WG08 Review Intro & TF examples by Patrick https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt This exercise is used to help you look at the good/bad features of an introduction + theoretical framework en-us 2020-11-23 22:25:08 UTC 2025-11-21 12:02:25 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f680.png Tip from Patrick patrick367 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/955917192 Please gather your feedback in 1 post + put your BreakOutRoom number above, so if I want to ask something I know who to contact]]> 2020-11-24 12:37:34 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/955917192 Breakout Room 8 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956352492 + The introduction is attention seeking
+ It is clear what the study is on
+ the references are clear]]> 2020-11-24 14:32:24 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956352492 Breakout Room 6 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956363764 Like
- starts with a statistic which hooks the reader
- lots of references 

Dislike
- the model is wrong --> 2 times paradox mindset
- not a good RQ
- quite a few grammatical errors

]]> 2020-11-24 14:34:47 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956363764 breakout room 3 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956369476 - unnecessary repeating sentences 
- wrong APA in text references
- well formulated research question]]> 2020-11-24 14:35:58 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956369476 Breakout room 5 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956370202 + Many sources used
- Confusing use of references
- Missing a clear research gap]]> 2020-11-24 14:36:08 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956370202 BreakOut Room 8 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956371192 - Not in APA style
- Not a good Research Question
- The model isn't right]]> 2020-11-24 14:36:21 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956371192 Breakout room 6 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956377159 2020-11-24 14:37:39 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956377159 Breakout Room 2 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956378696 + lots of resources
- Unnecessary use of italic quotes
- Unnecessary repeated sentences]]> 2020-11-24 14:37:59 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956378696 Breakout room 7 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956378711 - too many opinions
- not clear what the study is about
- a lot of jumping to conclusions
- the hook of the introduction is not that interesting
- APA not respected ]]> 2020-11-24 14:38:00 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956378711 Breakroom 5 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956380095 + Good amount of evidence and support for idea
- Incorrect sequence 
- Confusing model (twice the same variable)]]> 2020-11-24 14:38:17 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956380095 Breakout Room 10 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956389426 -It is immediately clear it is focused on proactive behaviour, but not exactly what is being researched about proactive behaviour.
-The “what we don’t know section isn’t so clear- it doesn’t address a clear research gap.
-APA completely disregarded.]]> 2020-11-24 14:40:10 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956389426 Breakout room 7 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956397451 - hook is interesting as it includes a scientific fact
- well structured
- figure not very clear]]> 2020-11-24 14:41:53 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956397451 Breakout Room 2 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956399460 + seek attention through accurate situations
- No APA style
- The model uses one variable twice

]]> 2020-11-24 14:42:19 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956399460 breakout room 3 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956400974 - strong introduction
- model has not got the same variables as expressed in the introduction
- well defined research gap ]]> 2020-11-24 14:42:37 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956400974 Breakout Room 5 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956404926 + Logical argumentation
+ Clear structure
+ Well defined constructs
+ Compelling communication
+ Good explanation of relationships
- Placement of hypotheses could be better]]> 2020-11-24 14:43:26 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956404926 Breakout room 10 aykpartiyan https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956407249 ·      Interesting hook to start the intro, however not an immediate clear indication of what the main focus of the research is. 
·      Concise breaking down of terms and defining each term briefly. 
·      Clearly stating how everything is planned on being solved.
]]> 2020-11-24 14:43:57 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956407249 Breakout Room 6 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956499279 Like 
- well structured --> 4 paragraphs explaining all 
- variables explained nicely taking into regard word count and everything

Dislike 
- paragraph 2 they mention motivation and mindset, but creativity as well which should come later. therefore, it feels mixed up]]> 2020-11-24 15:04:00 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956499279 Breakout 10 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956500672 - not clear definitions;
- weird structure;
- not clear arguments for Hypotheses;

]]> 2020-11-24 15:04:17 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956500672 breakout room 3 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956503222 - clearly structured 
- H1 lacks Positive/negative/enhancing relationship
- not perfectly apa]]> 2020-11-24 15:04:49 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956503222 Breakout Room 8 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956508068 + Clear variables
- Hypotheses in the wrong place
- Confusing lay-out

]]> 2020-11-24 15:05:49 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956508068 Breakout room 7 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956508774 - definitions are not clear
- hypothesis are not explained
- not well structures, very misleading ]]> 2020-11-24 15:05:57 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956508774 breakout room 3 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956511819 - clearly stated hypothesis and their relationships
- well structured framework
- clearly defined variables

]]> 2020-11-24 15:06:35 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956511819 Breakout Room 5 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956512317 - Incorrect APA formatting
- Informal and unclear communication
- Incomplete model argumentation (explanation of the hypotheses)]]> 2020-11-24 15:06:42 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956512317 Breakout Room 6 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956517875 - clear structure
- various sources
- could expand on variable definition
- hypotheses too simple/lacking positive/negative relation
- some incomplete sentences]]> 2020-11-24 15:07:51 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956517875 Breakout Room 8 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956527994 + Structure is clear
+ References are good
- Incorrect APA

]]> 2020-11-24 15:09:58 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956527994 Breakout room 7 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956528992 - hypothesis at the end of each paragraph 
- definitions are clear
- well structured
- hypothesis are maybe too convenient ]]> 2020-11-24 15:10:10 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956528992 Breakout Room 10 https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956559583 - Clear structure
-Very clear definition of variables + build up to hypotheses
-Very effective use of references]]> 2020-11-24 15:16:38 UTC https://padlet.com/patrick367/5b39az3g18xan2mt/wish/956559583