https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6 Write down the one positive and one element needing improvement and it should be anonymous en-us 2022-11-10 11:12:59 UTC 2022-11-13 23:44:45 UTC hello@padlet.com leelamap https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379509361 Good - Paragraph Structure
Improve - Explaining things in more detail
(Not 100% sure) ]]> 2022-11-11 01:21:26 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379509361 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379509383 One of the many things my partner did really well is looking into the poster with lots of depth. They made sure to look into the poster with lots of detail. Something they could work on is developing a little more structure and formality. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:21:26 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379509383 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379511584 Good paragraph and descriptive but should have added techniques.]]> 2022-11-11 01:22:55 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379511584 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379512384 2022-11-11 01:23:34 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379512384 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514002 Had good linking, but needs to be more depth with the techniques.]]> 2022-11-11 01:24:50 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514002 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514122 Interesting and descriptive introduction.
could possible have mentioned 'the Uglies' more ]]> 2022-11-11 01:24:56 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514122 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514232 Discusses and describes the image very well and makes a connection to the book. Very good if it was finished.]]> 2022-11-11 01:25:02 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514232 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514586 The point about the positioning of the man in the milk ad is again one. You could however have added a bit more information about the slogan. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:25:19 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379514586 leelamap https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515440 Something my partner did well in is critizing the advertisement and finding points. However, they could improve on stating their point slightly earlier. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:25:59 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515440 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515781 Very well structured PEEL paragraph with an interesting idea of a salient image. Could have added a link sentence at the end.]]> 2022-11-11 01:26:14 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515781 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515821 The paragraph constructively conveyed the harmful message present in the advertisement. However, it may have been more effective if they linked it to the book more. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:26:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515821 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515822 Jaiden's Peel paragraph was probably (I guess) amazing until it got deleted by his evil computer. This ruined Jaiden's life but at least Khalid got to relax.]]> 2022-11-11 01:26:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515822 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515823 It should have more points and information. They should also go further into depth about their point. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:26:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515823 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515974 2022-11-11 01:26:23 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379515974 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516170 good linking of techniques, link sentence was a bit boring and generic]]> 2022-11-11 01:26:34 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516170 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516399 Really good explanation of what happens in the book. Remember to actually link back to your idea.]]> 2022-11-11 01:26:45 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516399 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516445 My partner did well by using persuasive techniques and listing down different types of rhetorical questions he also didn't write much. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:26:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516445 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516744 Very descriptive paragraph which points out many techniques and links back to the book, could condense it more ]]> 2022-11-11 01:27:04 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516744 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516827 my partner did well listing down the different persuasive techniques, but didn't expand on the techniques nor did he have any structure. And he wrote 2 setences. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:27:07 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379516827 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379517386 Positive :) - Strong link between the novel and the advertisement displaying the direct message trying to be brought across. 

One thing to work on:  use of punctuation and sentence structure. There were minimal full stops and repetitive language.]]> 2022-11-11 01:27:31 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379517386 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379517729 A long point sentence, however every other point was written succinctly and really well :) ]]> 2022-11-11 01:27:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379517729 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379517896 very good paragraph structure

could improve on mentioning the book more ]]> 2022-11-11 01:27:57 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379517896 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379519384
really good use of techniques and language. only to link back to the main point. ]]> 2022-11-11 01:29:08 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379519384 https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379520334 was very decriptive and the paragraph was intriguing. could have linked it back to the original point]]> 2022-11-11 01:29:56 UTC https://padlet.com/jessicacampbell99/1fbqn4u6bakwe1y6/wish/2379520334