Notebook 5 by Katie Edwards Christlieb https://padlet.com/kaitlyn_mariah/1hqlyftj4tym 9a. Practice making your writing more concise. Select two paragraphs from a text you've recently written; use this website to rewrite the paragraphs https://writingstyle.wikispaces.com/Lesson+7+-+Concision. Write one more paragraph, describing the strategies you used for concision. en-us 2017-10-07 02:50:21 UTC 2017-10-07 03:10:45 UTC hello@padlet.com Revision kaitlyn_mariah https://padlet.com/kaitlyn_mariah/1hqlyftj4tym/wish/194874188   I sat there pondering how I should tell them and what I should say. Sitting on the bedroom floor in my room, I started to bite my nails out of nervous habit. Today is the day. I got up, walked across the hall and started to knock on my parents’ door. My mother opened the bedroom door, greeted me with a smile and asked “what’s going on?” I played it off as if I wasn’t going to tell them anything extraordinary. I began to say “I need to tell you and dad something.” My mother had a look on her face of worry and curiosity, as typically I would blabber out everything that was on my mind. Little did they know that what I was about to tell them would probably ruin their lives forever, at least that’s what I think. 

            “Um, I like this girl at my school… More than a friend.” I didn’t want to tell them that I thought I was Lesbian or Bisexual because honestly, I do not know and I probably shouldn’t say any more than what I just did. All I know is that I have feelings for both sexes for a while now and I had to tell my parents how I felt. My mother’s face is looking appalled, while my father started to chuckle as if I was telling a joke. My dad proceeded with using my full name, “Kaitlyn…” I instantly began to regret my decision of telling them the truth. 

]]> 2017-10-07 02:55:13 UTC https://padlet.com/kaitlyn_mariah/1hqlyftj4tym/wish/194874188 What I learned... kaitlyn_mariah https://padlet.com/kaitlyn_mariah/1hqlyftj4tym/wish/194874223 I kept reading my two paragraphs over and over again as I followed the nine steps. I was able to take out words that had no meaning. Rephrase my sentences and cut out repetitive words. Even now as I am writing this I am struggling because I am used to using the filler words. I think the hardest part in my two paragraphs was trying to replace negatives to affirmatives. It feels odd and different. I do like these tools and I think they will benefit me when I do peer reviews and when I need to edit my own papers. Especially when I have to stay within a word count. I can take out the words and rephrase sentences to make it fit. ]]> 2017-10-07 02:55:50 UTC https://padlet.com/kaitlyn_mariah/1hqlyftj4tym/wish/194874223