Personal Narrative Draft Revision Goals by Erica Woodson https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals Focus your energy and work time! en-us 2017-09-20 01:49:44 UTC 2017-09-26 16:27:56 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Dartstarget.png Ms. Woodson erica_woodson https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189358081 1) Adding transition words and phrases to show time passing throughout my writing
2) Adding details about the setting in my lead. ]]> 2017-09-20 14:45:59 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189358081 Mauricio https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189364155 1)Check for spelling  corrections done
2)varied my sentences done 
3)having a good ending done  

 ]]> 2017-09-20 14:57:06 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189364155 Jorge https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189365499 1. Add more transitions √



2. Editing 
]]> 2017-09-20 14:59:38 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189365499 Fiorella https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189365736 1. Add more clues about my problem in my story in the beginning (done) 
2. Adding more clues about the setting of my story in the beginning of my writing (done) 
3. Time to edit!]]> 2017-09-20 15:00:01 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189365736 Sebastian https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189365811 1. transition
 2. Right down a perfect ending that goas with my story 
3.check for spelling/corrections
4.Use paragraphs to organise my story 
5. ellaboracion on characters
6. Actions!!!!!]]> 2017-09-20 15:00:11 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189365811 Nirel nirelharmon https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189367422 1)Put more clues to what will become a problem in the beginning. DONE
2)Show why characters do things. DONE!!!!!
3)]]> 2017-09-20 15:02:56 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189367422 Naomi https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189367667 1.working on my grammar 
2.working on my spelling 
3.add clues to what will be a problem for the main character 
4.working on transition  ]]> 2017-09-20 15:03:19 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189367667 Alejandro https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189367736 1)check spelling 

2)organisation 

3)elaboration ]]> 2017-09-20 15:03:27 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189367736 Alana https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189369044 1)Transition words
2)Why did characters do things
3)add clues to what the characters problem would be in the future of the story  ]]> 2017-09-20 15:05:28 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189369044 Andre 2025_agarnier https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189369597 1.I ned to work on lead.
2.I need to work on punctuation.]]> 2017-09-20 15:06:23 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189369597 victoria 2025_vblohm https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189370110 1. work on the bigining and show what is happening
2. work on the ending and show the reader it is the end.]]> 2017-09-20 15:07:13 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189370110 Santiago https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189373824 1)organization
2)transition
3)craft]]> 2017-09-20 15:13:16 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189373824 Joshua https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189375268 1.I need transition words.]]> 2017-09-20 15:15:35 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189375268 Camille https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189377748 1)Create the pace of my story.
2)Slow down the heart of my story.


]]> 2017-09-20 15:19:26 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189377748 Michelle https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189377761 1)create the pace and tone.
2)show characters what they did 
3)spelling  ]]> 2017-09-20 15:19:27 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189377761 LAUR https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189380572 1] I NEED TO ADD MORE OVERALL.]]> 2017-09-20 15:24:22 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189380572 https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189384745 2017-09-20 15:31:17 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189384745 Charles Randolph Green https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189418911 I might need to work on some spelling. (I mean I need to do a lot of spelling 🙄)

]]> 2017-09-20 16:33:20 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189418911 Mariana https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189420119 1)I think i should make more powerful ending and give a sense of closure .
2) And i should really should work on spelling and grammar like commas and punctuation .  ]]> 2017-09-20 16:35:47 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189420119 Christophe https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189421631 1. I want to show what the story is about (friendship) by adding more action. 
2.
3.]]> 2017-09-20 16:38:37 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189421631 https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189421716 1)I need to add more diolage
2) I need to talk more about the others character.
3)I also need to work on paragraph]]> 2017-09-20 16:38:48 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189421716 Miles : https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189421904 1) I could use more transitions like putting phrases
2) I need to put craft like slowing down the heart of my story ]]> 2017-09-20 16:39:11 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189421904 Wonil :D https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189422871 1) i need to work on paragraphs because i have none in my story :0

2) i need to try and work in overall because my story is not that good of a important moment.    :(  but i like my story 👍😐

3)I REALLY need to add elaboration
:D]]> 2017-09-20 16:40:51 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189422871 Will https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189423380 1.I need to explain my setting more
2.I need and use different paragraphs in different spots.]]> 2017-09-20 16:41:42 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189423380 Carson Owens 2025_cowens https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189423595 1 Slow down the heart the story and ad more detail. 2 Tell where it is happening. 3 check to make sure that my verbs are present ,past ,and future tense. 4 check frequently of the confused words. 5Make sure of punctuation commas too.]]> 2017-09-20 16:42:06 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189423595 Hugues https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189423719 1- I need to put more transitions words like meanwhile or at the time.
2- I could work on my flashback and flash-forward by using transitions word like early that morning or three hours later
3- I could add more paragraphs.]]> 2017-09-20 16:42:19 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189423719 Evan 2025_egarnier https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189425236 1)Work on my ending.
2)Edit.

]]> 2017-09-20 16:44:50 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189425236 Maggie https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189426309 1. I need to make more transitions in my story so it can flow, and people know the time of when the story is taking place.
2. I need to add paragraphs to my writing when a new person is 
talking (dialogue). ]]> 2017-09-20 16:46:38 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189426309 Julieta https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189426557 1) Try to be more specific in WHEN the problem started, since I don't mention it in the story, so I should add a flashback.
2) I want to slow down in the MOST important scenes of the story.
3) I need to make the other readers PICTURE my story.
 ]]> 2017-09-20 16:47:01 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189426557 Emma https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189426622 1) I will work on using commas to set off the introductory parts of sentences.

2)I will work on showing where i am in my beginning]]> 2017-09-20 16:47:11 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189426622 Connor https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189433195 1)To make my lead closer to the main moment. 
2)To show not tell to make my problem so the reader can feel what I feel.
3)Adding how I can accomplished to not to be afraid of roller coasters. 
4) Add dialogue to make people understand what everyone is doing.]]> 2017-09-20 16:58:11 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189433195 Charles Randolph Green https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189856697 1. My first goal is to write more than 3 pages .

2. My second goal is to make this my best work.]]> 2017-09-21 17:18:05 UTC https://padlet.com/erica_woodson/revisiongoals/wish/189856697