Mia P. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2020 - 2021 by Mia Powell https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 13:38:47 UTC 2021-06-18 17:29:01 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png Janat Moudiab https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1068486863 I like your piece because there are so much thing’s happen you add details that make me fell like i am there.
Btw i like you saiki k picture ]]> 2021-01-08 19:25:54 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1068486863 Devasrigauri Lokesh devasrigauri https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513051645 I liked the way you  ended your first part of the hook paragraphs, and a they way you smoothly switched to another part. In addition I also loved you ending and all the question you put in and the your zinger. But you could also add a little more to your conclusion paragraph ]]> 2021-05-11 12:41:54 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513051645 Patrick 27pboyle https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513054501 Hi Mia a strength of your essay, “kids love art” in the way you we discrptive with your paragraph in the warrant. As you tell the importance of the evidence you do not just say what data you got you tell them what the data means. While do so, you truly support each of yours statements/claims in your body paragraph with great arguments and reasoning. To add, i like the way connecting the phrases help the reader figure out how your points are the same and back one another.a suggestion i have is that tell the reader more about how we can tell the parents to let us have art]]> 2021-05-11 12:42:42 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513054501 Jaslene gonzalez 27jgonzalez1 https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513114667 1# star:i like how you state that behind art is the fun of being creative and enjoying yourself and how it helps with your grades/education and how kids should enjoy the opportunity.
1# wish:my one wish is that  i was longer because your eassy hooked me to read more about how art should be allowed in schools.
2#star is that art is more enjoy full then doing what subject that they loved before.
]]> 2021-05-11 12:57:34 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513114667 naima 27npilgrim https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513131243 The reason I liked the beginning of your piece because you had a strong anecdote and I also liked how you put a lot in those two body paragraphs  . Your piece was really good in general. You had really good points I liked how you really elaborate. You also used really good transition words.I saw you use the same claim over again but its no big deal maybe next time you could try and use a different claim that goes with the second body paragraph. 



]]> 2021-05-11 13:01:33 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1513131243 Savannah Hudson https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1612367098 Hi Mia, I really enjoyed reading your creative writing piece. I love horror so I really enjoyed the part where the ladies had really long necks. I also liked how you decorated your slides so nicely and neat. Although I do wish that the story was a bit longer because I was a little sad when the story ended and wanted to hear more. 


]]> 2021-06-17 14:24:44 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1612367098 Jaslene gonzalez https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1612545798 #1 (star) i like how you gave a reason not to cry because scary things will happen and the story behind it i thought it was incredible how you made your own piece/your version of the Japanese story you heard of 
2# (star) another thing i like about your absolutely amazing piece is that your whole piece of your writing was organized amazingly and i liked your story.
3#(wish) my one wish is that you made a another story like this connected  to this story because i thought it was great story is wanted to read more.]]> 2021-06-17 15:47:46 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1612545798 Essay 27pboyle https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1612628879 Hi i think that it was vary creative how you said they tied here with the ladies long necks. I think it was cool how you showed us pictures of what things looked like. Can you write more next time tho thx  ]]> 2021-06-17 16:27:17 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1612628879 Janet Moudiab https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1614721641 I ever ever much like this pice i like how you gave credit instead of keeping the idea for yourself and the only thing i think you should change is the ending and make it a bit more interesting ]]> 2021-06-18 17:29:01 UTC https://padlet.com/27mpowell/1b05mspn5bt0vpkl/wish/1614721641