https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 16:48:45 UTC 2021-06-21 14:05:02 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f434.png Haidyn_B https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1074922490 I liked now you used this metaphor in your writing: “I can hear the faint sound of wet grass getting sloshed around, almost like a car driving through the snow on the side of the road.” I liked it because I think it made me think of winter and snow days.
I also liked how used this dash to dash phrase: “pretending-to-swim-in-the-ocean-but-actually-galloping-through- the-fields”  I liked this because it was a very good phrase and made me think of sloshing waves on the beach.
One this that I would change is this part: “In that moment my body gets thrown forward. My head smashed into the ginormous neck and luscious locks.” Because it made me get lost and didn’t really understand it. ]]> 2021-01-11 16:40:42 UTC https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1074922490 27cbenoit https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1079501292 I liked how you had a lot of simile's like,  "My hands were almost pouncing forward like a puma pouncing at it’s dinner." I liked the simile's because they were very powerful. I also liked how you slowed down your story a lot. It really made me feel like it was a powerful moment. My wish is that you added more inner thought. Your story could have been more powerful if you added more inner though.]]> 2021-01-12 16:59:00 UTC https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1079501292 27dharmer https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1517985417 Neela, your essay was so good and I really enjoyed reading it! Something I really liked about it was your hook, as soon as I read it I was so intrigued and wanted to read more. I loved how you described  “ Her cleats kicking up thinly cut bright green grass racing the clock to make her team proud.” I really loved that part and it was a really great way to start your essay. Another great part of your essay was how convincing your statements were. You really made good convincing valid points that would make anyone understand your point of view. I have no wish for you, your essay was amazing and I loved reading it!]]> 2021-05-12 15:39:34 UTC https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1517985417 27mcoppockhuegel https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1612425447 Hi Neela, I really liked your piece! One Star I have for you is your paragraph about Harry (Hairy). I thought it was very funny! Another Star I have is at the end of your first slide, I thought it was hilarious when you said, "If a decision has been made to leave it, I am sorry for your loss." I don't think I have any wishes for you, maybe better organization of your piece but, that's it. ]]> 2021-06-17 14:50:13 UTC https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1612425447 27mtaylor2 https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1617717358 Hi Neela, Star: I loved your writing piece. It was very cleaver. The pictures were so funny! The one of chewbaka was amazing.  Star: I loved the gifs were very creative and i loved them. Wish: I don’t have a wish because it was so good!  ]]> 2021-06-21 14:04:56 UTC https://padlet.com/27ndarmarajah/35tdfaz7msfi1bbp/wish/1617717358