https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa Made with whimsy en-us 2017-02-02 15:52:33 UTC 2025-11-02 13:36:00 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151280975 Please write all numbers lower than 100 in word form. (ex. 2 should be two).
Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-02 19:58:47 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151280975 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151281122 Topic Sentence: EDIT. James Cook is known for his three famous expeditions, the most famous being his third voyage.
Details/Facts: REVISION NEEDED. You definitely need more details (dates, locations, events).
Concluding Sentence: REVISION NEEDED. I don't see a concluding sentence]]> 2017-02-02 19:59:11 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151281122 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151281546 I need a better picture in order to edit. This one is too blurry and too far away.

]]> 2017-02-02 20:00:29 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151281546 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151281671 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: ok. Be sure all of your sentences are complete sentences.
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-02 20:00:51 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151281671 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282107 Topic Sentence: EDIT. Sebastian Vizcaino traveled on an expedition to find new land and claimed it for Spain.

Details/Facts: good

Concluding Sentence: REVISION NEEDED. I do not see a conclusion sentence. ]]> 2017-02-02 20:02:09 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282107 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282304 Topic Sentence: good.
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-02 20:02:40 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282304 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282429 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: GREAT! Your transitions were super!
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-02 20:03:05 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282429 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282689 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: excellent work!
Concluding Sentence: Combine your last two sentences into one power sentence.  ]]> 2017-02-02 20:03:49 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282689 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282965 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: REVISION NEEDED. ]]> 2017-02-02 20:04:40 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151282965 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151283445 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: More detail and facts are needed to beef up your paragraph.
Concluding Sentence: REVISION NEEDED. See me so we can tweak it slightly. ]]> 2017-02-02 20:06:06 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151283445 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151283754 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: Your concluding sentence is confusing. It looks unfinished. Please fix or see me for help if needed.  ]]> 2017-02-02 20:07:01 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151283754 cweighall https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151312507 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-02 22:10:52 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151312507 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151481353 Please see me for help.]]> 2017-02-03 16:10:42 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151481353 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151484234 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-03 16:18:39 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151484234 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151484916 Topic Sentence: EDIT an expedition.
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-03 16:20:33 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151484916 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151486210 Very nice work. Please be sure to CAPITALIZE names of people and places.
Topic Sentence: EDIT. In 1774...
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-03 16:24:08 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151486210 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151488323 2]]> 2017-02-03 16:30:24 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151488323 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151489042 Topic Sentence: REVISE. You need to include the word expedition in your topic sentence.

Details/Facts: good. You included a lot of detail. Well done. Remember to CAPITALIZE all names of people, places, months, etc.

Concluding Sentence: REVISE. You need a concluding sentence that bridges to the accomplishments paragraph. ]]> 2017-02-03 16:32:18 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151489042 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151942542 Topic Sentence: REVISE. James Cook is known for his three expeditions, the third being the most important to the development of California.

Details/Facts: good. Be sure to use past tense verbs.

Concluding Sentence: REVISE. I don't see a concluding sentence that bridges to the accomplishments paragraph. Please ADD one. ]]> 2017-02-06 19:14:53 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151942542 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151943328 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: ADD These doesn't seem finished to me. Please add more details/facts.
Concluding Sentence: ADD. I did not read a concluding sentence. Please add one. ]]> 2017-02-06 19:16:44 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/151943328 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/152308860 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: good
Concluding Sentence: good]]> 2017-02-07 21:30:02 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/152308860 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/152309286 Topic Sentence: good
Details/Facts: good (coast should be coastline)
Concluding Sentence: good (to go should be returned)]]> 2017-02-07 21:31:44 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/152309286 https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/152587855 2017-02-08 19:14:47 UTC https://padlet.com/cweighall/2638dfx04voa/wish/152587855