Zoe Google Sites Peer Feedback 2019 - 2020 by Zoe Lessing https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 15:53:08 UTC 2026-01-17 03:27:18 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f680.png Story feedback 26kparchman https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/421695841 I love how in the beginning of your story you describe what Ruby and Romeo were wearing. I also liked how you said they ran into the meanest teacher ever it really brought some fright to the story. The one thing I did not understand what they were talking about something with Dubai and Paris France it did not make much sense to me.


-Kaylee
]]> 2019-12-09 16:34:07 UTC https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/421695841 Something I really liked about your story was that your character’s emotions we clear and the main character, ( Ruby) changed her perspective. For example, when Ruby said, “ It doesn't matter what Heather gets to do I now know that other people do things that others don’t get to do.” It feels good to have a chance to say this or else I would have ended up a really mean person. After this I should go apologize to Heather, Nancie, and Millie,”. This showed that Ruby knew that before she was being kind of a brat and wants to make up for her bad behavior. Another thing I liked about your narrative, “ Romeo” was when the narrator said, ““No running!” He lectured.“Ok,” Ruby and Romeo said in sync. They giggled as they sped off through the hall past Heather, Millie, and Nancie,” because it reminded me of some of the times in school where you and me would be skipping in the hallway because we can’t run. Something I wish you would have incorporated is more detail about why she gets to go to Paris, France every summer. Does she have family there? All in all this was an amazing story. 26anazariosharpe https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/422196532 2019-12-10 15:07:35 UTC https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/422196532 One thing I recommend you is to make your story more longer so if they like your story they can read more and be a little more creativity. Another thing is that you said that your chapter was jealous but you have to make it really jealous. And like your theme when you say she is jealous and then she became graceful that is a good theme. https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/422234516 2019-12-10 15:55:28 UTC https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/422234516 Zoe omg I love your story i love how detailed it is its like I’m living it! Another thing is I love your chose of words when your using dialogue very creative. Lastly for my wish you should expand your story more! 26bkgordon https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/1074285098 2021-01-11 14:49:40 UTC https://padlet.com/26zlessing/1g8oexjj0uz/wish/1074285098