"La Belle Dame Sans Merci" by Principessa with the Scorpion Tattoo https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age Your Version of Keats' Ballad en-us 2017-03-03 16:19:44 UTC 2025-10-26 16:06:27 UTC hello@padlet.com Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157712440 The imagery is amazing, I love the contrast between the ocean and the inferno
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:00:00 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157712440 Joe https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713158 this poem is very emotional and natural
-apoorva 


]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:20 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713158 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713181 I like how you repeated the last stanza to show a cycle. 
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:25 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713181 Joe https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713197 The rhymes and rhythm flow together well. 
- Hadia

]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:29 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713197 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713224 I enjoy the intimacy in this, Joseph.
- Liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:34 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713224 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713239 Your ballad is similar to La Bells Sans Merci in the theme of spurned love

]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:36 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713239 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713245 I can relate, I like how intimate this ballad is.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:36 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713245 Joe, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713252 Have you shared this poem with your friend?
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:41 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713252 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713278 I really love these rhymes. It feels really natural. None of the sentences felt forced to fit a rhyme. - Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713278 Parthi https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713285 I like the multiple nature metaphors throughout the poem. 
Anushka]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713285 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713286 We've all been there!! -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713286 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713294 I like how raw and open this poem is.
- Caitlin ]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:50 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713294 Joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713309 Your diction is tear-jerking
--Nick ]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:52 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713309 joe, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713324 thank you for opening up so much to us.
-angel 

]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:56 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713324 Joe. https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713343 your ballad is so fluent.

-Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:02:58 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713343 Joe https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713350 I like the passion. Respect

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:03:01 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713350 Apoorva, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713943 Your life will resonate for years on end.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:04:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713943 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713991 Plot twist. -Parthi

]]> 2017-03-03 19:04:57 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157713991 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714022 I like the way you revealed "High School's" name.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:02 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714022 Apoorva https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714028 I like that I can relate to your ballad. 

- Hadia ]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714028 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714039 I love how you personified high school and left it unnamed until the end. -Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:04 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714039 Apoorve https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714041 I like how the syllables of the words that afflict your character are stressed
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:05 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714041 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714043 I strongly identify with the struggle of someone trying to make their high school matter...I think we can all relate to the pressure - Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:05 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714043 Apoorva https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714051 I do dream of straight A's, how did you know?

Liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714051 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714056 I like how relatable the poem is when it comes to the pressure of high school.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714056 Apoorva https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714069 Is this about Ms. Corsun?

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:10 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714069 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714098 Do you think this problem can be solved? I can relate to your problems.
-Sherwin Yu]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:16 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714098 Joe https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714100 The context of your poem is dynamic
-MC
]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:16 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714100 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714111 The rhythm of your ballad draws readers in as the struggle of the ballad is revealed.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:18 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714111 Aporva https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714164 You have a very well rounded background in your poem
-MC]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:28 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714164 Apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714201 you're poem does a nice job capturing the struggles of a high school senior 
-AMie]]> 2017-03-03 19:05:34 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714201 apoorva, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714421 senioritis is real
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:06:26 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714421 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714513 I like how you use "you" because it makes it seem like you are only talking to the person.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:06:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714513 Parthi https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714519 I firmly enjoy the adjective you have used

LIWAG]]> 2017-03-03 19:06:53 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714519 parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714536 your choice of words is captivating as well as your choice to intertwine nature into your ballad about love.
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:06:57 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714536 Parthi https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714560 I like the connection with fire and water with regards to the conflict associated with love...wild fire, crushing tide...both are forces of nature that do not yield to human desire -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:00 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714560 Parthi, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714567 I love the opposition between fire and the ocean. Vivid imagery.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:01 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714567 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714575 The metaphor of sinking in an ocean is very powerful imagery.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714575 Parthi https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714584 I can perfectly imagine two fiery and cool characters cancelling each other until they're dull. The relationship between your two characters is tragic.
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:05 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714584 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714600 You make it easy to imagine the story because of your vivid details.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714600 Parthi https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714617 Your use of rhetorical questions enhance your ballad. 
- Hadia]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:10 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714617 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714638 I love the constant use of the storm and fire metaphors and how they contrast with each other.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714638 Parthi https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714640 I like the use of imagery and vivid description

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714640 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714649 The descriptions of nature, make significantly strengthen your message.
-Kevin

]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:15 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714649 parthi https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714662 your poem's language is so vivid and clear

-apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:18 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714662 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714694 Invokes deep emotion
-MC]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:25 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714694 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714813 your figurative language and fairy-tale elements are well-worded

-Amie ]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714813 Parthi, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714842
Your use of detail and imagery creates a vivid image in my mind.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:07:58 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157714842 Chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715195 I like the contrast between "heaven" and "hell" 
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:08:55 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715195 Chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715206 While the juxtaposition of heaven and hell are used often to discuss opposites, you are successful in taking this comparison and succeeding in a many people would would fail to do - Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:08:57 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715206 Chris https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715207 Your sensory imagery, along with the title illustrates your story amazingly.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:08:57 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715207 Chris, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715210 You knew that was coming. I hate to hear about people breaking my cherubs' hearts.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:08:59 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715210 Chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715214 I like how you describe the realization of love and how it twists into darkness.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:08:59 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715214 Chris https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715233 I love how you called her heaven and you hell. The description is really apt, especially about the distance. 
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715233 chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715250 the contrast in your ballad between light and dark/ heaven and hell is quite captivating. it helps amplify your writing greatly
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715250 Chris https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715259 i like the contrast of your poem between heaven and hell symbolizing you and the girl 
-apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715259 Chris https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715260 The contrast between Heaven and Hell resonates with me.
Hadia]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715260 Chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715263 I really enjoy how this should be a happy love story, but instead your insecurities are being explained instead.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715263 Christopher https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715277 I greatly enjoy the role of the "good" and the "bad" in this ballad]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:09 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715277 Chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715288 the manner in which you express your sentiments can be felt which makes your use of imagery successful.
Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:11 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715288 Chris https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715295 I like how your character saw her in the darkness he lived in because it maintains an ideal that they are two sides of the same coin instead of her completely changing his personality. 
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715295 Chris https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715311 I like the way you represented opposites between the ideas of heaven and hell.

Anushka]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:15 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715311 Caitlin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715329 The slow pace of your poem captures your love of the ocean.
- Kevin]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:19 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715329 Chris https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715411 Great use of iambic tetrameter and iambic trimeter
-MC]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:34 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715411 Chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715477 I like how you personify heaven and hell as two people. It gives me a taste of how you and the person in the poem must fit together. -Parthi

]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:48 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715477 Chris, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715492 the detail and emotion of you're poem is so meaningful

Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:09:52 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715492 Christopher https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715807 I wish she would have been yours! 
LIWAG]]> 2017-03-03 19:10:58 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715807 Caitlin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715885 I like how you describe your body's reactions.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715885 Caitlin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715909 I enjoy the imagery of your anxiety and nervousness, it makes the poem more interesting.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:17 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715909 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715922 I like how your character not only endured the environment but befriended. Your story is promising
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:20 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715922 Caitlyn https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715929 I can really visualize your words because of the vivid imagery.
- Hadia ]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:21 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715929 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715932 I like the description of how you felt physically because of emotions.

Anushka ]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:22 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715932 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715958 I really like the description of nature in your surroundings. They were vivid and you made great use of them in terms of metaphor. 
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:27 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715958 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715971 I like the association of water with a calming embrace...water begins as an adversary but becomes a source of comfort -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:29 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715971 Caitlin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715973 your use of the five senses in your ballad is beautiful. it completely allows for a more personal connection for the reader.
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715973 Caitlyn, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715974 Your illustration on the ledge is chilling. Great job
-Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715974 Catie, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715985 Your words hold a sense of urgency that I can feel. -Parthi

]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:31 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715985 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715987 I enjoy the vivid description you have used in your ballad
Liwag ]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:31 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157715987 Caitlin, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716000 Slow down. Love your water imagery.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:31 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716000 Caitlin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716037 your use of detail and the manner in which you set up the scene makes it easy to feel the adrenaline as the character stands upon the building. The childhood memories add to the sentimental aspect.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:37 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716037 Caitlin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716075 your ballad is a nice, hopeful tone compared to "La Belle Dame Sans Merci"

Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:45 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716075 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716078 i like how the ending is resolved so that the struggle is worth it 
Apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:45 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716078 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716100 Your sensory images are vivid through the use of your vocabulary.
-MC]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716100 Caitlin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716103 I like the metaphor of the ocean. The descriptions help the reader and listener feel the water around them as well.

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:11:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716103 Nick, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716463 This poem sounds very captivating and similar to La Belle. -Parthi

]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:09 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716463 Nicolauz https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716483 I enjoy the intimacy in your ballad, very descriptive 

LIWAG]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716483 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716516 I like how the ballad sounds like an adventure

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:20 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716516 nick, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716535 the flow of your ballad is beautiful and it feels very out of wordly 
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:23 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716535 Nicholas https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716543 The dialogue in your poem makes it very nice to listen to and adds wisdom to your message.]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:24 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716543 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716544 I liked the rhythm and how you represented the relationship, relating it to gothic topics and ideas seen in The Castle of Otranto.

Anushka

]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:25 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716544 Nick, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716552 Beautifully written. Thanks for being brave enough to share with us.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:26 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716552 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716553 Your feelings are on the paper and expressed very clearly.
-Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:27 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716553 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716601 You give Keats a run for his money -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:36 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716601 Nick, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716608 I like the contrast you set up with the characters and the poem and the admiration you create in tis felt.]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:37 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716608 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716646 I really love your descriptions of falling in love. It feels fantasy-like and is filled with a lot of passion.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:44 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716646 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716679 your use of adjectives help to frame the poem just like in la belle dame 
apoorva


]]> 2017-03-03 19:13:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716679 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716696 2017-03-03 19:13:56 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716696 Nick, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716735 I like the passion portrayed through your details.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:14:05 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716735 Nick, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716736 I really like your use of double entendre!

Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:14:05 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716736 Nick https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716855 Very brave. Respect
-MC.]]> 2017-03-03 19:14:28 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716855 @Everyone, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716884 My ballad is called Broken Waves. -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:14:34 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157716884 jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717332 the shift from happy to sad  was very clear, I like how it was a cycle such as how the white teeth went from good to bad

]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:28 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717332 Nick, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717341 I like how you used dialogue and the "monkey see monkey do" part
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717341 jenny, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717350 the shift from light to dark is captivating. if this is based off true events, i hope that your heart mends. many of us have gone through this 
-angel]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:31 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717350 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717353 Your poetic language serves to both vividly describe your situation and to deliver your message in a straightforward manner -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:31 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717353 J3nny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717372 I notice the transition in this relationship, very deep and emotional
LIWAG

]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:33 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717372 Jenny, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717394 I like how time is a part of your story, it shows the power of your experience. -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:37 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717394 Jenny, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717398 I like the straightforwardness of your message... Heartbreak is slow and painful.

Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:38 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717398 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717414 I appreciate how much you poured yourself into this ballad. It shows in your descriptions and made it very memorable.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717414 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717420 Your self reflection made for a great poem.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717420 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717434 the shifts in your ballad provides a nice shift from romance to heartbreak to reality]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:45 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717434 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717440 I like how the ballad takes a completely different tone  in the middle.

- Hadia

]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:45 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717440 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717443
I appreciate how intimate and personal this ballad is, you mention many personal actions that are hard to say.

Anushka]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:46 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717443 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717446 I think your story about corruption is quite revealing of your character
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717446 Jen https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717448 Very relatable. The transition of crush to stranger is common, but is interesting through your eyes

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717448 Jenny, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717452 I am sorry that you had to suffer heartbreak.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:15:48 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717452 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717555 I like the shift after the "two months" and how you use the same words to describe the guy.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:16:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717555 Jenny, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717649 I like how the poem reveals something about you and how you convey your emotions.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:16:21 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717649 Jenny https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717888 Very romantic
-MC]]> 2017-03-03 19:17:08 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157717888 Sherwin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718142 I like how you use the same stanza to start a different tone in the ballad
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:01 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718142 Sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718169 Repetitive sentences contributed to the overall effect of the ballad.

- hadia

]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:08 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718169 sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718179 i like how you talk about the fakeness and carelessness of high school relationships, it is very applicable to all of us today

apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:09 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718179 Sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718183 I like how your ballad is in third person. It really emphasizes the difference between how people see you as a happy person and how numb you actually are.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:10 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718183 Sher, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718186 I like how you mentioned that high schoolers kiss people but don't know each other's names. Strong. -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:11 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718186 Sherwin, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718191 "The music beat on endlessly. For hours he was deaf." The words of a true poet.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718191 sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718194 The actions portrayed in this poem make it very real and relatable. It was very intimate and personal

Anushka

]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718194 Sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718202 While many ballads focus on love, your ballad takes on empty passion, and I commend you for that -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718202 Sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718205 Your description of high school is on point.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:14 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718205 Sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718208 I firmly enjoy the description you have written of this person you speak of 
LIWAG]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:14 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718208 sherwin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718209 the "people just faking passion" line was very tear jerking. im sure we all know people like this.
-angel 

]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:14 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718209 Sherwin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718239 your ballad effectively embodies high school life as you go through the details of how conversations and relationships are mostly hollow and meaningless.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:21 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718239 Sherwin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718247 A party is usually fun and exciting but the description from your ballad gives another perspective of a typical high school party. It is refreshing in a dark, twisted way.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:23 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718247 Sherley https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718263 I like how the transition from city life to home is contrasting


-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:26 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718263 Sherwin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718271 I like how your poem embodies nonconformity
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:27 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718271 Sherwin https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718405 Strong social commentary
-MC]]> 2017-03-03 19:18:56 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718405 Sherwin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718444 What happened to the boy?

-Kevin]]> 2017-03-03 19:19:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718444 Sherwin, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718461 you ballad, despite repeating "happy laughing boy" has such a deep tone of solitude

Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:19:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718461 sneh, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718902 i like how your ballad is light and airy. it is a nice break from the deepness of many of the other ballads as beautiful as those are.
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:33 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718902 Sneh, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718905 While I cannot identify with the struggles of being female (how can I?) but your poem provides telling insight - Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:33 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718905 Sneh, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718912 I like how you contrast the two sides of being a girl. Your message is strong. -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:34 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718912 Sneh, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718918 You go, girl!! I'm going to share Gloria Steinem's recent OpEd from the New York Times with you.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:35 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718918 Sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718927 I like the rhyme scheme you used in beginning stanza
liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:36 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718927 Sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718942 Your point of view is foreign to me as a male, great depiction.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:38 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718942 sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718945 I really enjoyed your topic
i think that the message behind the poem was strong even through we have made strides in women's equality 
apoorva 

]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:38 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718945 Sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718947 I love the message behind your ballad. Strong girls can still be girls as seen in the beginning of your ballad.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:39 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718947 Sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718954 The shifts in the ballad made it resonating
Hadia

]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:40 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157718954 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719009

]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719009 Sneh, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719010 your ballad is so enlightening on the gender inequality

Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719010 Sneh, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719021 I like how your character staid resilient to society's wishes.
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:20:50 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719021 Sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719076 You can be anything you want to be.

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:21:00 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719076 Sneh, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719131 I like how you give a personal anecdote to defy why society place men above women and how you are not okay with all the expectations of society.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:21:08 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719131 sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719160 I liked how this was not a typical romantic relationship. You can portray love without it being a romantic, personal love-- you can love a thing, or an idea.

Anushka

]]> 2017-03-03 19:21:14 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719160 Sneh, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719449 Your description of the world changing as you grow older is enlightening.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:09 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719449 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719466 Pouring yourself into another person is hard, and you couldn't have explained it any better.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:11 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719466 Johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719518 I love that line, "I saw a lot of me in her." -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:19 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719518 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719526 "Do I jump off of the plane or do I wait for it to crash" - Possibly the strongest line in your poem (save for the last) and really describes your no win situation - Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:20 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719526 johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719533 the line about the plane crashing was very nice as i had never really looked at love like that before.
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:21 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719533 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719567 I liked the double entendre and how personal and intimate this poem was.

Anushka]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719567 Johnson, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719618 I love the line "Do I jump off the plane or do I wait for it to crash." Conveys desperation.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:39 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719618 Johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719620

]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:40 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719620 Johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719621
your ballad nicely captures the unfortunate emotions of heartbreak

Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:40 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719621 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719638 Very creative title John, I love it!
Liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:43 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719638 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719679 I like the play on words, "Miss Erray" and "misery"

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:50 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719679 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719686 I love your title

- Hadia]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719686 Johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719702 I like how write about the similarities and the metaphor about the plane. 
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:54 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719702 johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719728 your poem was very deep and the rhymes flowed very naturally 
apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:22:58 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719728 Johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719742 The mess-mop metaphor reflects a beautiful symbiotic relationship while maintaining some level of mundaness

I like the ambiguity of the title

--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:23:01 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719742 Johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719751 I like the comparison you set up between the characters and you effectively set up the tone of sadness as you build up to why this person is so important to you.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:23:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719751 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719788 She would be your mop? She will clean up the mess that you are? Fire.

Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:23:09 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719788 Johnson, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719941 I like your word play. It makes the ballad entertaining yet personal with the raw emotions.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:23:36 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157719941 Johnson https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720033 Good word play
-MC]]> 2017-03-03 19:23:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720033 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720152 I love the adjectives used in your ballad

liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:14 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720152 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720161 Your criticism of the subject of your poem is strong, I feel as if I knew him/her.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:15 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720161 Sneh https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720174 I like the positive and the empowering tone of your ballad.

Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:18 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720174 Hadia, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720204 I like how the childlike attitude changes quickly. -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:23 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720204 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720216
I like the growth shown in the characters in the poem. It is interesting to see how the characters change as a result of other characters.

Anushka ]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:25 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720216 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720235 I really like the second person perspective. How you address the person feels much more real and makes the poem memorable.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720235 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720246 i like your title and its relation to la belle dame 
apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720246 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720296 I like how the contrast between the past and present gives strength to one another.


-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:39 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720296 hadia, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720300 your ballad was very beautiful specifically because of the message about how life can tear you down and make someone something that they are not.
-angel

]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:40 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720300 Hadia, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720329 you vividly describe the changes to demonstrate the character's transition from being open and fun to dull and closed. The changes go from physical to internal changes that have even affected the look in their eyes.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:46 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720329 Hadia, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720334 I like that you use Keats' wild wild eyes.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720334 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720349 I like how you used "wild wild eyes" from Keats to amplify the meaning of your ballad
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720349 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720368 Unlike Keats "wild wild eyes," yours are not hollow passion...this wildness is complex, deep, and much better developed]]> 2017-03-03 19:24:53 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720368 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720425 i like the way you write about the time it is time to leave the person
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:25:04 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720425 Hadia, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720529 2017-03-03 19:25:24 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720529 Hadia, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720533 The repetition of "wild wild eyes" adds emphasis on the development of the people with in the ballad.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:25:25 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720533 Hadia https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720748
i like your allusion to "La Belle Dame Sans Merci" with "wild wild eyes"

Amie]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:00 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720748 Hadia, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720883 Nice allusion to Keats.

-Kevin]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:23 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720883 Anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720951 Your sensory imagery really painted a vivid picture.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:35 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720951 Anushka, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720981 I love that she is a fire. It really shows me she can burn through the pain. -Parthi

]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:39 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720981 Anushka, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720993 No damsel in distress!! You are a "City of a Woman"!
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720993 Anushka, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720994 Mimics the relationship between Elizabeth and Darcy; this universality of gender roles adds another depth to your ballad
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157720994 Anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721008 The flow of your ballad is very nicely done, great job!

liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:45 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721008 anushka, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721018 your ballad contrasts many others with a damsel in distress message which was nice. i can see aspects of la belle dame sans merci in your writing
-angel]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721018 anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721031 the topic of unrequited love is painful and relatable to most people in high school 
I like how you have the questions and emotions the girl faces 
apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721031 Anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721034 I really liked your description of the break up talk. Something so simple and short is packed with so much emotion.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721034 Anushka, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721052 I like the characterization of the girl and how she changes throughout the ballad.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:26:52 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721052 Anushka, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721098 Its easy to feel how she feels about the guy due to your vivid and meticulously chosen details used to describe her feelings. And on top of that the narration through heart break is emotional.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:02 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721098 Anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721111 I like how fast paced the ballad is. Shows off how love can come quick, but also leave just as fast

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721111 Hadia, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721112 I like the adjectives that really explained your feelings.

Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:04 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721112 Anushka, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721168 I love the obvious battle between the two characters; the girl is in love and the boy does not reciprocate those feelings.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721168 Anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721170 While many ballads employ a damsel in distress, you are the champion of your poem -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721170 Anushka, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721233
I can sense the feelings of betrayal by the end of the ballad

Hadia

]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:24 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721233 Anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721278 I like the somber message of your poem.

Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:33 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721278 Anushka https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721412 I felt the emotion in your voice and in your words.

- Hadia]]> 2017-03-03 19:27:57 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721412 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721659 Very emotional and sensational ballad, Angel. I enjoy that this ballad was personal.
liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:28:48 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721659 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721697 Your description of the butterflies and downfalls of the first love...for those of us who have had our firsts, we stand with you and understand the pain of the first love that does not last -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:28:58 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721697 Angel, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721722 I like how you specify your age. It shows how much you've grown. -Parthi]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721722 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721728 Your depiction of heartbreak is on both sides of the spectrum. Amazing.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721728 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721729 The two male characters foil both each other and the main character--I like it
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721729 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721734 I like how you begin your ballad and how you describe the effect love had on you. 
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721734 Angel, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721736 You are too young to swear off love forever!
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721736 angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721756 i think the way that keats characterized the knight as a victim relates to the way you were but then you shifted to a situation in which you were the "villain" and you were able to see your own mistakes which is difficult to do 
apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721756 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721764 I like how you mention how young you were when you fell in love because it shows that you do not need to be older to fall in love with someone. I enjoy how relatable the ballad is when it comes to the hardships of relationships.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721764 Angel, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721785 I like your opening sentence: I thought forever was for real. The year makes this even more powerful considering it was only two years ago. Your poem is very moving and personal.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:16 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721785 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721788 I loved those last few stanzas of your poem. They were packed with a lot of emotion and were extremely sad.
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:17 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721788 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721797 I like the intimacy and how personal the story is

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:19 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721797 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721814 Your use of adjectives reflect your emotions.

- Hadia]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:22 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721814 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721822
I like the repetition before and after your feelings changed. It shows how one's perception of someone else can change as a result of outer incidents.

Anushka ]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:24 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721822 Angel, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721855
the explicitness of your poem reveals]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:29 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721855 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721975 I like the accuracy of your poem--giving time frame to  your poem elevates it.

Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:29:54 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157721975 Angel https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722117 Nice AABB rhyme scheme. ]]> 2017-03-03 19:30:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722117 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722177 I love the allusion to "O Captain! My Captain! -Joe]]> 2017-03-03 19:30:44 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722177 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722194 I enjoy the relationship you have with sister, very similar to the relationship I have with my siblings

liwag]]> 2017-03-03 19:30:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722194 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722243 your admiration for your sister can greatly be felt. She is clearly your inspiration which creates a heart warming feeling.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-03 19:30:57 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722243 Amie, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722294 I feel your appreciation and love for your sister.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:08 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722294 Amie, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722351 I like how "O sister, my sister" is similar to "O captain, my captain." -Parthi

]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:20 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722351 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722354 I like how the role model dynamic between you and your sister is described

-Chris]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:21 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722354 Amielyn, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722388 Have you shared your poem with your sister? 
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:27 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722388 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722401 I like the allusion to "Oh Captain, My Captain!" with your title: "Oh Sister, My Sister."
-Johnson]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:32 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722401 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722405 I like how you go to your sister for comfort
Sneh]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:33 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722405 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722429
Akshay]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:39 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722429 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722430 I like how origional your ballad is because it's about filial love instead of romantic love.
--Nick]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:40 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722430 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722472 I like that this is not the typical romantic relationship poem-- you express emotions in reaction to another cause.

Anushka

]]> 2017-03-03 19:31:45 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722472 amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722569 i like how you talk about the value of one person in your life, 
the lack of your sister can make such a big difference

-apoorva ]]> 2017-03-03 19:32:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722569 Amie https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722773 I like the sadness in your poem; I hope that all is well.

Sherwin]]> 2017-03-03 19:32:46 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/157722773 Becky https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134730 "years without hope" i like the double entendre. Hope, as a sister and a concept, highlights the how loss you suffered doubled.
--Nick]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134730 Becky https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134739 --Ncik]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:08 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134739 Rebecca, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134757 I love how you personify pain.
 -Parthi

]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:09 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134757 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134786 I loved how you incorporated paranormal figures and mythology such as Daedalus and the witch. It showed how you don't quite blame your sister.

-Johnson]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134786 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134788 I like how you show the difference between your sister before and after and what you think of this difference.

Sneh]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134788 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134792 I enjoy how this is a dedicated piece; a nice sentimental piece in contrast to the other more self-indulgent ballads.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134792 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134806 I like the allusions to Greek mythology with Daedalus. Ties in gothic elements.

Anushka

]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:16 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134806 Rebecca, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134824 Nice allusion to mythology. 
"Years without Hope." 
Have you shared  this with Hope?
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:17 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134824 Rebecca, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134834 I liked the metaphor of the witch.

-Billy
]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:18 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134834 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134899 I like the way the poem shifts from happy memories to something more severe. It shows the significance behind the ballad.

- Hadia]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:27 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134899 Rebecca, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134907 I like how you slowly build up why your sister is so important to you. She is your friend and your inspiration and this build up of detail makes it understandable why you care so much about her.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:28 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134907 Rebecca, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134987 I like your topic, it is unique  and personal to you. I also like how genuine the tone of your poem is.

-Kevin]]> 2017-03-06 18:54:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158134987 Rebecca, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135296 The emotion you conveyed in your ballad was tragically beautiful. 
- Caitlin ]]> 2017-03-06 18:55:30 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135296 Rebecca, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135331
I like how your poem is about your sister, like mine was. These similarities allowed me to relate to your ballad better

Amie]]> 2017-03-06 18:55:35 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135331 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135341 As a fellow younger sibling, your poem makes me feel sentimental. I relate to seeing a sibling change. 
Akshay]]> 2017-03-06 18:55:36 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135341 Rebecca, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135406 Nice use of classical allusion- Joe]]> 2017-03-06 18:55:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135406 Rebbeca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135719 I hope your sister and you have a better relationship in the future

LIWAG]]> 2017-03-06 18:56:35 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135719 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135754 The mood change in your poem is artfully dramatic
-McCarly]]> 2017-03-06 18:56:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158135754 MC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136000 I firmly enjoy your personal reflection and the adjectives used in this ballad

liwag]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:20 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136000 McCarly, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136059 I can feel the heavy emotion in your ballad. 
-Parthi]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:26 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136059 McCarly, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136104 Nice apostrophe to Cupid, even though he didn't help you keep her.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:34 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136104 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136151 The dialogue between the character and himself underscores the character's haplessness and echoes a deep rooted feeling of losing oneself.
--Nick]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:40 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136151 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136421 I really like your use of parallelism in your stanzas. They make your flow feel even better and your flow was already great to begin with.

-Johnson]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136421 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136479 I like how you incorporate the dialogue and how you end the poem.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:53 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136479 McCary https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136513 I like how cupid gives you the realization of your faults.
--Billy]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:55 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136513 mccarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136539 I like the extended metaphor using Cupid throughout. The allusions also add to the poem.

Anushka 

]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:56 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136539 Rebecca https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136543 As an older sister, this poem helps me see both sides of the story, especially since I am leaving my sister alone this year. 
apoorva ]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:56 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136543 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136550 I like how you take cherubs, a symbol of love and felicity, and turn them into something painful to bear- Joe

]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:56 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136550 McCarly, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136599 Your use of personification is great and illustrates the feelings you experienced skillfully.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-06 18:57:59 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136599 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136614 I like how the ballad centers around the cupid. It symbolized many things.

Hadia]]> 2017-03-06 18:58:00 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136614 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136638 I like the transition of your poem and how you vividly demonstrate how you feel after losing the person. You can feel the admiration that you feel for her. Very poetic.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-06 18:58:01 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136638 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136651 your ballad had really nice rhythm and fluency to it!

Amie

]]> 2017-03-06 18:58:02 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136651 McCarly, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136832 I like how your metaphors were used as imagery to help further convey the feeling of heart break and hidden emotions
-Caitlin]]> 2017-03-06 18:58:15 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136832 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136868 I like the fairy-tale allusion of your ballad; different from the more personal perspectives of the other love ballads.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-06 18:58:21 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136868 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136935 I like how even after you signal the end of you relationship, you continue to represent the moments you had in present tense. 
-Rebecca]]> 2017-03-06 18:58:31 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158136935 Jacob, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137664 Your poem is very raw and true. 
-Parthi

]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:22 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137664 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137690 Your double entrentre with the glove was very effective.
Akshay]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:28 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137690 Jacob, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137716 I liked your use of double entendre
--Billy]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:32 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137716 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137740 I like the use of the double entendre and how you write the description of the girl.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:37 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137740 Comment https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137791 Comment- Comment]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:45 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137791 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137808 Your double entendre is clever
--Nick]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:48 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137808 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137833 I like how you use both subtle double entendre and explicit language. It adds to the poem.

Anushka]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:52 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137833 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137834 Great use of double entendre and imagery.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-06 19:00:53 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137834 Jacob, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137883 "She took my heart, my love, my youth" is a line worthy of Keats.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:00 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137883 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137896 Your use of double entendre is effective- Joe

]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:02 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137896 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137899 I like the imagery of the ballad; I can almost see "her eyes."

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:03 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137899 Jacob, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137906 I like your use of double entendre!
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:04 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137906 McCarly https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137957 I enjoyed the rhythm in your poem. ]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158137957 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138043 I respect how you were able to write about so intimate a moment.
--Rebecca ]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:25 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138043 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138168
Nice use of double entendre

Amie]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138168 jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138176 I though the "glove" double entendre was interesting 
apoorva ]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:43 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138176 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138242 Your use of detail and flowery language stands out. 

Hadia]]> 2017-03-06 19:01:52 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138242 Jacob https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138353 I liked how you used older English in your ballad. Makes it feel a bit more authentic.

-Johnson]]> 2017-03-06 19:02:07 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138353 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138562 You capture well what the urge to leave feels like.

-Kevin]]> 2017-03-06 19:02:40 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138562 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138580 I like the rhythm of the poem and the similes and metaphors throughout it.

Anushka]]> 2017-03-06 19:02:42 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138580 Akshay, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138591 Your flow is very clean.
-Parthi]]> 2017-03-06 19:02:43 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138591 akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138650 I enjoyed how you described the awkward feeling of first love because I think everyone has a similar experience
-apoorva ]]> 2017-03-06 19:02:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138650 Akshay, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138682 I really like the rhythm of your poem and how you tell a story. 

Jenny]]> 2017-03-06 19:02:58 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138682 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138768 I like how your character has two parts of himself but still want to attention of a girl.
--Nick]]> 2017-03-06 19:03:11 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138768 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138800 Your poem has great flow and rhythm to it- Joe]]> 2017-03-06 19:03:17 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138800 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138849 I like how you start the poem and the progression of your story with her.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-06 19:03:27 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138849 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138998 I like how even though the poem was a progression of your relationship with her, you also talk about changes in you that did not directly relate to her.
--Rebecca]]> 2017-03-06 19:03:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158138998 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139081 I love your description of first loves. I think everyone has felt that awkwardness being around them and the sense of not knowing what you should be doing.

-Johnson]]> 2017-03-06 19:04:06 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139081 Akshay, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139163 Nice imagery in "Spice of Latina, Indian, / What else is there to say?"
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-06 19:04:18 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139163 Akshay, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139226 I like your use of metaphors to further describe your heart break.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-06 19:04:29 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139226 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139285 Decent.
-McCarly]]> 2017-03-06 19:04:37 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139285 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139310 The ballad's intimacy was refreshing.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-06 19:04:41 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139310 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139341 I enjoyed your use of double entendee
-- BIlly]]> 2017-03-06 19:04:44 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139341 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139381 Just kidding. This is a beautiful poem. I'm proud of your transparency]]> 2017-03-06 19:04:51 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139381 Ak https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139520 2017-03-06 19:05:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139520 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139530 I feel the emotion in your voice and words.

Hadia]]> 2017-03-06 19:05:13 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139530 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139565
i like you transition from an innocent crush to love to heartbreak.

Amie]]> 2017-03-06 19:05:18 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139565 Akshay https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139568 I notice the pun you used in your title, very effective in describing who this person is that you speak of

liwag]]> 2017-03-06 19:05:18 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139568 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139935 I loved how you said you "waited far too long" for happiness. I know how it feels and how rewarding it is to finally take that leap just as you described.

-Johnson]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:10 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139935 Billy, gina_corsun https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139946 "O woe is me; you are in my head" is a line Keats would approve.
Love that you included "dark and stormy" in your ballad.
Mrs. Corsun]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:11 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139946 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139988 I like how you depict winter and how you describe time going on.
Sneh]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:17 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158139988 Billy, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140012 I like how the setting changes, it gives the effect of passing time and explains how much time you spent together.
-Parthi]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:22 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140012 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140028 Your poem is melancholic and never loses emotion throughout.

Jenny]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:24 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140028 Billy, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140045 2017-03-06 19:06:26 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140045 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140051 2017-03-06 19:06:27 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140051 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140095 I like how you used real life events in the poem, it adds to the authenticity of it.

Anushka]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:33 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140095 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140096 I like how your ballad is affectionate and warm despite the heartbreak. The ballad also reflects your relationship and emotions.

Hadia]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:34 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140096 Billy, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140184 I love the change in tone as you go from a love filled spring and summer to a cold winter.
- Caitlin]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:49 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140184 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140239 I like how you recognize the necessity of ending the relationship but still represented how it affected you.
--Rebecca]]> 2017-03-06 19:06:57 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140239 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140369 Hearing this series in events in prose allows one to understand that these events occurred; hearing this series of events in poetry really conveys the feelings attributed to this event- Joe]]> 2017-03-06 19:07:19 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140369 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140396
I like your use of choir and music to explain feelings of love

Amie]]> 2017-03-06 19:07:23 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140396 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140447 "Dark and stormy days" is nice subtle comedy that can still portray your emotions effectively
--Nick]]> 2017-03-06 19:07:32 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140447 Billy, https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140533 The allusions you make to music really show something about you. (how much music means to you)
Akshay]]> 2017-03-06 19:07:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140533 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140536 Even though you were obviously hurt by her departure, I respect the fact that you still wanted the best for your "best friend". This is true love.
-McCarly]]> 2017-03-06 19:07:47 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140536 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140695 I like how you used the different seasons to depict   different emotions. 
-apoorva ]]> 2017-03-06 19:08:12 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140695 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140715 I like how you put in today's colloquialisms into the ballad; makes it much more relatable in this society.

-Sherwin]]> 2017-03-06 19:08:14 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140715 Billy https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140858 your word choice and imagery is impeccable!

liwag]]> 2017-03-06 19:08:38 UTC https://padlet.com/gina_corsun/19tt09us8age/wish/158140858