What makes good feedback? by Dwi Astuti

They need to respond to only 1 hormone/ neurotransmitter/ phremonone

2025-10-17 03:44:14 UTC

adeleavila — 2025-10-17 03:45:09 UTC

Identify the specific behaviour explicitly at the start of the answer to have a stronger link at the end

Relevance

2025-10-17 03:45:17 UTC

Limited knowledge relevant to the question. The prompt is not fully addressed.

Specify which chemical messenger -> specify what is the effect -> give example/research -> link back to specific behaviour

2025-10-17 03:45:28 UTC

link back

2025-10-17 03:46:13 UTC

the student did not link back the information they use in the essay to "one behaviour"

2025-10-17 08:12:13 UTC

Be specific and show depth when analyzing the concepts. What is the problem? Why is this a problem? Impact to the study?

2025-10-17 08:16:08 UTC

I think the student did not explain in depth about their explanation especially the critical thinking, it is always good to explain why is this a problem when there's bias and why establishing causality can always prone to falsification

Terminology & Links

awilliams411 — 2025-10-17 08:17:00 UTC

Explain rather than state terms. Subject terminology was mentioned but please unpack the terminology - and define terms, even briefly, to show understanding.

Also, include line references/explicit links to the stimulus material please to make a connection between ideas and the text.

The students needs a very good thesis statement to hook. I also think they were too descriptive & did not do sufficient critical analysis. Maybe consider a better conclussion?

2025-10-17 08:17:33 UTC

2025-10-17 08:18:27 UTC

Give more detailed analaysis with the psychological terms. For example if choose the bias concept, what type of bias issues that happened in the research? Why it can cause that bias issue?

Demands of the Question

awilliams411 — 2025-10-17 08:18:29 UTC

Ensure the intro. is developed and the link to one human behavior is clear.

P2 B

2025-10-17 08:18:42 UTC

To strengthen your understanding, remember that researchers establish causality by manipulating the independent variable (IV) and measuring the dependent variable (DV) while controlling other variables. However, be aware that individual differences, such as being introverted or having unusually high or low self-esteem—especially among men—can affect the results and potentially weaken the study’s internal validity.

adeleavila — 2025-10-17 08:21:05 UTC

- State your argument clearly - so you can build on it and analyze the concepts chosen critically - which will also allow you to have a stronger link at the end

melsmangun — 2025-10-17 08:23:11 UTC

Your response indicates some understanding of the specified concepts, but please place more emphasis on explaining them in detail. In explaining biases, you may define and elaborate on each bias more deeply, making clearer connections to the study. In causality, besides focusing on internal validity, you may also discuss the manipulation of IV that will build the foundation of causal inferences.

2025-10-17 08:30:44 UTC

the student needs to make a deep analysis that link with the clear argument.