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      <title>Feedback-Descriptive Writing by year 9a</title>
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      <pubDate>2021-06-15 06:02:33 UTC</pubDate>
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         <author>year9aigcse</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629458073</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Composition: Give an account of a real or imaginary experience of witnessing a sensational show.<br><br>Give a peer feedback<br><strong>Content and structure-___/16<br>Style and accuracy-____/24<br><br><br></strong><br></div><div><br><br></div><div><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 03:58:07 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Hima</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629488403</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>(Bhavana's script)<br><strong><em>Content and structure- 15/16<br>Style and accuracy- 22/24</em></strong><strong><br></strong>I really liked how she took a different take on the topic and described everything with vivid details. The ending was also a good one :)<br><strong><br>Tanirika<br></strong><strong><em>Content and structure- 14/16<br>Style and accuracy- 21/24</em></strong><strong><br></strong>The approach was very well-versed, and the entrance was pretty descriptive. However, I feel like the description slightly decreased as the writing went further. A little more attention to other senses, and changing sentence structure would've made the reading experience a lot better! But you did a beautiful job describing the entire performance! <strong><br><br>Sathvik<br></strong><strong><em>Content and structure- 15/16<br>Style and accuracy- 22/24</em></strong><strong><br></strong>Absolutely fantastic description, and brought the medieval presence very strongly. Great use of similes and metaphors; added more value to the description. Punctuation is on point, however, sentence structure could be a little better. Try switching up the length of the sentences. Placing impactful sentences by themselves in a separate line will create more effect.<br><strong><br>Eeshan<br></strong><strong><em>Content and structure- 13/16<br>Style and accuracy- 21/24</em></strong><strong><br></strong>Really good sense of the setting and atmosphere. Paragraphs were arranged well and gave a good flow to the writing. The description was detailed, however, it changed to a narrative setting in the end. Vocabulary was apt and consistent throughout. Could improve a little more on the description from the character's point of view. A little more attention to detail will make the writing better! :D<br><br><strong>Hari</strong><br><strong><em>Content and structure- 14/16<br>Style and accuracy- 21/24</em></strong><br>Strong sense of atmosphere; the opening sentence itself was very descriptive and set the tone for the rest of the writing. The description was very detailed, and varying lengths of sentences created a deliberate effect on the readers. Although, a few more lines to the writing can make a strong ending. <br><br><strong>Shubham</strong><br><strong><em>Content and structure- 13/16<br>Style and accuracy- 22/24</em></strong><br>The writing was good, with a good connection leading up to other sentences. The flow was maintained throughout, however, paragraphs need to be added for more clarity. Can improve on the visual imagery. <br><br><strong>Nishi<br></strong><strong><em>Content and structure- 14/16<br>Style and accuracy- 22/24</em></strong><strong><br>A go</strong>od concept, and had a good flow throughout the writing. However, the transition to the 'concert' was slightly unclear in the initial stages. Can improve a bit more on the description about that. It will be less confusing. The sentences and paragraphs were sequenced well. <br><br><strong>Alina<br></strong><strong><em>Content and structure- 14/16<br>Style and accuracy- 21/24</em></strong><br>The beginning was a good start however, it got slightly confusing as it advanced to the concert part. A little more attention to the concert can make the writing better. The concert was described well, with all senses. It was very engaging, but some elements seemed slightly out of place. As mentioned in class, euphemism can be used to make some parts less impactful. <br><br><br><strong><br></strong><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:20:08 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Shubham (Bhavana)</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629488678</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong>Content and structure- 14/16<br>Style and accuracy- 21/24<br></strong>The scene was described very well but other senses have to be used more often.<br>Good use of similes and metaphors.<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:20:22 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Eeshan</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629488706</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>(Sai Bhavana)<br><strong>Content and structure-_15_/16-- Description of all settings described very well.<br>Style and accuracy-_22_/24-- grammar used very well with different words<br><br>(Sathwik)<br>Content and structure-_16_/16<br>Style and accuracy-_22_/24</strong></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:20:23 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Tanirika </title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629488778</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Bhavana's descriptive writing:<br>Content and structure-13/16<br>-The storyline is good, but the story can be more complex.<br>Style and accuracy- 22/24<br>-The text is very descriptive, filled with adjectives and a lot of visual imagery. The vocabulary is well-chosen and precise.&nbsp;<br>Hima's descriptive writing:<br>Content and structure-14/16<br>There are many well-defined images, with a variety of senses(feelings, sight, and what can be heard)<br>Style and accuracy- 22/24<br>Well-chosen vocabulary is used, which gave a lot of description.&nbsp;<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:20:27 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Hari</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629488831</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Bhavana's script<br>Content and Structure- 15/16<br>Style And accuracy - 20/24<br><br>Tanarika's script&nbsp;<br>Content and Structure -&nbsp; 14/16<br>Style and accuracy- 23/24&nbsp;<br><br>Eeshan's script&nbsp;<br>Content and Structure -&nbsp; 13/16<br>Style and accuracy - 20/24<br><br><br><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:20:29 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Anshul</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629488986</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><br>content and structure 16/16<br>style and accuracy 24/24<br><br>hima- 16/16<br>24/24<br>&nbsp;<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:20:36 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Nishi</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629488996</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Bhavana's script- Content and Structure: 13/16 (great description of the show, there is use of imagery mostly visual, structure could be better)<br>Style and Accuracy: 22/24 (vivid imagery, enhanced vocabulary, very detailed)<br><br>Hima's script- Context and Structure: 14/16 (very engaging, visual imagery used the most, relatable, more description of the show could be given)<br>Style and Accuracy: 21/24 (well chosen register,  accurate vocabulary used)</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:20:37 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Akshay</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629490901</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Bhavana's script- <br><strong>Content and structure-14/16<br>Style and accuracy-23/24<br></strong>There is a lot of description used which helps the readers visualize more. here was a lot of useof similes and metaphors<br><br>hima's script<br><strong>Content and structure-13/16<br>Style and accuracy-20/24<br></strong><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:22:04 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Dinish (Tanirika) </title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629491702</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><br><br><br>Content and Structure: 14/16&nbsp;<br><br>Style and Accuracy: 23/24<br><br>Good points: Good imagery and well-chosen adjectives which helped the imagery.&nbsp;<br><br>Things to work on: Use of other senses to give more variety to the environment.&nbsp;<br><br><br>Dinish (Sathvik) 16/16&nbsp;<br><br>23/24&nbsp;<br><br>Good adjectives, and very good scenery. Good uses of multiple senses as well.&nbsp;<br><br><br>Sriman:&nbsp;<br><br>12/16<br><br>Paragraphs weren’t used to the proper effect. Other than that, sentences were well crafted.<br><br>22/24&nbsp;<br><br>Good descriptions and use of senses. <br><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:22:43 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Joshua</title>
         <author>1131189</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629499040</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Bhavana's script-<br>Content and Structure: 13/16<br>Style and accuracy- 21/24<br><br>there was a lot of imagery, but in some parts the description were slightly repeated.</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:28:19 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Mahi</title>
         <author>m13sadhnani</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629509147</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong><em>-- Shubam:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-__14_/16</strong><br>-&gt; well-maintained structure, and carefully managed for deliberate effect.<strong><br>Style and accuracy-__22__/24</strong><br>-&gt; very detailed description about the place, characters, and a lot of visual imagery.<br><br><br><br><strong><em>-- Alina:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-_14__/16<br>-&gt;</strong> a good structure, well maintained, and carefully managed for deliberate effect.<br><strong>Style and accuracy-__22__/24</strong><br>-&gt; very descriptive, and great use of the 5 senses; I like the way she involved the pros and cons of the concerts. <br><br><br><br><strong><em>-- Nishi:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-_15__/16<br>-&gt; </strong>Structure is secure, well balanced, and carefully managed for deliberate effect<strong><br>Style and accuracy-__22__/24<br>-&gt;</strong> a very interesting storyline, with specific details, great use of vocabulary, and very good use of the 5 senses. <br><br>-<strong><em>- Dinish: </em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-_14__/16<br>-&gt; </strong>Structure is secure, well balanced, and carefully managed for deliberate effect<br><strong>Style and accuracy-__22__/24</strong><br>-&gt; very interesting story; very specific details about the event; a variety of vocabulary<br> <br><br><br>-- <strong><em>Eeshan:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-__12_/16<br></strong>-&gt; The structure is good.<strong><br>Style and accuracy-__21__/24<br></strong>-&gt; It is very descriptive; there is a lot of visual effects. <br><br><br><br>-- <strong><em>Hari:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-__9_/16<br></strong>-&gt; The structure good, however could be better.<br><strong>Style and accuracy-__20__/24<br></strong>-&gt; Good use of words and vocabulary, and a good storyline.<br><br><br><br>--<strong><em>Sathvik:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-__16_/16</strong><br>-&gt; The structure is very well maintained, and the story is very interesting. <br><strong>Style and accuracy-__23__/24</strong><br>-&gt; Very descriptive, variety of vocabulary, punctuations, and simile all are used very well! <br><br><br>-- <strong><em>Tanirika:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-__15_/16<br></strong>-&gt; Structure is secure, well balanced, and carefully managed for deliberate effect<br><strong>Style and accuracy-__21__/24</strong><br>-&gt; Consistent well-chosen register is suitable for the context.<br>I really liked her explanation about the performance, and there is a variety of vocabulary. <br><br><br><strong><em>-- Hima:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-__15_/16</strong><br>-&gt;&nbsp; Structure is secure, well balanced, and carefully managed for deliberate effect<br><strong>Style and accuracy-__22__/24</strong><br>-&gt; There is a great use of vocabulary and the structure is well maintained. <br><br><br>-- Bhavana:<br><strong>Content and structure-__14_/16<br></strong>-&gt; The structure is very well maintained and managed for deliberate effect. <br><strong>Style and accuracy-__22__/24</strong><br>-&gt; There is a variety of vocabulary and a lot of visual imagery.</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:36:05 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Bhavana</title>
         <author>12010571</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629510817</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong><em>Hima's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 14/16 </strong>(Great description of the setting, lot of visual imagery used, very engaging)<strong><br>Style and accuracy-22/24 </strong>(well-chosen vocabulary and proper register, I also loved the ending)<br><br><br><strong><em>Tanirika's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 13/16 </strong>(Precise vocabulary and good description of the setting was used, however, as the story progressed, the description slightly decreased. I think the introduction was really well-written.) <strong><br>Style and accuracy- 21/24 </strong>(Structure is well-balanced and an appropriate register was used)<br><br><br><strong><em>Sathvik's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 15/16</strong> (interesting story, fantastic description of the setting)<strong><br>Style and accuracy- 23/24 </strong>(varied punctuation was used, figurative language used really well, the use of short sentences make the writing more engaging)<br><br><strong><em>Eeshans's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 13/16</strong> (nice setting, good description, vocabulary could be improved)<strong><br>Style and accuracy- 21/24 </strong>(good use of similes and metaphors, structure is well balanced)<br><br><strong><em>Hari's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 14/16</strong> (great setting, good description of surrounding and all 5 senses)<strong><br>Style and accuracy- 20/24</strong> (well-balanced structure, slightly monotone)<br><br><strong><em>Shubham's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 14/16</strong> (interesting idea, great description of characters and setting, good use of imagery)<strong><br>Style and accuracy- 22/24 </strong>(proper register, well-balanced structure)<br><br><strong><em>Dinish's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 14/16</strong> (thorough description of individual elements of the show, great imagery used)<strong><br>Style and accuracy- 23/24 </strong>(variety of punctuation used, proper register, and well-balanced structure)<br><br><strong><em>Nishi's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure- 14/16</strong> (great description and imagery used, well-balanced structure)<strong><br>Style and accuracy- 22/24 </strong>(variety of punctuation used, proper register)<br><br><strong><em>Alina's writing:</em></strong><br><strong>Content and structure-14/16</strong>(interesting setting, well-balanced structure, writing is very engaging)<strong><br>Style and accuracy- 22/24</strong>(great description of all 5 senses, good range of vocabulary used)<br><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:37:15 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Shubham (Hima)</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629511798</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong>Content and structure-9/16<br>Style and accuracy- 16/24<br></strong>Storyline needs to be improved and not much is described.</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:37:56 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Alina</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629512040</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><br><strong>Hima's writing:-</strong><br>Content and structure-&nbsp; 14/16 <br>Her writing was engaging and creative. It is properly organized and ideas create a deliberate effect on the reader.<br>Style and accuracy- 23 /24<br>Her writing involves good use of vocabulary.<strong><br><br>Tanirika's Writing:- </strong><br>Content and structure- 14 /16<br>There were many creative ideas and images created in the reader's mind. There was a lot of description which made her writing engaging and effective. <br>Style and accuracy-22 /24<br>There was a lot of vocabulary used and her writing was organized.<strong><br><br>Sathvik's Writing:-<br></strong>Content and structure- 15/16<br>His writing was engaging, effective, and complex. Creates an effect on the reader through the development of ideas through the description and use of various words.<br>Style and accuracy- 23/24<br>Used varied sentences and writing is organized in proper paragraphs.<br><br><strong>Eeshan's Writing:-<br></strong>Content and structure- 14/16<br>His writing was engaging and effective and creates a lot of imagery. <br>Style and accuracy- 22/24<br>Writing is structured and uses a good range of vocabulary.<br><br><strong>Hari's Writing:-<br></strong>Content and structure- 13/16<br>There's a good use of vocabulary that creates an effect on the reader through the description.<br>Style and accuracy-&nbsp; 21/24<br>Writing is formatted in proper paragraphs.<br><br><strong>Shubham's Writing:-</strong><br>Content and structure-&nbsp; 14/16<br>Writing is complex, engaging, descriptive, and effective. <br>Style and accuracy-&nbsp; 23/24<br>It uses a wide range of vocabulary and is formatted in paragraphs.<br><br><strong>Dinesh's Writing:-<br></strong>Content and structure-&nbsp; 14/16<br>There are many well-defined and developed ideas throughout his writing which created an effect on the reader. The description created a picture in the reader's mind.<br>Style and accuracy-&nbsp; 22/24<br>Good use of vocabulary and writing is organized. <br><br><strong>Nishi's Writing:-</strong><br>Content and structure-&nbsp; 14/16<br>There is a wide range of words used and description creates an effect on the reader.<br>Style and accuracy-&nbsp; 22/24<br>Writing is organized in proper paragraphs.</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:38:06 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Vignesh</title>
         <author>1110090</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1629513583</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>content and structure-13/16<br>style and accuracy-19/24<br><br>hima's script-13/16(very good)<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-29 04:39:11 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Kanishk</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1631101375</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Tanirika's&nbsp;writting<br>Content and structure-13/16<br>Style and accuracy-22/24<br>Very good visual imagery.<br>Can club the paragraphs.</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:48:19 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Shubham Reddy (Tanirika)</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1631101513</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Content and structure: 13/16<br>Style and accuracy: 22/24<br>Good use of words and descriptions were great but structure needs to be improved a bit.</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:48:26 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Anshul</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1631104112</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>content structure 16/16<br>style and accuracy 25/25</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:50:25 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Tanirika&#39;s writing (sriman)</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1631104274</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>content and structure- 13/16<br>style and accuracy- 21/24<br>Her sentence structure and use of vocabulary can be improved&nbsp;<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:50:33 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Judith ( Tanirika&#39;s Script)</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1631104474</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Style and accuracy-21/24<br>Content - 22/24&nbsp;<br>&nbsp;<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:50:44 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Vignesh</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1631104918</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>content and structure:14/16<br>style and accuracy:19/24<br>tanirika's script:14/16(very good</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:51:03 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Sathvik M (Tanirika</title>
         <author>darthkitten2228</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>Content and Structure- 15/16<br>Style and Accuracy- 18/26<br>The writing was pretty good</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:55:21 UTC</pubDate>
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Nishi</title>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>Tanirika - 13/16 (Content and structure) and 21/22 (Style and accuracy)&nbsp;<br>The text is descriptive and well structured. There is use of visual imagery, however she could also stress on other imagery too. The vocabulary is precise.<br><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-06-30 03:57:45 UTC</pubDate>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong><em>Sathvik's writing:</em></strong><br>Content and structure:15/16 <br>Style and accuracy: 23/24<br>The story was very interesting, filled with adjectives and figurative language. Though the writing had a lot of content, which often turns into narrative writing, this was taken care of and there was a good amount of description. I could clearly imagine the scenario. <br><strong><em>Sriman's writing:</em></strong><br>Content and structure: 12/16<br>Though the idea of the story was good (the type of show), it could have been more complex, which would have made it more engaging. Breaking it into paragraphs&nbsp;would make it easier to comprehend.<br>Style and accuracy:&nbsp; 22/24<br>There is precise, well chosen vocabulary which provides a lot of description. The figurative language used was very nice. However, a variety of punctuation can be used to bring in more effect. </div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-01 03:34:15 UTC</pubDate>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>Content and Structure - 15/16<br>Style and accuracy - 22/24<br>Very descriptive, appropriate and precise vocabulary, great use of figurative language,  and there is use of visual imagery.</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-01 03:37:17 UTC</pubDate>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1632790793</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Sathvik's writing&nbsp;<br>Content and structure:14/16<br>style and accuracy:22/24<br>great use of visual imagery and the plot was interesting.<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-01 03:41:24 UTC</pubDate>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1632791890</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>content and structure:12/16<br>style&nbsp; and accuracy:21/24<br><br>very good<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-01 03:42:12 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Paridhi Gupta </title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1632793351</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong>Tanirika</strong>-<br>Content and Structure- 14/16<br>Style and Accuracy- 20/26<br>The writing was very descriptive and a lot of vocabulary is used. Sentence structure can be improved. <br><br><strong>Sathvik</strong>-<br>Content and structure- 14/16<br>Style and Accuracy- 22/24<br>The story line was interesting and uses a lot of descriptions.<br><br><strong>Eeshan</strong>- <br>Content and structure-14/16<br>Style and Structure- 20/24<br>Was very descriptive. Vocabulary can be improved <br><br><strong>Shubham</strong>-<br>Content and Structure-14/16<br>Style and Structure- 21/24 <br>Used a lot of Vocabulary and was very descriptive . <br><br><strong>Dinish</strong>-<br>Content and Structure- 13/16<br>Style and Accuracy- 22/24<br><br><strong>Nishi</strong>- <br>Content and Structure-14/16<br>Style and Accuracy-22/24<br>Used a lot of vocabulary and was very descriptive. <br><br><strong>Alina</strong>-<br>Content and Structure- 13/16<br>Style and Accuracy- 20/24<br>Was very descriptive and used imagery. But could have better Vocabulary. </div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-01 03:43:18 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Judith(Sriman)</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1633379375</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Content and Structure-13/16<br>Style and accuracy-22/24<br><strong>Judith( Sathivk)<br></strong>Content and Structure- 14/16<br>Style and accuracy- 23/24</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-01 13:02:32 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Anshul(sriman)</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1634654211</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>content and stucture 15/16<br>style and accuracy 23/24&nbsp;<br>eeshan<br>16/16<br>23/24&nbsp;<br>hari<br>14/16<br>24/24<br>shubham<br>16/16<br>24/24<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-02 07:54:19 UTC</pubDate>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong>Alina: <br><br>13/16 content and structure : <br><br></strong>Good uses of words to describe the setting. Story didn’t go into narrative and did well to show imagery.<strong><br><br>21/24 style and accuracy </strong><br><br>Could use more punctuation but otherwise good. <br><br><br>Nishi: <br><br>14/16 content and structure: <br><br>Very good description of setting. <br><br><br><br>22/24: Style and accuracy: <br><br>Few spelling and grammar issues, but other wise well made sentences with variety. <br><br><strong>Shubham: </strong><br><br>Good descriptions of actions made by characters, and good adjectives used. <br><br>13/16<br><br><br>Environment wasn’t very well described, reader isn’t sure about the setting. Other senses could be used more. Could use more variety of sentences. Narrative is more than Description. <br><br>21/24<br><br><strong>Hari</strong>:- 15/16 content and Structure <br><br>Good descriptions, especially the stadium. <br><br>22/24: few grammar mistakes and needs more variety of sentences but otherwise well made with clear imagery. <br><br><br><strong>Eeshan: </strong><br><br>14/16 content and structure&nbsp;<br><br>Good structure and content is well made with lots of descriptive words.&nbsp;<br><br>Might need more variety of vocab.&nbsp;<br><br>21/24 style and accuracy&nbsp;<br><br>Good use of similes and metaphors which added style to the text.&nbsp;</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-02 07:59:55 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Nishi (Eeshan)</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1634659429</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>13/16: Content and Structure<br>20/24: Style and Accuracy<br><br>Shubham:<br>14/16: Content Structure<br>21/24: Style and Accuracy<br><br>Dinish:<br>14/16: Content and Structure<br>22/24: Style and Accuracy</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-02 08:00:49 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Shubham</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1634659596</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>(Sathvik)<br>Content and structure: 13/16 Style and accuracy: 22/24<br>Great use of words. A bit more description might be better.<br>&nbsp;(SRIMAN) Content and structure- 13/16Style and Accuracy- 21/24<br>Good structure and good use of figurative language.Other sense have to be used more often.<br>(Tanirika)<br>Content and structure: 13/16<br>Style and accuracy: 22/24<br>Good use of words and descriptions were great but structure needs to be improved a bit.<br>(Hima) <br><strong>Content and structure-9/16<br>Style and accuracy- 16/24<br></strong>Storyline needs to be improved and not much is described.<br><br>(Hari)<br>Content and structure: 12/16 Style and accuracy: 20/24<br>Didnt give the idea of a 'sensational show' and other senses have to be used.<br><br>(Dinish)<br>Content and structure: 13/16 Style and accuracy: 23/24<br>Great use of imagery throughout gives the idea of a 'sensational show'.Sentence structure needs to be imroved.<br><br>(Nishi)<br>Content and structure: 12/16 Style and accuracy: 20/24<br>Good use of figurative language but the idea of a 'sensational show' wasnt evident.<br><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-02 08:01:02 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Vignesh</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1634660227</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>content and structure:12/16<br>style and accuracy:19/24<br>eeshan: very good<br><br>content and structure:10/16<br>style and accuracy:15/24<br>sriman: average<br><br>content and structure:13/16<br>style and accuracy:20/24<br>hari: could have done better<br><br>content and structure:12/16<br>style and accuracy:19/24<br>shubham: good<br><br>content and structure:13/16<br>style and accuracy:21/24<br>alina: very good</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-02 08:01:50 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Suhas</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1634669793</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong>(Eeshan)</strong> The content was good and the title was unique.<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Content and structure: 13/16<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Style and Accuracy: 18/24<br><br><br><strong>(Shubham)</strong> The storyline was good. The content was unique and the use of&nbsp; &nbsp; vocabulary was good&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; <br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;Content and structure:15/16<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;Style and accuracy: 22/24<br><br><br><strong>(Hari)</strong>The use of vocabulary was good but the story needed a bit of change<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;Content and structure:12/16<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;Style and accuracy: 19/24<br><br><br><strong>(Dinish)</strong>The use of vocabulary was wonderful but the ending of the writing could be better<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Content and structure:15/16<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Style and accuracy:23/24 <br><br><strong>(Alina)</strong> The storyline was good and the sentence structure was put to good use.<br>Some words could be replaced.<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Content and structure: 15/16<br>&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Style and accuracy:23/24</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-02 08:13:59 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Alina</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/year9aigcse/2shj33m54tkhwqto/wish/1636867707</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<div>Judith<br>Content and structure: 15/16<br>Style and accuracy: 22/24</div>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2021-07-05 05:15:55 UTC</pubDate>
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