Hello my name is Milson Barahona

I was born on February 24, 2001. I am 23 years old.

I am from Teguscigalpa, Kennedy. I like to sleep, listen to music and play soccer. I also live

with my brother and he is the only brother I have

and I have a dog named Dolly she is very small an furry. I also have a dog and my hobbies are watching movies.

New Versions

Hello my name is Milson Barahona

I was born on February 24, 2001. I am 23 years old.

I am from Teguscigalpa, I live colonia kennedy, I like to sleep, listen to music and play soccer, live with my brother and he is my only sibling and i have a pet named Dolly, she is very small and flufyy and my hobbies include watching movies and in this class i want to improve my English and my favorite color es red.

Analysis

The analysis that i can observe is the shift to using connectors and new words that I don't know as well as the fluency in connectors in to sometings more fluid an coherent.

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  Old version:

My name is Denises Sagrario Motiño,  I'm 24 years old ,I'm from Talanga  and live Talanga in the Col.Giron

I was born in junio 14 2000 , I live with my parents, I have 3 Sister,  3 brothers.

I have small dog, a rabbit and 2 cats. i  have a small dog calle Exxi , a rabbit called Cramberry and 2 cats called Izu and Nony.

My hobbies is reading book and watching series. My expectations from the class is to learn more, to take the class .

My favorite food is burgués,  chicken and fries.

New version:

My name is Denises Sagrario Motiño,  I'm 24 years old ,I'm from Talanga  and live Talanga in the Col.Giron

I was born in junio 14 2000 , I live with my parents, I have 3 Sister,  3 brothers.

I have a small dog, a rabbit and 2 cats. i  have a small dog called Exxi , a rabbit called Cranberry and 2 cats called Izu and Nony.

My hobbies are reading books and watching series. My expectations from the class is to learn more, to take the class .

My favorite food is burger, chicken and fries.

Analysis:

Structure: The information is somewhat disorganized, writing: There are confusing sentences and errors of agreement.

 Spelling: It has several spelling errors.

My name is Euarado Flores, i’m 23 Years old i’m from Talanga and i live in the Kennedy, i was born in may 11, 2001, i live with my parents and sisters, i have 3 sisters and 1 brother, i don’t have pets, my hobbies are playing soccer and watching anime, my expectations from the class are to leam because, i hardly know and to pass, my favorite food is roast beef and chicken with slices

New version

My name is Eduardo Flores.

I’m 23 years old and I’m from Talanga but, I live in la Kennedy.

I was born on May 11, 2001. Actually I live with my parents and siblings, I have three sisters and one brother.

I don’t have any pets

My hobbies are playing soccer, watch anime and going to the gym.

My expectation for this class is to be able to learn English and pass my class with good grades.

My favorite food is roast beef and fried chicken with plantain slices.

I started my day in the center of tegucigalpa by taking the bus to the park, where enjoyed a peaceful walk. Then I visited the museum on my motocicle and spent the afternoon strolling through the shopping malls: On my way back, I went to the cinema. The next day. Zexplored the city on map motrade and met up with friends at a cote. After that, Iwant to work and returned on my moto arden The weekend wasmore relaxed walking through the parks and chatting with elderly rendu

if I ended the week driving to the center for shopping and socialicing with coworkers, It was an activate and fulfilling week in Teguscigalpa

Lastly during my walk,I feel very happy , in good spirits and tour the city more.