your project which is great! Good primary research when you visited the museum - maybe add your thoughts that you had at the museum and how that's perhaps changed your perspective on your project, if it has at all.

Maybe you could conduct research on the issue as a questionnaire? like for artists to comment on their struggles with AI and recognition for their own personal work.

well done :))

Great concept especially for us artists growing up with the use of AI.

Strong sense of primary and secondary research and tying your passion for illustration and cartoons into your project.

Maybe present what your outcome will be and if you are experimenting with digital or physical illustration :)

Very unique concept 👍

Great concept that is not very explored, a link to climate change and plastic use would really support your fish campaign. Definitely explore a range of different outcomes that come together to support your concept.

Already a vast range of research which is very aesthetically pleasing and has provided a very good amount of explanation. Well done!

Important to stand against the rise on A.I. In Illustrative work . Research was well considered but more of the actual idea and project could be shown

Ava

solid start and a clear concept, try to find other examples in universities who do a similar event/ external speakers. E.g rave late

You have fully done presentation with research and even some sketches in such a short time. Also a very unique and specific topic, very few people even think about it

Glad you're going to be speaking out againt AI, the overly enthusiastic attitude we've been getting from the teachers who don't know how it works is exhausting.

I think for the next step some specific artists would be good to list and look at and definitely some research into the court case that Midjourney is fighting against at the moment with all the leaked information about them not caring about artists and seeing them as disposable

Personal topic, idea for final product, consideration of style and typeface for initial poster conceptualisation

Identify artist and practitioners.

What specific issues around gender equality and empowerment do you want to explore- make sure you explore intersectional feminism and how gender issues overlap with ethnicity, race, ability, sexuality, geographical location etc. rather than what is considered 'white feminism'

Freya

so gorgeous love all the research you’ve done, looking further into placement and the meaning could help with the context of the project, potentially look at chakras. I love it so much

Nice topic!

what are you most interested in about the history of women and their accomplishes?

what are the posters going to include, facts, empowerment, history, experiences? Maybe you could get some in person experiences that could be used in the posters.

The concept and the thought are very good and there is a lot to get inspired from too. The idea is there there can be more detailed research and more about the mediums and the design process.

Nice idea and plans of primary research

To improve think about people that you could interview and do some initial sketches

love the concept! I like your vision for the project.

Good plan on conducting more primary research, how could you document this? Maybe a collage of your findings from the British museum?

Maybe talk about potential problems you may face and how you might swerve them / solve them.

Good use of images to describe your idea! :D

• good primary research

• good theme

• good research

• love the idea

unique development from your topic and very strong, varied research. good ideation of how the project may unfold.

thinking about final goal (not too set in stone) - exploration of designs which portray the same ideology - planning primary research, planning ways to research

Identify specific artists - look into more specific media and culture surrounding the subject, both figures and artwork - have a more narrowed down idea in which you can focus on

• unique concept and can produce interesting results

• ideas shown for inspo are coherent and interesting

• show ideas for specific aspects that you want to redesign

• include timeline

The topic chosen is relevant and there is lots to talk about and discuss, so I like the idea of creating a book so that you can go into more depth with the topic through this!

The poster could be an advertisement for the book?

For research, you could interview a range of women where they have experience inequality or problems based on their gender.

I really like how clear you are with your idea of women in the tattoo industry and you made clear decisions of what you plan on doing as a final outcome

I think you could add some artists you are inspired by. Really well done!!!

Love the idea of looking into Chinese Culture as a fellow mixed Chinese person :D

I like the visuals of what you are planning to do and the specific artists you're looking into.

Maybe plan out how you will make your outcomes and what you will use to make it (digital/physical).

Love the idea :)

Emphasis on life of chinese immigrants and poster work to advertise such businesses along with research on diary like true to life comics is cool

If you want some references to comics like that, while not matching said theme, work as part of the same sort of communication

Maus

The pervert

The man with no talent

My lesbian experience with lonliness

Persepolis

(A lot of of these tackle heavy issues so warning)

Ava

Really good topic with lots of rich history. With your first outcome idea of working with a nude mesh-like fabric with your designs printed on, you could look at creating a diverse range of mesh skin tones to make your work and the brand you theoretically create one that is ethically sensitive. Look at metaphors for imagery that would be targeted for a specific area of the body for a specific gender or for both.

Really well put together presentation, beautifully laid out!!

• could create a soundscape of tattoo noises? To accompany 2d work

• Projector used to project tattoo design onto people?

GOOD - Interesting idea that social media should just be called 'media' due to the lack of face to face aspect. Research from Ted talks is good because this secondary research is based on talks so you have to really engage with the subject. Also I like the juxtaposition between making an anti-social media campaign on social media. Also has a personal link to the subject.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Show examples of previous artwork which is similar to the project you are going to create.

Amazing concept I love how your bringing a voice back to those who have been silenced,

find more research on these topics first hand accounts would be amazing!

As part of your research maybe do a public interview ai vs “real” art would be cool.

Great concept, I think something that would really fit your project is 3D modelling. a render of your posters and general graphic design in a real looking Chinese restaurant would look amazing

(if you've never done 3D don't worry though)

other than that I feel it's very strong and I'm looking forward to seeing the final result

GOOD - Really great planning and production, a lot of experimentation and problem solving. Really unique idea to manage design and create an event - very interactve and you're tapping into a niche underrepresented are within the university.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Maybe refer to RaveLate as reference on how to presen and structure the event.

Good research and historical context, i never thought about tattoos in such perspective. Well done presentation which covers all of required criteria

concept is well thought out and shows clear direction. The book The Boy, the Mole, the Fox and the Horse could be helpful for illustration inspiration

GOOD - I love the idea of a concept art book as the media form, great artist reseach. Really well thought out plot for the world you are creating.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - I don't have any !!

i think you could interview people who have migrated and ask how this has affected them - have they experienced any struggles, language barrier and if it affected their cultural heritage. for an alternative/ fresh perspective you could look into a book 'untethered soul' the author explored the meaning of 'self' and how we find who we are.

Great research, backed with relevant imagery. You’ve tied together cultural and social ideas well but what you intend to create as an outcome could be finalised more clearly.

Really really strong idea, lots of scope for cool final project!!

• could look at creating a fake spoof product as well as posters?

Really good start and good to develop your skillset in terms of character design, if you want to pursue that in the future.

I really liked your presentation! You are clear with what you’re doing and how you plan to do primary research. I think you should look into more inspiration for you final outcome. Really well done

clear and informative research!

what could the posters include and how will they visually look? Could you go to a fast fashion shop and and investigate the quality side of the items as they are made cheaply? Are you aiming to make fast fashion stop or is it just to reduced the mass production as some people can only afford fast fashioned items- you could look at both sides to fast fashion?

• Love to see you looking at your culture, it makes the project more personal to you and more important

• Interviews to see how ppl feel about traditions etc would be a good idea for primary research

Haylee's feedback

forming initial ideas - formulating first steps and methods - showing clear goals - clear research, extending research out of initial subject, looking at case studies - good planning

Do some further primary research, try do some interviews - explore what methods you could use for these - look at goal

The vision is great. Creating more awareness about this subject would be very helpful. As well as the in depth research that helps people understand the matter better. Moreover there are some very good examples.To improve there could be more about the mediums and the design process behind this ptoject.

You have informative research and discuss more niche questions within the topic of fast fashion, especially liked the calling out the hypocrisy of brands who celebrate International Women's Day and Pride Month.

How will you interpret fast fashion and your research into an illustration?

Also, maybe for primary research could reach out to small brands and ask about the impact of fast fashion on their businesses.

Great topic, it is a large idea to explore with both the hiding/created shame of being a woman, and the punk unashamed imagery of modern women. Explore a range of techniques, both digital and physical/traditional, and a range of artists.

Really good start and love how you implement illustration into photography. Strong idea and really shines a light on what is happening to your people

-Strong research (primary and secondary)

-Clear timeline and plan

- How will you present your final outcome professionally?

Good project so far, I feel like it needs more detail on what the final product is going to be. Is it for posters? a magazine? a campaign? I saw you say you were printing it but I'm not sure what the overall product is

Good range of research starting points! Nice drawings and plan for using a range of materials. You are clearly enthusiastic about this project but make sure you can link it to the theme. This will probably come under either protest or empowerment.

Maybe organise a way to collect data from other people and their opinions on the topic. Did they agree with the harassment the three players faced or not? a questionnaire would be good to broaden your data so that its not just your own views

three books may be too big of a project in the time frame... make sure you have enough time to execute each well if you end up proceeding. :)

Good introduction to your project, including strong research relating to your concept. Explained your process clearly and sense of direction for it too.

Interesting and certainly a lot to look into with the impact of football on society especially in terms of this country

Would be good to research into the history of how football is funded so heavily and footballers paid so muchwhile key workers are not. Advertisement and politics play into it

I remember my old teacher from Greece told me how during the huge uprising and social upheaval the undemocratic government would only play football and news on T.V. She said how both were used to distract and not talk about actual ongoing issues.

Focusing on the actual joy of the sport is nice to consider , removing all the nasty baggage of reality but its important to consider

Ava

Alex

• the theme was very good

• I liked the materials you are thinking of using

• good use of primary and secondary research

Good theme with personal interest

It’s good that you have intentions of experimentation with different mediums

To improve maybe research some historical examples of the impacts of football as well as recent ones, and maybe ones from around the world

• good topic as you're personally invested

• i like the idea of tying it to a current event like the euros

• clear timeline and action plan

• deeper look into football and society and its link with the working class, ik youre looking into european countries but it has a big relevance amongst working class people in latin america (argentina losing their minds for a week when they won the world cup and forgetting the country is in an economic spiral)

Strong concept and passionate about the subject.

Clear understanding of what you want to do as an outcome alongside strong detailed research. Strong sketches got me interested in football fr fr.

GOOD - love the multimedia approach, alongside the personal link to Tibetan culture. The context of China invading Tibet is really important and hopefully this project will allow you to empower your Tibetan identity and fight against Tibetan erasure in China.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT - maybe develop the idea of your final concept further so you have a more concrete goal.

-clear planning

-Love how she explained her proposal

Well researched starting point- established different articles to look at, nuanced topic, flipping gender stereotypes, addressing deep rooted misogynistic structures

Narrow down goal and purpose

Sensitively address how you discuss and approach the way religion views periods (you mentioned how you may not be allowed into religious houses on your period)

Primary research- interview men and women on how they view periods

Freya

I like that you are shredding light on a topic that is often dismissed and something women often have to "get on with".

Also, highlighting lots of common stereotypes and flipping them on its head, sounds like it could be an interesting collection of work.

Maybe try talking to a range of people and how much they know of this topic or women's menstrual health so that it's ethical still.

• cool concept very specific

• take a look at the art book vermis, its like a players guide/artbook for a video game that doesn't exist, its more horror orientated but it seems similar to what you want to do, could take inspo from the format/style

Interesting concept and I like the idea of going into character designs.

I really liked how you took into account the ethical design manifesto with culture and trying to present your work in a non offensive way.

good topic to showcase!

You could research this idea further. I think that you could create some very powerful work through this topic. explain how you are going to investigate this topic through primary research and how you will carry this out. Clearly state what materials are needed for this project and what you will need to plan to meet these aims

I like the fact that your topic is relevant to today! Good understanding of ethics and your audience. Good range of research so far. I like your showcase of initial idea development.

A book diversifies your research which is great!

Is this going to be a 2D or 3D outcome? what sort of materials would you need to experiment with or execute the plan?

A timetable would be good :)

-The concept is unique and interesting with the pokemon aspect

-The research using books is good

-Try make a timeline to ensure you get enough trials

Good use of primary and secondary research and clear understanding of what you want to do. Might be good to research New Zealand and Maui artists to influence your character designs.

Interesting idea and I like how you are taking inspiration from New Zealand.

It’s good that you already have ideas about what you want it to look like

To improve add some research into how existing games have exploded character design

• great theme and depth of research on it, the concept is unique and intriguing

• good research primary and secondary

A strong point on a fact that has not had much light shone upon it and needs to be addressed. Good work on the suggestion of using sustainable materials to accentuate the environmental factor of architecture and interior design.

Very in detail, unique and interesting project concept, strong research too. Expand on your ideas connecting them to your research and how it will take form for your process and outcome.

Strong concept, looking forward to seeing your creature designs. I think for the details I'd like to know what the final product will be aside from the designs, maybe a game trailer?

Interesting topic and often very criticized as a man I really look forward to the outcome of this project. Also, the way you approach the project is great. Moreover more about the process and the design medium would be better.

-I like the campaign idea and it's very uplifting for small artists and empowering. Fits the overarching theme well.

- Try getting a range of resources for your research stage.

Interesting concept with good potential for interviews

To improve try some primary research and specific examples

GOOD - Really in depth research, great planning & production. The context about the history of consumerism has had a lot of work put into it.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Maybe provide some artist inspirations so we know what kind of posters you intend to create.

• personal connection to concept

• solid ideas for final outcome

• maybe go to fashion museums for research?

• more research into internet culture and the state of it today, dead internet theory, bots just stealing designs and putting them on shirts

• making posters and other things are a great way to show software use and skill.

• good research into the them

• maybe do a mood board to show your idea more visually

Good understanding of the context of your theme! Strong opinions which is always good to stem ideas off of!

Ethical concepts in mind such as sustainability is a good detail. Maybe look into your specific audience. Who do you want this project to speak to. Is it the general public? Teens? people who think the internet is damaging? is it just a piece of art you wanna put out there? Figuring this out can help you polish your final outcome to answer the needs of your chosen audience, cus its quite a broad topic, so you need to narrow it slightly.

Really interesting topic! :))

Really strong pointers and what you're going to do with your FMP and I really look forward to what you create!

Clear idea of what you want to do taking into account the sustainability of fashion.

Look into some primary research very cool concept :)

• Love the history and details, shows great understanding of the background of your idea - how will this be incorporated (fact file etc)?

• If your FMP is about ads, try looking at how they are all presented (media, tv, billboards etc)

• Try looking at rules and policies of consumption (produce, materials etc) and how consumption differs between countries (e.g. USA vs African Countries)

Haylee's feedback

I really like your idea a lot, you could look into y2K and other internet demographics fashion styles

Would always be cool to see someone drag on Elon Musk again and how he absolutely ruined that site

Ava

-Good explanation of what the topics are

-Good images for inspiration

-What type of final outcome will you consider making?

Really interesting concept with great scope for research and experimentation

Think about some primary research

Nice clear vision and timetable

I like how you mixed classics and American gothic

• i like the theme you choose and can see it ending up being a great end project.

• the secondary research was strong and I liked the mood board you made.

Gothic 👌💪 love the concept. I can definitely see your work in a gothic sense so really suits!

It’s great you want to experiment with different mediums and research from films and books will definitely help your illustration.

I cant wait to see your outcomes :)

Good range of research and enthusiasm for the topic. You seem to be well versed in both literary and film based mediums which is great!

What is your final? What materials do you want to use to experiment with? What could be the disadvantages or limitations of using certain mediums e.g. time restraints / learning software etc.

Great project tho - super interesting but i dont expect any less :)

Very strong concept, I love American Gothic so I'm excited to see where it goes. As for what can be improved I'm unsure what your final deliverable is however I still see a lot of promise in it and I'm sure it'll be great

I like the campaign idea! Nice moodboard!

Good knowledge on your audience and proposed primary research with the interviews. I like that you aim to use various types of sources instead of just the internet.

Maybe creating a social media account could help build a community for the cause? :)

Also some comics/comic artists that have really good visual presentation

Junji ito, scud the disposable assasissin, berserk (modern gothic too), Gast, sam and max, watchmen

-Good concept

-I like the idea of building a campaign with mock ups and posters

-Make a plan to ensure you get enough trials with all of the campaign aspects.

Unique idea and good examples of research

To improve add some visual examples of the graphics and some inspiration for this

Think about interviews as well

GOOD - Really good research into brand identities regarding food, unhealthy food vs healthy food and packaging, promotion etc.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Add images so that we get an idea of the kind of artists or designers that you're referencing.

Good concept and something that will definitely shine a light on mental health in society.

Good mindmaps show clear visuals.

Maybe more primary research

Strong argument and a very interesting topic on how food affects our behaviour and the dark side to marketing and big brands. Would really like to see where this goes.

Good research maybe expand more into the artistic part of your topic and see how you can visually tell this story and message

• try viewing the project from a product design perspective; so look at similar products (maybe 3) and talk about ACCESSFMM (aesthetics, customer, cost, environment, safety, size, function, materials, manufacture)

• Country consumption and how they differ

• how does food consumption affect people (malnutrition + malnourishment, obesity etc)

Haylee's feedback

GOOD - Consideration of art history and art movements is really good. It's fun that you're playing with 3D space as well - not just 2D media.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - show what materials you intend to use for your final piece.

• Love the idea of food plans + models (think about drafts and trials + making it accurate, visit R2 and Geoff for help?)

• material + machinery research would help (cost, size?)

• might be a great idea to create client profiles for the different rooms and sketches to give an idea for style (could base them off real people)

Haylee's feedback

Good use of a large moodboard and a topic that hits close to home, I really think that you can cover the change in social situations in Hong Kong from the early 2000s to present day.

• history of the art movement could be included for context (artists from that time)

• Google maps could be used to see how Hong Kong has changed over the years

Haylee's feedback

I liked how you included possible outcomes that you're going to produce for FMP and the context of why you're doing this as your FMP

The concept is very good, and there was a good amount of context and research sources

• good clear plan of what you're doing

• research and knowledge on your topic is evident

• visit any relevant exhibitions

• good primary research added to your presentation and a good presentation overall

• look into how your idea/s will develop over the coming weeks

I liked how you used books as a research source - I think you could vary your research

Such as looking at movie/theatre performance posters

• Good idea presented

• Research artists that can help with your final idea

• I think more primary research included

• really well researched proposal with lots of it evidenced

• look into brands/festivals that have been redesigned recently to help you

I like how the theme is linked to childhood memories, there is a lot of good analysis through the poster and logo research

• good at explaining your idea and how it relates to you (more personal)

• Very detailed research

• Explain more about the audience ( who attends the festival, how your rebranding will attract the target audience and why)

I think your final outcome is really cool of medicine packaging

I think you could also create an information leaflet about the medicine and posters/social media posts advertising it

Interesting topic and concept, good context and explanation

• Really good presentation. i like the final outcome idea

• Show research that supports your reason for this project/ final outcome ( e.g. how people can become parasocial, what age is this targeted towards, evidence/statistics )

• good topic to work on and very clear idea of how to explore it and what you're doing

• good opportunity to get data from people who identity as women for your work to help further it

You're explanation is really good and the concept of your FMP - I like how you're looking a the different perspectives of woman in each culture/race

I think doing interviews would be really useful for your FMP as it will give you more insight on women's experiences

Really good research and examples, the topic is very interesting

• good detailed research into topic

• Maybe interview or do a questionnaire with women to help get more qualitative data