Tiana G. Peer Feedback 2022 - 2023 by Tiana Goff https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 17:27:33 UTC 2023-06-15 13:31:19 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png Rosalie Lourenco 29rlourenco https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2355931060 One strength in your memoir was your inner thoughts. I think they really captured what was going on in your head. Another strength in your memoir was your figurative language. I think it made it clear what things sounded, looked, and felt like. One suggestion I have for you is to tell how long it was taking for the paint to dry. I think it would make the readers feel that anticipation that you were feeling while waiting for the paint to dry.]]> 2022-10-25 17:57:19 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2355931060 Frankie 😎😎🤓🤓 https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2357818301 This story showed how you throughout the story created something but fell even with a restart this showed that you put effort into this ]]> 2022-10-26 18:34:39 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2357818301 Rosalie Lourenco 29rlourenco https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2407124682 I think the inner thoughts of your narrative was a strength. They made it clear how your character was feeling and what was going on in their head. Another strength in your memoir was your dialogue. It really brought your narrative to life and captured the moment. One thing you should work on is checking your work to make sure there is punctuation and the grammar is correct.]]> 2022-12-02 20:20:13 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2407124682 Aishwarya Sharma https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2434864866 I think the organization of your paragraph was a star. I say this because the way you organized it made me clearly understand you paragraph and the point you were trying to prove. I also think the sentence starters (transition words) were a star. I say this is a star because not only the sentence starters but the stronger words in you paragraph really made of paragraph stronger and better. A wish I have for you is to slow the picturing scene down a little and really explain. Overall, your story is really good!]]> 2023-01-05 16:31:36 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2434864866 https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2494115634 I thought that you did a great job on your essay but there are a couple stuff that’s missing. For example i feel like in the intro  paragraph the first transition word either shouldn’t be there or should’ve been  different. there was a couple misspelled words. But i really liked how you ended it and i liked your ceec paragraphs.]]> 2023-02-24 16:40:57 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2494115634 Bella G 29igiannacio https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2533493063 Hai Maple. A strength of your paragraph was your  strong transition words. They were the perfect addition to your sentences. I really liked the one “Undoubtedly”. Another strength was your evidence. It was very  elaborate and explained perfectly.  One wish would be to expand the  vocabulary. The words weren’t big and different.]]> 2023-03-27 17:34:31 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2533493063 29bboris https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2623567641 Hello Maple! One strength of your informative presentation “Converse Universe” was your graphic design. I thought that your cover slide perfectly demonstrates your beautiful design choices by displaying your images in an intriguing way, it really elevated your presentation. Also, another strength of your presentation was your title. I thought that having it rhyme was genius and a perfect way to capture the attention of your reader. “Converse Universe” is such a perfect title that encapsulates your research. Although, one suggestion I have is to change the font on your closing and hook. I thought it was hard to decipher your text which is a shame because it was so good.]]> 2023-06-14 15:38:34 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2623567641 Lyla G https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2623662869 I enjoyed your background as it was pretty and looked nice with your theme. I like the different shapes you include in it too. I also like your variety of pictures and how they are placed in each slide. The pictures are pretty and there are a lot of them. A wish I have is that you made your font a bit more easy to read. A simpler text style would’ve been a bit better for me, but your slides were very nice and you wrapped it up well. Good job!]]> 2023-06-14 17:48:45 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2623662869 One strength in your informational presentation was your photos. It made the presentation a lot more colorful and vibrant. The photos were all related to the topic and gave it a lot more character. Another strength in your presentation was your hook. It did a good job of bringing in the reader and making them want to read more. One thing you could work on is your history slide because some of the bullet points were a bit confusing to read. 29rlourenco https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2624570490 2023-06-15 13:31:19 UTC https://padlet.com/29tgoff/4quloe8hukp7kfd3/wish/2624570490