11am America 1908 by Merritt Moore

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deeremerritt — 2018-10-09 18:27:48 UTC

How does Rasenberger shift from one newsworthy event to the next? Think TRANSITIONS. Include one quote from the text, correctly cited in-text.
Does Rasenberger’s writing read like a chain of events or a story? Explain your response with 2 in-text cited examples.
As you read, find a well written portion of text that is descriptive (30-50 words), quote and cite it, then paraphrase it.

No Name

2018-10-10 15:46:03 UTC

Rasenberger's writing tends to write like a story for the majority of the time._{(Sounds awkward, fix the diction)} He avoids simple transitions like first, second, or third to keep the reader interested. An example of where Rasenberger tells more of a story then a sequence of events is, "That same day, at another end of the world, the man responsible for dispatching Louis Maxfield and his fellow sailors..."(pg.56). Rasenberger used multiple commas to explain a different setting; however, keeping the story connected to Roosevelt.

Great Nut

2018-10-10 15:47:49 UTC

1) I notice the Rasenberger goes from event to event by similar words, meaning he uses specific words in the end sentences of the first event and continues them into the beginning of the next event. For example, he would use the word “blueberry” in the end sentence of one paragraph and the first sentence of the next paragraph so they would feel unified but they would be different events.

No Name

2018-10-12 15:10:13 UTC

Grade: 60
Overall, the paper is just quotes without much structure. The paper would be stronger if the quotes were explained and properly cited.

What does an artificial heart look like? Describe.

Great Nut

2018-10-12 15:11:28 UTC

Also a 60.
In essence, this paper conveyed a rudimentary knowledge of his topic, although it was only scraping the surface. The language was awkward and unresolved, also there was inconsistency in spacing of paragraphs and indents.

1) What material is the heart made of?
2) Why was it the right material to use in the human body?

Quadrupe-Scoop

2018-10-12 15:17:32 UTC

We have this essay a 40 out of 100 due to the immense lack of organisation, understanding of spending and grammar, and effective use of research and quotation. It had a good amount content and research, but it needed 2 more drafts and a peer review to help with organisation and structure.

Connect 4

2018-10-12 15:19:18 UTC

Grade: 50
We’ve asked Steve, Why is everything quoted? What happened to being somewhat authentic? Why is such basic vocabulary used for such a sophisticated science topic

Buffalo-Quad

fontancb01 — 2018-10-12 15:22:48 UTC

We decided that he did not achieve any of the qualities due to his lack of editing. Which is why we gave it a 28/100.

Buffalo-Quad

fontancb01 — 2018-10-12 15:36:24 UTC

Rasenberger has ability to switch between completely different topics. He does this by making a clean comparison between the two topics, then swap right over to the next topic. Which he does when he compares Harry Thaw to Theodore Roosevelt. "That same day at another end of the world, the man responsible for dispatching Louis Magellan was once again stirring up concerns that his mental apparatus was nearly as flawed as poor as Harry Thaw's" (p 56).

Quadrupe-Scoop

2018-10-12 15:36:41 UTC

“Early on the afternoon of January 31, just as the Thaw jury was beginning deliberations in New York, the battleships of the Great White Fleet rounded the Southern tip of Argentina and turned westward into the mouth of the Strait of Magellan” (Rassenburgerp.55). Jim Ransenburger writes about an event as of it is a narrative, he then transitions by juxtaposing the event with another that is going on congruently. He often uses signal phrases such a short meanwhile to show the comparison of similar timelines.

Connect 4

2018-10-12 15:38:02 UTC

Rasenberger’s writing is a chain of events composed as a story. His writing diction is strategic as he is drawing his audience in more and more. His ocasional casual tone is what also makes the factual stories intriguing. For example when he wrote, “Thus, that winter, Times readers learned of a woman in New York who dug up her husband’s corpse in order to have her photograph taken with it...” (p.59), this line is an intriguing line that isn’t too wordy but still goes with the story.
Another line in 1908 that seemed visual and story like was when he said, “He observed the color of the snow as it shifted subtly from deep bruised purples toward dark violets.” This line creates a nice visual that would be seen in a story rather than something in just a regular chronological factual manner (p.71).

Great Nut

2018-10-12 15:40:49 UTC

1) Rasenberger sounds more like a chain of events creatively formatted into a story. Its strangely both, all the word uses are colorful and easy to read, and flow from one to another almost seamlessly.

Great Nut

2018-10-12 15:42:37 UTC

"Finally, of course, there were the true anarchists—the men and women who proudly called themselves by that label and proselytized the cause of overthrowing government, all government, by any means necessary. Generally portrayed as blood-crazed sociopaths or nihilists,”

(Rasenberger, Jim. America, 1908: The Dawn of Flight, the Race to the Pole, the Invention of the Model T and the Making of a Modern Nation (p. 79). Scribner. Kindle Edition.`)
There were those who were revolutionaries, Those who found pride In that title and passionately promote their belief of drastic political change. Often these people were depicted as fanatics and mad men

Quadrupe-Scoop

2018-10-22 15:37:27 UTC

Connect 4

2018-10-22 15:46:44 UTC

“The engine whirred to life. The propellers began to spin on the wings behind Wilbur. For a few moments, the plane remained motionless, held firmly from behind by a cable, tugging forward eagerly like a dog on a chain. Then Wilbur release the cable and the plane started down the track. “ (P.130)

The plane remained motionless for some time,

Quadrupe-Scoop

fontancb01 — 2018-10-22 15:47:46 UTC

Jim Ransenburger writes about different events in his narrative, he then transitions by juxtaposing the event with another that is going on congruently. He often uses signal phrases such a short meanwhile to show the comparison of similar timelines. “Early on the afternoon of January 31, just as the Thaw jury was beginning deliberations in New York, the battleships of the Great White Fleet rounded the Southern tip of Argentina and turned westward into the mouth of the Strait of Magellan” (Rassenburgerp.55).

Quadrupe-Scoop

2018-10-24 15:31:34 UTC

Americans in New York in 1908 tended to believe that the Giants were the best baseball team.

Conventional wisdom has it that you can't build higher than 2000 feet in New York City. According to Jim Rasenberger's book America 1908 "Scientific American asked how high a building could get, given the limits of physics and New York City's building code. (Two thousand feet seemed to be the approximate answer.)" (p.118)

Quadrupe-S

2018-10-24 15:31:38 UTC

Buffalo-Quad

fontancb01 — 2018-10-24 15:31:48 UTC

Americans in 1908 tended to believe that tall buildings were large and scary and they didn't really trust them. In his text, Jim Rasenberger describes the new architecture "skyscrapers are the monsters of the market"(p.117).

Conventional wisdom had it that AGAIN WE NEED A introductory PHRASE "a women's first obligation in this view was to get married and bear children"(p.120).

Common sense seems to dictate that no one will ever be able to fly. (p.124) Punctuate outside the quotations since this is a citation- the exception.

It is often said THIS IS NOT SOMETHING THAT IS OFTEN SAID< THIS WAS SPECIFICALLY SAID AND NOT A "STANDARD VIEW" FROM MY PERSPECTIVE BUT MAYBE I"M WRONG? CONVINCE ME PLEASE "the fleet's arrival in San Francisco had a special meaning to both the people onshore and the men on board"(p.129) NEEDS A PERIOD AT THE END- OOPS!

No Name

2018-10-24 15:32:40 UTC

Americans in 1908 tend to believe that, "A women's first obligation in this view was to get married and bear children" (120).

Common sense seems to dictate that you should not pay for something sight unseen, or as Rasenberger writes about the Wright Brothers' inventions, "No government or private enterprise wanted to buy a Wright airplane without first seeing a demonstration of its abilities" (127).

Great Nut

2018-10-24 15:33:29 UTC

1)Americans in 1908 often believed a woman’s first obligation was to We need an introductory PHRASE "get married and bear children."(120)

2) Conventional wisdom in 1908 stated that women had to wear heavy and extravagant clothing.

3) Common sense seemed to dictate that balloons and dirigibles were the superior form of aircraft. "seems" was the present tense and needed editing. Common sense usually focuses on common things, and flight was not common in 1908 so perhaps a different topic here would suit. For example, common sense seems to dictate that no matter what the fashions are, woman should dress appropriately for the weather when going outside. Then you could evidence the text when it speaks about women being blown over by all their petticoats.

Connect

2018-10-24 15:33:58 UTC

1. Americans in 1908 tend to believe that baseball was the best game.

2. Conventional wisdom has it that women ~~were made~~ should to stay at home and take care of the family.

3. Back in 1908, Common sense seems to dictate that the way that they viewed women were still contemporary.

4. It is often said that, “whenever gales hit town, the list of casualties always included a few women blown off course.”(119) Punctuation goes inside quotations, except for citations.

5. Back in 1908, Many people assume that b