Feedback/feed forward by https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2 Write your feedback/feed forward en-us 2018-11-21 22:49:50 UTC 2018-12-01 01:53:14 UTC hello@padlet.com Feral Cats coratijones https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125375 Beate and Reidunn

Paragraphs and the structure of the paragraphs are used effectively. The introductory paragraph sets the tone and direction of the letter to the editor clearly.]]> 2018-11-22 22:11:38 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125375 Good use of paragraph structure. Each paragraph explores a supporting point to your argument, and has a clear topic sentence. https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125407 A range of language features are used, including emotive language for persuasive effect. 
A variety of sentences are used.]]> 2018-11-22 22:11:58 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125407 Feral Cats https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125480 Your use of persuasive language features is certainly effective as you have used emotive language which will create a strong response from the audience.

There is some repetition across the paragraphs for example 'neutered'. The last paragraph needs to be more than one sentence and the word 'because' is not a sentence starter.




]]> 2018-11-22 22:12:36 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125480 Nancy Combs Natasja Wright Feral Cats https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125622 He/she met the success criteria.  She/he has good paragraph structure and persuasive language is evident.  

Teacher could guide the student to read the document and look for repetition of ideas and what other information could be replaced by that.  

]]> 2018-11-22 22:13:46 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125622 HB Grp https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125642 The level of emotive language is too extreme. Possibly aim to use a wider range of persusive techniques.]]> 2018-11-22 22:13:56 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125642 https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125657 Use more variety in your sentence starters, rather than repeatedly starting with They. ....


]]> 2018-11-22 22:14:04 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125657 D https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125797 2018-11-22 22:15:40 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125797 Feral Cats https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125826 Good use of paragraphs to structure your different thoughts.

Nice use of persuasive language to try to get your point across. Very emotive.

 

]]> 2018-11-22 22:15:59 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125826 Objective vs Subjective https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125858 An important strategy in presenting an argument is remaining impartial. To understand how fact and opinion matter in expressing an idea see https://www.vocabulary.com/articles/chooseyourwords/objective-subjective/

]]> 2018-11-22 22:16:18 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307125858 There is repetition of two sentences. https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126069 2018-11-22 22:18:40 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126069 Ellina Tito https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126103 2018-11-22 22:19:03 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126103 The structure of paragraph - Cats threatening the balance of nature is a bit confused. https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126353 2018-11-22 22:21:47 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126353 The structure of your paragraphs are good. You have used a topic sentence to describe what you are discussing in your writing. Can you see in the third paragraph whether you have used a topic sentence or not? https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126431 2018-11-22 22:22:46 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/307126431 F https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/310018857 2018-12-01 01:53:14 UTC https://padlet.com/irene_andersen/3qwv2a9618l2/wish/310018857