https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg ♥ Thankyou for the feedback on my pieces! Please keep the comments constructive and positive! ♥ en-us 2018-12-05 17:13:16 UTC 2025-12-14 18:57:06 UTC hello@padlet.com 24salnasseri https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg/wish/312315903 I really like how you describe things very nicely in all your peices. You use descriptive language! ]]> 2018-12-07 16:58:41 UTC https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg/wish/312315903 24salnasseri https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg/wish/312321696 I loved how you ended your suspence narrative, and tied it into the tital. The story kept me in suspence and really had me routing for the main character. ]]> 2018-12-07 17:10:11 UTC https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg/wish/312321696 24salnasseri https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg/wish/312322174 I read your suspence narative and I noticed that in some places, you didn't have enough commas. You can try to work on that for next time, but overall the story was great and the plot was very interesting. ]]> 2018-12-07 17:11:08 UTC https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg/wish/312322174 24salnasseri https://padlet.com/24tcino/18p51o0n51sg/wish/312326884 When I read your vigette, I saw how you used your description very well! It made the story very fun to read. I think you should try to use different figurative language that you don't use much, such as making up new similes, I also loved how you ended this ( and your other storys ) very well!

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