https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz Malthus got it right- we are doomed? - What mark would you give this essay based on content? Why? Justify your mark with supporting comments. - What do you think of the essay structure? - How will this influence your technique? Top do's and don't en-us 2017-02-22 05:12:36 UTC 2017-02-22 06:55:32 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366337 Generally accurate knowledge and understanding. Case studies are provided, however, some points were very general and examples were not provided.
Introduction was concise but the writer's general stance on the issue was not provided which made it a bit confusing. Paragraphs and points were structured in a manner that was easy to read and the conclusion provided a clear understanding of the writer's views. 

Do: provide several facts and figures to back up points and also bring in information from other topics that we have covered eg: water scarcity etc.

Don't: Make points with no examples and not explaining what specific terminology means. ]]> 2017-02-22 06:27:09 UTC https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366337 https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366517 This person shows high K&N towards the essay through contrasting ideas by including neo malthusian and anti malthusian points. Turning the essay into an evaluation. Majority of the points made were general and can be improved by providing examples. 

The structure was well placed as it starts of with theories from both sides, examples to support both sides and a personal opinion. The personal opinion improves the marks as it covers the evaluation part. 

Graphs that were included were relevant to explain the theories, but it was not specified specifically. However, more graphs can be added when the author is using the connection between the industrial revolution and pollution, and also the relation between birth rates and population increase as it was mentioned in the essay. 

Do's:
- Refer to diagrams to support your points
- Make sure to keep in context 
- Explain any specific points (anything that is not generally known)

Dont's:
- Simply place graphs without referring to it specifically 
- Expect the reader to understand some specific terminology. 


]]> 2017-02-22 06:29:42 UTC https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366517 https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366687 Why? 
• Considered both sides of the argument.

• Slightly unbalanced argument; More points for the Anti-Malthusian theory. 

• No statistics in the use of case studies; Generalised. 

• Had a simple and easy to understand outline of both sides of the argument. 

• Most of the information is generalised without specific data.

• Used an appropriate diagram, but could mention the diagram in the essay. 


Structure: 
A good and logical structure to begin with both sides of the argument, and to evaluate the evidence to support both sides of the argument before offering your opinion and stance on the issue.


Do's:
• Evaluate both sides of the argument before offering your opinion.

• Use and refer to diagrams and charts to enhance the reader's understanding of the text and to strengthen your argument. 

• Name the case studies. 


Don'ts:
• Use colloquial language such as basically and reckons. 

• Generalise the date of case studies (use statistics).]]> 2017-02-22 06:32:03 UTC https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366687 https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366703 Shows a generally accurate understanding towards the essay. Shows well detailed points but some without any evidence and explanations. Used graphs but not too detailed. Shows a well balanced argument but his/her view point was unclear. He answers showing most aspects of the question. 

Do: Show more well detailed evidence and explanations to the points made. Use more examples to prove your point. Graphs must be well detailed and referred to. Use more number/statistics/data to make your point or when you are showing your evidence.


Don't: boost the oppositions argument too much that you contradict your own point. ]]> 2017-02-22 06:32:16 UTC https://padlet.com/kratz_b/2uubh1ivggoz/wish/155366703