https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0 Wednesday 19 January en-us 2022-01-13 17:25:43 UTC 2022-01-19 14:58:32 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998392397 I think the example 3 is a very good example of feedback that the student can use to improve their essay while not being discouraged to write the next. It gives also enough direction to the students for a better grade - however, I would have thought using some examples from the essay (or giving some examples on how to 'adopt greater analytical tone' would have helped the student more.]]> 2022-01-18 16:26:49 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998392397 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998400373 I thought the feedback is providing a good guidance on how to improve the essay but focuses mainly (if not only) on the negative aspects of it. It might be better to point out at least one or two good thing that the student did to encourage them in writing more.]]> 2022-01-18 16:29:51 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998400373 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998411265 I think this is a derogatory way to write a feedback - good that they use an example but it does not seem a constructive feedback to me (leaving alone whether the student would be too discouraged to attempt another work).]]> 2022-01-18 16:33:57 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998411265 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998422938 The feedback is nicely put - but in my opinion needed to use some examples from the student's work to point them out the details more. It could have also used pointing out some positive aspects of the student's writing.]]> 2022-01-18 16:37:55 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1998422938 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999219567 The way it's written is not wrong, but might not be helpful. Wording includes teaching jargon that links it well with the official assessment criteria, but, as a result, it's not specific enough, which makes it not very actionable.
Student might ignores this or seek further comments from the marker.]]> 2022-01-19 00:27:42 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999219567 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999224848 Feedback is too informal and inappropriate, even rude. It is also not actionable. Good idea to attach feedback to specific passages in the submission.
Student will feel discouraged and will rightly file a complaint.]]> 2022-01-19 00:32:20 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999224848 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999230411 Bullet-point list format looks effective. Positive feedback is well-worded and sounds encouraging. Suggestions for improvement are a little vague and not quite actionable.
Student might need to seek further comments from the marker, but will feel encouraged to do so.]]> 2022-01-19 00:36:48 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999230411 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999236026 This example seems to be most specific and actionable, but it doesn't include any examples of what was done well.
Student might feel discouraged. They'll have a clearer idea of how to improve, but might still need to seek further comments from the marker.]]> 2022-01-19 00:42:07 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/1999236026 tr172 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000590985 Bullet points can make it easier for the student to understand the different comments. It is also a good idea to add the positive part first, and the "suggestion for improvement" later on.]]> 2022-01-19 14:48:31 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000590985 tr172 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000598102 They could have put the basic grasp of economic theory as a positive point for instance. We do face some non-sense essays sometimes, and it might be better to explain the lack of coherence and vagueness in a more neutral manner]]> 2022-01-19 14:50:57 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000598102 tr172 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000602199 Also agree with more detailed information and providing examples. This could also be done in-text when correcting them online. I think in-text comments are also quite helpful.]]> 2022-01-19 14:52:22 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000602199 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000607320 Only negative comments, too short and with no examples. ]]> 2022-01-19 14:54:08 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000607320 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000610100 Aggresive language, focused only on the negative sides.]]> 2022-01-19 14:55:02 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000610100 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000614390 Balanced analysis, even negative points are described as ways to improve in the future. Bullet points help visualization.]]> 2022-01-19 14:56:32 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000614390 https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000620364 Better language and structure than examples 1 and 2. There are some comments to be improved. But still too negative.]]> 2022-01-19 14:58:32 UTC https://padlet.com/ashleylait/4d9phurc22u95nb0/wish/2000620364