공룡연구200주년이되어 꽤 전통이 있다 생각하여 그림

BANK:은행

은행은 돈과관련이있다생각하여 동전과 지폐들을 그림

-취소하다라는 뜻을 문자로 약속을 취소하다로 표현함

2.Corn dog:콘도그

-콘도그를 그려 위에 소스루 글자를 표현

담요를 덮고있는 아이 밑에 blanket을 적어넣어

담요(blanket)을 강조하였습니다.

2. Corndog : 콘도그

콘도그 위에 케첩과 머스터드를 뿌린 것 처럼 Corn dog를 넣었습니다.

(그림에서는 쓸때 r을 빼먹었다 ㅜㅜㅜㅜ)

-쇼핑센터에 있을만한 물건을 그림으로 만들었다.

North: 북쪽

-북쪽을 나타내기 위해 북한을 그렸다.

2.sew바느질을 하다/꿔매다:누비이불에서 바느질을 하다

지역의, 국내의 라는 뜻을 저렇게 표현하였다.

2.bank:은행

은행이라는 뜻을 저렇게 표현하였다

fabric은 직물,천이기 때문에 천을 표현함.

2. corn dog-콘 도그

corn dog는 핫도그로 표현함.

바늘과 실을 그려 바느질하는 것을 표현함

2.electric-:전기의

전기를 그려 단어의 의미를 표현함

fair의 이미지가 놀이공원이라는 이미지가보여서 케이블카을 이용해서

전망을 보는것이좋을것같아서 'f'을 케이블카의줄 지지대로쓰고 'a'을 사탕처럼표현하고 'i'을비누방울을 부는것처럼표현하고'r'추러스처럼표현했다

하늘처럼표현하려고 하늘색으로칠했다

2.electric:전기

전기주의표시판을표현했다 'l'을 천개의⚡️을표현해 그렸다

-색을 조합해 표현함

2.Conrth:대회,시합

-배드민턴대회로 표현함

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시티와 홀을 표현했다

2.Cancel 할게 생각이 안나서 스카이캔슬을 표현했다

시청의 모습을담아 표현함

2.unique-독특한

독특한 모습을 표현하기 위해 하늘색과분홍색을 표현함

약간 쇼핑몰 드어가면 반짝하고, 청소가 잘되있어서 표현함

Area - 구역, 지역의

미국에서 유명하고 전세계 적으로도 유명한 51구역을 이용해서 그림

진심 잘했다 ㅇㅈ? 💀 💀

건강한 느낌을 과일과 채소들과 근육을 드러낸 실루엣으로 표현함

2.cancel

취소했다는것을 금이 갈라지는것과 도장을 찍은것으로 표현하고 강조하기 위해서 주변에 노란색 입펙트를 넣음

의도:뜻이 전기라서 번개를 그림

Corndog

(콘도그)

의도:콘도그가 분식이라 분식을 그림

straight 는 똑바로라는뜻을의미를화살표로표현함.

scared

:무서운

scared는 무서운이라는 의미를 무섭게표현함.

손가락으로 취소 버튼을 누르는 것을 표현 함.

Unique : 독특한, 특별한

중간에 있는 대머리 아저씨만 독특하고 특별하다는 것을 표현 함.

의도:유니폼하면 농구 생각이 나서 농구유니폼과 꾸며주는 신발 그림

Bank(은행)

의도:은행은 돈이 많아 도둑과 은행그림

붉은색의 천이 사방으로 휘날리는 것을 표현했고, 양쪽 상단에 있는 천은 직물이라는 것을 강조하기 위해서다.

unique - 독특한,특별한

독특한, 특별한이라는 뜻에서 볼 수 있듯이 독특하면서도 특별한 느낌을 내고 싶었다

-귀여운 서점을 표현함.

2,Corn dog 핫도그

-핫도그를 먹을때 소스흘린 표현을 함.

- cancel 취소하다는 의미를 컴퓨터의 팝업창들을

취소한다는 뜻과 연결하여 표현함.

2. blanket: 담요

-blanket 담요라는 의미를 담요에 직접 디자인하여 표현함

Healthy-건강한-》 건강해 보이게 할아버지께 근육을 그려드렸습니다.🥵🥵

독특한이 조금어려워 특별한으로 했습니다.

네이클로버로 바구니째 표현하고 무지개도 보기

힘드니까 특별한 것같아서 했습니다.

2.scared:무서워하는,겁먹은

피나 거미와거미줄로 표현했고 조금더 무서움을 강조

하기위해 칼과 바선생님 그리고 눈과 구멍을 뚫어 표현 했다.

Combination하면 딱 떠오르는게 콤비네이션 피자였기에, 콤비네이션 피자를 참고하여 그림.

2. electric:전기의

천둥이 치는 어두운 밤이 생각나 번개와 어두운 밤 하늘과먹구름을 그림.

-corn dog

-corn dog 콘도그의 그림과 콘도그와 비슷한 핫도그도 그림

의도:전기와 관련된 피카츄를 그렸음

2.qullt퀼트,누비아이불

의도:유령이 이불을 뒤집어 쓴 것

창의적

일거

같아

서

취소

컴퓨터

화면

취소

-서점에는 책이 있기에 책을 표현함

2.bank: 은행

-은행을 표현함

healthy 라는 글자를 쓰고 근육으로 꾸며서 건강함을 나타냈다

2.unifrom.제복,유니폼

uniform 이라는 글자를 쓰고 알록 달록하게 꾸며서 다양한 유니폼의 색깔을 나타냈다

2. North - 븍쪽의: 북쪽은 추우니까 주운느낌으로 색칠했다.

하는

무서워하는 모습을 그리고 그거에 맞게 공포감을 조성했다

2.healthy:건강한

건강한 느낌으로 덤벨과 근육맨을 올렸다

건강한 하다는 오이랑 사과를 그린 그림

Corn dog

콘도그랑 비슷한 핫도그를 그림

2.mall: 쇼핑몰의 상품을 표현함.

시청을 표현함

2.bank 은행

돈을 표현함

독득한 느낌을 주는 느낌으로 색깔을 많이 썻다

2.corn dog

콘도그를 표현하고자 소스로 글자를 만들었다

Bank-은행 삘 받아서 씀

It is held at the end of March.

You should visit Nonsan, Korea, because you can make strawberry cake and strawberry jam.

You can enjoy making strawberry goods, making strawberry desserts, and eating various strawberry treats.

You must also try strawberry noodles and strawberry rice cakes (tteok).

Please come to the Nonsan Strawberry Festival someday to enjoy many delicious strawberries!

It is held on the last Wednesday of August.

You should visit Buñol, Spain because there are so many things to enjoy.

You can enjoy throwing tomatoes and watching the fireworks.

You also have to try Paella, a Spanish rice dish and Fideuá, a Spanish noodle dish.

Please come to the festival someday to throw tomatoes and see a lot of exciting things.

You can enjoy two main activities: the first is a costume party, and the second is trick-or-treating. You should also try candy corn and a chocolate mix pack.

The festival offers many exciting activities for people to enjoy.

It's held from December to February in winter.

You should visit Harbin, China because the Ice Snow Big Word is the most biggest interesting place in Harbin.

You can enjoy ice slides and ice lanterns. You also have to try Fried egg with tomato, fried pork in scoop, and mapa tofu.

Please come to Harbin, China to see many ice buildings.

It is held on the last Wednesday of August.

You should visit Buñol in Valencia, Spain because you can do fun and active things there.

You can enjoy a tomato fight and a cooking contest on the eve of the festival.

You also have to try the traditional Spanish dish, paella and arroz negro made of rice and squid.

Please come to La Tomatina someday to have various experiences.

It is held in November every year.

You should visit Cheonggyecheon Stream in Seoul because it is the main place where beautiful lanterns are displayed.

You can enjoy watching colorful lanterns at night and making your own paper lantern.

You also have to try hotteok, a Korean sweet pancake and tteokbokki, a popular Korean street food made of chewy rice cakes.

Please come to the festival someday to see beautiful lanterns and enjoy Korean street food.

It is held in mid-February.

You should visit Kairakuen because features beautiful plum blossoms and various events.

You can enjoy There are guided tours of the gardens, a plant fair, snack stands, during the festival.

You also have to try the plum glutinous rice cakes and plum ice cream.

You should come to this beautiful festival to enjoy the plum blossoms and special events.

It is held from October 4 (Saturday) to October 5 (Sunday), 2025.

You should visit Florida, USA because you can enjoy special events and exhibits.

You can enjoy talking to fossil experts and shopping for rare fossils and minerals.

You also have to try soul food egg rolls, and Crack Mac like mac and cheese.

Let's come to the Fossil Fest someday to do exciting activities.

It is held from April 13th to April 15th.

You should visit Bangkok, Thailand because you can have fun and cool off in the hot summer by using a water gun to spray water.

You can enjoy water fights and music festivals.

You also have to try eating somtum and rice noodles.

If you have nothing to do or have some free time, come to enjoy this festival!

It is held from July 11th to 15th in summer.

You should visit Ulaanbaatar, Mongolia because you can see the traditional culture of Mongolia.

You can enjoy horse riding and archery.

You also should try khuushuur, fried dumplings and khorkhog, lamb stew.

Come and visit the Naadam Festival someday to have a lot of fun.

2. lt is held 2025 started in april

3. You should visit Yeouido because The fans and the pn atos go well togther

4. You can enjoy 1live perfor mance 2 cherry blossomo motion

5. You also 1 cherry blossom popcorn 2Mushroom Bun gepp ang

6.I want to in vite you to the paty

I want to introduce the Camogli Fish Festival.

It is held on May 11th.

You should visit Camoli, Italy because you can play on cruise ships and at the beach.

You can enjoy a cruise and play on the beach.

You also have to try freshly fried and grilled fish in Italy.

I want to invite my friend to Camogli, Italy to enjoy the beautiful seaside and spend time together.

It is held in early February during the winter.

You should visit Sapporo, Japan because you can see amazing things.

You can enjoy the snow sculptures on display and the beautiful night light-up.

You also have to try Sapporo miso ramen and buttered potatoes.

Please come to the festival someday to experience many amazing things!

It is held in mid-May during the spring season.

You should visit the Million Roses Garden because you can see 151 different types of roses.

You can enjoy taking pictures at the photo zone and viewing the scenery from the Rose Observatory.

You also have to try cotton candy and a corn dog.

Please come to the festival someday to see the beautiful roses.

It is held at the end of October.

You should visit Cheongsong because it offers a wide variety of food to enjoy.

You can enjoy the Apple Cooking Experience and the Apple Parade.

You also have to try the apple pudding and apple rice cake.

Please come to the festival someday to eat many foods.

It is held on the first Saturday of October every year.

You should visit the Yeouido Hangang Park area in Yeongdeungpo-gu, Seoul because it will help you create beautiful memories.

You can enjoy the night view of Seoul and a spectacular drone fireworks show.

You should also try the sandwich and pasta restaurants near Hangang Park.

Come to the festival sometime to enjoy the beautiful scenery!

it is held on March 16th.

You should visit New York, USA because it's fun and healthy.

You can enjoy exercise and physical training

You also should try eel and red ginseng.

Please come to the festival someday to do the New York marathon. You'll have so much fun!

It is held from mid-February to early March.

You should visit Menton, France because it can be enjoyed by all generations.

You can enjoy lemon and orange sculpture exhibitions and parades.

You also have to try lemon tarts and lemon sherbet.

Please come to the festival someday to experience the unique culture and art of France.

It is held around December.

You should visit DaLat in Vietnam because there are parades and flower exhibitions.

You can enjoy parades, flower shows, and art performances.

You also have to try bún chả, a noodle dish served with grilled pork, and bún, a noodle dish with seafood, a specialty of DaLat."

Come with me to the Da Lat Flower Festival to enjoy the flowers!

It is held in the middle of April in spring.

You should visit Hirosaki in Japan because you can see beautiful scenery.

You can enjoy viewing and taking pictures of the cherry blossom tunnel and a boat ride.

You also have to try hanami dango, a pink rice cake with red bean filling, and onigiri, a Japanese savory rice ball.

Please come to the festival someday to see the beautiful sights.

You're going to have so much fun.

I want to introduce the Yamato Festival.
It is held on Wednesday, August 27, 2025.
You should visit Spain because it looks fun!
You can enjoy the Battle of Tomato Throwing and a slippery tomato slide.
You also have to try paella and gazpacho.
I want to invite you to join the Tomato Festival with me!

2. It is held in January, around the 20th.

3. You should visit Hwacheon-eup and the Hwacheon Stream because it's a fun and famous festival.

4. You can enjoy Sancheoneo (mountain trout) fishing and snow sledding.

5. You also have to chance to catch fish with a hook and ride on the snow.

6. The Hwacheon Sancheoneo Festival is very fun, so be sure to come and visit!

2. It is held in the first week of October every year.

3. You should visit Hangang Park because you can see the grand fireworks finale.

4. You can enjoy fireworks displays as well as opening and closing performances.

5. You also have to try Tteokbokki and a hot dog.

6. Please come to the festival someday to see the grand fireworks finale.

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want to introduce the Paris Chocoate Festival.

It is held in the October 29th-November 2nd winter.

You should visit Paris France because you can do fun activities

You can enjoy Choclate Sculptures and displays

You also have to try Choclate macaroons and single origin data chocolate

Please come to festival someday and have some fun things to do 어법 문법적으로 틀린거 알맞게 고쳐줘

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I want to introduce the Paris Chocolate Festival.

It is held from October 29th to November 2nd, during the autumn season.

You should visit Paris, France, because you can enjoy many fun activities.

You can see chocolate sculptures and various displays.

You also have to try chocolate macarons and single-origin dark chocolate.

Please come to the festival someday and have a lot of fun!

주요 수정 사항 요약:

"Chocoate" → "Chocolate": 철자 수정.

"in the October 29th-November 2nd winter" → "from October 29th to November 2nd, during the autumn season": 날짜 표현 자연스럽게, 계절도 가을로 수정 (프랑스는 10~11월이 겨울이 아님).

"Paris France" → "Paris, France": 지명은 쉼표로 구분.

"fun activities" 앞에 "many" 추가: 어색한 문장 개선.

"Choclate Sculptures" 등 철자 및 표현 수정: 보기 좋게 대문자 정리 및 복수형 처리.

"macaroons" → "macarons": 프랑스식 초콜릿 디저트는 macaron이 맞음.

"single origin data chocolate" → "single-origin dark chocolate": 어색한 표현 수정.

"fun things to do" → "a lot of fun": 더 자연스러운 표현으로 개선.

I want to introduce the Sapporo Snow Festival. It is held in early February in winter. You should visit Sapporo, Japan to see the characters made from big snow sculptures. You can enjoy eating something, looking at the characters made of snowballs, and eating delicious food.

You also should try ramen and snow crab. Please come to the festival someday to enjoy the Sapporo Snow Festival!

in spring and autumn every year. You should visit Takayama City because the festival is held there and it’s very famous. You can enjoy watching beautiful floats and traditional puppet shows. You also should try mitarashi dango and Hida beef skewers. Please come to the Takayama Festival to enjoy traditional culture and delicious foods.

It is held in early August during the summer.

You should visit the Samjeong Comprehensive Social Welfare Center in Bucheon, Korea because it’s a great place to make cool and enjoyable memories during the hot summer.

You can enjoy fun activities like water slides, catching loaches, and the "Find the Ice Man" game.

You also have to try Sotteok Sotteok, tornado potatoes, and other delicious foods.

Please come to the festival someday to do many exciting activities!

It is held in from February 4th to 11th

You should visit Sapporo, Japan because there are beautiful views.

You can enjoy ice statues of various shapes and go skiing.

You also have to try Kaisendon and Sapporo ramen.

Please come to the festival someday Please come to the festival someday to have a happy day.

This winter festival will be held in 2026, running for 10 days from February 3rd to February 12th.

You should visit Sapporo, Hokkaido in Japan because you can enjoy magnificent snow and ice sculptures.

You can also try enjoy unique experiences like ice dining and snow slides.

You also have to Sapporo ramen and curry soup.

Come to Sapporo Snow Festival to enjoy a fun winter festival!

It is held in early to mid-August. You should visit North Korea and the Daedong River because they offer 7 types of beer and a variety of other attractions.

You can enjoy watching various North Korean performances and experience the cultural zone for foreigners.

You also have to try various kinds of beer and Pyongyang cold noodles.

Don't miss your chance to visit North Korea. To experience North Korea culture, be sure visit.

It is held on the last Wednesday of August.

You should visit Buñol, Spain because you can enjoy unique and interesting activities.

You can enjoy a cooking competition and the tomato toss.

You also have to try paella and chorizo.

Come to the festival to enjoy unique and exciting activities.

2.It is held in early April during spring.

You should visit Seoul, Korea because the scenery is so beautiful.

3.You can enjoy the views and take pictures to create lasting memories.

4.You also have to try tornado potatoes and ice cream.

5.Please come to the Seoul Seokchon Lake Cherry Blossom Festival someday to enjoy many exciting activities.

6.You'll have so much fun!

I want to introduce the Tenjin Matsuri Festival. It is held on July 24th and 25th. You should visit Osaka, Japan because you can enjoy the festival. You can enjoy the lion dance and fireworks. You should also try yakisoba and takoyaki.

Come to the Tenjin Matsuri Festival to enjoy the lion dance!

I want to introduce vietham Ghost Festiual

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2. The festival is held Night of July 15th

3. You should visit Ghost Festiual, viethamFestivals are held in many places, such as homes and village because you can see the ornate dragon sculptures.

4. You can enjoy There is an interest in raising ghosts to the sky.

5. You also have to try the rice noodles and chicken skewers.

6. Please come to the festival someday to enjoy many exciting activities.

I want to introduce the Sapporo Snow Festival.

It is held every winter, from February 4th to February 11th.

You have to visit Odori Park, Susukino, and Tsudomu in Sapporo because the scenery there is truly beautiful.

You can enjoy snow sculpture exhibitions and ice skating.

You have to try the ramen and the king crab at the food court.

Come to the Sapporo Snow Festival to experience the beautiful views!

It is held during the last week of August.

You should visit Buñol, a town in the province of Valencia,

Spain because it hosts the world’s largest food fight festival.

You can enjoy throwing fresh tomatoes and watching fireworks. You should also try traditional Spanish food like paella, made with rice, and arroz negro. a black rice dish cooked with squid.

Please come to the festival sometime to throw some tomatoes.

It is held in early March.

You should visit Honolulu, Hawaii because you can enjoy various festivals there.

You can enjoy fireworks and cultural experience booths.

You also have to try Dole Whip and Haupia.

Please come to the festival someday to eat many foods.

It is held from March to May.

We invite you to visit Lisse, Netherlands because you can enjoy this beautiful festival!

You can enjoy the colorful tulip fields, and don’t miss the chance to see tulips in full bloom and make traditional Dutch crafts.

Be sure to try delicious local foods, like Dutch pancakes and honey waffles, during your visit!

It is held on the last Wednesday of August.

You should visit Buñol, Spain because you'll experience fun activities

You can enjoy the tomato fight, parade, and fireworks.

You also have to try arroz negra, made with rice and seafood, and fideuà, a noodle dish.

Come to this festival someday to have fun in Spain!

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La Tomatina: The Spanish Tomato Festival

La Tomatina is a world-famous festival held every year in the town of Buñol, near Valencia, Spain. It takes place on the last Wednesday of August and is known for its unique and fun tradition—people throwing ripe tomatoes at each other in a massive food fight!

The event attracts thousands of visitors from around the world. Participants gather in the streets, dressed in old clothes and goggles, ready to get messy. When the signal is given, trucks filled with tomatoes arrive, and the battle begins. In just an hour, the town is covered in red, and everyone is soaked in tomato juice.

La Tomatina started in 1945 as a local event but has grown into a major tourist attraction. It's not just about the tomato fight—there are also parades, music, dancing, and fireworks throughout the week.

It's a fun and unforgettable experience, symbolizing joy, community, and a little bit of harmless chaos!

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If you'd like a shorter version or one tailored for kids or tourists, just let me know!

It is held in October in Gwangu.

You should visit this festival because you can learn about Korean culture and taste many kinds of Kimchi.

You can enjoy Kimchi making experience and traditional performances.

You also have to try kimchi stew, a Korean fermented dish made primarily from Napa cabbage or radish and kimchi pancakes, a popular savory pancake from Korea.

Please come to the festival someday to have fun and eat delicious food!

The Gimcheon Gimbap Festival will be held from October 26 to 27, 2025, in Gimcheon, Korea.

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At the festival, you can enjoy busking performances and taste a variety of ramen and gimbap.

You can also try other popular Korean snacks like Tteokbokki and ???

We invite you to join the fun-filled Gimcheon Gimbap Festival to enjoy delicious snacks, experience live busking performances, and play picnic games.

It is held in Open during Christmas time

You should visit Finland because you can see santa.

You can enjoy Meeting Santa giving gifts to

others. You also should try Joulutorttu Riisip and

Do you want to go to the Christmas festival in Finland

with me to make fun memories!

Gimcheon Gimbap Festival.

The Gimcheon Gimbap Festival will be held from October 26 to 27, 2025, in Gimcheon, Korea.

At the festival, you can enjoy busking performances and taste a variety of ramen and gimbap.

You can also try other popular Korean snacks like Tteokbokki and

We invite you to join the fun-filled Gimcheon Gimbap Festival to enjoy delicious snacks, experience live busking performances, and play picnic games.

It is held from June 6 to August 31, 2025.

You should visit Paris, France because you can taste dishes from Michelin-starred chefs and top restaurants, all in one location.

You can enjoy watching famous chefs perform cooking demonstrations and showcasing their culinary skills.

You also have to try macarons and crêpes.

Come to the Grand Palais Festival to experience amazing food and art!

I want to introduce the Mito Plum Blossom Festival.

It is held from late February to late March during the spring season.

You should visit Kairakuen, Japan because you can enjoy a variety of experiences.

You can enjoy night lights and night Plum tea parties.

You also have to try plum wine and Natto.

Come to the Mito Plum Blossom Festival to enjoy delicious food, fun activities, and a wonderful time.

I want to introduce the Halloween.
It is held Friday, October 31st.
You should visit Halloween is celebrated in most cities.
because Halloween is a special time to visit because it creates memories.
You can enjoy the first one is a costume party and the second one is trick or treat.
You also have to candy corn and chocolate Mix pack.
The festival someday to do many exciting activities.

수정본:

I want to introduce Halloween.
It is held on Friday, October 31st.
You should experience Halloween, which is celebrated in most cities.
Halloween is a special time to visit because it creates lasting memories.
You can enjoy a costume party and go trick-or-treating.
You should also try candy corn and mixed chocolate packs.
This festival is a great opportunity to enjoy many exciting activities.

주요 수정 사항 설명:

1. "the Halloween" → "Halloween"
   → 'Halloween'은 고유명사이므로 일반적으로 관사를 붙이지 않습니다.

2. "is held Friday" → "is held on Friday"
   → 요일 앞에는 전치사 on을 사용해야 합니다.

3. "You should visit Halloween is celebrated..."
   → 문장이 어색하게 두 문장이 합쳐져 있어, "experience Halloween, which is celebrated..."로 수정.

4. "because Halloween is a special time..."
   → 같은 이유를 반복하고 있어 "Halloween is a special time..."으로 자연스럽게 정리.

5. "You can enjoy the first one is..."
   → 번호 매기기보다는 활동들을 나열하는 형식으로 간결하게 정리.

6. "have to candy corn and chocolate Mix pack"
   → 어법상 부자연스러우므로 "try candy corn and mixed chocolate packs"로 수정.

7. "The festival someday to do..."
   → 문법이 맞지 않으므로 "This festival is a great opportunity to enjoy..."로 자연스럽게 표현.

1. **First, I have a habit that makes me procrastinate.**

2. **To solve this problem, I should start tasks that I usually delay instead of waiting.**

3. **Second, I am a person who is easily swayed by emotions.**

4. **To solve this problem, I will start with habits that help me recognize my emotions.**

5. **I feel guilty, which makes me want to improve.**

6. **I will build better habits that will change my life step by step.**

## 🔎 점검

### 1.

**원문:** First, I have a habit that makes me procrastinate.

👉 **오류 없음.**

* 문법적으로 완벽합니다. (*habit + that절* 관계대명사 사용 OK)

---

### 2.

**원문:** To solve this problem, I should start tasks that I usually delay instead of waiting.

👉 **살짝 어색함.**

* 틀린 건 아니지만, *waiting*만 쓰면 “무엇을 기다리는지” 불분명.

* 더 자연스럽게는 **instead of waiting to start them** 또는 **instead of putting them off**.

**수정본:** To solve this problem, I should start tasks that I usually delay instead of putting them off.

---

### 3.

**원문:** Second, I am a person who is easily swayed by emotions.

👉 **오류 없음.**

* 관계대명사 *who* 잘 사용됨.

* 매끄러운 문장.

---

### 4.

**원문:** To solve this problem, I will start with habits that help me recognize my emotions.

👉 **오류 없음.**

* *habits that help me recognize my emotions* 완벽한 관계대명사절.

---

### 5.

**원문:** I feel guilty, which makes me want to improve.

👉 **오류 없음.**

* *which*가 앞 문장 전체(I feel guilty)를 잘 받아줌.

---

### 6.

**원문:** I will build better habits that will change my life step by step.

👉 **오류 없음.**

* *habits that will change my life* 올바른 관계대명사절.

---

## ✅ 최종 정리

| 1 | First, I have a habit that makes me procrastinate. | 문제 없음 | 그대로

| 2 | To solve this problem, I should start tasks that I usually delay instead of waiting. | *waiting*이 불명확 → “무엇을 기다리는지” 애매 | To solve this problem, I should start tasks that I usually delay instead of putting them off. |

| 3 | Second, I am a person who is easily swayed by emotions. | 문제 없음 | 그대로

| 4 | To solve this problem, I will start with something that helps me recognize my emotions. | 문제 없음 | 그대로 .

| 5 | I feel guilty ??????? for to bad habits. | 문제 없음 | 그대로

| 6 | I will build better habits that will change my life step by step. | 문제 없음 | 그대로수정본

First, I have a habit that makes me procrastinate. To solve this problem, I should start tasks that I usually delay instead of putting them off. Second, I am a person who is easily swayed by emotions. To solve this problem, I will start with something that help me recognize my emotions.I feel guilty, which makes me want to improve. For to bad habits. I will build better habits that will change my life step by step.

I have tow bad habit which I want to change

First, using my phone at night

To solve this problem, I should try to sleep early without my phone

Second, I don't eat well as a habit

To solve this problem, l will try at least as simple

I feel so guilt

I will try to sleep early and well

📌 문법 오류와 이유

First, using my phone at night ❌

동사가 없어서 문장이 불완전합니다.

✔ 고쳐쓰기: First, I use my phone at night.

To solve this problem, I should try to sleep early without my phone ⭕

문법상 문제 없음. 자연스러운 문장.

Second, I don't eat well as a habit ⭕

틀리진 않지만 조금 어색합니다.

✔ 더 자연스럽게: Second, I have a habit of not eating well.

To solve this problem, l will try at least as simple ❌

“as simple”은 형용사라서 목적어가 빠져 문장이 불완전합니다.

✔ 고쳐쓰기: To solve this problem, I will try to eat at least a simple meal.

I feel so guilt ❌

guilt는 명사 → 여기서는 형용사 guilty를 써야 합니다.

✔ 고쳐쓰기: I feel so guilty.

I will try to sleep early and well ⭕

문법상 문제 없음. 다만 좀 더 자연스럽게 I will try to go to bed early and sleep well.

📌 관계대명사 여부

현재 문장들에는 관계대명사 (who, which, that 등) 가 들어가 있지 않습니다.

👉 넣는다면 다음 위치가 자연스럽습니다:

First, I use my phone at night, which is a bad habit.

Second, I have a habit of not eating well, which makes me unhealthy.

이렇게 쓰면 문장이 더 풍부해지고, 과제용 글에서 좋은 인상을 줄 수 있습니다.

📝 최종

I have tow bad habit which I want to change

First, I use my phone at night.

To solve this problem, I should try to put my phone away and go to bed early.

Second, I have a habit of not eating well. It makes me unhealthy.

To solve this problem, I will try to eat at least a simple meal that gives me enough energy.

I often feel guilty about these habits

I will make an effort to change them by sleeping early and eating better.

First, my bad habit is putting off work because feel lazy.

To solve this problem, I shoud set small gaols.

Second, my bad habit is suearing.

To solve this problem, use polite words instead.

I feel / I feel regretful about my bad habits.

To solve bad habits , break them and improve

📌 원문과 오류

1. First, my bad habit is putting off work because feel lazy.

❌ because feel lazy → 주어 I가 빠짐.

올바른 표현: because I feel lazy

2. To solve this problem, I shoud set small gaols.

❌ shoud → should (철자 오류)

❌ gaols → goals (철자 오류)

3. Second, my bad habit is suearing.

❌ suearing → swearing (철자 오류)

4. To solve this problem, use polite words instead.

❌ 주어 I will 빠짐 → 명령문처럼 보임.

올바른 문장: To solve this problem, I will use polite words instead.

5. I feel / I feel regretful about my bad habits.

❌ I feel / I feel → 중복됨.

하나만 쓰면 됨: I feel regretful about my bad habits.

6. To solve bad habits , break them and improve myself.

❌ habits , → 쉼표 앞 띄어쓰기 잘못됨. (habits,)

❌ 주어 없음 → I will 필요.

올바른 문장: To solve my bad habits, I will break them and improve myself.

수정본

First, my bad habit is putting off work because I feel lazy.

To solve this problem, I should set small goals that I can achieve step by step.

Second, my bad habit is swearing that many people dislike.

To solve this problem, I will use polite words that others can appreciate.

I feel regretful about my bad habits that I sometimes cannot control.

To solve my bad habits, I will break the ones that I know hurt others and improve myself.

1. First, I being talkative.

🔧 수정:

✅ First, I am talkative.

또는

✅ First, my bad habit is being talkative.

이유: "I being"은 문법적으로 틀립니다. "I am" 또는 "My bad habit is ~" 구조가 자연스럽습니다.

2. To solve this problem, I should think before speaking.

✅ 이 문장은 맞습니다!

자연스럽고 문법적으로도 OK.

3. Second, I one that get angry easily.

🔧 수정:

✅ Second, I am someone who gets angry easily.

또는

✅ Second, my bad habit is getting angry easily.

이유: "I one that get"은 문법 오류입니다. "I am someone who gets" 또는 "My bad habit is ~"라고 해야 자연스럽습니다.

4. To solve this problem, I will play meditation

✅ 이 문장도 괜찮습니다.

다만 더 자연스럽게 하려면:

✅ To solve this problem, I should meditate when I am angry

"will"보다는 "should"가 더 적절할 수 있습니다.

5. I feel so sad.

✅ 문법적으로 맞지만, 더 다양하게 표현할 수 있어요:

✅ I feel very sad about my bad habits.

6. I will keep thinking abaut soulutions.

🔧 수정:

✅ I will keep thinking about solutions.

오타 수정: "abaut" → "about", "soulutions" → "solutions"

전체 수정된 답안 예시:

First, I am talkative.

To solve this problem, I should think before speaking.

Second, I am someone who gets angry easily.

To solve this problem, I should meditate when I am angry.

I feel very sad about my bad habits.

I will keep thinking about solutions and putting them into practice

필요하면 이걸로 아래 작성칸에 맞게 문단도 만들어줄게요! 원해?

나의 말:

3번은 관계대명사가 들어가야해

ChatGPT의 말:

좋은 지적이에요! 맞아요, 3번 문장은 관계대명사를 써야 자연스럽고 문법적으로도 맞는 문장이 됩니다. 그럼 3번 문장을 관계대명사를 사용해서 올바르게 수정해볼게요:

원래 문장:

3. Second, I one that get angry easily. ❌

수정 문장 (관계대명사 사용):

✅ Second, I am the one who gets angry easily.

🔹 "who"는 사람을 꾸며주는 주격 관계대명사예요.

🔹 "get" → "gets"로 주어 "who"가 단수이므로 동사도 단수형으로 맞춰야 해요.

추가 예시 (더 간단하게 말하고 싶다면):

Second, I am someone who gets angry easily.

Second, I am a person who gets angry easily.

혹시 관계대명사 문장 더 연습해보고 싶거나, 이 문장을 다른 표현으로 바꾸고 싶으면 도와줄게요!

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I have a lot of things to do, but I don't do them on time.

To solve this problem, when something needs to be done, l will do it immediately.

Second, l repeat myself too many times.

To solve this problem, I will try not to say things too many times.

I feel sad for two bad habits.

I will stick to the solutions to get rid of bad habits.

수정문

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I have a lot of things to do, but I don’t finish them on time.

To solve this problem, when something needs to be done, I will do it right away.

Second, I keep repeating the same things.

To solve this problem, I will try not to say the same things that I have already said again and again.

I feel sad about my two bad habits.

I will stick to my solutions to break these bad habits.

고친부분/이유

"l" → "I"

소문자 l(엘)과 대문자 I(아이)를 헷갈린 부분이 있어요. 영어 문장에서 "나"는 항상 대문자 I로 써야 해요.

"I feel sad for two bad habits."

👉 이 문장은 어색해요. "for" 때문에 "두 가지 나쁜 습관이 있어서 기쁘다/슬프다"라는 식으로 들려요.

더 자연스럽게는 "I feel sad because of my two bad habits." (나의 두 가지 나쁜 습관 때문에 슬퍼요.)

마지막 문장: "I will stick to the solutions to get rid of bad habits."

👉 문법은 맞지만 살짝 부드럽게 바꾸면 좋아요. 예:

"I will stick to my solutions to break my bad habits."

(내 나쁜 습관을 고치기 위해 내 해결책을 지킬 거예요.)

"don’t finish them on time" → 더 정확한 습관 묘사

(일을 끝내지 않는 습관).

"do my work immediately" → 간단하고 명확.

"say the same things again and again" → "repeat myself"를

더 어울리는 표현으로 바꿈.

마지막 문장 → "these bad habits"로

ㅋ연결감을 주어 더 자연스럽게 정리.

First, I look at my phone while walking. To solve this problem, I should put my phone in my bag when I walk.

Second, I use my phone for a long time before sleeping. To solve this problem, I will turn off my phone 30 minutes before I sleep.

I feel guilty about these bad habits. I will never give up until I change my habits.

수정 (주격 혹은 목적격 관계대명사가 없어요)

l have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I look at my phone while walking.

To solve this problem, I should put my phone in my bag when I walk.

Second, I use my phone for a long time before I sleep.

To solve this problem, I will turn off my phone which l usually use too much 30 minutes before going to bed.

I feel guilty about these bad habits.

I will definitely change my bad habits.

✅ 포인트 요약

관계대명사 which는 "use my phone for a long time before sleeping"을 설명함.

"잠들기 어렵습니다"는 완전히 제거함.

전체 글은 간결하고 자연스러운 구조 유지.

First, I have a habit of picking my nails.

To solve this problem, l should keep my fingernails, which are short and neat. Second, I have a habit of putting off things.

To solve this problem, l wil set small goals and try to achieve them.

I feel so annoying for two bad habits.

I will make a lot of effort to change my bad habits.

🔍 설명:

**관계대명사 "which"**는 **"my fingernails"**를 수식하며, 뒤에 오는 내용은 손톱이 어떻게 유지되어야 하는지를 설명합니다.

원래 문장에서 "which are short and neat"는 현재 상태만 말하지만,

→ "which should be short and neat"는 유지해야 할 바람직한 상태를 말하기 때문에 문맥에 더 적절합니다.

✅ 수정 예시:

To solve this problem, I should keep my fingernails short and neat.

Second, I have a habit of putting off things.

❗ 문제점:

"putting off things"도 괜찮지만 **"putting things off"**가 더 자연스러운 표현입니다.

✅ 수정 예시:

Second, I have a habit of putting things off.

To solve this problem, l wil set small goals and try to achieve them.

❗ 문제점:

l → I

wil → 철자 오류, will 이 맞습니다.

✅ 수정 예시:

To solve this problem, I will set small goals and try to achieve them.

I feel so annoying for two bad habits.

❗ 문제점:

"I feel so annoying" → 문법적으로 틀림.

→ "annoying"은 보통 사람이 아니라 사물/상황이 다른 사람을 짜증나게 할 때 쓰는 말입니다.

자신의 감정을 말할 때는 "annoyed" 를 써야 합니다.

그리고 "for two bad habits"는 어색합니다. "about" 을 사용하거나 재구성해야 자연스럽습니다.

✅ 수정 예시:

I feel annoyed about these two bad habits.

I will make a lot of effort to change my bad habits.

❗ 문제점 (경미함):

"make a lot of effort"도 문법적으로는 괜찮지만, "make an effort" 혹은 "put in a lot of effort" 이 더 자연스럽습니다.

✅ 수정 예시:

I will put in a lot of effort to change my bad habits.

수정본

First, I have a habit of picking my nails.

To solve this problem, I should keep my fingernails short and neat fingernails and stop the habit that I have.

Second, I have a habit of putting things off.

To solve this problem, I will set small goals and try to achieve them.

I feel annoyed about these two bad habits.

I will put in a lot of effort to change my bad habits.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, it is a one-legged jump, that makes me look unbalanced.

To solve this problem, I should stand up straight and try not to cross my legs.

Second, I am a picky eater who doesn’t like many kinds of food.

To solve this problem, I will eat as much as possible and try even a little bit of the foods I don’t like.

I feel so upset.

but I will try my best not to cross my legs and eat a balanced diet.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, it is a one-legged jump that makes me look unbalanced.

To solve this problem, I should stand up straight and try not to cross my legs.

Second, I am a picky eater who doesn’t like many kinds of food.

To solve this problem, I will eat as much as possible and try even a little bit of the foods I don’t like.

I feel so upset for two bad habits.

Therefore,I will try my best not to cross my legs and eat a balanced diet.

틀린부분

I it's → It is 또는 I am

one-leggsd → one-legged

your legs → my legs

as possible → as much as possible

a little bit even things → a little bit of even the things

to your best → to do my best

balancer diet → balanced

What is your 1st bad habit?

A: First, I put off my work.

What is your solution for the 1st bad habit?

A: To solve this problem, I should make a plan and do it right away.

What is your 2nd bad habit?

A: Second, I cannot keep the time.

What is your solution for the 2nd bad habit?

A: To solve this problem, I will use an app that limits my smartphone use.

How do you feel about your two bad habits?

A: I feel terrible. (→ ‘끔찍한’)

What is your resolution for the bad habits?

A: I will not delay my work because of my smartphone.

문제점

1. What is your 1st bad habit?

A: First, I put off my work.

✅ 맞음.

“put off”는 ‘미루다’라는 뜻으로 잘 썼어. 문법적 오류 없음.

2. What is your solution for the 1st bad habit?

A: To solve this problem, I should make a plan and do it right away.

✅ 맞음.

“do it right away” 표현이 자연스럽고 좋음.

더 자연스럽게 하고 싶다면 → “…follow it right away.” (계획을 바로 따르다)라고 해도 괜찮아.

3. What is your 2nd bad habit?

A: Second, I cannot keep the time.

⚠️ 살짝 어색함.

영어에서 *“keep the time”*은 거의 쓰이지 않음. 보통 *“keep time”*은 음악 템포 맞출 때 쓰는 말이야.

👉 더 정확한 표현:

“I cannot keep the schedule.” (일정을 못 지킨다)

“I cannot manage my time well.” (시간 관리 잘 못한다)

“I cannot keep the promised time.” (약속된 시간을 못 지킨다)

4. What is your solution for the 2nd bad habit?

A: To solve this problem, I will use an app that limits my smartphone use.

✅ 맞음.

문법·표현 모두 적절하고 명확해. 👍

5. How do you feel about your two bad habits?

A: I feel terrible.

✅ 맞음.

“terrible”은 ‘끔찍한’의 좋은 번역이야.

혹시 더 강조하고 싶다면 → “I feel really terrible about them.”

6. What is your resolution for the bad habits?

A: I will not delay my work because of my smartphone.

✅ 맞음.

문법적으로 정확하고, 다짐의 의지도 잘 드러남.

다른 선택지: “I will try to change my bad habits.” (더 넓은 의미)

총평

틀린 문장은 없음, 다만 3번 “keep the time”만 조금 부자연스러움 → “keep the schedule” 또는 **“manage my time well”**로 바꾸면 훨씬 좋아져.

나머지는 문법, 의미 모두 수행평가에 쓰기 적합하고 자연스러움.

수정본

First, I have a habit which makes me put off my work.

To solve this problem, I should make a plan which I can follow right away.

Second, I have a habit that shows I cannot manage my time well.

To solve this problem, I will use an app that limits my smartphone use.

I feel terrible about them.

I will not delay my work because of my smartphone

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my smartphone too much. To solve this problem, I will find another activities that I can do or play.

Second, I eat too much even I'm full. To solve this problem, I will eat as much as I want, in moderation, until I'm full.

I feel so remorseful for two bad habits. Therefore, I will find more solutions that can solve the problems.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my smartphone too much. To solve this problem, I will find other activities that I can do or play instead.

Second, I eat too much even when I am already full. To solve this problem, I will eat in moderation and stop eating once I feel full.

I feel remorseful about these two bad habits.

Therefore, I will try to find more solutions to overcome them.

"find another activities." Another은 단수 명사와만 함께 써야함. Activities는 복수 이기에 other이 맞음.

"even I'm full." 문장 구조와 시제가 어색함. "even when I'm full." 이 더 자연스러움.

"two bad habits" -> "these two bad habits"가 더 자연스러움.

1. 글에서 철자오류, 어법 오류가 있다면 수정해주고 왜 그런지 이유를 설명해주세요.

2. 글에 주격 혹은 목적격 관계대명사(한정적 용법)가 있는지 확인해주고, 어법적으로 올바르게 사용했는지 알려주세요. 수정이 필요하다면 바르게 고쳐주세요.

3. 내가 쓴 글 중에 주격, 목적격 관계대명사가 없다면 적절한 위치에 넣어서 문장을 구성해주세요.

1. 글에서 철자오류, 어법 오류가 있다면 수정해주고 왜 그런지 이유를 설명해주세요.

2. 글에 주격 혹은 목적격 관계대명사(한정적 용법)가 있는지 확인해주고, 어법적으로 올바르게 사용했는지 알려주세요. 수정이 필요하다면 바르게 고쳐주세요.

3. 내가 쓴 글 중에 주격, 목적격 관계대명사가 없다면 적절한 위치에 넣어서 문장을 구성해주세요.

1. 글에서 철자오류, 어법 오류가 있다면 수정해주고 왜 그런지 이유를 설명해주세요.

2. 글에 주격 혹은 목적격 관계대명사(한정적 용법)가 있는지 확인해주고, 어법적으로 올바르게 사용했는지 알려주세요. 수정이 필요하다면 바르게 고쳐주세요.

3. 내가 쓴 글 중에 주격, 목적격 관계대명사가 없다면 적절한 위치에 넣어서 문장을 구성해주세요.

First, I can’t control my time when I use my phone, which makes me waste a lot of time.

To solve this problem, I should set a timer when I use my phone.

Second, I look at my phone while I walk.

To solve this problem, I will keep my phone in my bag while walking.

I feel sad because they are not good for me.

Therefore, I will control my phone time and not look at it while walking.

고친점

1)First, I can’t control my time when I use my phone, which makes me waste a lot of time. -> First, the thing that I do is use my phone late at night.

2) phone -> smartphone

고친 글

First, the bad thing that I do is use my smartphone late at night.

To solve this problem, I should set a timer when I use my smartphone.

Second, I look at my smartphone while I walk.

To solve this problem, I will keep my smartphone in my bag while walking.

I feel sad because they are not good for me.

Therefore, I will control my smartphone time and not look at it while walking.

내가 쓴 글:

> I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my smartphone until late at night.

To solve this problem, I should turn off my smartphone at 10o'clock from now on.

Second, I can't concentrate when I study.

To solve this problem, I will pinch my cheek when I can't concentrate.

I feel so ashamed for two bad habits.

Therefore, I will put solutions into actions for a good life.

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수정 후 버전

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my smartphone until late at night.

To solve this problem, I should turn off my smartphone at 10 o'clock from now on.

Second, I can't concentrate on the subjects that I study.

To fix this problem, I will pinch my cheek when I can't concentrate.

I feel so ashamed of my two bad habits.

Therefore, I will put the solutions that I made into action for a good life.

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👉 이렇게 하면 글 속에 주격 관계대명사 (that keeps …), **목적격 관계대명사 (that I study / that I made)**가 고르게 들어가게 돼요.

원해요? 제가 이걸 더 자연스럽게 에세이처럼 다듬은 버전도 만들어줄까요?

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2. 관계대명사 사용 여부

현재 글에서 관계대명사는 딱 한 번 쓰였어요:

"two bad habits that I want to change."

그 이후 문장에는 관계대명사가 쓰이지 않았습니다.

👉 정리:

틀린 부분: 10o'clock → 10 o'clock, ashamed for → ashamed of, **actions → action

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I put off the homework that I have to do

To solve this problem I will set a small goal and stick to it.

Second, I can't get up early in the morning.

To solve this problem, I will set a good alarm and go to bed early.

I feel so guilty for two bed habits.

Therefore, I will work hard on solutions to live a wiser life in the future.

수정사항-

I feel so guilty for two bed habits. - I feel guilty about these two bad habits.

I will work hard on solutions to live a wiser life in the future. - I will work hard on these solutions to live a wiser life in the future

수정본-

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I put off the homework that I have to do.

To solve this problem, I should set a small goal and stick with it.

Second, I can’t get up early in the morning.

To solve this problem, I will set a reliable alarm and go to bed early.

I feel guilty about these two bad habits.

Therefore, I will work hard on these solutions to live a wiser life in the future.

First, I use my phone late at night, which makes me not sleep enough.

To slove this problem, I should stop using my phone after 10 p.m.

Second,I use my phone too much when I eat.

To solve this problem, I will not look at my phone while eating.

I feel worried about my bad habits.

Therefore I will not use my phone late at night and not look at it while eating

수정본

i have two bad habits that i want to change.

First, I use my phone late at night, which makes me sleep less.

To solve this problem, I should stop using my phone after 10 p.m.

Second, I use my phone too much while eating.

To solve this problem, I will not look at my phone while eating.

I feel worried about my bad habits.

Therefore, I will not use my phone late at night and will not look at it while eating.

🔑 수정 포인트

slove → solve (철자 오류)

makes me not sleep enough → makes me sleep less (더 자연스럽게 표현)

Second,I → Second, I (띄어쓰기)

when I eat → while eating (더 자연스러운 표현)

마지막 문장 and not look at it → and will not look at it (평행 구조 유지)

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I spend too much time watching short videos that are like reels.

To solve this problem set a time limit with a timer or a time-limit app.

Second, I look at my smartphone too closely which is bad for my eyes.

To solve this problem, I will try to keep at least 30~40cm between my eyes and my smartphone.

I feel regretful and sad.

I will try two solutions In my life and I will make my self better than i am now.

[수정본]

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I spend too much time watching short videos that are like reels.

To solve this problem, I should set a time limit with a timer or a time-limit app.

Second, I look at my smartphone too closely, which is bad for my eyes.

To solve this problem, I will try to keep at least 30-40cm between my eyes and my smartphone.

I feel regretful and sad about my bad habits.

I will act on two solutions in my life, and I will make myself better than I am now.

[고친 부분]

📝 원문 검토

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

✅ 어법 맞음.

that I want to change → 관계대명사 that 사용 (habits를 수식).

First, I spend too much time watching short videos that are like reels.

✅ 문법 맞음.

that are like reels → 관계대명사 that 사용 (short videos를 수식).

To solve this problem set a time limit with a timer or a time-limit app.

❌ 주어가 빠짐. → To solve this problem, I should set a time limit with a timer or a time-limit app.

Second, I look at my smartphone too closely which is bad for my eyes.

❌ closely 뒤에 콤마(,) 필요.

→ Second, I look at my smartphone too closely, which is bad for my eyes.

여기서 which는 앞 문장 전체(too closely 보는 것)를 수식하는 관계대명사.

To solve this problem, I will try to keep at least 30~40cm between my eyes and my smartphone.

✅ 문법 맞음. 자연스러움.

I feel regretful and sad.

✅ 맞음. (다만 영어에서는 보통 “regretful”보다 “I regret it” 또는 “I feel sad about it”을 더 자주 씀.)

I will try two solutions In my life and I will make my self better than i am now.

❌ 수정 필요:

In → 소문자 in

my self → 한 단어 myself

i → 대문자 I

더 자연스럽게: I will try two solutions in my life, and I will make myself better than I am now.

✅ 정리

관계대명사 들어간 문장:

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

I spend too much time watching short videos that are like reels.

I look at my smartphone too closely, which is bad for my eyes.

👉 총 3개 문장에서 관계대명사 사용 ✔

❌ 수정해야 할 부분:

(3) “To solve this problem set …” → 주어 넣기

(4) “closely which …” → 콤마 추가

(7) 철자·대문자 수정

I have two bad habits that l want to change.

First,I'm on my smartphone while eating.To solve this problem,I should no smartphone while eating.

Second,I spend too long using my smart phone.To solve this problem,I will need to spend less time on my smartphone.

I fell harmful and not good.

I will make a plan for smartphone usage time.

수정본:

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my smartphone while eating. To solve this problem, I should not use my smartphone while eating.

Second, I spend too much time on my smartphone. To solve this problem, I will need to spend less time on it.

I feel these are harmful and not good for me.

I will make a plan and change the bad habits which are harmful to me.

수정이유 설명

l → I

소문자 L(l)이 아니라 대문자 I(I)를 써야 맞습니다.

I'm on my smartphone while eating. → I use my smartphone while eating.

be on도 쓸 수 있지만, 여기서는 use가 더 자연스럽습니다.

I'm on my smartphone은 다소 구어체이고, I use my smartphone이 글쓰기에는 적절해요.

I should no smartphone while eating. → I should not use my smartphone while eating.

영어에서는 동사가 필요합니다. no smartphone만 쓰면 문장이 불완전해요.

따라서 not use로 고쳐야 맞습니다.

I spend too long using my smart phone. → I spend too much time on my smartphone.

too long은 보통 **동작의 길이(시간이 너무 오래 걸린다)**를 말할 때 씁니다.

여기서는 "스마트폰에 너무 많은 시간을 쓴다"이므로 too much time이 적절합니다.

smartphone은 한 단어로 씁니다. (smart phone ❌ → smartphone ✅)

I fell harmful and not good. → I feel that it is harmful and not good for me.

fell은 떨어졌다의 의미이고, feel을 써야 감정 표현이 됩니다.

또 "유해하고 좋지 않다"라고 할 때는 I feel (that) it is harmful 구조로 써야 자연스럽습니다.

I will make a plan for smartphone usage time. → I will make a plan for my smartphone usage time.

usage time 앞에 **소유격(my)**가 들어가야 문장이 더 자연스럽습니다.

I have two bad habits that i want to change

First i have sleeping late so i'm tired

To solve this problem i should avoid looking at cell phone 30 mintes before going to bed

Second i use my phone too much

To solve this problem i will do something instead of using your cell phone

I feel tired and regretful

I will try to change

수정된 문장:

I have two bad habits that I want to change

First,l go to bed late, so I feel tired

To solve this problem, I should avoid looking at my cell phone 30 minutes

before going to bed

Second, I use my phone too much. This is a problem that I must fix.

To solve this problem, I will read a book or study instead of using my cell phone.

Because of these habits, I feel tired and regretful

I try to change my bad habits

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📌 주요 수정 포인트:

i have sleeping late → I go to bed late (자연스러운 표현으로 수정)

30 mintes → 30 minutes (철자 수정)

using your cell phone → using my cell phone (주어 일치)

문장을 끊어서 읽기 좋게 정리

수정본: I have two bad habits that I want to change. First, I have the habit of biting my nails when I am anxious or nervous. To solve this problem, I should apply a very bitter product to my nails. Second, my bad habit is looking at my phone as soon as I wake up. To solve this problem, I will put my phone in a place which is far from me. I will try my best to change these habits step by step.

문제점. 1. l → I (스펠링 오류)

2.First l the habit → First, I have the habit (동사 누락)

3.your nails → my nails (자신의 습관을 말할 때)

4.in the from of nail porch → in the form of nail polish (철자 및 표현 오류)

5.l bad habit → my bad habit (소유 표현 수정)

6.which far from me → far from me (관계대명사 제거, 자연스러운 영어)

7.문장 사이에 마침표(.) 추가로 문장

원본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I bite my nails, which is something I want to stop.

To solve this problem, I should apply nail polish.

Second, I eat snacks too often, which is not good for my health.

To solve this problem, I will keep snacks out of sight.

I find it difficult, which sometimes makes me frustrated.

Therefore, I will not give up.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I bite my nails. This is a habit that I want to stop.

To solve this problem, I will use nail polish.

Second, I eat snacks too often. This is a habit that is not good for my health.

To solve this problem, I will put snacks where I cannot see them.

It is difficult, but it is something that sometimes makes me frustrated.

Therefore, I will not give up changing my bad habits.

👉 오류는 없었지만, 자연스러운 표현으로 조금 다듬었고,
👉 which + 명사 → that 구조로 바꾸어 주격·목적격 관계대명사 중심으로 고쳤습니다.

First, I used to ask my mom for help after using the bathroom when I was little.

To solve this problem, I will handle it myself like a person who is home alone.

Second, I used to play with my toys and leave them on the floor.

To solve this problem, I will put away the toys that I play with instead of leaving them out.

I feel I should become a person who can take care of myself.

Therefore, I will first use the bathroom by myself instead of asking my mom for help.

I will second tidy up the toys that I use, so my room becomes clean.

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I have two bad habits to change.

First, I often use bad words when I get upset.

To solve this problem, I will speak politely.

Second, I don’t bow when greeting others.

To solve this problem, I will practice bowing until it becomes a habit.

Therefore, I will stop using bad words and bow properly when I greet others.

First, I have a habit that involves not cleaning my room well.

To solve this problem, I should clean my room once a week.

Second, I have a habit of putting things behind my back.

To solve this problem, I will do my job right away.

I feel regret about that.

I will live with will and do what I have to do.

수정본

First, I have a habit that makes me avoid cleaning my room properly.???????

To fix this, I will clean it once a week

Second, I have a habit which causes me to put things off.???

To change this, I will do tasks as soon as I can.

These are habits that I regret.?????? ????

From now on, I will be someone who does what needs to be done with determination.

수정사항

"that involves not cleaning..." → "that makes me avoid cleaning..."

→ 더 명확하게 "그 습관 때문에 방을 안 치우게 된다"는 원인-결과 구조로 표현됨

"well" → "properly"

→ more natural and precise (well은 너무 모호함)

"To solve this problem" → "To fix this"

→ 더 간결하고 일상적인 표현으로 수정

"I should" → "I will"

→ 의지를 표현하는 조동사 'will' 사용

"putting things behind my back" → "put things off"

→ 원래 표현은 영어에서 자연스럽지 않음. "미루다"의 정확한 표현으로 교체

관계대명사 "which causes me to..." 추가

→ 습관이 어떤 결과를 초래하는지 설명하는 구조로 바꿈

"solve this problem" → "change this"

→ 더 간결하고 자연스러운 표현

"do my job" → "do tasks"

→ "my job"은 직장 업무처럼 들릴 수 있음. 일반적인 일(tasks)로 표현

"right away" → "as soon as I can"

→ 조금 더 부드러운 의지 표현

막연한 "that" → 명확하게 "These are habits"

"feel regret about" → "regret"

→ 더 간결하고 자연스러운 표현

관계대명사 "that I regret" 추가 → 문장 연결과 강조

"live with will" → 어색한 표현 → **"with determination"**으로 대체

"do what I have to do" → "do what needs to be done"

→ 더 자연스럽고 강한 책임감 표현

"I will be someone who..." → 관계대명사 "who" 사용하여 자신에 대한 미래 다짐을 강조

수정본
I have two bad habits that I want to change.
First, I avoid cleaning my room properly. To solve this problem, I will clean it once a week from now on.
Second, I often put things off. To solve this problem, I will try to do tasks as soon as possible.
I feel regret having these bad habits. Therefore I will try hard to put my plans into action and become a more responsible person.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I have a bad habit of procrastinating.

To solve this problem, I should count to 5 seconds and start working right away.

Second, I'm not good at keeping appointments.

To solve this problem, I will be ready 20 minutes before your appointment.

I feel so remorseful for two bad habits.

Therefore, I will become a sincere person.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I have a bad habit of putting off work.

To solve this problem, I should count to 5 seconds and start working right away.

Second, I'm not good at keeping appointments.

To solve this problem, I will be ready 20 minutes before the appointment that is scheduled.

I feel so remorseful for two bad habits.

Therefore, I will put in effort and take action to create a better life.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I using smartphone during conversation.

To solve this problem, I should turn off your smartphone and talk to the other person.

Second, I am picky about carrots.

To solve this problem, I will try eating a variety of foods you don't normally eat.

I feel doldrums.

I will continue to work hard to implement solutions.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my smartphone during conversations, which distracts me from engaging fully.

To solve this problem, I should turn off my smartphone when I am talking with others.

Second, I am picky about carrots, which limits my diet.

To solve this problem, I will try eating a variety of foods that I don’t normally eat.

I feel frustrated because the communication wasn't smooth.

Therefore, I will continue to work hard to put these solutions into practice.

수정사항

“I using” → “I use”: ‘I using’은 문법적으로 틀립니다. 주어 + 동사원형(현재형) 구조가 되어야 해서 ‘I use’가 맞습니다.

“smartphone” → “my smartphone”: 소유격 ‘my’를 넣어 더 자연스럽고 명확하게 표현했습니다.

“conversation” → “conversations”: 복수형으로 바꾸어 ‘여러 대화 상황’을 의미하도록 했습니다.

your smartphone” → “my smartphone”: 주어가 ‘I’이므로, 소유격도 ‘my’여야 맞습니다. ‘your’는 상대방 것을 의미해서 문맥에 맞지 않습니다.

“and talk to the other person” → “when I am talking with others”: 자연스럽고 구체적인 표현으로 바뀌었습니다. ‘talk to the other person’보다는 ‘talking with others’가 더 자연스러운 영어 표현입니다

“you don't” → “I don’t”: 주어가 ‘I’이므로 ‘you’ 대신 ‘I’를 써야 문법에 맞고 의미가 명확합니다.

“that I don’t normally eat”: 관계대명사 ‘that’ 사용으로 ‘평소에 내가 잘 먹지 않는’ 음식을 명확히 설명합니다.

“feel doldrums”: ‘doldrums’는 명사로, 감정을 표현할 때 ‘feel’과 자연스럽게 쓰이지 않습니다.

“feel frustrated sometimes”: ‘frustrated’는 감정을 나타내는 형용사로 ‘feel’과 자연스럽게 쓰이고, ‘sometimes’를 넣어 감정을 좀 더 자연스럽고 일상적인 표현으로 바꿨습니다.

“Therefore”: 문장 연결을 더 자연스럽게 해줍니다.

“put these solutions into practice”: ‘implement solutions’도 맞지만, ‘put into practice’가 좀 더 일상적이고 자연스러운 표현입니다.

“these solutions”: ‘solutions’ 앞에 ‘these’를 넣어 앞에서 말한 해결책들을 가리키도록 명확히 했습니다.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I sleep too late at night, so I can't get up early the next morning.

To solve this problem, I should go to bed right away at 10 o' clock from now on.

Second, people hate me because I swear too much.

To solve this problem, I will change the behavior that makes people dislike me.

I feel so regretful and really sad because my bad habits are so hard to break, and I'm confused and don't know how to fix them.

Therefore, I will promise to improve myself, and I will be careful, sleep early, and speak nicely.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I sleep too late at night, so I can't get up early the next morning.

To solve this problem, I will go to bed at 10 o'clock, which is earlier than my usual time.

Second, people hate me because I swear too much.

To solve this problem, I will change the behavior that makes people dislike me.

I feel so regretful and really sad because my bad habits are so hard to break, and I'm confused and don't know how to fix them.

Therefore, I will promise to improve myself, and I will be careful, sleep early, and speak nicely.

I have two bad habits that want to change.

First, I come to school and sleep, so I can't hear the class.

To solve this problem, I will go to bad at 11 o'clock, which is earlier than my usual time.

Second, my eyes hurt because I use my phone for a long time.

To solve this problem, I need to use my phone less and seaside time for it.

I feel so regretful and really sad because my bad habits are so hard to break, and I'm confused and don't know how to fix them.

Therefore, I will sleep early and use my phone less.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I come to school and sleep, so I can't hear the class.

To solve this problem, I will go to bed at 11 o'clock, which is earlier than my usual time.

Second, my eyes hurt because I use my phone for a long time.

To solve this problem, I will use my phone less and set aside time for it.

I feel so regretful and really sad because my bad habits are so hard to break, and I'm confused and don't know how to fix them.

Therefore, I will sleep early, use my phone less, and change the habits that make my life difficult.

First, l overslept on weekdays. To solve this problem.

I should get up ten minutes early.

second, l to have difficulty controlling one's emotions.

To solve this problem, l will learn how to control emotions according to situations.

I feel anxiety.

I will Even if it's annoying, l don't give up.

수정본

I have two bad habits that l want to change.

First, I often oversleep on weekdays.

To solve this problem, I should get up ten minutes earlier.

Second, I have difficulty controlling my emotions.

To solve this problem, I will learn how to manage my emotions in different situations.

I feel anxious ??????? ecause of bad habits.

I will be someone who will not give up ???????? and will put solutions into action for a better life.

I have two bad habits that l want to change.

First, I am picky about food.

To solve this problem, I should eat a variety of food.

Second, I look at your smart phone in the dark.

To solve this problem, I will not miss your smart phone around me in the dark.

I feel upset.

Therefore, I will work hard and make myself good.

수정본

I have two bad habits that l want to change.

First, I am picky about vegetables.

To solve this problem, I should eat a variety of foods which are good for my health.

Second, I look at my smartphone in the dark.

To solve this problem, I will not put my smartphone around me in the dark.

I feel upset for two bad habits.

Therefore, I will diligently follow the solutions above and make myself better.

👉 주요 수정점:

a variety of food → a variety of foods (여러 가지 음식)

look at your smart phone → look at my smartphone (자기 얘기이므로 my)

miss your smartphone around me in the dark → not use my smartphone in the dark (원래 표현은 어색함 → 의도에 맞게 수정)

make myself good → make myself better (자연스럽게)

First,I lose my cards often.

To solve this problem, I should fix the card position.

Second, I check every time a text that comes in.

To solve problem I will set a time to check texts

I feel angry for bad habits

I will do it consistently.

수정된 글

I have two bad habits that I want to change

First, I often lose my credit cards.

To solve this problem, I should fix the place where I put my credit cards.

Second, I check messages that everytime comes in.

To solve this problem, I will set a time to check messages.

I feel angry about my bad habits, but I will overcome them.

I will keep trying solutions consistently.

수정포인트

관계대명사(that) 사용

전치사/표현을 영어식으로 매끄럽게 수정

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my cell phone for too long.

To slove this problem, I should hang a kid's lock on one's phone.

Second, I Look at the phone too close.

To slove this problem, I will keeping a proper distance.

I feel be annoyed and resentful.

Therefore, l will work hard and fix it quickly

[수정본]

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my cell phone for too long.
To solve this problem, I should hang a child’s lock, which can help limit my phone usage.

Second, I look at the phone too closely.
To solve this problem, I will keep a proper distance from the screen, which will help protect my eyes.

These habits make me feel annoyed and resentful.
Therefore, I will work hard to fix them quickly.

[중요수정사항]

Spelling mistakes 고침: "slove" → "solve", "kid's lock" → "child’s lock", "keeping" → "keep", "Look" → "look"

관계대명사 추가

that I want to change → 목적격 관계대명사

which can help → 주격 관계대명사

which will help protect

which have been bothering me

틀린 부분 slove → solve

(철자 오류) 2hours → 2 hours (띄어쓰기 필요)

수정본

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First, I spend too much time on playing the game

To solve this problem, I should remove the game apps which i like. Second, I do not exercise enough

To solve this problem, I will go to the gym three times a week I feel disappointed with myself because of my two bad habits

Therefore, I will make plans and act according my resolution

원본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I use my phone late at night. Because of this, I often feel tired the next day.

To solve this problem, I should turn off my phone at 11 o'clock.

Second, I swear a lot when I feel angry.

To solve this problem, I will stop using words that hurt others and try to speak more kindly.

I feel upset about my bad habits.

I will stick with these solutions.

수정본

(I don't think 큰 수정 필요 없음. 다 자연스러워요!)

주요 수정사항

문법이나 어법상 틀린 부분이 없고, 의미 전달도 명확해서 굳이 고칠 필요가 없습니다.

"turn off my phone at 11"에서 "11"은 "11 PM"으로 명확히 해도 좋아요.

"stop using words that hurt others" 대신 "stop saying words that hurt others"가 더 자연스러울 수 있지만, 원래 문장도 문제 없음.

필요하면 고쳐본 예:

To solve this problem, I should turn off my phone at 11 PM.

To solve this problem, I will stop saying words that hurt others.

I have two bad habits that I want to change

First, I swear a lot when I hang out with my friends.

To solve this problem, I should think before I speak.

Second, I get excited a lot when I exercise.

To solve this problem, I will take a deep breath and clear my mind.

I feel a deep sadness that affects me deeply.

I will become a person who practices self-control and thinks carefully.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change

First, I swear a lot when I hang out with my friends.

To solve this problem, I should think before I speak.

Second, I get excited a lot when I exercise.

To solve this problem, I will take a deep breath and clear my mind.

I feel uncomfortable and sad because of my habits.

I will become a person who practices self-control and thinks carefully.

수정사항

I feel uncomfortable and sad에서 그 기분이 느껴지는 이유를 적음

First, l biting nais. To solve the problem,l should bandage one's fingernails. Second, l sleep late To solve this problem, l will Turn off your smartphone 20nihutes before geting to badly. l feel sad,I will try to break my bad habits.

수정본

I have two bad habits that l want to change.

First, I bite my nails, which is a habit I want to stop.

To solve this problem, I should bandage my fingernails.

Second, I sleep late, which makes me tired in the morning.

To solve this problem, I will turn off my smartphone

20 minutes before going to bed.

I feel sad because I can’t get rid of my bad habits.

I will try to break the bad habits which bother me.

🔎 수정 포인트:

l → I : 영어에서 1인칭은 항상 대문자 I.

biting nais → bite my nails : 현재 습관은 I bite my nails라고 단순현재 시제 + 소유격 my 사용. spelling 오류도 수정(nails).

one's fingernails → my fingernails : 자기 자신을 가리키므로 my 사용.

sleep late → (OK) 하지만 문장 끝에 마침표 추가.

Turn off → turn off : 문장 중간은 대문자로 시작하지 않음.

your smartphone → my smartphone : 자신의 습관이므로 my.

20nihutes → 20 minutes : 철자 오류.

geting to badly → going to bed : 올바른 표현은 “go to bed” (잠자리에 들다). spelling 오류도 수정(getting → going).

I feel sad,I will… → I feel sad, so I will… : 두 문장을 연결할 때 접속사 so가 자연스러움.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I have the habit of procrastinating, which I really dislike.

To solve this problem, I will set an alarm.

Second, I have the habit of resting my chin on my hand.

To solve this problem, I will keep good posture.

I feel bad about these habits.

Therefore, I will keep being aware of whether I am doing well.

✨ 수정 버전

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I have the habit of procrastinating, which I really dislike.

To solve this problem, I will set an alarm.

Second, I have the habit of resting my chin on my hand, which makes me look lazy. (추가하면 더 자연스러움, 선택사항)

To solve this problem, I will keep good posture.

I feel bad about these habits.

Therefore, I will keep being aware of whether I am doing well.

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📌 수정 포인트

“keep good posture” → 원래는 맞는 표현이지만, 조금 더 자연스럽게 쓰려면 “maintain good posture” 라고 해도 좋아.

문단 흐름을 위해 Second… 문장 뒤에 which makes me look lazy 같은 작은 부연 설명을 붙이면 훨씬 자연스러워짐. (선택사항)

그리고 수정 내용도 다시 간단히 정리해 드립니다.

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최종 수정본 문장 (관계대명사/조동사 표시 포함)

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1. First, I have a bad habit of crossing my legs.

관계대명사: 없음

조동사: 없음

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2. To solve this problem, I must sit upright, which I do whenever I notice it.

관계대명사: which (앞 문장 “I must sit upright”를 받음)

조동사: must (의지 표현)

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3. Second, I have a bad habit of procrastinating.

관계대명사: 없음

조동사: 없음

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4. To solve this problem, I will start tasks immediately, which is what I must do.

관계대명사: which, what (둘 다 관계대명사 역할)

조동사: will, must

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5. I feel disgusted about my bad habits, especially because I have not been able to fix them yet.

관계대명사: 없음

조동사: have (조동사 ‘have’ + 과거분사 ‘been’의 완료 시제 표현)

부정 형태: not been able to (‘~할 수 없다’ 의미)

조동사 ‘will’이나 ‘must’는 없음

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6. I will fix the habits that have held me back, and I won't give up.

관계대명사: that (앞에 ‘habits’ 수식)

조동사: will (의지 표현), won't (will not, 부정 의지 표현)

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수정 내용 요약

수정 내용 설명

“that I procrastinate” → “of procrastinating” ‘procrastinate’가 자동사이므로 ‘habit of ~ing’ 표현이 자연스러움

중복 문장 제거 “To solve this problem, I will start tasks immediately...” 문장이 두 번 반복되어 한 번만 남김

새 문장 추가 “I feel disgusted about my bad habits...” (나쁜 습관에 대한 감정과 고치지 못함을 표현)

단수 → 복수 변경 habit → habits (복수형)

관계대명사, 조동사 위치 확인 및 정리 문법적 정확성과 자연스러운 흐름 확보

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해석 (다시 한번)

1. 첫째, 나는 다리를 꼬고 앉는 나쁜 습관이 있다.

2. 이 문제를 해결하기 위해, 나는 똑바로 앉아야 하며, 그 습관을 발견할 때마다 그렇게 한다.

3. 둘째, 나는 미루는 나쁜 습관이 있다.

4. 이 문제를 해결하기 위해, 나는 즉시 일을 시작할 것이며, 그것이 내가 반드시 해야 할 일이다.

5. 나는 내 나쁜 습관들에 대해 혐오감을 느끼는데, 특히 아직 고치지 못했다는 점에서 그렇다.

6. 나는 나를 뒤처지게 했던 습관들을 고칠 것이며, 절대 포기하지 않을 것이다.

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필요하면 이 문장들을 더 다듬거나 다른 문법 포인트도 자세히 설명해 드릴 수 있어요!

First, I have a bad habit of crossing my legs.

To solve this problem, I must sit upright, which I do whenever I notice it.

Second, I have a bad habit of procrastinating.

To solve this problem, I will start tasks immediately, which is what I must do.

I feel disgusted about my bad habits, especially because I have not been able to fix them yet.

I will fix the habits that have held me back, and I won't give up.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I tend to procrastinate.

To solve this problem, I should make a daily schedule and stick to it.

Second, I spend a lot of time playing games.

To solve this problem, I will set a take limit on gaming.

I feel worried about two of my habits.

I will try to change my habits to live a better life.

수정 후

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I tend to procrastinate

To solve this problem, I should make a daily schedule and stick to it.

Second, I spend too much time playing games.

To solve this problem, I will set a time limit on gaming that helps me.

I feel concerned about these two habits.

I will try to change them so I can live a better life.

수정 내용

A lot of time playing games --> too much time playing games

To solve this problem, I will set a take limit on gaming. --> To solve this problem, I will set a time limit on gaming that helps me

Worried about two of my habits --> concerned about these two habits.

Try to change my habits to live a better --> try to change them so I can live a better life.

1. What is your 1st bad habit?

→ I look at my phone before sleeping.

2. What is your solution for the 1st bad habit?

→ I won’t use my phone before sleeping.

3. What is your 2nd bad habit?

→ I enjoy using my smartphone too much.

4. What is your solution for the 2nd bad habit?

→ I will keep my phone away and talk with people for at least 30 minutes a day.

5. How do you feel about your two bad habits?

→ I feel they are bad habits.

6. What is your resolution for the bad habits?

→ I decided to use my smartphone less and spend more time with my family and friends.

고친거

1. What is your 1st bad habit?

→ I look at my phone before sleeping, which is a bad habit that hurts my eyes.

2. What is your solution for the 1st bad habit?

→ I won’t use my phone before sleeping.

3. What is your 2nd bad habit?

→ I enjoy using my smartphone too much, which makes me waste time.

4. What is your solution for the 2nd bad habit?

→ I will keep my phone away and talk with people who are around me for at least 30 minutes a day.

5. How do you feel about your two bad habits?

6. What is your resolution for the bad habits?

→ I decided to use my smartphone less and spend more time with my family and friends.

I have two bad habit that I want to change.

First, I'm a picky eater, so I've gained weight and my health has deteriorated.

To solve this problem, I need to eat vegetables regularly.

Second, I gossip when I'm angry.

To solve this problem, I need to stop gossiping about others, even when we're apart.

I think I need to change my picky eating habits and the way I speak.

I need to break this bad habit and develop good ones, which I need to practice.

수정후 (감정 표현 문장 추가. 관대 표시)

I have two bad habit that I want to change.

First, I am a picky eater, which makes me lose weight and feel weak.

To fix this problem, I will eat vegetables which that are good for my health.

Second, I say bad things when I’m angry, which hurts others.

I want to stop saying bad things which about people who are not with me anymore.

I feel worried which because I have this bad habit.

I will try to make good habits which help me become a better person.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I shaking my legs in a daze.

To solve this problem, I should reduce anxiety by relieving tension and managing stress and make a conscious effort not do shake my legs.

Second, l turned the pen without thinking.

To solve this problem, I will put the pen in my pencil case when i'm not using it in the future

I feel so regretful for two bad habits. I feel very distracting

will try hard and put solutions into actions for a better life.

I will only take out the pen when l need to use it, and I will try not to shake my legs.

수정후

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I often shake my legs absentmindedly.

To solve this problem, I should reduce anxiety by relieving tension and managing stress, and I will make a conscious effort not to shake my legs.

Second, I spin my pen without thinking.

To solve this problem, I will put the pen in my pencil case when I'm not using it in the future.

I feel regretful about these two bad habits because they are very distracting.

I will try hard to put these solutions into action for a better life.

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수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change

First, I the habit which makes me look at my phone on the street

To solve this problem, I try to get my mind off my phone so that I don’t look at it on the street.

Second, I habits that lead to bad words and actions

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To solve this problem, I will be careful with the words that I use and the actions that I take. ????????

I will look back at myself and think again before speaking and acting.

I feeI I had to fix this, and

Therefore, I will I thought I should make an effort to avoid doing this in the future

수정사항

반복적인 단어 정리 및 자연스러운 연결

원본:

“Second, l habits tnat lead to bad words and actions to solve this problem l willTo be careful with your words and actions, look back at yourself and think again before speaking and acting,”

수정본:

“Second, the habits that lead to bad words and actions — to solve this problem, I will be careful with the words that I use and the actions that I take. I will look back at myself and think again before speaking and acting.”

→

원본은 "l habits tnat" 등 오타가 있고, 문장도 너무 길고 혼란스러움.

수정본은 문장 부호(대시, 쉼표)를 적절히 써서 뜻이 더 명확해지고, 주어와 동사도 명확해졌음.

First, I often use my smartphone too much.

To solve this problem, I should limit my screen time.

Second, I sometimes stay up too late.

To solve this problem, I will go to bed earlier.

I feel bad and tired because of my bad habits.

I will try to fix my habits and live more healthily.

수정

????????????

First, I often use my smartphone too much.

To solve this problem, I should limit my screen time.?????

Second, I sometimes stay up too late.

To solve this problem, I will go to bed earlier.

I feel bad and tired because of these bad habits.

I will try to fix them and live more healthily

gpt수정

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I often use my smartphone too much, which is not good for my health. To solve this problem, I should limit my screen time by setting an alarm and avoiding phone use before bed.

Second, I sometimes stay up too late, which makes me feel very tired. To solve this problem, I will go to bed earlier and try to keep a regular sleep schedule.

I feel bad and tired because of these bad habits.

I will try to fix so that I can live more healthily.

first, i bad habits is looking at your phone while walking

to solve this problem i should put your phone in your pocket

second, i bad habit looking at your phone before going to bed

To solve this problem, which involves putting your phone away, I will need to make a habit change.

i feel bad about bad habits

i will try to break my bad habits

수정 후

First, my bad habit is looking at my phone while walking.

To solve this problem, I should put my phone in my pocket.

Second, my bad habit is looking at my phone before going to bed.

To solve this problem, I need to change this habit by putting my phone away.

I feel sad about my bad habits.

I will try to break my bad habits.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I put off annoying things.

To solve this problem, I should write down the negative effects of procrastinating.

Second, I spend money too freely without thinking.

To solve this problem, I will save money regularly in a savings account.

I feel regret and guilt.

Therefore, I will stick to my solutions and do my best to change the habits that make me feel regret and guilt.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I put off unpleasant tasks.

To solve this problem, I should write down the negative effects of putting things off.

Second, I spend money carelessly without thinking.

To solve this problem, I will save money regularly in a savings account.

I feel guilty and regretful about my bad habits.

Therefore, I will stick to my solutions and do my best to change the habits that are causing me regret.

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### 📝 비교 + 수정 표시

1. **원문**: I put off **annoying things**.

**수정**: I put off ***unpleasant tasks***.

👉 *귀찮은 일을 미루는 것* → "annoying things"는 보통 사람이나 상황에 쓰여서 어색, "unpleasant tasks"가 더 자연스러움.

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2. **원문**: write down the negative effects of **procrastinating**.

**수정**: write down the negative effects of ***putting things off***.

👉 의미는 같지만 "procrastinating"은 교과서적이고 딱딱한 느낌. 구어체에서는 "putting things off"가 더 자연스러움.

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3. **원문**: I spend money **too freely** without thinking.

**수정**: I spend money ***carelessly*** without thinking.

👉 "too freely"는 해석은 되지만, 돈 쓸 때는 보통 "carelessly / recklessly"를 사용.

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4. **원문**: I feel **regret and guilt**.

**수정**: I feel ***guilty and regretful***.

👉 "regret and guilt"는 직역체, 형용사형으로 쓰면 더 자연스러움.

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5. **원문**: the habits that make me feel **regret and guilt**.

**수정**: the habits that ***cause me regret and guilt***.

👉 "make me feel"은 가능하지만 반복적인 느낌. "cause me"가 더 간결하고 세련됨.

First, I talk too much in everyday life.

To solve this problem, I should control my habit which makes me talk too much by thinking before I speak.

Second, I have a bad habit of picking my nails.

To solve this problem, I will keep my fingernails short and neat and stop the habit that I have.

I feel ashamed of my two bad habits.

Therefore, I will speak less and also try to stop my nail-picking.

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I biting nail

To solve this problem, I should set small goals.

Second, I forget my things

To solve this problem, I will check my stuff.

I feel fear about my bad habits.

I will try to fix them.

수정본

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I bite my nails.

To solve this problem, I should set small goals such as rewarding myself if I don’t bite my nails for one day.

Second, I often lose my stuff.

To solve this problem, I will check my stuff before I leave.

I feel worried about my bad habits.

Therefore, I will try to fix them.

고친 점

I should set small goals. 🚫

I should set small goals such as reward myself if I don’t bite my nails for one day. ✅️

I forgot my stuff. 🚫

I often lose my stuff. ✅️

1. First, I sit with my back bent.

2. To solve this problem, I should sit with my 🤬 against the backrest that I should lean against when I sit on the chair.

3. Second, I swear a lot.

4. To solve this problem, I will speak in a way which helps me swear less.

5. I feel like I'm putting myself down.

6. I will stop procrastinating and get started.

[수정문장]

첫번째문장 쓰기,

수정된 문장 모두 쓰기.

그림표시 ????

I have two bad habits that I want to change.

First, I sit with my back bent.

To solve this problem, I will sit with my back straight and lean against the backrest when sitting in the chair.

Second, I swear a lot.

To solve this problem, I will speak in a way that helps me swear less.

I feel like I'm putting myself down.

I will stop procrastinating and get started.

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✏️ 수정된 문장

1. First, I sit with my back bent.

→ ✅ 정확한 문장입니다.

2. To solve this problem, I should sit with my 🤬????? against the backrest that I should lean against when sitting in the chair.

→ ✅ 약간 다듬을 수 있음:

"To solve this problem, I should sit with my 🤬 against the backrest, which I should lean against when sitting in the chair."

왜 수정했는가?

원래 문장도 틀린 건 아니지만, "that I should lean against"는 약간 반복적인 느낌을 주므로 "which I should lean against"로 바꾸면 더 자연스럽고 매끄럽습니다.

그리고 "when I sit on the chair"보다는 **"when sitting in the chair"**가 더 자연스럽습니다. 영어에서는 보통 chair는 "sit in a chair"라고 합니다 ("on a chair"는 다소 어색하게 들릴 수 있음).

3. Second, I swear a lot.

→ ✅ 정확한 문장입니다.

4. To solve this problem, I will speak in a way which helps me swear less.

→ ❌ 수정:

"To solve this problem, I will speak in a way that helps me swear less."

왜 수정했는가?

"which"는 비제한적 용법(콤마 사용)일 때 자주 쓰이고, 제한적(한정적) 용법에서는 보통 **"that"**을 사용합니다.

여기서는 **"a way"**를 한정하므로 **"that"**이 더 어법에 맞습니다.

5. I feel like I'm putting myself down.

→ ✅ 정확한 문장입니다.

6. I will stop procrastinating and get started.

→ ✅ 정확한 문장입니다.

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🔍 관계대명사 확인

현재 문장에서 관계대명사는 다음과 같이 사용되고 있습니다:

"the backrest that I should lean against" → 목적격 관계대명사 "that" 사용 → 적절하게 사용됨

"a way which helps me swear less" → "which"는 "that"으로 고치는 게 어법상 더 자연스러움 → 위에서 수정함

1. First, I use the phone for a long time, which is a problem.

To solve this problem, I should set a time limit.

2. Second, I go to bed late, which makes me tired and sad.

To solve this problem, I will create regular sleep habits.

3. I feel sad about habits.

Therefore, I will try my best.

first, I bad habit texting

while walking

to solve this problem, i

should use apps that

lock the screen while

i feel sad about bad

habit

i will try to break my bad

habits

수정후

첫번째 문장 쓰기 ????????

First, l have a bad habit

of texting while walking.

To solve this problem, l

should use apps that

lock the screen while I'm

walking.

두번째 문제점과 해결방안이 없음.

I feel sad about this bad

habit,but I will try to

break it.

I will try to break my bad

habits, which make my

life difficult

First,lbad habit ls looking at ur phone while walkng

To solve this problem should put your phone ln your pocket

Second, bad habit looking at your phone before going

To so very this problem, wh ich in vo lves putting your phone away lwill need to make a bait cmnge

l fe El sad about my bad habi ts

T hereore, l will try to break bd baal

수정

First, lbad → [a bad] habit ls → [is] looking at ur → [your] phone while walkng → [walking]

To solve this problem (should → [you should]) put your phone ln → [in] your pocket

Second, bad habit looking → [a bad habit is looking] at your phone before going (→ [to bed])

To so very → [To solve] this problem, wh ich in vo lves → [which involves] putting your phone away lwill → [I will] need to make a bait cmnge → [big change]

l fe El → [I feel] sad about my habi ts → [habits]

T hereore → [Therefore], l → [I] will try to break bd baal → [my bad habits]

1. 글에서 철자오류, 어법 오류가 있다면 수정해주고 왜 그런지 이유를 설명해주세요.

2. 글에 현재완료 시제가 바르게 쓰였는지 확인해주시고 수정이 필요하다면 바르게 고쳐주세요.

3. 내가 쓴 글 중에 가주어 it과 진주어 to부정사 구문이 어법적으로 잘 쓰였는지 확인해 주시고 수정이 필요하다면 바르게 고쳐주세요.

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to moon with my younger brother.

First, I want to drink cocktail from the air.

Second, I want to jump very high on moon.

Lastly, I want to fly in space to see the Earth from above.

It will be fun to jump high and fly in space.

챗 GPT수정

cocktail -> water

on moon -> on the moon

Fun -> thrilling

수정본

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to moon with my younger brother.

First, I want to drink water from the air.

Second, I want to jump very high on the moon.

Lastly, I want to fly in space to see the Earth from above.

It will be thrilling to jump high and fly in space.

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to the Mars with my family.

First, I want to float and jump on air.

Second, I want to eat space food like dry icecream.

Lastly, I want to make a garden on Mars ground.

It will be exciting to travel the Mars.

<수정본>

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to Mars with my family.

First, I want to float and jump in the air.

Second, I want to eat space food like dried ice cream.

Lastly, I want to make a garden on the surface of Mars.

It will be enjoyful to travel to Mars.

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설명:

the Mars → Mars : 행성 이름 앞에는 관사를 붙이지 않습니다.

jump on air → jump in the air : “jump in the air”이 올바른 표현이에요.

dry icecream → dried ice cream : “건조된 아이스크림”은 “dried ice cream”이라고 해야 합니다.

on Mars ground → on the surface of Mars : “on Mars ground”는 어색하고, “on the surface of Mars”가 자연스러워요.

travel the Mars → travel to Mars : travel 뒤에는 장소가 나오면 보통 “to”를 씁니다.

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to the Mars with my friends.

First, I want to viewing the sun and planets from Mars.

Second, I want to running around on Mars.

Lastly, I also want to making water float on Mars and dring it

It will be amazing to travel in space

✅ 1. 철자 및 어법 오류 수정본

> I have never been to space before.

I want to go to Mars with my friends.

First, I want to view the Sun and planets from Mars.

Second, I want to run around on Mars.

Lastly, I also want to make water float on Mars and drink it.

It will be amazing to travel in space.

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💡 2. 수정 이유 설명

원문 수정 후 수정 이유

the Mars Mars 행성 이름 앞에는 보통 관사 the를 붙이지 않습니다. (예: go to Mars, not the Mars)

viewing → view ‘want to’ 뒤에는 동사 원형이 와야 합니다. (to + 동사원형)

running → run 같은 이유로 want to + 동사원형(run)

making → make 같은 이유로 want to + 동사원형(make)

dring → drink 철자 오류 (dring ❌ → drink ✅)

Sun Sun 고유명사로서 S는 대문자로 써야 합니다. (the Sun)

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⏳ 3. 현재완료 시제 확인

> I have never been to space before.

→ ✅ 현재완료 시제 정확하게 잘 썼습니다!

“지금까지 한 번도 우주에 가본 적이 없다”는 경험을 나타내므로 현재완료(have + p.p.) 사용이 아주 적절합니다.

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🧩 4. 가주어 it + 진주어 to부정사 구문 확인

> It will be amazing to travel in space.

→ ✅ 완벽하게 맞는 문장입니다.

이 문장에서 it은 가주어,

to travel in space는 진주어(진짜 주어)입니다.

“우주 여행을 하는 것은 놀라울 것이다”라는 의미로 자연스럽고 문법적으로 정확합니다.

수정본

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to Mars with my friends.

First, I want to see the Sun and planets from Mars.

Second, I want to run around on Mars.

Lastly, I also want to make water float on Mars and drink it.

It will be amazing to travel in space.

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to the moon with my friend.

First, I want to jump on the moon.

Second, I want to plant a flag on the moon.

Lastly, I also want to play tag with a friend on the moon.

It will be so thrilling to travel in space.

수정본

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to the Moon with my friend.

First, I want to jump on the Moon.

Second, I want to plant a flag on the Moon.

Lastly, I want to play tag with my friend on the Moon.

It will be so thrilling to travel in space.

💡 수정 및 설명:

“the moon” → “the Moon”

→ 고유명사이기 때문에 **‘Moon’**은 대문자로 쓰는 것이 맞습니다.

“play tag with a friend” → “play tag with my friend”

→ 위 문장에서 이미 “with my friend”라고 언급했으므로 일관성을 위해 my friend로 바꾸면 더 자연스럽습니다.

문장 구조나 시제는 모두 맞습니다.

→ “I have never been to space before.” (현재완료 시제, 과거부터 지금까지 한 번도 안 가봤다는 의미로 적절합니다.)

→ 나머지 문장들은 단순현재로 미래의 희망이나 계획을 말할 때 자연스럽게 사용된 형태입니다.

I have never been space before.

I want to go to Mars with my family.

First, I want to collect rocks on Mars.

Second, I want to grow plants in a grass dome.

Lastly I want to ride a space bike to explore Mars.

It will be fun to explore Mars.

챗GPT 수정

Never been -> never been to

Be fun -> thrilling

수정본

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to Mars with my family.

First, I want to collect rocks on Mars.

Second, I want to grow plants in a grass dome.

Lastly, I want to ride a space bike to explore Mars.

It will be thrilling to explore Mars.

I haven't been there yet

I want to go to the moon with my friends. First, Sleeping in space

Second, Watching the moon

Lastly, Running in space

Exploring space would be really fun.

수정

I haven't been to space yet.

I want to go to the space station?????? with my friends.

First, we plan to sleep in space.

Second, we hope to watch the moon.

Lastly, we want to run in space.

It will be incredible to explore space!

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to the moon with Hong Joong.

First, I want to observe and explore the moon.

Second, I want to see many planets on the moon.

Lastly, I want to float around in the spaceship.

It will be very thrilling and amazing to travel in space.

수정사항

First, I want to observe and explore the moon.

Second, I want to see many planets on the moon.

Lastly, I want to float around in the spaceship.

First, I want to observe and explore the surface of the moon.

Second, I want to see many planets from the moon.

Lastly, I want to float around inside the spaceship.

수정본

I have never been to space before.

I want to go to the moon with Hong Joong.

First, I want to observe and explore the surface of the moon.

Second, I want to see many planets from the moon.

Lastly, I want to float around inside the spaceship.

It will be very thrilling and amazing to travel in space.

I have never been space

I want to go to mars with jiho

First, playing with water

second, float around

lastly try earth food in space

it will be good to space

수정본

I have never been to space.

I want to go to Mars with Jiho.

First, we play with water.

Second, we float around.

Lastly, we try Earth food in space.

It will be great to go to space.

“been space” → “been to space” : ‘go to / been to’는 장소 앞에 to가 꼭 필요합니다.

“mars” → “Mars” : 행성 이름은 대문자로 씁니다.

“jiho” → “Jiho” : 사람 이름도 대문자.