https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7 LO: To compare the methods Brooke and Tennyson use to present their attitudes to war en-us 2018-03-08 01:12:47 UTC 2018-04-15 01:15:51 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475203 The exemplification of the idea that war is treacherous and blood thirsty. This is presented in the Charge Of The Light Brigade. Tennyson highlights this in his use of personification: " Into the jaws of Death" and "Into the mouth of Hell". This phrase clearly implies that Tennyson was horrified by the violence of the battle through personification. The noun 'jaws' from this evidence clearly also tells us that a person wants to escape from a dangerous problem. Further on in the text, it states that Tennyson admires the soldiers because they are brave and skilful. This could reflect how in contemporary society that people aren't forced to do what others want them to do. Overall, this could reflect Tennyson's feelings about war and how death is something we should face head on instead hiding from it.

On the other hand, the exemplification of the idea that death is honourable, this is presented in The Solider. Brooke highlights in his use of personification: " there's a corner of a foreign field that is forever England ". This phrase clearly implies that the soldier's willing sacrifice on " a foreign field", an explanation that has more to do with idealised concepts about oneself and one's country than causes of war. Overall, this could reflect the poet's feelings which is love and how war can benefit the soldiers.]]> 2018-03-08 01:48:55 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475203 alison_wright2 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475215  Tennyson presents the idea that the soldiers are heroic and gallant in ‘The Charge of the Light Brigade’. The poet highlights this in his use of the rhetorical question ‘was there a man dismay’d? Not tho’ the soldier knew’. This phrase clearly implies to the reader that the soldiers were brave, courageous, and fearless. The verb ‘dismay’ from this evidence noticeably tells us that the soldiers were not put down or discouraged by the evident fact that death might be upon them. Further on in the text, it quotes ‘when can their glory fade?’. In addition the word ‘glory’ suggests that Tennyson believes that these audacious soldiers should be remembered and commemorated for their bravery of charging into the jaws of death. Overall, this could reflect the poet’s feeling about pre 1914 attitudes to war and perhaps how the poet admires the soldiers.

This can also be seen in the poem ‘The Soldier’ by Rupert Brooke. The poet illuminates this in his use of rhyme and rhythm throughout the entire poem. Particularly, the phrase ‘a body of England’s, breathing English air’ implies that the heroic soldiers would’ve been accepted as truly English for fighting for King and Country. The noun England is used multiple times in this evidence. This clearly tells us that Brooke was proud of his nation and what the soldiers did. Further on in the text, it states ‘under an English heaven’. This shows that their actions had been awarded by being sent to an ‘English heaven’, and people believed that only favourable persons went to heaven. Overall, this could reflect the poet’s feelings on how the soldiers should be remembered as brave and gallant when going into an English heaven.

]]> 2018-03-08 01:48:56 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475215 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475283 In the poem The Charge of the Light Brigade. Tennyson presents the feeling that war is futile and inescapable through the quote 'Half a league, half a league, half a league onwards... Into the valley of death rode the six-hundred." The use of repetition mimics the unstoppable beat of the horses' hooves and how they charge into the valley of death. Furthermore, the phrase "Valley of Death" is a metaphor to present the war as a very deadly concept, forming fear in the reader. Overall, this phrase implies how much the soldiers were willing to sacrifice their lives for something that they know is deadly. Similarly, as presented in The Soldier by Brooke, the soldier is portrayed to show a deep love and honour for war and death in the quote "If I should die, think only this of me,  that there's a corner of a  foreign field, that is forever England" this quote also shows how loyal the soldier is towards the people for England. Further on in the text the quote "a pulse in the eternal mind" shows that the people of England with always remember him. The phrase "pulse... eternal" suggests that he will forever be remembered even if he is dead because to us his pulse will always be beating. In addition, the phrase "... roam, ... home" uses the rhyme and rhythm of the poem to create a romantic sense to show some sort of devotion towards war. Overall, this could reflect the poet's feelings of respect towards the soldier for his sense of devotion towards war and his country. In conclusion, these two poems suggests that soldiers are heroes that should be highly respected due to the great amount of justice they have done to serve for the country.]]> 2018-03-08 01:49:14 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475283 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475301 The poet presents the feeling that war is futile in the poem: Charge of the Light Brigade. The poet highlights this in his use of the repetition " Half a league, half a league, half a league onward." This quote implies that the repetition of the quote shows the on going beat of the horses' hooves and how they are charging to their death. Further on in the text, it states that they are charging into the "valley of death". This phrase uses metaphor to suggest that the war is a place where the soldiers die when they are surrounded by it. Overall, the poem similarly says the same thing in the poem "The Soldier". The poet represents the idea that the soldiers are showed to have love and honour for war and death. In the quote "If I should die, think only this of me, that there's a corner of a foreign field, that is forever England". This quote shows that the soldiers are willing to sacrifice their life to help the country.]]> 2018-03-08 01:49:19 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475301 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475336 Tennyson presents war as inescapable. ' 
'Cannon to the right of them, 
Cannon to the left of them, Cannon in front of them.' 
The poet highlights this in his use of repetition which signifies that they were surrounded by powerful weapons that were no match to their feeble swords. The onomatopoeic noun 'cannon' suggests that weapons are continuously fired at the cavalry.  Overall this could reflect the poet's feeling that war is futile and horrendous. 
Alternatively in Brooke's poem The Soldier, war is shown as  honourable and is presented as a personification of love. 
'A dust whom England bore, shaped, made aware
Gave, once, her flowers to love...
A body of England's, breathing English air,'
The poet highlights this in his use of rhyme and personification  to present war as almost lovable. The verb 'love' implies the affection Brooke has towards his country. Love is presented, further on in the text in the phrase: 'Dreams happy as her day'. This suggests that the soldiers are happy serving their country. 
Overall this reflects Brooke's lovable feelings towards war as differently compared to Tennyson's attitude which presents war as inevitable.  ]]> 2018-03-08 01:49:29 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475336 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475344 Tennyson presents the idea that war is inescapable and futile through the quote "In the valley of death rode the six hundred...Into the jaws of Death...Into the mouth of hell" this is presented in the poem Charge of the Light Brigade. Tennyson highlights this in his use of personification in the quote "into the jaws of death" This phrase clearly implies that  death is inescapable and inevitable. Furthermore the noun "hell" clearly also tells us that the soldiers are facing a very terrifying battle. This could reflect on the contemporary society that war last time was not that honourable and rewarding compared to now. Overall, this could reflect on the poet's feelings about the war, that it was very hellish and futile. 
On the other hand, Brooke presents the feeling that war was noble and is was similar to giving love to your country or in this case England. ]]> 2018-03-08 01:49:31 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475344 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475416 Tennyson presents the idea that war was hellish and was an inescapable "valley of death". The poet features this metaphor to create suspense and tension which links back to the idea of the poem being hellish and inescapable. The phrase clearly displays the horror and cruelty of war. The noun valley is somewhat unexpected, which links back to the attitudes toward war in 1914 in which war itself was completely unexpected to be inflicted in this way. Overall, this could reflect the poet's feelings of war being depressing and his hopes for the poem to spread awareness of the cruelty of war in hopes for history to not repeat. However, the poem The Soldier challenges this point. This poem argues that death is honourable and noble. The poet expresses this by using rhymes such as "If I should die, think only this of me... That is forever England. There shall be." The poet uses rhymes to present a traditional love which is often displayed in poems with rhymes except in this poem it is used as a love for England. The phrase "Forever England" highlights the idea that no matter what happens, England will always be forever. Furthermore, the phrase, "If I should die, think only this of me" would mean that the soldier was expecting that he/she would die in the war and that they have mentally prepared themselves for what is going to unfold.]]> 2018-03-08 01:49:47 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475416 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475577 Tennyson presents the idea of war as being heroic. Tennyson highlights this in his use if the phrase 'Noble six hundred'.The adjective 'Noble' clearly implies that Tennyson honours the soldiers and tells the readers to honour them too as we can see this in the quote 'Honour the Light Brigade'. Similarly this is also presented in the poem 'The Soldier'.Rupert Brooke presents the idea that the soldiers are heroic in the phrase 'If I should die ...That is forever England' . The poet highlights this in his use of the phrase 'That is forever England' shows that it's an honourable being a soldier and fighting for your country and the verb 'die' from this evidence clearly also tells us that soldiers will die for their country and for their pride. ]]> 2018-03-08 01:50:26 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/239475577 alison_wright2 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697641 -add quotations
-make sure grammar is correct
-don't repeat your point too much
- explain your points
-use semi colons and links 
-have a closing sentence 
-you don't need to tell the audience when there is a link
(sorry if this all feels very harsh)

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]]> 2018-03-12 05:49:54 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697641 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697677 WWW: You have included at least one piece of evidence for both paragraphs. You have clear points in both paragraphs. You have evaluated each poet's attitude towards war. Included comparison phrase to link the poems. 

EBI: To include the effects on the reader and to zoom in on one word in the quote. ]]> 2018-03-12 05:50:10 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697677 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697711 WWW: Good use of comparative links and you guys have used clear points for each paragraphs. We liked of how you have zoomed in on a specific noun not just writing noun on its own.
EBI: Redraft your first paragraph because it doesn't make sense. ]]> 2018-03-12 05:50:34 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697711 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697717 WWW: You were able to assess one poem correctly and had at least one piece of evidence. You used a wide range of vocabulary in your description of Charge of the Light Brigade.

EBI: If you had at least one piece of evidence for both of the poems and extend/complete your explanation of The Solider. It would be better if you didn't repeat the used vocabulary in your description of Charge of the Light Brigade.]]> 2018-03-12 05:50:37 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697717 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697722 WWW: There were some good use of examples - it was relevant and supported the main point well. Also it was clear.

EBI: Better SPAG. Showed the effect on the reader, how it reflects the poet feelings towards war]]> 2018-03-12 05:50:38 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697722 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697740 WWW: You guys gave evidence to support your point. you included a Comparison phrase.

EBI: The evidence needs to be less than six words. and you could evaluate each writer's attitude and overall purpose.
you could make it more clear and understandable.]]> 2018-03-12 05:50:48 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697740 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697996 WWW: Clear points for each poem and good evidence which is used in the right context, effect on reader for each poem and evaluation for each poem.
EBi: Improve on the length of evidence and use correct subject terminology and comparison phrases.]]> 2018-03-12 05:53:45 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240697996 https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240698048 WWW: They included two points of evidence to support their points.

Good analysis of quotes

EBI: Tell us what poem it is from in the first paragraph

The part where you imply the meaning of "that is forever England" didn't really make sense]]> 2018-03-12 05:54:19 UTC https://padlet.com/khumphrey1/14nwz4yd7jw7/wish/240698048