https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh Type your answer about the prompt then comment on one of your classmate's responses; make sure you also type your name at the end of your comment. en-us 2021-03-07 06:18:39 UTC 2021-03-08 21:55:05 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284570599 to improve my final essay is to give more details and add more information in my E.]]> 2021-03-08 21:24:49 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284570599 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284570675 To improve my essay, I will need to add more details and information to my E. ]]> 2021-03-08 21:24:50 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284570675 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284570916 Something I will do to improve my essay is to add more details in my body #2, and maybe even fix and explain my evidence more. I might also need to fix and change some of my concluding sentences in some of my body paragraphs. ]]> 2021-03-08 21:24:55 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284570916 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571241 Something I will do to improve my draft is I plan to add more details and help make it easier for the reader to understand and make sure that they get where I'm coming from my point of view. Also, making it easier for the reader to find where I got my information from so that they can have a more clear mind of why kids have a big impact in technology today.]]> 2021-03-08 21:25:01 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571241 ajackson226 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571265 My final conclusion needs improvement because I still need to finish it. I'm gonna come to after school tutoring to improve it.]]> 2021-03-08 21:25:02 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571265 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571602 To improve my essay, I will need to add 2 more G E"s on each of my body paragraphs and do my conclusion.]]> 2021-03-08 21:25:08 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571602 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571827 Something that I will do to fix my essay is to give more information and explain as much as I can from the provided sources]]> 2021-03-08 21:25:12 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284571827 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284572017 One thing that I will improve with my essay is my final conclusion by adding more details to it and keep reading it over and over and see if I have any mistakes so it makes sense to the reader.]]> 2021-03-08 21:25:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284572017 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284574680 How I will improve my essay draft before the final submission is to make sure I stick with one thing for each paragraph and not talk about something else so it stays organized and be clear on how I explain things. ]]> 2021-03-08 21:25:55 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284574680 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575204 I could improve my essay by making it more detailed and add more evidence to it.]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:04 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575204 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575211 To improve my essay I would put more details in my G's and E's .]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:04 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575211 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575703 Something I would improve in my essay is to add a little bit of extra statements in my conclusion.]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:14 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575703 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575737 I can improve my essay by doing my conclusion and putting more facts and details in my body 3. ]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:15 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575737 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575851 The one thing that is wrong with my essay is that i need to finish it and how i' going to finish it i going to tutoring to get help with it  ]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:17 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284575851 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284576457 something i will do to improve my draft is fix any thing and everything and try to make it better so i wont get a super bad grade ]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:31 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284576457 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284577205 I will add more details to the concluding paragraph.]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:46 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284577205 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284577693 something that I would do to improve my essay is to get more evidence so the readers can understand more. I would also fix some of my sentences and have better words on my essay to make it better.]]> 2021-03-08 21:26:57 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284577693 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284578139 In order to improve my essay i have to do my conclusion and add a little more detail to all of the body]]> 2021-03-08 21:27:07 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284578139 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284578657 In order to improve my essay I still need to work on my conclusion because it is not complete and i need to do some fixing on it.]]> 2021-03-08 21:27:18 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284578657 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284580369 I would add more details on my body paragraphs and my G and E's]]> 2021-03-08 21:27:54 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284580369 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284583856 In order to improve my essay I'll need to add more details and be more specific.]]> 2021-03-08 21:29:05 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284583856 ajackson226 https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284605981 GO TO TUTORING FOR HELP]]> 2021-03-08 21:36:28 UTC https://padlet.com/jmateo/2e5sp6hp4ul626rh/wish/1284605981