https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq en-us 2020-12-01 16:26:25 UTC 2020-12-02 17:21:45 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980632084 2020-12-02 16:59:38 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980632084 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980635254 Dry as dust because they repeat goals to much]]> 2020-12-02 17:00:14 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980635254 danalvarenga1 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980641455 Repetitive phrasing]]> 2020-12-02 17:01:28 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980641455 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980642243 Dry as Dust because they keep repeating the topic]]> 2020-12-02 17:01:39 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980642243 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980643179 Dry as dust]]> 2020-12-02 17:01:50 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980643179 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980654114 Laundry list ]]> 2020-12-02 17:04:00 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980654114 danalvarenga1 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980661554 Track ideas that connect to the thesis statement ]]> 2020-12-02 17:05:27 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980661554 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980664451 Like stay on topic and make sure the paragraphs connect in a way. And try pre writing it]]> 2020-12-02 17:06:02 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980664451 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980668359 I think that the treatment that would work is pre writing  process and connect the paragraphs ]]> 2020-12-02 17:06:48 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980668359 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980671112 The second one/green highlight]]> 2020-12-02 17:07:19 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980671112 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980677450 Pre writing the sentence structure ]]> 2020-12-02 17:08:34 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980677450 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980702600 2020-12-02 17:13:35 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980702600 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980707116 Over sharer and laundry list is the one that I think ]]> 2020-12-02 17:14:19 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980707116 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980707349 Over-shared because it included a lot of details ]]> 2020-12-02 17:14:22 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980707349 danalvarenga1 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980709959 Over shares]]> 2020-12-02 17:14:54 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980709959 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980711368 Over sharer ]]> 2020-12-02 17:15:11 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980711368 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980711582 Over-sharer because they go on and talk about Harry’s life and doesn’t talk about the goals he set just his life]]> 2020-12-02 17:15:14 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980711582 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726075 Eliminate irrelevant details]]> 2020-12-02 17:18:09 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726075 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726181 2020-12-02 17:18:11 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726181 danalvarenga1 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726472 Connect back to the thesis]]> 2020-12-02 17:18:14 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726472 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726875 I would connect back to the thesis and delete details because there really isn’t any explanation for the thesis mainly examples.]]> 2020-12-02 17:18:18 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980726875 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980728484 Connect back to the thesis ]]> 2020-12-02 17:18:38 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980728484 https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980728569 2020-12-02 17:18:39 UTC https://padlet.com/wlong9/3hxfogxkhhyh00xq/wish/980728569