AP Essay Reflections by Kyle Williams

AP Essay Reflections by Kyle Williams https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n “So few people are really aware of their thoughts. Their minds run all over the place without their permission, and they go along for the ride unknowingly and without making a choice.” en-us 2019-04-30 14:32:58 UTC 2023-06-29 11:00:42 UTC hello@padlet.com conclusions were good on most essays mcdangelo0226 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474744 2019-04-30 15:06:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474744 introduction https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474819

]]> 2019-04-30 15:06:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474819 introduction https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474835 really started off strong with my introduction]]> 2019-04-30 15:06:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474835 Creativity asdaniels0906 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474910 I am good at writing when there is no prompt LMAO BRB #ENDgAME]]> 2019-04-30 15:06:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355474910 Fletcher Archibald https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475005 I had strong word choice and selection of evidence to use to support my claim]]> 2019-04-30 15:07:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475005 the people in my group https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475038 2019-04-30 15:07:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475038 Allysa Knopf https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475256 I had good flow from sentence to sentence, as well as strong evidence for my thesis. ]]> 2019-04-30 15:07:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475256 Most people had no trouble finding quotes for evidence. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475314 2019-04-30 15:07:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475314 3rd Body Paragraph - Ilse https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475384 Information and quality of analysis fizzled out by the 3rd body paragraph.

]]> 2019-04-30 15:07:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475384 Mackenzie Pagel https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475549 I embed quotes well and make sure they are relevant to the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475549 syntax, word choice, and overall tone could've been better for most essays mcdangelo0226 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475570 2019-04-30 15:08:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475570 A lot of people did not go in depth into their analysis and just need to elaborate more https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475583 2019-04-30 15:08:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475583 nothing I am perfection https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475601 getting the first ever 6 on the ap lit test]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475601 What you can work on... https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475779 ThE QuAlItY Of YoUr InFoRmAtIvE aNaLySiS AfTeR YoU qUOtE yOuR eViDeNcE.

http://bit.ly/MrsWilliamsInstagram]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:25 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475779 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475816 I felt our essay flowed together very well for being written by 4 different people. Also, the conclusions I read were good and wrapped up the essays and brought in the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475816 Dallas Summers https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475930 I explained my evidence well and it made sense.]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475930 an essay with a prompt to me is like The Avengers to Thanos, im defeated in the end asdaniels0906 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475975 2019-04-30 15:08:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475975 Nick n1ch0l45j0n35 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475989 Evidence was well-embedded, but the main distinction comes in the form of in-depth and specific analysis.]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:47 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355475989 Essay Strengths - Sean Ignacio https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476045 I can usually understand and explain the answer to the thesis statement. ]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476045 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476050 I have good evidence along with good analysis.]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476050 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476064 Did a good job elaborating on evidence and tying it back to the prompt]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476064 Introductions - Ilse https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476090 Most of he introductions had really amazing hooks and perfectly elaborated on the topic.

]]> 2019-04-30 15:08:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476090 Analysis https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476126 2019-04-30 15:08:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476126 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476168 I fe]]> 2019-04-30 15:09:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476168 Some of the body paragraphs had too many quotes and the explanation wasn't as good as it could have been. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476173 2019-04-30 15:09:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476173 Discussed the evidence and got into depth https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476275 2019-04-30 15:09:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476275 Mackenzie https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476325 I should go further into depth, quicker, I spend a lot of time saying the same thing and not going any deeper than just the surface.]]> 2019-04-30 15:09:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476325 The spelling was pretty accurate https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476416 2019-04-30 15:09:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476416 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476532 explain evidence more thoroughly ]]> 2019-04-30 15:09:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476532 Most of the introductions were pretty good and introduced the topic of the essay. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476679 2019-04-30 15:09:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476679 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476717 Transitioning paragraphs]]> 2019-04-30 15:09:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476717 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476734 Transitioning paragraphs ]]> 2019-04-30 15:09:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476734 Not communicating with group members https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476743 2019-04-30 15:09:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476743 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476748 Transitioning paragraphs]]> 2019-04-30 15:09:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476748 Jared Kaufman https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476763 Our essay flowed from evidence to explanation and addressed the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476763 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476792 Used great vocabulary to show the tone and most essays were well written by four people.]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476792 senioritis https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476803 2019-04-30 15:10:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476803 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476820 Add more evidence and analyze it better.]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476820 I can work on focusing on the task at hand LMFAO asdaniels0906 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476840 2019-04-30 15:10:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476840 Mackenzie https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476851 I need to improve the clarity of my thoughts and make them more concise. I could also improve transitions.]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476851 Allysa Knopf https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476866 My thesis could be stronger and make sure to tie it back ]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:11 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355476866 Mrs. Williams Phone https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477044 This seems to be a recurring problem

]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477044 Nick n1ch0l45j0n35 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477062 Mostly relating back to the prompt and the thesis overall. ]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:31 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477062 making it interesting https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477071 2019-04-30 15:10:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477071 People could focus on putting forth more effort on the actual AP test. I think because this was a practice thing, people didn't really try, which is why even simple things like word choice were lacking. mcdangelo0226 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477105 2019-04-30 15:10:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477105 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477124 Some of the intros were vague and weak; people would use evidence but not explain it ]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477124 Essay Weakness - Sean Ignacio https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477277 I think that i tend to lose focus when writing the essays and I tend to go off-track.]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477277 Connection https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477288 Connecting the evidence and explanation back to the thesis and prompt. ]]> 2019-04-30 15:10:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477288 conclusions were boring and vague https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477336 2019-04-30 15:10:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477336 Lacked analysis on some of the evidence used. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477357 2019-04-30 15:11:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477357 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477380 Surface level writing]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477380 Evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477385 Incorporating evidence into my body paragraphs so that it flows]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477385 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477432 Starting paragraphs with a strong hook]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477432 cONCLUSIONS https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477459 2019-04-30 15:11:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477459 Nick n1ch0l45j0n35 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477462 Specifically relating to the prompt]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477462 ONCLUSIONS https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477474 2019-04-30 15:11:31 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477474 CONCLUSIONS https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477494 Most of the conclusion were fairly weak...

]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477494 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477598 I need to do better with the ]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477598 Sesqupedalian klwilliams4 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477629 ...be one of these if you know what the words mean]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:38 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477629 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477664 I need to do better with the transitions so things will make more sense throughout the essay.]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477664 Ses klwilliams4 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477740 2019-04-30 15:11:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477740 different writing styles don't blend well https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477764 2019-04-30 15:11:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477764 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477779 Embedding quotes was well done in most essays]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477779 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477813 Conclusions were sometimes copy and pasted intro paragraphs]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477813 Sesquipa klwilliams4 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477892 2019-04-30 15:11:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477892 Sesquipedalian klwilliams4 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477907 ...but don't be pendantic or obnoxious with your vocabulary]]> 2019-04-30 15:11:54 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477907 Jared Kaufman https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477978 We probably could have shortened ours ]]> 2019-04-30 15:12:00 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355477978 Sean Ignacio https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478012 i think that I need to focus more on understanding the passage and simplify the essay more]]> 2019-04-30 15:12:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478012 Not summarizing and explaining https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478053 2019-04-30 15:12:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478053 Conclusion - Ilse https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478157 My conclusions become repetitive so I need to bring in new phrases and insight.]]> 2019-04-30 15:12:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478157 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478159 conclusions & sentence flow]]> 2019-04-30 15:12:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478159 Flow throughout the entire paper https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478177 2019-04-30 15:12:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478177 Thanos https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478331 I am inevitable]]> 2019-04-30 15:12:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478331 Fletcher Archibald https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478586 I need to work on going in depth on my analysis, and not leaving it halfway or not present. As well with the analysis, presenting more commentary/explanation.]]> 2019-04-30 15:12:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478586 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478646 Using evidence and EXPLAINING IT]]> 2019-04-30 15:13:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478646 First Body & Intro https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478814 Very strong aspects of most essays

]]> 2019-04-30 15:13:22 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355478814 Tony Stark https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479120 "and I am Iron Man" *dies*]]> 2019-04-30 15:13:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479120 Jared Kaufman https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479350 From the essays I read, most could have elaborated more or been less vague.]]> 2019-04-30 15:14:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479350 not spoiling endgame mcdangelo0226 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479362 2019-04-30 15:14:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479362 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479954 syntax & avoiding plot summaries. ]]> 2019-04-30 15:15:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355479954 @to the person who spoiled Endgame, I already knew he was going to die, but this is for you https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355480362 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fOfLtsseEAo

]]> 2019-04-30 15:16:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355480362 @to the person who spoiled Endgame https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355480398 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=egm8vgonrkw]]> 2019-04-30 15:16:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355480398 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355480704 deeper analysis, y'all]]> 2019-04-30 15:17:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355480704 Whoever spoiled endgame, you're moms a hoe https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355482066 2019-04-30 15:19:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355482066 asdaniels0906 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355483202 2019-04-30 15:22:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355483202 hjh asdaniels0906 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355484304 2019-04-30 15:24:23 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355484304 None https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355485556 They are all horrible]]> 2019-04-30 15:26:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355485556 ENDGAME SPOILERS!!! https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355486194 2019-04-30 15:27:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355486194 Analysis bdbaer0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510627 I noticed that the essays I read did a good job embedding quotes and giving thorough analyses.

Also, my group did a pretty good job :)]]> 2019-04-30 16:15:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510627 Intros-Jessica Conway https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510745 Most of the intros had a strong tag and thesis statement. A lot of the group essays had good background info too that really helped you understand the passage/poem they were given. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:15:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510745 arczap0314 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510913 Not enough evidence]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510913 Claire Sorensen clairesorensen234 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510947 All the essays I graded had sufficient evidence present.]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510947 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510967 Most essays used very good pieces of evidence]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:14 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355510967 Strengths https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511031 2019-04-30 16:16:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511031 Most of the essays connected to the thesis, and included a good connection. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511058 2019-04-30 16:16:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511058 Strengths in what I wrote https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511152 TAG

]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511152 cdspinazzola0118 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511160 Most essays used flow quotes very well, as well as sophisticated diction.]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511160 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511169 Most essays had a strong conclusion and good flow quotes.]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511169 Claire Sorensen clairesorensen234 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511219 While there was enough evidence, it was not adequately analyzed and explained.]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:49 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511219 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511271 Needed deeper analysis]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511271 shaila kostman https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511285 good flow, use of diction, and I felt like I had a pretty good analysis]]> 2019-04-30 16:16:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511285 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511333 I feel like I was good at relating my evidence to the ]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511333 Laura Glesener dexpere https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511339 There was a good use and incorporation of evidence along with a solid explanation which provided better insight.

]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511339 xblamoreux0320 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511397 Alot of the essays used strong diction and didn't sound elementary -xanadu]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:13 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511397 Cameron Quagge https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511443 The essay I read was strong, complex, and written well. The group elaborated with their analysis of the piece and ended their essay well. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511443 every group's seemed quite repetitive, even ours hmluff0925 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511480 2019-04-30 16:17:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511480 Nina Heins https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511506 weaknesses I noticed were some really short and incomplete body paragraphs. Some people just didn't finish their part of the essay and it brought the overall score down]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:31 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511506 Transitions- Jessica Conway https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511543 Surprisingly a lot of the essays lacked good transitions. A lot of the paragraphs did not flow together making it hard to read/understand. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511543 Conclusions bdbaer0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511562 I noticed that some of the conclusions weren't too strong in terms of explaining what they analyzed in their essay, but they were still decent.]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511562 Matthew Carr https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511567 There was clear differences in writing between body paragraphs and most did not have a uniform voice.

]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511567 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511616 Using more in depth analysis]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:49 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511616 weak evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511645 2019-04-30 16:17:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511645 The explanation of the quotes could use some more detail, helping the reader understand why they used the quote. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511670 2019-04-30 16:17:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511670 cdspinazzola0118 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511677 A lot of the quotes were not analyzed, but rather summarized and were very surface level connections.]]> 2019-04-30 16:17:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511677 The essays that I saw had really string conclusions. mrjohnson0222 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511680 2019-04-30 16:17:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511680 shaila kostman https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511751 I feel like I needed to incorporate my quotes more smooothly]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:07 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511751 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511789 I felt that a strength in these essays were the amount of evidence as well as the analysis that follows.
]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511789 Ashley M https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511836 The few essays I read had very strong diction and a strong conclusion. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:20 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511836 this is ivan, our essay had strong explanations to our thesis https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511877 2019-04-30 16:18:25 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511877 everyone's diction was very strong hmluff0925 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511896 2019-04-30 16:18:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511896 shaila kostman https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511936 some essays had a lot of awkward sentence structure]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511936 vacullison0527 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511946 The analysis was weak, it could have been stronger and deeper.]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355511946 cdspinazzola0118 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512045 A more in-depth analysis, and work on making sure all of my quotes flow.]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512045 Nina Heins https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512088 I can work on making deeper connections with the text and the prompt. I can find quotes, I just have to analyze them deeper]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512088 Some people had trouble connecting evidence to the prompt mrjohnson0222 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512140 2019-04-30 16:18:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512140 shaila kostman https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512160 finding a deeper analysis and having quotes to support it]]> 2019-04-30 16:18:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512160 In general, my writing needs a lot of work hmluff0925 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512375 2019-04-30 16:19:22 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512375 vacullison0527 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512465 The TAG was clear and on some people's analysis was really good. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512465 xblamoreux0320 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512550 Some quotes were random and seemed like they were just trying to squeeze two quotes in the paragraph.

]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512550 Matthew Carr https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512573 Getting a deeper connection to the thesis.]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512573 Michael Pierson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512607 I feel like we did good at tying the evidence to the thesis]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:47 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512607 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512613 Making sure the essays flew was a common weakness among the essays. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512613 arczap0314 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512617 Deeper analysis ]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512617 Evidence & Analysis mmeastwood0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512648 The essays all had direct evidence with acceptable analysis tying to the quote.]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512648 Cameron Quagge https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512649 Maybe just work on the transitions to make them a bit smoother. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512649 Yikes. bdbaer0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512686 I feel like I could've made my paragraph flow a bit better because it may have seemed choppy.]]> 2019-04-30 16:19:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512686 I could work on improving my diction. mrjohnson0222 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512724 2019-04-30 16:19:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512724 caschweder1128 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512747 Evidence was used and cited correctly. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:20:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512747 Essay Strengths vmstrandberg0406 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512771 The information to back up the evidence ]]> 2019-04-30 16:20:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512771 our group could use more evidence. ivan https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512801

]]> 2019-04-30 16:20:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512801 The essays that I read all had at least two pieces of evidence directly stated and cited. cllathrop0814 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512855 2019-04-30 16:20:14 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512855 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512958 Adding quotes that naturally flow within the essays is something that we can all work on.]]> 2019-04-30 16:20:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512958 caschweder1128 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512966 Weak body paragraphs, but good conclusions make papers uneven.]]> 2019-04-30 16:20:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355512966 xblamoreux0320 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513025 I need to work on my analysis]]> 2019-04-30 16:20:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513025 meagan davis https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513118 I need to work on my analysis and how I may use the quotes to back up my claims. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:20:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513118 Essay Weaknesses vmstrandberg0406 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513163 2019-04-30 16:20:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513163 Matthew Carr https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513306 A lot of the essays had strong conclusions that reflected a collaborative effort.]]> 2019-04-30 16:21:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513306 Ashley M https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513344 The weaknesses I saw in the essays I read would probably be the flow and not using strong quotes.]]> 2019-04-30 16:21:13 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513344 caschweder1128 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513483 Not going on a tangent or lingering on one piece of evidence for too long.]]> 2019-04-30 16:21:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513483 Jessica Conway https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513535 I need to work on deeper analysis. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:21:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513535 clairesorensen234 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513572 I need to work on strengthening my arguments.]]> 2019-04-30 16:21:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513572 dexpere https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513637 Transitions could be a little choppy ]]> 2019-04-30 16:21:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513637 Word choice krkuehne0623 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513638 2019-04-30 16:21:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513638 good selection of evidence hmluff0925 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513743 2019-04-30 16:21:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513743 arczap0314 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513993 Tag is clear]]> 2019-04-30 16:22:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355513993 Conclusions mmeastwood0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514037 The conclusions were eloquently written taking each thesis, from the body paragraphs, acknowledging back to the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 16:22:34 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514037 Michael Pierson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514134 All the essays I read had conclusions that tied in the whole essay with the conclusion.]]> 2019-04-30 16:22:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514134 transitions were rough from paragraph to paragraph hmluff0925 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514299 2019-04-30 16:23:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514299 krkuehne0623 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514322 explanation of evidence]]> 2019-04-30 16:23:11 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514322 Appropriate amount of evidence was present https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514365 2019-04-30 16:23:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514365 There was a few people who didn't go into enough detail with their analysis. cllathrop0814 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514403 2019-04-30 16:23:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514403 What can you work on.. vmstrandberg0406 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514488 Make sure essay flows ]]> 2019-04-30 16:23:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514488 Michael Pierson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514652 I feel like I repeated a lot of my points.]]> 2019-04-30 16:23:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514652 A https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514736 explaining ]]> 2019-04-30 16:24:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514736 Ashley M https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514795 Explaining essays to a greater depth.]]> 2019-04-30 16:24:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514795 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514838 Evidence was often listed rather than elaborated on, and many transitions could use work

]]> 2019-04-30 16:24:07 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514838 Cameron https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514867 2019-04-30 16:24:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514867 Cameron Quagge https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514894 I could work on my analysis of my evidence]]> 2019-04-30 16:24:11 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355514894 Michael Pierson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515019 2019-04-30 16:24:23 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515019 Michael Pie https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515024 Some of the essays I read did not back up the evidence with discussion.]]> 2019-04-30 16:24:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515024 Michael Pierson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515302 I can integrate my quotes more seamlessly. ]]> 2019-04-30 16:25:00 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515302 I could work on going deeper into my analysis and explaining evidence. cllathrop0814 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515606 2019-04-30 16:25:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515606 Analysis mmeastwood0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515971 Some analysis however didn't tie back to the argument answering the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 16:26:07 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355515971 Evidence mmeastwood0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355516269 Some essays had paraphrasing, but wasn't fluent enough in the paragraph.]]> 2019-04-30 16:26:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355516269 I need to work on going deeper into my reasoning for my argument. mmeastwood0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355516982 2019-04-30 16:28:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355516982 I could also work on my vocabulary to make my writing more powerful and effect the reader, by helping them understand my argument. mmeastwood0211 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355517464 2019-04-30 16:29:08 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355517464 kjrathjen1008 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538221 Some essays had evidence but did not go into much detail of the evidence.

]]> 2019-04-30 17:12:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538221 Evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538656 2019-04-30 17:13:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538656 Body paragraphs were well written in most. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538686 Natali O.]]> 2019-04-30 17:13:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538686 jrapodaca0816 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538701 Lots of evidence used
Intros were powerful]]> 2019-04-30 17:13:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538701 Molly Peterson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538829 Not only answering the prompt correctly, but having additional deeper analysis/thought.]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538829 Francisco Saucedo https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538840 Most essays had good examples and thesis statements.]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538840 Olivia J. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538859 All of the essays I read used evidence and cited it correctly.]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:07 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538859 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538983 Having a formulaic feel to the essay

Explanations could be more elaborated
-Aislyn]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:22 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355538983 maddie dobyns https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539029 answering the essay prompt and staying on topic ]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539029 Victoria Hall https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539047 Centering all of the paragraphs in the essay on the theme statement in the intro helped the essay become a cohesive address instead of random inspirations.]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539047 Victoria Hall' s Paragraph kcjackson1121 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539074 Amazing word choice that captured exactly what she was saying and analyzed each quote extremely well. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:34 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539074 kjrathjen1008 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539210 Because, multiple people worked on one essay it did not flow as well as it should]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:47 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539210 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539244 batman dies in endgame :'( ]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539244 Riley Boyer https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539256 Most of the essays had all the components of the TAG and a clear thesis!]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539256 Jenna DeMassa https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539261 The essays I read did a great job of making the evidence flow into the writing. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539261 Alexa Skidmore https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539292 Most of the essays I read had good introductions that mentioned what the prompt was looking for, and what the essay would be about. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:14:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539292 kyra :> https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539308 some people had good ideas, but didn't portray their ideas in an academic way]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:00 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539308 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539411 using an ample amount of evidence ]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:14 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539411 jrapodaca0816 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539490 analysis wasn't always the best
conclusions were lacking]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539490 Natali Olvera https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539499 most paragraphs had sufficient evidence & well organized.]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539499 Alexia Fowler https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539503 Most essays have good evidence following their reasons that support the topic sentence

]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:25 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539503 cody funk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539583 Evidence worked really well with supporting the thesis]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:34 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539583 Riley Boyer https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539585 Evidence is used well with adequate background info/context.]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539585 Meghan Singh https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539611 Everyone did a really good job finding solid pieces of evidence and support them throughout their body paragraphs.]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:38 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539611 kjrathjen1008 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539629 had well placed evidence]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539629 cmwrightsman0514 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539636 Most of them had good intros, that used TAG and explained what they were going to talk about.

]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539636 Logan Pautsch https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539674 for the most part the into paragraphs were pretty good]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539674 Molly Peterson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539686 Having an adequate/appropriate amount of evidence along with explanation that ties back to the prompt and synthesizes with the rest of the essay.

]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539686 Austin Gath https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539687 These essays really answered the prompt in detail.]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539687 maddie dobyns https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539708 the body paragraphs were very cohesive even though the essay as a whole was written by several people]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539708 Tyler H. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539711 There was good communication between group members, a lot of essays drew upon each paragraph and elaborated very well.

]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539711 I noticed very good use of detail. -Kennedy Palaschuk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539757 2019-04-30 17:15:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539757 My Essay Intro kcjackson1121 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539782 The TAG statement was absolutely perfect and the first sentence was a great attention grabber. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:15:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539782 Francisco Saucedo https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539810 Almost all of the essays had very weak introduction and conclusion paragraphs.]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539810 Alexia Fowler https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539833 As well as creativity in introductions]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539833 Jenna DeMassa https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539843 I liked how Landon and Sauce's essay matched the humorous tone of the piece they wrote about. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539843 lcskinner0824 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539864 The symbolism that was found throughout the Titanic piece was deep be it the number 10 or the Tower of Babel.]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539864 jrapodaca0816 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539887 Explaining the evidence and tying it back to the prompt/thesis]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539887 Jaden Sonive https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539893 The essay I read was well write, and had good meaning.]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539893 There was also very good flow. -Kennedy Palaschuk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539910 2019-04-30 17:16:15 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539910 Natali O. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539937 Conclusions were the afterthought, shallow and weak.]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539937 strengths https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539943 a lot of essays had a clear directions and were organized

]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355539943 Alexia Fowler https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540032 Sentence flow throughout the essay can be fixed ]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540032 Beep boop beep bop https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540033 2019-04-30 17:16:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540033 kjrathjen1008 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540067 had clear introduction]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540067 Bopp beep boop boop https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540079 2019-04-30 17:16:34 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540079 maddie dobyns https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540093 could elaborate more on their ideas and evidence ]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540093 Riley Boyer https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540132 Be careful of summarizing/repeating the quote. If anything add more analysis!]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540132 There could be more use of direct evidence. -Kennedy Palaschuk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540137 2019-04-30 17:16:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540137 Molly Peterson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540149 A lot of the essays I read were dangerously close to summarizing.]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540149 Beep bop booop boop bbeep bop https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540158 2019-04-30 17:16:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540158 Manuel Rodriguez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540162 Punctuating my evidence correctly.]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540162 cody funk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540219 some had very little evidence]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540219 Logan Pautsch https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540224 the 3rd paragraphs could go into depth more]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540224 Jenna DeMassa https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540241 A lot of the essays tended to summarize instead of analyzing the pieces in depth. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540241 Beeep https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540247 Beep boop bop bop bop

]]> 2019-04-30 17:16:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540247 cody funk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540297 Most of the papers had very good conventions and flowed together pretty well]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540297 kjrathjen1008 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540346 In the intro answer the prompt]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540346 maddie dobyns https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540349 TAG in intros]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540349 Tyler H. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540364 2019-04-30 17:17:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540364 Bop boop beep https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540374 Beep bop booop bop

]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540374 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540417 Essays were well organized and contained interesting concepts

incorporated evidence well
-Aislyn ]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540417 Molly Peterson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540450 Trying to be able to ]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:14 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540450 Beep beop https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540483 Boop Beep Bop]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540483 maddie dobyns https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540503 I will work on finding a clearer argument and going into a deeper analysis about my ideas]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540503 Riley Boyer https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540510 Make sure there are two pieces of evidence per paragraph.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:22 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540510 kjrathjen1008 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540542 Make the story flow]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:25 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540542 Francisco Saucedo https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540544 2 things i need to work on are my introduction and conclusion paragraphs, and i need better descriptions of my examples.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:25 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540544 Austin Gath https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540566 The essays were well organized and interesting.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540566 Natali O https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540586 2019-04-30 17:17:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540586 Beep Bop https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540588 Beep bop
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]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540588 Natali O. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540597 evidence explanations could be more fleshed out. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540597 Victoria Hall https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540615 End where you begin. An essay will be more powerful if it concludes with its assertion.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540615 Meghan Singh https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540621 Our introduction was very strong. It was a solid way to open up the paper and grab the attention of others.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540621 cody funk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540622 sometimes the analysis of the evidence and how it related to the thesis was pretty weak and shallow]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540622 Alexia Fowler https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540628 Also there was mostly lack of discussion after the evidence ]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:34 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540628 Jenna DeMassa https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540637 The conclusions sometimes struggled to make a strong final point.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:34 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540637 Alexa Skidmore https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540640 Good at including evidence from the passages.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540640 Beep boep bope beep https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540649 Beep beep beep]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540649 Olivia J. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540676 2019-04-30 17:17:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540676 cmwrightsman0514 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540705 Everyone did a good job on picking good evidence that proved their thesis. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540705 We could work on getting stronger conclusions and introductions. -Kennedy Palaschuk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540734 2019-04-30 17:17:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540734 Beep beep bopp bope https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540742 2019-04-30 17:17:47 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540742 GARBAGE :)) https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540810 2019-04-30 17:17:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540810 Porter Blackhurst https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540821 Strong analysis and use of evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540821 maddie dobyns https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540822 I will also provide more evidence ]]> 2019-04-30 17:17:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540822 kyra :> https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540859 good things to do is try to find symbolism in the text. makes you sound smart. make sure you know symbols.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540859 cody funk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540862 need to focus on adding more evidence and analysis]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540862 Natali O. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540863 we could work on solid conclusions
Attention to evidence explanation.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540863 cmwrightsman0514 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540865 A few groups could have went more in depth with their explanation of the evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540865 BEEEP https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540867 BOPBOBPBOPBPBOBPB

]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540867 Austin Gath https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540872 Some of ya'll wrote alot for a five paragraph essay.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540872 BEEEEPEP https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540929 PEEEEEP]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540929 Alexa Skidmore https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540933 Better and deeper analysis of the evidence used]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:11 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540933 EEPEPEPEPEPEPEP https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540984 EPEPEPEBEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540984 Im really bad at writing introductions and conclusions. -Kennedy Palaschuk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540989 2019-04-30 17:18:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355540989 Alexia Fowler https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541013 Focus on adding more creative details

]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541013 Trash https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541027 2019-04-30 17:18:23 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541027 Logan Pautsch https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541053 explain evidence more and use better evidence]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541053 Riley Boyer https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541079 I can work on explaining my evidence instead of just summarizing it.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541079 Alexa Skidmore https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541127 Answering everything the prompt is looking for.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541127 Jayden Y https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541129 There was a lot of good focus on the thesis and staying on topic as well as good organization in terms of ideas.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541129 Meghan Singh https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541134 A lot of conclusions were not at strong as they could have been.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541134 Jenna DeMassa https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541147 I need to focus on my speed ]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541147 I could work on analyzing the pieces of work more quickly and with more detail. -Kennedy Palaschuk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541164 2019-04-30 17:18:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541164 Alexia Fowler https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541167 Work on discussion after evidence

]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541167 lcskinner0824 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541175 The connection to the past and the relationship it created between father and son was a key concept to discuss and was very well done.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541175 Conclusions kcjackson1121 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541177 Some of the conclusions were underdeveloped and were almost a repeat of what was said in the introduction. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541177 Tyler H https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541229 Several essays lacked structure and body instead just throwing random information at readers.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541229 Jenna DeMassa https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541250 I also need to work on my word choice. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541250 Austin Gath https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541290 There were alot of summaries in the essays.]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541290 Manuel Rodriguez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541300 Most intros did not address the prompt.

]]> 2019-04-30 17:18:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541300 Victoria https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541302 2019-04-30 17:18:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541302 Victoria Hall https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541328 Pauses in thought or incomplete analysis]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:00 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541328 Alexa Skidmore https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541331 I need to be more in depth with my analysis of the evidence I use.]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:00 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541331 Riley Boyer https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541338 I can work my word choice and creating interesting sentence structures.]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541338 cody funk https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541340 didn't have a conclusion for some reason so that might be good to add

]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541340 Meghan Singh https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541381 Some of the essays were repetitive because people talked about the same topics in various paragraphs.]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:07 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541381 Jayden Y https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541412 Citations could be more in-depth and better explained on a lot of them and there could also be more detail added.]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:11 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541412 Porter Blackhurst https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541457 Good use of literarl allusions]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541457 Tyler H. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541490 Citations and using evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541490 Victoria Hall https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541567 Lack of depth, finding meaning, but ignoring deeper symbolism or universal themes]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541567 Quotes kcjackson1121 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541577 Some of the quotes were just dropped into the paragraphs instead of being introduced and explained. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541577 I hate all of you https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541605 2019-04-30 17:19:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541605 most com https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541632 2019-04-30 17:19:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541632 most conclusions seemed to be rushed/ not complete https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541642 2019-04-30 17:19:38 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541642 cmwrightsman0514 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541655 Having the conclusions actually wrap up the essay and restate the point the essay was trying to make. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541655 Molly Peterson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541676 Trying to be able to synthesize points and analysis instead of just spitting them out in a random
order.]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541676 Olivia J. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541753 The essays flowed well, and didn't go off topic or feel disconnected]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541753 Porter Blackhurst https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541779 Only answered half of the prompt well. Be sure to answer the whole prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:54 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541779 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541816 The essays introduction is very strong and the essay is well organized.

]]> 2019-04-30 17:19:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541816 Jaden Sonive https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541848 Very well, had good wording.]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541848 have a more in depth analysis.- ariana wright https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541869 2019-04-30 17:20:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541869 Victoria Hall https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541955 Starting with a smile, being excited to write]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:15 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541955 cmwrightsman0514 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541982 Better introduction and conclusions ]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355541982 Conclusion kcjackson1121 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542049 I need to be better at tying everything together at the end of the essay. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542049 Alexa Skidmore https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542050 I need to work on my introductions, and creating a good theme statement. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542050 Olivia J. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542083 The analysis wasn't always in depth or relating to the evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542083 Porter Blackhurst https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542098 Had minimal to no analysis for some of the quotes.]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:31 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542098 cmwrightsman0514 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542102 Also, trying to discuss the evidence on a deeper level.]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:31 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542102 Molly Peterson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542111 I need to work on getting a deeper analysis.]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542111 explainations https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542145 most were very limited or weak following quotes

]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542145 Not being here and understanding what was going on. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542215 2019-04-30 17:20:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542215 Meghan Singh https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542268 I can work on being less repetitive in my paragraphs.]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542268 Victoria Hall https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542279 Plan essay faster so the end is not stressful and the conclusion provides closure]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542279 Olivia J. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542311 Some essays didn't have a conclusion]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:54 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542311 Introductions kcjackson1121 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542323 Instead of just doing a TAG, I need another sentence to capture attention and build interest. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:20:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542323 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542410 the body paragraphs had too much evidence without enough descriptions to help describe them

]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542410 Molly Peterson https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542432 I need to work on making my points cohesive. ]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542432 Olivia J. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542434 Incorporating evidence into sentences rather than just using quotes on their own]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542434 Austin Gath https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542467 I could have included more evidence in my essay.]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:14 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542467 Meghan Singh https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542531 I can work on using stronger words to make my essay more persuasive.]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:22 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542531 lcskinner0824 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542554 It could have been stated that the Iceberg was God's rather than alluding to it.]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542554 Porter Blackhurst https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542573 Adding more depth to my intro and conclusion and adding more detail to my quote analysis]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542573 Austin Gath https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542709 I could have analyzed the txt deeper.]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542709 Analysis and evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542799 2019-04-30 17:21:54 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542799 Olivia J. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542816 Transitions between paragraphs]]> 2019-04-30 17:21:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355542816 Jaden https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355551604 Some didnt do their work

]]> 2019-04-30 17:37:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355551604 luka zivkovic ^ somewhere up there https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355552524 2019-04-30 17:39:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355552524 luka zivkovic somewhere up there https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355552826 2019-04-30 17:40:15 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355552826 Manuel Rodriguez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355572475 writing group essays lets you focus on one paragraph and do your best to perfect your particular pargraph and not the whole essay.]]> 2019-04-30 18:17:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355572475 The introduction was weak and made the essay inconsistent. lcskinner0824 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355600524 2019-04-30 19:23:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355600524 lcskinner0824 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355600747 I could work on the clarity of my work by lowering the amount of run-ons and better punctuation. ]]> 2019-04-30 19:24:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355600747 lcskinner0824 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355601089 I could incorporate my quotes with transitions.]]> 2019-04-30 19:25:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355601089 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614031 Since we only had to focus on one paragraph, everyone was able to go further in their analysis.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:04:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614031 Matthew Nixon https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614454 -Full circle conclusion/intro
-Thorough analysis on evidence
-Beautiful word choice]]> 2019-04-30 20:05:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614454 Jarrett Ardente https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614676 Claims were supported by fitting evidence and, for the most part, the evidence was expanded upon by well thought out analysis. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:06:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614676 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614746 Very interesting points made ]]> 2019-04-30 20:06:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614746 Seamlessly flow of evidence into sentences https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614868 2019-04-30 20:07:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614868 Amy Gomez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614876 Very good ideas were expertly explained and thorough]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614876 Giovanni Begano https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614878 Most people were able to find evidence that really supported their arguments, and thus justified the piece.]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614878 Anna F https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614883 Finding evidence ]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:20 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614883 Matthew Nixon https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614895 - Sort've confusing intro. Some people said it wasn't clear while others did.
-Fairly short intro and conclusion compared to the body paragraphs. It was just a typical intro, nothing special that make it a 9.]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614895 All of the essays that I read understood what the prompt was asking https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614907
In addition to that, the essays all had really relevant quotes.
-Vanessa]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614907 Danna Lopez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614913 Good transitions and diction. And good analysis. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:25 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614913 Grace Buckley https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614920 Our essay, and other essays, had pretty strong and specific theses.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614920 Adrian Kwiatkowski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614949 1.) The evidence selected for each essay I read was relevant and strong. Several original and insightful points were made through the incorporation of valid, relevant evidence.
2.) The essays consistently addressed all aspects of the prompt. While some theses were stronger than others, they all made sure to respond to all parts of the prompt. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614949 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614966 lacked clear claim ]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:38 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614966 K https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614969 2019-04-30 20:07:38 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614969 Kaitlyn Ashcroft https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614978 1) I could explain and expand on my evidence more.
2) I could also make my quotes smooth more smoothly with the paragraph.]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355614978 Emmely Rocha https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615005 1. The essays I read incorporated good evidence that were important for the meaning of the passage. They weren't random quotes that had no significance.
2. The intros were well written and were good in presenting what they are going to analyze.]]> 2019-04-30 20:07:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615005 Giovanni Begano https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615123 Even though the essays where made in a group, each piece had a great flow and well done transitions.]]> 2019-04-30 20:08:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615123 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615158 Needed a deeper analysis and less summarizing]]> 2019-04-30 20:08:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615158 Rey Meraz https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615198 Out of the two group essays that I read, both did a phenomenal job synthesizing each other's writing to create, or rather mimic, the convention of a singular writer. It made the fluency of the essay flow very nicely.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:08:28 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615198 Dayna R. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615210

Since we had to discuss, brainstorm and outline together, we were able to hear more perspectives and ideas. Overall , it gave the essays more depth.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:08:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615210 We had an idea down and we fully expressed it sssides0306 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615258 Plentiful evidence was used ]]> 2019-04-30 20:08:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615258 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615278 Pre-planning before I write ]]> 2019-04-30 20:08:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615278 Remembering https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615323 2019-04-30 20:09:00 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615323 Grace Mastin https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615345 I will improve my thesis to make it more clear. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615345 D'Angelo Perez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615355 Need to include more voice, make the essay more engaging]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:08 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615355 Danna Lopez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615366 A deeper and stronger analysis could have been done. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615366 Matthew Nixon https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615386 -Intro needs to be written with more voice instead of just reading the prompt back to the grader
-Conclusion needs to sound more conjoined instead of like 3 different people wrote it. (Even though thats how we did it)]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615386 1.) A lot of the essays that I read were good, but they had way too much summary. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615391 2.) I also noticed that the thesis statements were generic.

-Vanessa]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615391 Anna F https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615398 Good thesis statements]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615398 D'Angelo Perez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615458 1) Good, deep analysis with well used evidence
2) Strong points and organization]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:34 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615458 Taylor Lee https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615461 Remembering to add citations ]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615461 Brody https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615462 There were many strong thesis statements that covered what specifically would be discussed throughout the essays.]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615462 Marina https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615496 1. Most part of essays I read presented a really strong and well-developed argument supported by relevant evidence.
2. The essays weren't superficial, they analyzed the texts/poems in a meaningful way and were able to deepen the interpretation.]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615496 Jarrett Ardente https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615515 How most essays went]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615515 Ixchel https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615516 We did a good job at identifying the techniques that were used within the poems and how they impacted the meaning]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615516 Taylor Lee https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615521 Pre-planning before I write ]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615521 Kinzey https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615560 The essays had great introductions that included phenomenal vocabulary and reasoning]]> 2019-04-30 20:09:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615560 Taylor Lee https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615578 Summarized instead of analyzed ]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615578 Giovanni Begano https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615587 Most of the intro paragraphs could be stronger, and sometimes did not give enough of a clear explanation of what the piece would be about.]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615587 Taylor Lee https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615661 Vague and minimal explanation ]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615661 Anna F https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615665 Analysis needs to be deeper.]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615665 I need to work on planning my essays without taking too much time. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615695 -Vanessa]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615695 Taylor Lee https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615733 Really deep analysis and unique viewpoints ]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615733 Grace Buckley https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615737 There was good organization across the whole essay, and every paragraph had its own topic.]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615737 Brody https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615742 Sometimes during essays it seemed to be a lot of summarizing.]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615742 Amy Gomez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615754 We could have used more transitions between paragraphs so it flowed better. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:47 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615754 Grace Buckley https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615760 Sometimes, the analysis of quotes was lackluster and very surface-level.]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615760 Adrian Kwiatkowski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615767 1.) While several essays had great evidence was incorporated throughout, there were many that failed to analyze the selected quotes and connect it back to the prompt in a relevant way.
2.) Introductions/theses often lacked specific examples that would later be discussed in the essay body. While it does not necessarily have to be in the introduction, it is important to enumerate the topics that will be/were spoken about. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:49 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615767 Kaitlyn Ashcroft https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615772 1) We used evidence multiple times in different paragraphs so we could have communicated better about what evidence we were using.
2) We also could make the essay more smooth and comprehensive.]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615772 Daniel Gadomski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615797 The tags were clearly stated in the beginning for easy points.]]> 2019-04-30 20:10:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615797 Anna F https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615811 More transitions throughout the essays.]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615811 DETAILED https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615816 ICH BIN MIKE

There ]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615816 Taylor Lee https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615821 Very nice flow of evidence into explanaion ]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615821 Danna Lopez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615824 Analyzing rather than summarizing.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615824 Amy Gomez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615895 Submitting my work on time]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615895 Grace Mastin https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615905 I will also make sure that the essay goes in depth with my analysis to avoid confusion.]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615905 Genna Geiger https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615925 Very strong points and clear ideas on the essays I read]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615925 Brody https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615936 Making sure to make it clear why the evidence connects to the thesis]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615936 Giovanni Begano https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615979 Some of the synthesis for the evidence could have been stronger and more fluent.]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355615979 Grace Mastin https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616032 The essay needed a better structure so it would be easier to follow.]]> 2019-04-30 20:11:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616032 Daniel Gadomski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616147 Very good use of evidence, didn't lean on it too much, used more analysis.]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616147 Genna Geiger https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616150 Some had really short intro paragraphs and some didn't have a conclusion. Also important to remember to keep background historical info in the introduction paragraph :)]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616150 Grace Mastin https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616176 By the end, the essay became very repetitive without any profound analysis to drive the thesis forward. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:23 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616176 Emmely Rocha https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616241 For some essays they needed a little bit more elaboration on the quotes.]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616241 Marina https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616258 1. Some paragraphs were too long, the sentences could have been written more succinctly
2. Sometimes the transitions between paragraphs weren't too clear]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616258 Ixchel https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616270 2019-04-30 20:12:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616270 Ixchel https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616273 They had smooth transitions that made their essay flow well]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:49 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616273 Danna Lopez https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616280 Focus on providing more evidence.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616280 Daniel Gadomski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616293 There were some misunderstandings of the prompt, didn't always answer the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:54 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616293 Anna F https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616302 Making sure that it is not repetitive throughout the essay.]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616302 Jarrett Ardente https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616305 The flow of most essay were not very good. The body paragraphs should use the intro as a map for organization of the essay.]]> 2019-04-30 20:12:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616305 I was not totally ashamed of my inability to write well sssides0306 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616328 2019-04-30 20:13:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616328 Grace Buckley https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616330 Repetition was a problem for some of the essays, including ours.]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:02 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616330 Grace Mastin https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616404 The essay had a strong introduction]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:20 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616404 Daniel Gadomski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616424 sometimes they summarized more than analyzed the evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616424 Adrian Kwiatkowski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616483 I am making these critiques based on previous essays due to my absence...
1.) Be more concise in your thought process. Often, too many ideas distract from the main idea and argument being made.
2.) Spend more time analyzing the nature of the passage, as this can be extremely helpful while writing and structuring the essay. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616483 DETAILED https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616489 ICH BIN MIKE

Alot of people had alot of info making it a deep and interesting essay]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616489 Dayna R. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616491 Some people did not use a lot of evidence, while others would use too much. Overall creating an imbalance in their paper.]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616491 Anna F https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616495 Having deeper analysis after evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616495 Genna Geiger https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616497 State as many points as I can and lots of analysis.]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616497 Repetitive sssides0306 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616507 2019-04-30 20:13:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616507 Kaitlyn Ashcroft https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616518 1) We answered the promt in a direct way and found evidence for it.
2) we analysised the pieces of evidence we provided instead of just summarizing.]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616518 Kinzey https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616546 Reading through the essays, you could see that by the 3rd paragraph/conclusion people ran out of what to talk about, so they were a bit weak

]]> 2019-04-30 20:13:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616546 Difficult to fully coordinate what we had wanted to say. sssides0306 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616550 2019-04-30 20:13:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616550 Giovanni Begano https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616563 I could have done a better job with the ratio of evidence to explaination]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616563 Ixchel https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616587 Writing a more meaning full analysis that supports back to the thesis]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616587 Rey Meraz https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616731 There were a few instances where the evidence being used wasn't direct evidence.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:40 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616731 Grace Mastin https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616739 There was a good amount of evidence that was strong for the argument created.]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616739 Giovanni Begano https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616755 I could have done a better job with the flow of the paragraph]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616755 Daniel Gadomski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616762 I could do more with the evidence I use. I don't d enough all the time.]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616762 Ixchel https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616763 Expanding on my vocabulary might help the overall flow]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:47 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616763 Grace Buckley https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616776 We can work on strengthening our arguments, so that we can have more things to analyze.]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616776 Emmely Rochac https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616803 2019-04-30 20:14:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616803 Grace Buckley https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616808 Sometimes, we don't enough evidence. We can work on picking more/better quotes.]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616808 Emmely Rocha https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616815 I need to improve my analysis on the evidence and connect it more smoothly to my thesis.]]> 2019-04-30 20:14:57 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616815 Marina https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616841 I could have deepened my arguments by analyzing the poems under different perspectives

]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616841 Morgan Eaton https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616903 The intro was very well written and specific. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616903 Kinzey https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616909 Flow of the essay, better ways to say things where it's not watered down and simplistic]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616909 Daniel Gadomski https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616921 Take more time to annotate the prompt and piece to make more connections and make it easier for myself later on.]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:20 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616921 Isabelle Kaleta https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616929 Introductions were solid and efficient in most essays]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616929 TMI https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616967 ICH BIN MIKE

Too much Info being put in essays that are repetitive and ridicule to the point where people are not putting in synonymous words]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616967 Ixchel https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616988 I can work on finding more direct evidence and explaining it further ]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:31 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355616988 Rey Meraz https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617010 Focus on small details within the story: specific word choices made by the characters, historical context, setting, etc.

]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617010 Morgan Eaton https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617028 There was not enough evidence in each paragraph, there was no conclusion, and one of the paragraphs were not finished.]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617028 Jarrett Ardente https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617040 The intro MUST be strong to pull in the adjudicator- sets the tone of the rest of the essay.]]> 2019-04-30 20:15:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617040 Isabelle Kaleta https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617184 Some of the essays seemed like nobody read each others parts because the paragraphs became repetitive ]]> 2019-04-30 20:16:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617184 Morgan Eaton https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617209 Something I can work on is making sure to add more evidence and go more in depth. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:16:22 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617209 Jarrett Ardente https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617247 I need to work on the organization/flow of my essays.]]> 2019-04-30 20:16:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617247 Dayna R. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617353 Being more straight and to the point. ]]> 2019-04-30 20:16:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617353 Isabelle Kaleta https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617550 Going into deeper analysis]]> 2019-04-30 20:17:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617550 SYNTAX https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617714 ICH BIN MIKE

I need to use more deep and sophisticated words where it flows like waves]]> 2019-04-30 20:18:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355617714 FIG LANG https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355618513 ICH BIN MIKE

I could use fig lang to drive the intro because its unique and yet purposeful]]> 2019-04-30 20:21:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355618513 THESIS https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355618762 ICH BIN MIKE

THESIS WAS AWESOME
it related back to the prompt and essay]]> 2019-04-30 20:22:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355618762 MORE SENTENCES https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355619002 ICH BIN MIKE

In into I need more sentences so it does not sound like a run-on]]> 2019-04-30 20:23:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355619002 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355629983 1) I need to work on deeper explanation of the quotes and
2) tying them into the prompt and how they answer the claim
Arianna Vakselis

]]> 2019-04-30 21:06:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355629983 Savannah Gambell https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630465 The two strengths I found in most essays were a lot of good/supported evidence, and a lot of essays had a good TAG and thesis in the introduction.]]> 2019-04-30 21:08:07 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630465 Blake McAvoy https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630473 The essays I read had strong, fluid structure.]]> 2019-04-30 21:08:09 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630473 Jenny Feuerstein https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630479 1. they answered the prompt
2. had a complete thesis
3. good diction and syntax overall]]> 2019-04-30 21:08:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630479 Jennifer Ramosssssssssssssssss https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630553 2019-04-30 21:08:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630553 Izabel Pena https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630564 From the essays I read, I noticed that there was less direct quoting and more elaboration than I have seen in the past.]]> 2019-04-30 21:08:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630564 Natalie Bluth https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630580 The essays...
1. answered the prompts
2. related their evidence back to the thesis ]]> 2019-04-30 21:08:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630580 Riley Drayna https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630669 The essays I read all had great choices of evidence for the most part, and their writing style was really good with few errors.]]> 2019-04-30 21:08:54 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630669 Rachel Einecker https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630683 Great diction and word choice, along with good structure. Also most essays were able to completely answer the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 21:08:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630683 Blake McAvoy https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630691 Everyone knew how to do in-text citations.]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630691 Brandon Good https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630710 Some essays did a great job analyzing rather than summarizing.]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630710 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630775 1) Conclusions/ intros
2) explanation of evidence
Arianna Vakselis]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:20 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630775 Sam V https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630777 All the essays I read had good vocabulary. They were well spoken and well put together.]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:20 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630777 Julianna Head https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630798 The evidence for the essays I read were very well supported and efficiently developed their claims. They continued to back up their claims by going in-depth on analysis. ]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630798 Victoria Halvorsen https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630818 - strong introductions and conclusions
- good use of evidence

]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:27 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630818 Flow ljchatham0901 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630829 While reading different essays, some strengths that I found was that many of them had done well with flowing the entire essay together. It was put together well and the ideas were flowing well.]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630829 Jenny Feuerstein https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630858 1. needs more elaboration
2. needs more transitions]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630858 Caroline Smith-1 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630866 Evidence was good in all of the essays. there was more than 2 in each paragraph and it went well with the analysis.]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630866 Waldy Osorio https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630950 1. finding sufficient amount of evidence to support the analysis
2. Good transitions in the paragraphs and between paragraphs.]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:49 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355630950 Brandon Good https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631041 There was never too much evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 21:09:53 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631041 All essays had required sources, and many went above and beyond quoting many sources. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631093 2019-04-30 21:09:56 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631093 Sam V https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631567 Alot of times the writing tended to ramble on to some topic not quite related.]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:16 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631567 Brandon Good https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631572 2019-04-30 21:10:18 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631572 Jenny Feuerstein https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631575 1. Elaborate more
2. add more evidence and more transitions]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631575 Brandon Good https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631580 1. Sometimes there wasn't enough evidence to develop the point overall.

2. Some sentences lacked cohesiveness which made them difficult to read.]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:20 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631580 Izabel Pena https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631607 I found that several of the essays I read had strong introductions rather than the basic "TAG." ]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631607 Riley Drayna https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631610 A lot of the essays I read had introductions and conclusions that didn't match the quality of their body paragraphs and analysis, and some had thesis statements that didn't go into enough depth to satisfy the prompt.]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631610 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631638 1) Evidence was well selected to answer prompt
2) good flow especially for it being multiple people making it
Arianna Vakselis]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631638 Rachel Einecker https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631639 Many essays gave large chunks of evidence and then had little explanation. It's better to have embedded quotes, with in-depth explanations that connect back to the thesis.]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:33 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631639 Of https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631659 2019-04-30 21:10:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631659 Good attention getters/support of evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631669 Every essay I read had a great hook, and the use of diction was often very beneficial to their points.
-Cassie Traicoff]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631669 christian https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631699 getting a better grasp on the intro]]> 2019-04-30 21:10:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631699 Savannah Gambell https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631775 I found a lot of essays had issues with properly citing their evidence, even though most used a lot of it. And some conclusions I read didn't tie in the introduction properly or nicely.

]]> 2019-04-30 21:11:03 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631775 Well written, informative essays. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631790 2019-04-30 21:11:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631790 All of the essays had well written conclusions https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631813 -Lucas TR]]> 2019-04-30 21:11:11 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631813 Sam V https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631909 Getting to the point of the writing and sticking to it.]]> 2019-04-30 21:11:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631909 Victoria Halvorsen https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631989 - transitions between paragraphs were typically pretty awkward or abrupt
- Evidence wasn't properly cited]]> 2019-04-30 21:11:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355631989 Julianna https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632038 1.For one of the essays I read, it leaned towards plot summary instead of actual analysis.
2. Also, one paragraph attempted to identify elements and how they were used but it didn't analyze it deeply. ]]> 2019-04-30 21:12:01 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632038 Braxton https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632127 2019-04-30 21:12:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632127 Good Vocab!! https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632130 -Lucas]]> 2019-04-30 21:12:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632130 Braxton H https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632131 Good Content and evidence

]]> 2019-04-30 21:12:29 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632131 Izabel Pena https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632239 Some of the essays could have used stronger vocabulary.]]> 2019-04-30 21:12:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632239 christian https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632271 my groups essay had a strong use of evidence and i feel like it really brought the maturity of the writting up.]]> 2019-04-30 21:12:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632271 A lot of unproperly cited evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632316 -Lucas]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:05 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632316 Riley Drayna https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632319 In the future, I'd like to work to improve the general organization of my writing, and try to make my writing a little bit more concise.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632319 Brandon Good https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632321 1. Trying to maintain voice so that the essay flows.
2. Making sure that you are including enough evidence to show multiple points that support your overall argument.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:06 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632321 Rachel Einecker https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632403 Having a wider range of vocabulary.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632403 Izabel Pena https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632407 Sometimes certain essays would have too much direct quotes rather than elaboration about that evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:23 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632407 Many had insufficient explanation of sources. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632416 2019-04-30 21:13:23 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632416 Blake McAvoy https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632421 When discussing imagery, interpretation is basic.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:26 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632421 Natalie Bluth https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632455 1. Some essays had more of a summary than an analysis
2. Some people did not use enough evidence when others used too much ]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632455 Addressing The Prompt ljchatham0901 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632479 The other essays did well in addressing the prompt of whatever they had. They made sure all the aspects of the prompt were in the essay and touched on.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632479 Rachel Einecker https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632519 Structuring/outlining the essay before writing it.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:51 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632519 Braxton Harris https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632534 essays had unique diction]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632534 Sam V https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632552 Many people got very into the writing and added many details and even more evidence than necessary.]]> 2019-04-30 21:13:59 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632552 Citation/Introductions https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632607 Some essays unfortunately lacked citation for their evidence, and some introductions lacked a proper thesis.
-Cassie Traicoff]]> 2019-04-30 21:14:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632607 Waldy Osorio https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632645 1. making introductions longer but not repetitive
2. using evidence and analysis in a balanced way, not too much analysis or too much evidence]]> 2019-04-30 21:14:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632645 Blake McAvoy https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632646 Conclusions simply restate theses and are boring.]]> 2019-04-30 21:14:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632646 Izabel Pena https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632689 I can work on using higher vocabulary words.]]> 2019-04-30 21:14:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632689 Jennifer Ramos https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632730 good incorporation of the text throughout the essay]]> 2019-04-30 21:14:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632730 Savannah https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632790 Personally, I need to work on going more in depth with my analysis of the quotes I use, and not ending explanations open-ended.]]> 2019-04-30 21:14:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632790 i think the flow of our esaay was amazing https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632829 christian]]> 2019-04-30 21:14:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632829 Caroline-2 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632891 The word choice was good in most of the essays as well. It was coherent and transitioned well.]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:11 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632891 Julianna Head https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632901 1.) I need to work on using more evidence to back up my claims
2.) I also need to have more out of the box explanations to answer the prompt]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:13 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632901 Our cited evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632914 -lucas]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:14 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632914 Sethe Divine svdivine0731 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632928 Most essays were able to answer the prompt with having a consistency involving the thesis in some way, which is always awesome.]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632928 Sam V https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632937 Some got a little hard to read. Some issues were the flow, too ambitious vocab or run on sentences.]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:19 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632937 Izabel Pena https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632974 I can work on having more creative introductions.]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632974 Transitions ljchatham0901 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632993 I found that many of the essays struggled with transitions. They were there but it did not transitions well into the next paragraph.]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:36 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355632993 peer editing skills https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633007 -lucas]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633007 Blake McAvoy https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633011 Connect all interpretations to a theme for deeper analysis.]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:39 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633011 Victoria Halvorsen https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633019 - try to analyze on a deeper level
- tie back to thesis]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633019 Did not include all information we should have had. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633033 2019-04-30 21:15:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633033 Rachel Einecker https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633039 Many essays lacked a conclusion. If you are running low on time, even one last conclusion sentence makes a difference.]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:47 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633039 caroline-1 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633046 Some of the diction in the essays were very casual and did not exhibit AP level writing. ]]> 2019-04-30 21:15:49 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633046 Braxton Harris https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633106 One of the essays had contradicting points in different paragraphs.]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:04 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633106 christian https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633113 we couldve used better vocab

]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:07 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633113 christian https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633203 i think that if anything the conclusion of our group was lacking and could have used more]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:30 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633203 Braxton Harris https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633223 Group Unity]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:35 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633223 Rachel Einecker https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633232 Essays had good introductions, remembering the TAG and including a clear thesis. ]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:37 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633232 caroline- 2 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633249 the analysis of evidence was repeated several times]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633249 Ehtes Enivid svdivine0731 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633250 The essays seemed very formulaic, which at best, according to the AP scale, puts you at a 6 or below. Work on being a little more human than being a robot. That's all.]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633250 Sam V https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633252 Structure paragraphs more, they were a lil all over the place]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:41 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633252 Blake McAvoy https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633258 Play with structure to have more voice.]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:43 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633258 Braxton Harris https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633281 Deeper conclusions from evidence, less surface level explaination]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:48 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633281 Paragraphs ljchatham0901 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633296 Of the essays I read, many of them didn't have a conclusion. ]]> 2019-04-30 21:16:52 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633296 Better explanations of evidence https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633375 2019-04-30 21:17:10 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633375 Jennifer Ramos https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633419 transitions and introduction]]> 2019-04-30 21:17:21 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633419 christian https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633425 opening up our vocabulary]]> 2019-04-30 21:17:22 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633425 Word economy ljchatham0901 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633434 When writing my paragraph, I tend to repeat myself. I should work on saying my point clearly and concisely. ]]> 2019-04-30 21:17:24 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633434 connecting evidence back to thesis in a well written manner.. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633441 2019-04-30 21:17:25 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633441 Ali https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633502 I had some good points along with some good evidence. I was able to tie it back to the thesis.]]> 2019-04-30 21:17:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633502 Waldy Osorio https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633509 1. deeper analysis
2. introduction and conclusion]]> 2019-04-30 21:17:44 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633509 Start early ljchatham0901 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633683 I took too long in my paragraph to really get to the good stuff. I need to work on making it all work well together.]]> 2019-04-30 21:18:32 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633683 Caroline-1 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633730 I could work on improving my word choice and using higher level words.]]> 2019-04-30 21:18:45 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633730 Ali https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633734 I wasn't able to go deep enough even though I had some good evidence.]]> 2019-04-30 21:18:46 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633734 Jennifer rAMOS https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633748 Better transitions and better use of commas..]]> 2019-04-30 21:18:50 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633748 caroline-2 https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633820 I also need to work on analyzing on a deeper level and explaining more. ]]> 2019-04-30 21:19:12 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633820 I could improve on my analysis and transitions. https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633839 Natalie Bluth]]> 2019-04-30 21:19:17 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633839 Coordination/editing https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633934 Groups probably could of worked together better in order to help the writing flow smoother, and some editing could be used as well to help.
-Cassie Traicoff]]> 2019-04-30 21:19:42 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633934 Ali https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633982 I can work on getting deeper and analyzing more and connecting it back to the thesis.]]> 2019-04-30 21:19:55 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633982 Braxton Harris https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633989 Sentence fragments and run on sentences]]> 2019-04-30 21:19:58 UTC https://padlet.com/klwilliams4/2a7iq8b2ag5n/wish/355633989