Google Sites Peer feedback 2016-2017 by 23Scohen https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49 Sprinkled with salt en-us 2016-11-23 15:55:47 UTC 2018-02-01 14:53:07 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Ninja.png Persuasive Essay 2/27/16 https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/156511971 Hello, viewers I'm back with Trevor's Wondrous Reviews, today I will be reading "Why Uniforms?" In this viewing I will be giving the marvelous writer Sam Cohen two stars and a wish! I will be commentating throughout it too! Let's start, shall we? First I will give my favorite my first star of the day, I like how you use your anecdote, also how you used that will be mentioned at the end of it. For example you say for reasons that will be mentioned later. My second star is I like how you ask questions. My last task is to give you a dreaded wish, and that will be I think you need to check your punctuation. BTW best writing piece I have ever read 10/10 would read again]]> 2017-02-27 18:23:56 UTC https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/156511971 Informative G.C.P Essay 6/8/17 https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/175771874 Hello Readers/Writers i'm back with Trevor's wondrous reviews!!!!! Today I will be reviewing and reading "Barbados Water Scarcity” by the man himself Sam Cohen!! On today's show i will be using the two stars and a wish format, its when you say two likes about a piece or more or their story and just comment some good thoughts and what you like about it. A wish, the dreaded wish, is when you choose a part about their piece that was eh, not so good. So lets start. One star I have in stock for you is, I really enjoy your beginning, I really like how your description makes me want to read it more and come to it like a moth attracted to a light. The second star I have is I really like, the evidence you pulled, I feel its valid, some people don't have very good evidence for what their trying to pull. Finally the dreaded, evil, horrendous wish. I wish you would make your piece more clear, at some parts you were missing a word, some a letter, and you didn't highlight some paragraphs and transition words.]]> 2017-06-08 17:28:44 UTC https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/175771874 Informative GCP Essay https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/175780392 Hello writers and readers! you should all know me, Gabriel's lane of genres !. Today i'm going to do two stars and a wish to one of my favorite writers, and a  "love able nudge", Sam Cohen! Now The first star. I loved the way you did the warrants it really showed liked you cared about this. You showed detail for the data. Now the second star. Your conclusion was amazing! you showed the touch back, to the heart/into the future,and zinger. Now The wish. I would suggest working on your anecdote better because it really doesn't make me hooked in. You need more detail. Now time to go hit the 'road' (get it?) cya next time!!!  -Gabriel Johnson

P.S-Your welcome ]]> 2017-06-08 18:22:07 UTC https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/175780392 Informative GCP Essay: 6/8/17 23wlewis https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/175781949 Hello peers from all periods.  I'm Wesley and Welcome to Wesley's Wonderful Reviews!  Today I am reading Barbados Water Scarcity, by this man, the writer on the spotlight today, Mr. Sam Cohen!  Let's start.  Your warrants, man, Wow!  What expressions there.  Star 2 is that you did express how bad this will become if nobody stops this.  My wish is that there could be a little bit of work for the anecdote.  Well I better be off, or my dad will see I'm here without asking. Bye!]]> 2017-06-08 18:34:47 UTC https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/175781949 GCP essay https://padlet.com/23scohen/4n3jvarjta49/wish/176099068 First off an improvement you could make is to better check your grammar. In the first couple sentences I can see many unchecked mistakes and some of it doesn’t make sense. One pro of your essay is your thesis. Your thesis clearly states that water scarcity negatively impacts Barbados, and, you used stupendous word choice. Also, I like the humor you added at the end. Even with humor, you still found a way to keep your ending persuasive and  kept the reader considering about helping the cause.
-D.J.

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