https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5 1.) Copy your claim from TTTC and AI and paste in the Subject of your padlet response. 2.) Using your writing rubric and using your Thesis Statement Refresher explain why you think your thesis is strong. Be specific and quote your own claim. And finally, talk about one area where your thesis is weak or could be stronger. en-us 2021-09-12 23:00:49 UTC 2021-10-19 01:28:22 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1817710142 I think that my thesis is strong because it: 
1. takes a claim
2. can be supported by evidence (but not directly stated in the text)
3. makes a significant point. 

1. My thesis makes the argument that war stories do not need morals, even though the audience wants to have them. 
2. My thesis can be supported by evidence because I used evidence that was relevant in my paragraph. I included a quote from Susan Sontag that said, "It is always the case that interpretation of this type indicates a dissatisfaction (conscious or unconscious) with the work, a wish to replace it by something else.” This phrase demonstrates the second half of my claim where the reader/audience want a moral for their own interest or good.  
3. I also believe that my claim makes a significant point. I think that it may give the reader an insight to Tim O'Brien's choice behind making a book that was so gory and depressing. 

In my claim, I argue for 2 different ideas, that war stories/art have value without morals, and that the audience wants there to be morals. ]]> 2021-10-14 17:01:23 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1817710142 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1817740172 I believe that my thesis is strong because it leaves room for explanation.  The first section can easily be related to the benefits and detriments of proper and improper analysis,  and the second section allows expounding on the ways in which O'Brien writes, and the connections his work has to the "desirable" form of interpretation.

I think that I could improve my thesis by re phrasing it so that there is not a context break in the middle of it. This would allow it to hit the reader more concisely and sooner into the essay, providing a more powerful hook.]]> 2021-10-14 17:14:25 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1817740172 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1817766814 I think my thesis is strong because it leaves room for explanation. I also connect both the article and the book in this claim. The words "alienated from meaning or god" come from the Against Interpretations article. In addition, the second half of my claim connects to TTTC when the soldiers were in the forest and they were questioning their very actions. I think that I can strengthen the beginning of my thesis where I am most general.]]> 2021-10-14 17:25:55 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1817766814 nreichman251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818342587 I think my thesis is strong because it is detailed and specific enough to get a good sense of what's to come in the following paragraph, while also leaving room for expansion and explanation. Additionally, having the word "true" in quotes, sets up an explanation of what defines true to O'Brien, aiding my transition into the rest of the paragraph smoothly. I also think that while my topic sentence refers only to The Things They Carried, it is easily applicable to "Against Interpretation" as well. 

I think the wording could be clearer and more concise. I also think that an element from "Against Interpretation" could have strengthened my claim. Lastly, I think that it could apply a little more into the rest of my paragraph, but I think it still captures the heart of my message.]]> 2021-10-15 00:02:57 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818342587 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818368771
I feel my claim is really strong because it is concise. Due to the fact that I think it gets my point across very directly, I am proud of it. The only thing I am worried about is whether or not the reader can understand my idea, due to how concise it is. Moreover, I am questioning whether I was too concise.]]> 2021-10-15 00:19:26 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818368771 abrod251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818429702 My thesis is strong because it reasons what my paragraph will be based upon in totality. It is very straightforward, and not factual, but can be interpreted to have a deeper meaning. It is simply a statement that can be unfolded well. The "so what" is present as well, connecting the themes of both texts.

However, I feel as if perhaps I could have improved upon my specificity in what negativity is present.]]> 2021-10-15 00:48:49 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818429702 nrajpal https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818469205 My thesis is strong because it uses a subordinating conjunction at the start of this sentence. My claim is very concise; however, it is vague and quite simple. I could have strengthened the claim by having more of a tie to the text.


-Nitya]]> 2021-10-15 01:07:11 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818469205 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818517309 I think my claim is strong because it is specific in how interpretation has effected our view of art and literature. It also is an arguable statement and not simply a fact or description. Personally, I think this answers a "so what" question and is interesting but that's obviously a matter of opinion, however I do believe it answers a "so what" question.

One thing that could be improved on this thesis is possibly a better structure of my words because I think I often have a good idea but can't transfer it onto the paper very well, so basically the clarity of my writing.]]> 2021-10-15 01:28:53 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818517309 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818578967 I think my claim is strong because it takes a side to whether or not stories should have morals or lessons. I justify why it shouldn't have a lesson or moral (how a person tells a story should be up to them and how comfortable they feel). 


I think it can be improved by having a SO WHAT. Something deeper to just storytelling is subjective. What does it being subjective and how telling the story let us know about the person? I also think that second sentence should explain more (why shouldn't it have rules, why is it subjective?) Though I think it is good, going a little deeper to why it matters would help it become stronger.

]]> 2021-10-15 01:55:26 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1818578967 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819410439 I think my claim is strong and overall, makes a argument, that both authors are exposing the truth. I do also think I need to be a little bit more specific in order for the reader to know exactly what I’m talking about. -Shiloh]]> 2021-10-15 11:25:01 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819410439 jhornick251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819493837 My claim is strong as it answers a specific argument that is based on the text. I believe that my thesis can be argued which allows the reader to have an internal debate where I sway them with my analysis. It answers the "so what" and uses a subordinating conjunctions to spread my idea. When I say with which Yet, as I look back at my thesis with critical eyes, I think it could have been even more concise and used better vocabulary to express what I truly meant to say. ]]> 2021-10-15 12:24:43 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819493837 jmoalemzadeh251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819512061 I think my claim is strong because it explains that it should not be interpreted but instead experienced.  It also adds a why which lets the rest of the paragph explain why it should be experienced.  I need to use context sfter my claim.  But the claim needs to relate to the context.

- Jake M]]> 2021-10-15 12:34:59 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819512061 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819515000 I think my claim is strong because it makes an argument that I am able to support.  It also includes different aspects of my overall claim which makes it stronger and easier to write about. It is very straightforward and you can really tell what my claim is.


Something I could do better is being more specific, as specific as I can be.]]> 2021-10-15 12:36:40 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819515000 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819528482 I think my claim is strong as I answer the question as well as outline my argument for the rest of the paragraph. The "truly absorb the meaning of such a story" part is strong, and I like the word "absorb" in this context. However, I worry that the sentence might be wordy or complex, and I think I could have done a better job on it.]]> 2021-10-15 12:43:52 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819528482 alewis2510_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819568750 I like my claim because I think that I went into depth about something that most people don't notice. I also think my claim really goes into the text and is specific to one part, however I can really go into depth about that one part and how it affects the entire chapter.

I also think that my claim can be supported by text evidence, however I think that O'Brien never actually says my claim in the text which means that my claim is my own. ]]> 2021-10-15 13:03:19 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819568750 gbishop251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819632827 I think my claim is strong because of the evidence and quotes I provide. I also make sure to include connections between the writings. I do think I could have had a better and more original claim but I feel I supported it well by including many quotes from both books.]]> 2021-10-15 13:30:59 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819632827 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819648082 I think that my claim is strong because it takes the side of an argument and it is very specific. For example when I say " interpretation takes away from the truth of art and literature" I am taking a specific stance on the matter of art being interpreted. Although my claim is concise, it reaches a conclusion based off of the main idea that I am writing about. 


On the other hand, my claim needs to do a better job of specifically reaching a conclusion. It also needs to do a better job of being unique. ]]> 2021-10-15 13:37:33 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819648082 egati251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819699348 I think my topic sentence is good because it is specific but also doesn't go into to much detail. It also included "silence" which is a quote that introduces my whole paragraph which shows that I know what I will talk about ]]> 2021-10-15 13:59:04 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819699348 nkramskiy251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819826959 1. I think my thesis is strong in the way that it clearly states my argument without using any unnecessary words. I also think that my thesis is interesting and fulfills the "so what" question. I also believe that my thesis can not be answered simply by looking at the book and it requires an essay to back up my claim.

2. I think that I could work on my word choice to make my topic sentence even better. This would exude style and make my reader even more interested in my topic.]]> 2021-10-15 14:53:09 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1819826959 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1820013965 I think my thesis is strong because it explains how one of the ideas generally so that in my paragraph I can do more into depth about it. I also think that it sets up my paragraph to support this. ]]> 2021-10-15 16:23:31 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1820013965 sleisman25_2 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1822167658 2.) Using your writing rubric and using your Thesis Statement Refresher explain why you think your thesis is strong. Be specific and quote your own claim. And finally, talk about one area where your thesis is weak or could be stronger.

I think my thesis is strong because it requires interpretation and could be argued ie "interpretations are unnecessary."  I could improve my thesis by adding transitional words. ]]> 2021-10-17 14:29:38 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1822167658 wtighe251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1822558172 I believe that my thesis is strong because it isn't too long and it gives a preview of what I talked about in the rest of the paragraph. When I say, "there is a theme of trusting the content of the story rather than the author who wrote it," I think that I go on to discuss that theme in the following two quotes and their analysis. Also, I state the point of the paragraphing by writing the two texts we were using in the claim. I could have done better by providing a little bit of context in the thesis by giving a small example of how the theme is expressed in the texts. ]]> 2021-10-17 22:04:54 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1822558172 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1823104062 I think my thesis is strong because it is specific, is able to be argued against, and acknowledges another way of considering an issue. It is a bit wordy so if it was more concise it would be clearer. ]]> 2021-10-18 03:45:51 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1823104062 jzwirn251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1823923168 I believe that my thesis is strong because it gives a specific point that answers the question of "so what?" My beginning thesis statement about TTTC talks about the idea of "silence" and how it relates to the soldiers. Then, I used my thesis for "A.I." in order to connect it to TTTC and my previous analysis. My thesis statement could be improved because at times it can be a bit too wordy, meaning that I could state the same point in fewer words.

]]> 2021-10-18 12:19:34 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1823923168 oaborn251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1824856504 I think that my thesis is good because I was able to make it arguable, and easy to support with evidence. I said that making a war story would give "the listener a false idea of what war is like", but you could argue that it does the opposite, because it might make the story more relatable. It could have been more specific, but I think that it was generally a strong thesis. ]]> 2021-10-18 17:33:35 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1824856504 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1824949085 2021-10-18 18:07:19 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1824949085 sweise251_1 https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1825726481 I think my thesis is strong because it is clear and to the point about what the paragraph will be about, but it could be more original. It follows a very generic template for a claim, and I think I could've been more original with the wording and format. The language I use, however, is used throughout my paragraph making it much stronger. The inclusion of phrases such as "for their existence," and "truly understand" also make it easy for me to connect to "Against Interpretation." It is generic, but not necessarily bad.]]> 2021-10-19 01:28:22 UTC https://padlet.com/ttelford5_1/44tdgqa9mimdk6n5/wish/1825726481