https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg Please leave a detailed note for Khivani after the presentation! en-us 2017-04-04 18:15:36 UTC 2018-04-09 12:44:57 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709084 The story was creative and unique. Try to proofread your story next time. Good job! :-)]]> 2017-04-04 18:36:52 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709084 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709124 Khivani, you did an amazing job with your story, it was very detailed and really well put together. ]]> 2017-04-04 18:37:00 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709124 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709760 I like how you took the traditional love story and gave it a twist. The idea to use a stuffed animal for a grown woman was unexpected, but unique. I loved the diction you used to describe the scene.]]> 2017-04-04 18:39:09 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709760 wattsjas000 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709764 First, Jimmy is very scary. Second, I like that it's gay. Your story seemed very interesting but I couldn't really hear you that well so work on your projection. Also why you gotta make it sad tho?]]> 2017-04-04 18:39:09 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164709764 figuejas000 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164710153 It is interesting to hear a story about a lesbian soldier, and what she experienced; Hummel's "hallucination" was also well-worded and helped the reader understand Hummel's experience.]]> 2017-04-04 18:40:22 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164710153 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164712790 The story was really sad and touched me jimmy the kangaroo has seen some action that can be determined by the wounds on Jimmy.]]> 2017-04-04 18:50:03 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164712790 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164715074 The language in this is very nice. It flows nicely. The story is very creative and detailed. I was drawn in and intrigued. It made me think and I didn't know what was going to happen next. ]]> 2017-04-04 18:57:31 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164715074 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164718718 I enjoyed the writing style in this particular project, and it draws a painting for your imagination. The item has decent distress, and I'm impressed with the project in general. This story seems more complete than several other of the other stories. Good job.]]> 2017-04-04 19:10:33 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164718718 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164719117 You are an excellent writer. I think the concept was well thought out but I wish the ending was a little more clearer.]]> 2017-04-04 19:12:01 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164719117 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164719553 Jimmy is a bear rather than a kangaroo. The touch of bringing a kangaroo is very unique. A story of a lesbian soldier and her tale was intriguing to hear the point of view from. Can tell that you took a lot of time to think of the story and developing it.]]> 2017-04-04 19:13:39 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164719553 https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164719956 Could not distinguish a bear from a kangoroo.
I also like how distinctive the story was and how detailed it is. 
I like the imagery that she portrays at the end. 
I also like her character development.]]> 2017-04-04 19:15:07 UTC https://padlet.com/elsong/5j6pfexbmvmg/wish/164719956