DESCRIPTIVE WRITING by NURIN NAZIHAH BINTI MD DAUD IPG-Pelajar

PUBLISHING

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PRE-WRITING

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MAIN CHARACTERS:

Evelyn and Remi

SIDE CHARACTERS:

Evelyn’s parents and Remi’s parents

RISING ACTION

-Evelyn was a devotee Christian.

-Remi worshipped Buddha.

-Evelyn and Remi meet in college and form a deep friendship.

-They are aware of their religious differences.

-They talk openly about their backgrounds and the challenges they may face.

-They visit each other’s religious spaces with the families.

CLIMAX

-Evelyn and Remi decided to get married,despite knowing it may not be fully accepted by their families and communities.

-This decision represents the height of tension and emotional intensity asthey are choosing to stand by their love even in the face of potential judgement and resistance from those around them.

-They work together to create a wedding ceremony that honors both their traditions,combining elements from each faith to symbol the union of their lives.

FALLING ACTION

-Evelyn and Remi begin their married life together

-They have a discussion about how to raise their future children.

-Their families begin to see the respect and care that Evelyn and Remi have for one another.

-The families grow more accepting over time.

RESOLUTION

-Evelyn and Remi’s relationship gradually becomes a model of unity and respect,inspiring others in their families and communities.

-Their journey shows that love,mutual respect and open-mindedness can bridge differences and bring people closer.

-Creating a life filled with a harmony and understanding.

DRAFTING

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RISING ACTION
Evelyn and Remi meet in college and form a deep friendship, which soon blossoms into romantic feelings. They recognize the connection they share, but they are aware of their religious differences. After realizing their relationship is becoming serious, they begin to talk openly about their backgrounds and the challenges they may face. They visit each other’s religious spaces. These interactions deepen their bond but also highlight the potential difficulties in blending their faiths.

CLIMAX
When Evelyn and Remi decide to get married, despite knowing it may not be fully accepted by their families and communities. This decision represents the height of tension and emotional intensity, as they are choosing to stand by their love even in the face of potential judgment and resistance from those around them. They work together to create a wedding ceremony that honors both their traditions, combining elements from each faith to symbolize the union of their lives.

FALLING ACTION
After the wedding, Evelyn and Remi begin their married life together, facing the day-to-day realities of blending their two faiths. They have difficult discussions about how to raise their future children, deciding to teach them about both Christianity and Buddha. Their families, initially hesitant, begin to see the respect and care that Evelyn and Remi have for one another, and the families grow more accepting over time.

RESOLUTION
Evelyn and Remi relationship gradually becomes a model of unity and respect, inspiring others in their families and communities. They create a home that honors both religions, embracing diversity as a strength rather than an obstacle. Their journey shows that love, mutual respect, and open-mindedness can bridge differences and bring people closer together, creating a life filled with harmony and understanding.

REVISING

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Evelyn and Remi met during their first year of college in a shared literature class. Sara was a devotee Christian, and Remi followed Buddha. Though their faiths were different, they were drawn to each other through a mutual love for books and endless conversations. Late-night study sessions turned into long discussions about life, philosophy, and their dreams for the future. They found a deep connection that made them feel at home in each other’s presence. For a while, they didn’t focus on the religious differences that set them apart; they were simply two people who enjoyed each other’s company. But as their friendship grew into something deeper, both knew they were approaching a crossroad.

One chilly autumn afternoon, while walking in the park, Evelyn and Remi shared their concerns for the first time. Evelyn opened up, her voice soft. “I know my family has always wanted me to marry someone who shares our beliefs. They might not understand this.” Remi nodded. He knew the feeling well. “My family feels the same way. But I believe in us. If we’re willing to learn and respect each other’s beliefs, I think we can build a life together.”

That conversation marked the beginning of their journey to bridge the gap between their faiths. Over the next few months, they made a conscious effort to understand each other’s religions. Remi accompanied Evelyn to her church on Sundays, and Evelyn joined Remi family for celebrating Wesak’s Day . These experiences weren’t always easy—at times, they felt out of place or unsure of how to fully engage. But each effort brought them closer, giving them new ways to connect and respect each other’s spirituality. Slowly, their families began to see the genuine love and respect they shared, and a tentative acceptance began to grow.

When they decided to marry, Evelyn and Remi faced yet another set of challenges. Extended family members, family friends, and even religious leaders offered opinions on the potential difficulties of a marriage between two faiths. But Evelyn and Remi remained committed to their vision of a shared life built on understanding. At their wedding, they combined elements from both religions, creating a ceremony that represented the union of two faiths in a celebration of love.

Their marriage wasn’t without its struggles. There were moments of tension, especially around major holidays and decisions about how to raise their future children. But their commitment to each other and to honoring both faiths remained the foundation of their relationship. They agreed to raise their children with an understanding of both traditions, allowing them to learn about Christianity and Buddha with love and respect.

In time, their relationship became an inspiration to those around them, including their families. Evelyn and Remi proved that love, patience, and open-mindedness could overcome the challenges of a multi-faith relationship. They built a home that bridged two religions and embodied unity in diversity, showing that even the deepest differences could be met with compassion and respect.

PROOF-READING/EDITING

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• Change: “they were simply two people who enjoyed each other’s company”
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• Change: “Evelyn opened up, her voice soft”
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• Change: “made a conscious effort to understand each other’s religions”
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• Change: “Slowly, their families began to see the genuine love and respect they shared”
To: “Gradually, their families saw the genuine love and respect they shared.”

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• Change: “Extended family members, family friends, and even religious leaders offered opinions on the potential difficulties of a marriage between two faiths”
To: “Extended family members, friends, and even religious leaders voiced concerns about the challenges of an interfaith marriage.”

• Change: “remained committed to their vision of a shared life built on understanding”
To: “remained devoted to their vision of a life built on mutual understanding.”

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• Change: “Their marriage wasn’t without its struggles”

To: “Their marriage had its struggles.”

• Change: “allowing them to learn about Christianity and Buddha with love and respect”
To: “giving them the chance to learn about Christianity and Buddha in a home of love and respect.”

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• Change: “In time, their relationship became an inspiration to those around them, including their families.”
To: “Over time, their relationship inspired those around them, including their families.”
• Change: “a multi-faith relationship”
To: “an interfaith relationship.”