https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp What did you think? en-us 2018-02-15 16:12:29 UTC 2024-06-05 12:19:20 UTC hello@padlet.com harryabbott76 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/231983328 2018-02-15 16:15:34 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/231983328 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046034 Opening sentence feels too long. You also use the word despite twice in quick succession. 

]]> 2018-02-15 17:50:00 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046034 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046419 Sentences in 4th paragraph - nice language & description.
Word repetition in intro - amazing, experience, despite.

]]> 2018-02-15 17:50:32 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046419 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046424 Lots of semicolons not sure they should be. Some places where proof reading could have gotten rid of mistakes.]]> 2018-02-15 17:50:32 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046424 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046531 I enjoyed writing this review, but I feel like there are somethings I could improve on. I may have taken the bus to comma and semi colon town to many times.]]> 2018-02-15 17:50:42 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046531 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046927 "...make me not only believe, but emotionally invested in the characters..." - reads poorly ]]> 2018-02-15 17:51:17 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232046927 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232048000 "...for want of a better word, stunning" - Feels unnecessary and only adds to the word count]]> 2018-02-15 17:52:56 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232048000 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232048733 "The special effects involved with the birthing of the replicants are excellent because the physicality and make it look and feel like..." - this doesn't make sense]]> 2018-02-15 17:54:02 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232048733 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232050409 "... is a fully enjoyable experience" - not sure about this phrasing]]> 2018-02-15 17:56:46 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232050409 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232050957 Your conclusion is all one sentence, break it up.]]> 2018-02-15 17:57:34 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232050957 https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232051498 The final line is underwhelming. Not a great send off for an audience, particularly given how much you did enjoy the film.]]> 2018-02-15 17:58:21 UTC https://padlet.com/harryabbott76/3fcduzc6vgpp/wish/232051498