Precision/Ambiguity

Patterns in Word Choice

Metaphor/Simile

Symbolism

Grow: You started using imagery by describing the flask but you could make it stronger. Maybe describe the actual object more or what exactly it symbolizes, such as it was just a drinking glass then a weapon.

Growth : add more figurative language

Grow: I do suggest adding a bit of variation in line length, the long length is fine and slow, but its always better to have variation for the reader.

Grow: You could possibly use some rhyming with that introductory phrase to keep the reader intrested

Grow: Write a little  more.

Grow: There shouldn't be a need to used a paragraph in each stanza.

The imagery really makes lets you feel how tough the speaker has it as a hard working student. Such a strict life style.

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Try to use more metaphors in your poem to make it sound like it is truly rigorous to maintain a 4.0

Grow: The idea of short verses can be powerful, try to add more variety in your structure.

Grow: you could use different sized sentences to represent the speed of your running.

Grow- i feel like you could add more sound in your poem

Grow: Maybe matching

Grow: Well, I suggest making the lines a bit shorter and adding the extra on the next line. It was a bit too long but a slow poem is pretty good.

Grow: Since you used some rhyming maybe you can try to rhyme more of your words.

Grow: Try and develop what we know about the speaker, you did well as to showing the love for the season the speak but providing a little more information could make the reader's understanding better.

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Grow: Lacks imagery and doesn't flow as good as it could

Grow: If you used repetition on some things it would help the reader feel the way a senior feels.

Growth: add more

Grow: Next time maybe write a little shorter and not like a paragraph, mystery can be

Grow: I for sure have to say that a bit more writing could definitely serve you well. Maybe longer lines in the beginning, try to add variation.

Grow:The imagery in the beginning was great and I feel like a little more imagery towards the end would give the poem a really good ending.

Grow: This poem needs to have some sort of rhythm and more meaning to support it.

Grow: Boyyy I think this is a great poem!

Grow: Even though you do a good job of having some rhyme helping the sound of your poem, some verses can be longer than others.

glow: you exceeded the requirements

Grow:try to seem more happy even though happiness is not the theme

But I have to say the experience is surreal.

Grow: I would suggest a few short lines in between. Don't get me wrong, its a good poem overall

Grow:use more imagery

Grow: There's not a lot to go off about the speaker involving some feelings would be great.

Grow- I think you could add more sound into your poem maybe saying "I smile although I hear my tears drip in the inside...one after another:"

Glow: There isn't the need to make two stanzas as two paragraphs nor make it like one to begin with.

Grow: Maybe next time you could use more rhyming because your rhyming actually makes the poem stronger

The rhyme in the begining really makes it

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You probably shouldn't add the last line because it's kind of intuitive, that's what you want the reader to think after they read the poem.

Grow: It needs more lines to make the imagery have some ephasis

Grow: It doesn't have connotation or any other rhetorical devices that is not even being used.

Grow: Your speaker I think is third person but the person it talks about is interesting maybe you should elabarate on that.