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      <title>Exercise 1- B. Complete the body parts of the argumentative essay below. by Sebahat Yılmaz</title>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>In today’s globalized world, learning English has become an essential skill that <strong>offers countless opportunities. </strong> <em><mark>is a bit vague.</mark></em> As the most widely spoken language across the <strong>"global" → "globe"</strong>, English serves as a bridge for communication. Although many people think that learning English has several drawbacks, in my opinion, it is crucial in terms of career and travel.</p><p><br/></p><p>To begin with, English is a universal language. Speaking English fluently makes <strong><em><s>difference in CV</s></em></strong> <strong><em>a difference on your CV.</em></strong> Also, many companies now want you to know English <strong><s>for you to be able to contact with global companies.</s></strong> <strong><mark>so that you can communicate with global organizations. </mark></strong>Getting hired without English knowledge is harder. English helps us achieve our work goals.</p><p><br/></p><p><br/></p><p>Secondly, when you travel abroad, even if you don’t know their native language, you can still <strong><s>explain</s> express </strong>yourself  to some extent if you know <strong>the</strong> English language. Furthermore, even without travelling, we can communicate with other people from other cultures.</p><p><br/></p><p><em><mark>The essay lacks concrete evidence or statistics. Adding facts such as "English is the official language in 67 countries and is spoken by over 1.5 billion people worldwide" would strengthen the argument.</mark></em></p><p><br/></p><p><em><mark>For Arguments: </mark></em></p><p><em><mark>Expand on how English proficiency specifically benefits careers (e.g., access to international markets, promotions, remote work opportunities).</mark></em></p><p><em><mark>Provide more specific examples of how English facilitates travel, such as being able to navigate airports, ask for directions, or interact with locals.</mark></em></p><p><br/></p><p><em><mark>Add more varied transitions to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.</mark></em></p><p><br/></p><p>On the other hand, some people think that learning English is a stressful process and <strong>it</strong> <strong><em>that</em></strong> may cost a lot to pay for books or courses<strong><s> etc.</s></strong> "<strong>books, courses, and other resources"</strong>: (more formal).<strong><mark> (Explain why this perspective might appeal to some individuals.)</mark></strong> They <strong>might be true  </strong>to some extent. (<strong>have a point) </strong>Nonetheless, it is worth for all the<strong><s>se </s></strong>stress and money because speaking English provides <strong><s>lots of goods. </s><em>numerous benefits</em></strong></p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>Strengthen the refutation of the counterargument by emphasizing why the benefits of English outweigh these costs.</mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p>Taking these points into consideration, English has many <strong>oppurtunities <em>spelling</em></strong><em> </em> for career, and cultural knowledge. Although people think it has disadvantages, <strong><s>advantages of English is a lot more.  </s><em><mark>the advantages of learning English far outweigh them. </mark></em></strong><em><mark>Consider ending with a stronger final sentence, perhaps a call to action or a reflection on the growing importance of English in the future.</mark></em></p>]]></description>
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         <title>                   Learning English</title>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>There are <strong>differences (spelling)</strong> of opinion about learning English. (Space) <strong>Although</strong> some people think that it is unnecessary, learning English comes with a lot of benefits, such as <strong>provideing</strong> <em>(providing)</em> good communication skills and job <strong>oppurnuties </strong><em>(opportunities)</em>.</p><p><br/></p><p>  <strong><em><mark>Firstly, ...  because ... For example, ,such as... Research indicates that English is ...</mark></em></strong></p><p><br/></p><p>For example, when you need to communicate with someone who speaks a different language, like on vacation or while traveling abroad, English becomes a common ground. Research indicates that English is spoken by over 1.5 billion people globally, making it the ideal language for international communication.</p><p><br/></p><p>    Many employers all around the world care about your knowledge of languages when you apply for a job, so speaking English puts you one step ahead of others. Also, it is better to know other languages besides your native language.</p><p><br/></p><p>    Even though most people think that learning English is hard and takes a lot of time and  they <strong>quiet right</strong> <em>(are quite right) </em>about<strong> that but  it is</strong> <strong> <mark>(that, it is)</mark> </strong>worth the effort and provides benefits for your working life.</p><p><br/></p><p><br/></p><p>    In conclusion<strong><mark>,</mark></strong> learning English help us in both our social and business<strong> </strong><a rel="noopener noreferrer nofollow" href="http://life.At"><strong>life.At</strong></a><strong> (space) </strong>the end of the day <strong>Learning english </strong>improves our <strong>life quality quality of life </strong>and make<strong><mark>S</mark></strong> us more well-qualified.</p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>Please extend paragraphs to ensure each one fully develops an idea, includes supporting details, and connects back to the thesis: </mark>Revise the counterarguments &amp; the conclusion for more depth and coherence</strong>.</p><p><br/></p><p>  </p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2024-12-27 08:18:14 UTC</pubDate>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>"English is an <strong><mark>argumentative (WW) </mark>(important)</strong> language <strong>for a long time (globally)</strong>/ English <strong>has been</strong> an important language  for a long time. Some people think it is <strong>bad</strong> for their traditional language, while some think it is important. Although some people think it is <strong>bad (vague- simple-repetitive)</strong>, in my opinion <strong>it’s i(it is) </strong>advantageous. </p><p><br/></p><p><strong>A stronger hook to draw readers in. For example: "As globalization connects cultures and economies, English has emerged as a universal tool for communication and opportunity."</strong></p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>TS: While some people argue that learning English negatively affects traditional languages, I believe it offers significant advantages in both personal and professional growth.</mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p> To begin with, English is an important language globally. Most people speak English <strong>additionally</strong> <strong><em><mark>(in addition)</mark></em><mark> </mark></strong>to their native language. This is why English provides <strong>accessing</strong> <strong><em><mark>(access to)</mark></em></strong> information easily. Also, <strong>English being common makes people write articles in English</strong> <em><mark>(</mark></em><mark>awkwardly phrased: </mark><em><mark>its status as a/global common language encourages authors/people to publish/write articles in English)</mark></em><mark>.</mark></p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>Explaining how this access benefits individuals (e.g., access to research, global news) would add depth.</mark></strong></p><p><strong><mark> "English provides individuals with easy access to international research, media, and educational resources."</mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p> Secondly, English provides an environment to communicate with foreign people because it is a global language. Because of this, international companies prefer employees who know English. This provides English speakers job opportunities with high salaries.</p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>The point about job opportunities is valid but could benefit from specific examples, such as industries or roles where English proficiency is critical.</mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p>On the other hand, English is slowly destroying our own language because people mix <strong>english</strong> <em><mark>(English)</mark></em> <strong><mark>to</mark></strong><mark> </mark><em><mark>(into)</mark></em><mark> </mark>their daily speeches. However, being an English speaker’s advantages <strong>overweight to</strong> <em><mark>(outweigh the)</mark></em> disadvantages. Furthermore, English improves our brain functions. <strong><mark>(how so?) </mark></strong>Therefore, English develops people in several ways.</p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>The claim about English destroying native languages is valid but needs elaboration. Adding an example (e.g., youth adopting English words in casual speech) would make it more compelling.</mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>Cognitive benefits ("English improves brain functions") is promising but vague. Explain or provide examples, such as bilingualism enhancing memory or problem-solving skills.</mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p>To sum up, English gives people <strong>a lot chances</strong> <em><mark>(many opportunities)</mark></em><mark> </mark>such as reaching data effortlessly, improving people’s <strong>CV’s</strong> <em><mark>(CVs)</mark></em> for good jobs and enhancing brain functions. I think everyone should start <strong>learn</strong> <strong><em><mark>(learning)</mark></em><mark> </mark></strong>English <strong>i<mark>n</mark></strong><mark> </mark><em><mark>(at)</mark></em> an early age.</p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>The conclusion would be stronger with a clearer restatement of the thesis and a concise summary of the arguments.</mark></strong></p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2024-12-27 08:21:55 UTC</pubDate>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>In many <strong>schools, (space)English</strong> is being <strong><s>theached </s>taught </strong>as<strong> (add "the")</strong> initial foreign language. With that, people started to question <strong>whete</strong>r <strong>(spelling) </strong>or not it is beneficial. I believe that knowing English <strong><s>has</s> (offers)</strong> many opportunities. <mark>(Intro. Short)</mark></p><p>To begin with, learning English is beneficial due to <strong>(add "the") </strong>opportunities it<strong><s> gaves </s>gives</strong> us <strong>(add a comma)</strong> such as a worldwide information access. A massive number of <strong>research<s>es</s></strong> <strong>(UC- research papers)</strong>are being published in English because<s> it's </s><strong> it is</strong><s> </s>chosen as <strong>(add "the")</strong> common language. With that, <strong>people who know<s>s</s> (SVA) </strong>English <s>are having more various sources.</s><strong><s> </s>have access to more diverse sources.</strong></p><p>Another reason why we should learn <strong><s>English, it </s>(noun clauses: ...<mark> English is that it.</mark>)</strong> <s>makes us one point ahead </s><strong><mark>puts us one step ahead</mark></strong> in education and career<s> from</s> <strong><mark>compared to </mark></strong> others who don't know English. <strong><s>In </s></strong>these days, English is <strong><s>a wanted property and it affects (</s>+object<s>) in many ways.</s></strong> <strong><mark>a highly valued skill and has many effects.</mark></strong>For instance, in your career <strong>(add a comma)</strong> it can boost your salary <strong>(add a comma)</strong> or in education <strong>(add a comma)</strong> it will <strong><s>make you get priority than other students.<mark> </mark></s><mark>it will give you priority over other students.</mark></strong></p><p><br></p><p><strong><mark>Body III: REFUTATION- MISSING! </mark></strong>This is an <strong>opinion essay</strong>, not an<strong><mark> argumentative </mark></strong>one, as it primarily reflects your personal beliefs and perspectives rather than presenting multiple sides of an issue or providing counterarguments.</p><p><br></p><p>Although, unfortunately English decreases <strong>(add "the use of")</strong> other languages (add "<strong>in") </strong>daily life conversations, in my point of view <strong>(add a comma)</strong> learning English can <strong>affect positively</strong> <strong>(word order: positively affect)</strong> in many areas of your life.</p>]]></description>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>  Nowadays English <strong>is</strong> (<em>has become) </em>the first language that is learned and used all over the world. <strong>(OK. However, it could be more engaging to immediately capture the reader's interest.)</strong></p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>(one paragraph-not 2)</mark></strong></p><p>Millions of people spend hours trying to learn English. <strong><mark>(hook is short) </mark></strong>Although some people think learning English is time consuming and overwhelming<strong><s>. In  </s><mark>(, in my)</mark></strong>my humble opinion, it’s  necessary in many ways.</p><p> To begin with, thanks to English, there are lots of job opportunities. For instance, in <strong><mark>today's </mark><em><mark>(today's)</mark></em></strong> world, companies and government institutions want their employees to be qualified with English. Thus, people who start learning English in early <strong><mark>ages</mark></strong><mark> </mark><em><mark>(age)</mark></em><mark> </mark>invest in their careers. In other words, English is a significant element in <strong><mark>bussiness</mark></strong><mark> </mark><em><mark>(business)</mark></em><mark>.</mark></p><p>   Another crucial point in learning English is its contribution in our academic life. Especially in university <strong>(comma)</strong> students can access a wide range of resources. As it is the language of the world <strong>(comma)</strong> almost all of the books have an edition in English . <strong><mark>+So?</mark></strong></p><p>    The opponents of this idea support that learning English leads cultural degeneration. To some extent it can be true <em><mark>(No space before a period) </mark></em>. However, this cultural problem takes long time to evolve. <strong><mark>so?</mark></strong> At the end, for job opportunities and academic issues, English is more important compared to cultural degeneration.</p><p>     In conclusion, learning English contribute to our academic life and career. <strong><mark>(one paragraph-not 2)</mark></strong></p><p><strong>Living as a person who doesn’t know English <s>is so </s><mark>makes it </mark>hard to do many <mark>(what things?) </mark>things.</strong><em> Living without knowledge of English makes navigating many aspects of life considerably more challenging.</em> <strong> Combine the final sentences into one cohesive paragraph. The conclusion paragraph is well-written but lacks essential components that make it complete and impactful in an argumentative essay. Specifically:</strong></p><ol><li><p><strong>Restatement</strong>: The conclusion does not restate the thesis clearly in a new way. </p></li><li><p><strong>Summary</strong>: While it briefly touches on academic and career contributions, it does not summarize the main arguments from the essay effectively.</p></li><li><p><strong>Prediction or Suggestion</strong>: ?</p></li></ol><p><br/></p>]]></description>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>To begin with, learning English has become an important skill in today’s job world. As English is <strong>A </strong>widely spoken language, it can form an international bo<strong><s>u</s></strong>nd. With this international bo<strong><s>u</s></strong>nd, there <strong>is</strong> <strong><s>are</s></strong> competition<strong><s>s</s></strong> among the companies. English puts companies one step ahead of others. Therefore, many companies take English as a necessity. <strong><mark>So, do have better job opportunities? </mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p>Another important reason for learning <strong>e</strong>nglish is that it boosts cognitive abilities. For example, when you learn <strong>THE</strong> English language, you learn cultural information about English, which expands your horizon<strong>S. <mark>So? how is it linked to cognitive skills?  </mark>(one paragraph) </strong></p><p>Also, memorizing words in t<strong><s>he</s></strong> <strong>AN</strong>other language improves your memory.</p><p><br/></p><p><strong><mark>Add facts, statistics &amp;  examples </mark></strong></p><p><strong><mark>Research shows that...</mark></strong></p><p><strong><mark>This means...</mark></strong></p><p><strong><mark>Therefore, ... </mark></strong></p><p><br/></p><p>On the other hand, some people think that learning English is time<strong><mark>-</mark></strong>consuming and overwhelming. This opposition may be true to some extent. <strong><mark>lacks explanation/elaboration </mark></strong>However, the advantages of learning <strong><s>e</s>E</strong>nglish outweigh<strong><s>s</s></strong> the disadvantages. </p>]]></description>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>In today’s globalized world, learning English has become an essential skill that offers countless opportunities. As the most widely spoken language across the global, English serves as a bridge for communication. Although many people think that learning English has several drawbacks, in my opinion, it is crucial in terms of career and travel.</p>]]></description>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>Taking these points into consideration, English has many oppurtunities for career, and cultural knowledge. Although people think it has disadvantages, advantages of English is a lot more. </p>]]></description>
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