Nick H. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2020 - 2021 by Nicholas Homer https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 21:41:46 UTC 2026-02-24 18:54:00 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f94d.png Snapshot Piece Feedback 27miannotta https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1074597659 One thing I really liked about your piece was your similes and metaphors. My favorite metaphor that you used was “The regret was a jagged rock in my soul,” and my favorite simile was “my head was popping like a fresh bag of popcorn.”
Another thing that I really liked about your piece is the ending sentences. I really like how you brought up your long term goals and showed how determined you were to get to the end.
However, one thing that you could’ve done to elevate your snapshot piece was to give readers that don’t know about lacrosse context as to what x and gle is. 

Overall, your writing piece was outstanding. I would give it a 96/96]]> 2021-01-11 15:45:43 UTC https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1074597659 from Dillon 27dlassman https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1074908920 one thing i really liked about your writing is how you said you were going want to start they came off hot using inner thoughts I also like how you explained the parts of the field named X one wish i have your writing is to add more details about what you feel and see]]> 2021-01-11 16:38:27 UTC https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1074908920 Aidan https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1513700945 i like your hook, it really hooked me to your essay and it made me want to read more
I like the way you showed proof for your evidence.
I recommend dont starts most of your sentences with sports


]]> 2021-05-11 14:57:58 UTC https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1513700945 Matt 27mmartucci https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1517978660 Star-One thing I really liked about your essay was the introduction paragraph because it really got me hooked me to your essay and I wanted to keep reading. Star- Another star I have is I liked how you described that scene of Calvin how he transferred schools and didn’t have many friends until he met Matt who gave him the courage to try out for the football team. Wish- A wish I have for you is I wish you would have made a 3rd body paragraph because I was really into your intro and body paragraphs but otherwise great job!]]> 2021-05-12 15:38:05 UTC https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1517978660 essay 27dlassman https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1518035415 One star i have for your piece is your hook i thought your hook because it was very descriptive i could really tell what was going on the field i liked how you asked the question how would you feel if you were the QB i liked the question because it really made me think of the players perspective. Another thing i liked about your piece was how you explained that Calvin was new and shy and that he wanted to play football but he was to shy to try but when he did he made friends i thought this was good because it explains how sports can help you make friends. One thing i wish was in your writing was no periods and i i did not know when to stop. But overall super good]]> 2021-05-12 15:50:32 UTC https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1518035415 Matt M 27mmartucci https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1610217585 Hi Nick I liked how you made the story about the kid named joe and he never have brushed his teeth before. I also liked the consequences of eating to much and what would happen if you did. One Wish I have though would be to elaborate on some parts more but other wise great job, good story overall.]]> 2021-06-16 15:15:11 UTC https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1610217585 Enjoyed it 27dlassman https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1612433962 I really like your creative writing peice. I thought it was funny and good .i really liked the pictures they were very funny. One star i have for you is the story about the b oh who has an iron stomach i thought it was very funny because there was so much war going on in his stomach that he needed a new one to perfectness him form getting hurt by the toothy battle. Another star i have is the ending because i feel you rap it up well by giving a quick summery.one wish i have is for the journal part to be a little more in-depth and detailed but are great]]> 2021-06-17 14:53:46 UTC https://padlet.com/27nhomer/38ijkuhad3if08j6/wish/1612433962