Group D argument essay by Laura Manzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful Reviewing first drafts en-us 2017-02-27 10:31:41 UTC 2023-10-24 20:18:41 UTC hello@padlet.com 2 lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356048 2017-02-27 10:32:16 UTC https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356048 5 lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356145 2017-02-27 10:32:45 UTC https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356145 3 lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356193 2017-02-27 10:33:00 UTC https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356193 4 lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356302 2017-02-27 10:33:37 UTC https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356302 1 lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356374 2017-02-27 10:34:01 UTC https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356374 6 lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356440 2017-02-27 10:34:23 UTC https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356440 7 lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356531 2017-02-27 10:34:47 UTC https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356531 Thinking about cohesion - repeating key words when you write lkmanzie https://padlet.com/lkmanzie/delightful/wish/156356614 Read the essay:
1. Highlight examples of good vocab repetition 
2. Highlight examples of bad vocab repetition
3. How could you change it? suggest an idea.

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With the turn of the century, the presence of internet has become a usual component of people's live. Internet related crime increasingly affects live of people

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