8-1 Mindmap B -- Constructive Criticism by Megan Wilkinson

mwilkinson2 — 2016-09-15 15:07:50 UTC

This is a great mindmap! Good sentence structure. A bit hard to read though

jtaylor61 — 2016-09-15 16:09:56 UTC

You should have chose a different color than the neon green.

cray3 — 2016-09-15 16:34:43 UTC

Learn to organize better.

Kind of scattered and hard to read

jejoiner — 2016-09-15 16:36:42 UTC

JuliannJones — 2016-09-15 16:39:08 UTC

I really like your ideas and the explanations, but I also think you should have organized your map more.

ndawson1 — 2016-09-15 16:42:07 UTC

Not close together and it's hard to read because of the colors

cruiz8 — 2016-09-15 16:42:19 UTC

Great sentences, but hard to read because of the colors

a little hard to read but great information and i like how you described transcendentalism!!!

dnewcomb1 — 2016-09-15 16:44:13 UTC

asingh9 — 2016-09-15 16:44:27 UTC

As everyone is pointing out it is hard to read, but besides that you explained everything very well and structured it nicely.

jvalladolid — 2016-09-15 16:45:55 UTC

Its was good but I couldn't read the light green one

dnoland2 — 2016-09-15 16:54:28 UTC

It's hard to understand because its kind of all over the place. <3

Good detail but it could be a little closer together.

mcampbell23 — 2016-09-15 16:55:17 UTC

Love it

ndawson1 — 2016-09-15 16:55:22 UTC

dmartinez5 — 2016-09-15 19:04:51 UTC

the color of the boxes make it hard to read the text

Your mindmap is great but maybe you could have added a bit more about the groups the Americans created

dserna — 2016-09-15 19:36:15 UTC

stsosie — 2016-09-15 21:22:05 UTC

This one is kinda hard to read because of the green, other than that it is pretty good.

spread out to much

pehawkins — 2016-09-15 21:34:14 UTC

The light green makes the words a lot harder to read. One of your boxes is "Americans create perfect groups" which when I read it, it doesn't give me the idea of it being a town trying to be a Utopia but something on a much smaller scale. Shakers shouldn't be directly linked to your "Perfect groups" either since they were a different type of community but came from the same root, which is religious beliefs. Same root but one not coming directly from another.

rbamburg — 2016-09-15 23:29:54 UTC

nisidro — 2016-09-16 01:55:39 UTC

organize it better and a little more information

It's hard to follow because of the color, and cause it's scattered

amartinez46 — 2016-09-16 02:48:01 UTC

wrowan2 — 2016-09-16 03:26:34 UTC

The green is barely readable needs a little more info but its still pretty good.

rvilla1 — 2016-09-16 03:36:04 UTC

You have good information but the way you set it up is hard to read.

sdelfin — 2016-09-16 04:28:26 UTC

Your mind map had good information but some of it was really hard to read.

eriesen — 2016-09-16 05:05:26 UTC

Can't really read whats in green.

jruiz6 — 2016-09-16 06:26:58 UTC

map was spread to far and a lot of important events were missing.

skandler — 2016-09-16 17:08:33 UTC

Needs more information on Utopian societies